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In the war-torn land of Cyraveil, four heroes strove to overthrow an empire. By cold steel and elemental sorcery, they brought peace to a warring land on the brink of destruction. As the flames died, the realm needed strong leadership, and who better than the champions who had saved the kingdom? But when the people sought out their saviors... they vanished.

Matt, Blake, Jen, and Carl: the four mysterious companions, who together had deposed an insane ruler and saved countless lives, were gone—spirited back in a whirlwind of magic to a sleepy suburb in Mellbridge, Oregon, never to return. The friends found themselves home in the real world, exactly as they'd been the night they were taken, as if no time had passed... except only three came back.

  

 


 

Hi there! This was my entry for National Novel Writing Month, because why only write one series at a time? The more the merrier! (meanwhile, my keyboard bursts into flames...)

I'm also the writer of The Last Science, an ongoing low-fantasy/speculative sci-fi series. If you're familiar with that, you know what to expect here: lots of character-focused drama and dialogue, not a whole lot of traditional action. However, I'm writing a bit differently than usual here, and in a very different structure, so there should be some surprises for returning readers. I hope you enjoy it!

 [Discord] — for those of you who want to hang out and chat.

 

Cover art (fullsize): Path of Revelation, by taenaron (Tobias Roetsch), modified by Etzoli. Normally I like to do my own cover art from scratch, but I was in a rush for the contest. Might be replaced down the line if I get time.

[participant in the NaNoWriMo Royal Road challenge]

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T_J_K
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A brilliant story, if sometimes logically inconsistent. 

Ljsquared
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extremely interesting take on what happens after

Overall a very good story, I'm a bit disappointed that we didn't actually get to see the fantasy world but at the same time it sort of makes sense. There were, of course, things I didn't really like but you don't have to enjoy every single aspect of a story to enjoy the story itself. There were minor grammar/spelling mistakes that my mind nearly automatically filled in for. The only thing I was truly confused about was that Matt made it sound like Carl became a better person within the fantasy world early on in the story which turns out to be the opposite, he thrived within the fantasy world but he had to become a fairly bad person to do so. So, ultimately, I find the story incredibly enjoyable but it takes a darker turn towards the end that I find a rather depressing. If your looking for a light-hearted story about fantasy and magic where everything turns out great, in the end, this may not be the story for you.

Zethuron
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A Beautiful Tragedy

What a beautiful read this was from beginning to end. One of the best, if not the best short story i have read on royalroad, and fully deserves being so high on best rated. I felt so much different emotions throughout reading this tragedy in the making.

Totally flawless grammar, the author is just skilled at words.

The prose is of high quality, the perspectives are well written, this story is worthy of being published, thats how high quality it is.

 

I felt i just had to give this one a review, despite reading it months ago.

Wholeheartly recommended, this story doenst take much time to read. I also recommend the other stories by the same author.