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In the war-torn land of Cyraveil, four heroes strove to overthrow an empire. By cold steel and elemental sorcery, they brought peace to a warring land on the brink of destruction. As the flames died, the realm needed strong leadership, and who better than the champions who had saved the kingdom? But when the people sought out their saviors... they vanished.

Matt, Blake, Jen, and Carl: the four mysterious companions, who together had deposed an insane ruler and saved countless lives, were gone—spirited back in a whirlwind of magic to a sleepy suburb in Mellbridge, Oregon, never to return. The friends found themselves home in the real world, exactly as they'd been the night they were taken, as if no time had passed... except only three came back.

  

 


 

Hi there! This was my entry for National Novel Writing Month, because why only write one series at a time? The more the merrier! (meanwhile, my keyboard bursts into flames...)

I'm also the writer of The Last Science, an ongoing low-fantasy/speculative sci-fi series. If you're familiar with that, you know what to expect here: lots of character-focused drama and dialogue, not a whole lot of traditional action. However, I'm writing a bit differently than usual here, and in a very different structure, so there should be some surprises for returning readers. I hope you enjoy it!

 [Discord] — for those of you who want to hang out and chat.

 

Cover art (fullsize): Path of Revelation, by taenaron (Tobias Roetsch), modified by Etzoli. Normally I like to do my own cover art from scratch, but I was in a rush for the contest. Might be replaced down the line if I get time.

[participant in the NaNoWriMo Royal Road challenge]

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MystraMan
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Just incredible work. This was a NaNo novel? Incredible. I wish I could write something of this caliber. You are a true artist, and don't ever stop writing or let anyone tell you otherwise. I wish there were more, but I understand why you had to stop here. Thank you so much for writing it.

RiceCake
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It was a great story. As I read along the story It just pulled me In deeper. This story Is filled with emotion, but that ending tho... the bittersweet, dark, cliffhanger. But Is a good ending, It fulfils Its purpose.

If you are interested in reading this book, go for it.

NeoJax
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This story is pretty unique. I really like how the author deals with what the characters go through after they return from a fantasy land that they have basically spent another life in. The characters play pretty well off of each other and as it goes on you learn more and more of what they went through. I really loved learning more and more about all of them and their experiences with the other world. I enjoyed reading this and would recommend it.

wayfarer
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Not a story i loved, but absolutely well-written

This story is more of a mystery thriller than high-fantasy, but it is definitely more enjoyable for those who have some isekai novel experience. PLEASE reply to my comment in the last chapter, I NEED CLOSURE!!

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Wow this is the best, so i'm writing this first, but the character are so fleshed out considering it's such a short story. Yes I hate certain characters at times, but that makes it so good, cos I can understand that's really how some people might feel or react, rather than hating the character for being fake or very forced.

Style:
I feel it is a little inconsistent, as sometimes it is first person, yet other times it addresses the audience directly, or seemingly like a jurnal entry. Not sure if it is intentional as it only occurs with Jen as far as i noticed.

Story:
Great story, great thriller, "hate" the ending, but that's just the way mystery thrillers are i guess

Grammar:
Not many mistakes, some minor spelling error. And a language i can't understand haha

 

TheGreatOne
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One of the Deepest Stories Ever Told

Everything in this story was indescribably wonderful. In fact, it was so good that I was not satisfied by the ending -- and that was only possible because of how wonderfully the story was written.
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 100% recommend reading.

Also another review mentioned that this deserves some sort of tv series or movie - I don't know how such a wonderful story could be done justice on screen but if possible, that would be insanely awesome.

Asviloka
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Read the whole thing without stopping. Extremely impressed. It's not easy to write multiple first-person characters and keep them all feeling distinct, but this story pulled it off beautifully.

 

Quite a few typos, though. I understand it's a 'wrimo book, but it could use a spell/grammar check.

EDIT: In the year since I first wrote this review, it has received a solid spelling/grammar check, so any remaining typos are infrequent and non-egregious.

Slanted_Slash
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One of the best fictions I've ever read!

Reviewed at: Epilogue

I just don't have words to describe how much I liked it. There were several instances when I thought that it will go as I predicted but that did not happen. I was curious about this highly rated fiction and what can I say I loved every single moment of it. Thanks a lot for this amazing piece of art!

P.S. - Made an account just for this review. This should be enough to tell how good it was!

aralbair
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Unique premise, complex relationships, gripping pace, well written

Reviewed at: Epilogue

One of the best stories on RR. Anyone who has enjoyed portal or isekai fantasy should read this. An amazing premise that makes you wonder why there aren't more stories like this, a gripping pace that kept me up into the morning until I finished reading this in one go, and conflicts where you want to root for every side.

After nearly a decade spent as overpowered heroes saving a fantasy world, the characters are forcefully sent back to Earth, somehow arriving only minutes after they left in Narnia fashion. Stripped of their powers and traumatized by constant life-and-death fights, they struggle to relearn how to live on Earth as teenagers. The differences in how the characters handle their return to Earth bring them to both help and conflict with each other, revealing the complexity of their relationships due to events in the fantasy world.

It may look short at 19 chapters, but the chapters are pretty long. Grammar and style are great, even by non-web serial standards. Plot and pacing are phenomenal. Again, I started it planning to read it over the course of a week and read the final chapter six hours later. After binging through tons of isekai and fantasy web serials and translated novels, Epilogue was fresh air, with all the best parts of web fiction (fast-paced, interesting premise, strong characters) and none of its shortcomings (tired tropes, filler, bad English).

The only part of the story I thought was weak was that the characters, while they are believable and engaging, are a little too reliant on past plot events for their personalities. One character, who was especially traumatized in the fantasy world, isn't fleshed out much beyond trying to deal with that specific trauma. The other two main characters are similarly perfectly fit to the roles they played in the fantasy world. This isn't very noticeable, though, as the story's plot constantly drives the characters into motion, and there's no slice of life or filler where the story would become dependent on the strength of the characters' personalities.

Overall, after reading Epilogue, I feel like I've journeyed into a vital, novel, and unexplored section of the fantasy portal/isekai genre. Like (some of) the characters in Epilogue, I'll treasure my time spent in that world.

Lord3Pi
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Thoroughly enjoyable

Reviewed at: Epilogue

Other reviews have said it all. Highly recommend. Really captures what coming back could be like

SoundTramp
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Brilliant story following three teens after their return from a land of magic and warfare. 

This story is of much higher quality than I was expecting. Being a step removed from the action of Cyraveil, the story has the chance to explore themes of character, and consequence.

Epilogue overall has a much slower pace than most other stories on royalroad, and has more suspense. 

Overall, this is an entertaining and thoughtful story. We'll worth your time.

 

Thank you Etzoli for the wonderful  work.