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In the war-torn land of Cyraveil, four heroes strove to overthrow an empire. By cold steel and elemental sorcery, they brought peace to a warring land on the brink of destruction. As the flames died, the realm needed strong leadership, and who better than the champions who had saved the kingdom? But when the people sought out their saviors... they vanished.

Matt, Blake, Jen, and Carl: the four mysterious companions, who together had deposed an insane ruler and saved countless lives, were gone—spirited back in a whirlwind of magic to a sleepy suburb in Mellbridge, Oregon, never to return. The friends found themselves home in the real world, exactly as they'd been the night they were taken, as if no time had passed... except only three came back.

  

 


 

Hi there! This was my entry for National Novel Writing Month, because why only write one series at a time? The more the merrier! (meanwhile, my keyboard bursts into flames...)

I'm also the writer of The Last Science, an ongoing low-fantasy/speculative sci-fi series. If you're familiar with that, you know what to expect here: lots of character-focused drama and dialogue, not a whole lot of traditional action. However, I'm writing a bit differently than usual here, and in a very different structure, so there should be some surprises for returning readers. I hope you enjoy it!

 [Discord] — for those of you who want to hang out and chat.

 

Cover art (fullsize): Path of Revelation, by taenaron (Tobias Roetsch), modified by Etzoli. Normally I like to do my own cover art from scratch, but I was in a rush for the contest. Might be replaced down the line if I get time.

[participant in the NaNoWriMo Royal Road challenge]

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monk
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Instead of sleeping, I read the entire story in one sitting. It ruined my workday but this story was worth it. 

The characters are complex and feel real. The story is tragic, real, epic yet everyday. The perspective is brilliant.

 

Thank you.  

Yeah-uuh
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This is a great story

I would've given a 5 star advanced review, but I don't really want to write much.

All you have to know is that this is a great story. I'm extremely grateful to the author for bring this into our world.

Minishade
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Realistic to a Saddening Degree

First you're story finally got me to leave a review after years of just enjoying content here.

A story of what happens next after the adventure ends done with beautifully crafted realistic characters.Worth a read just like others have said simply due to the fact that it is relatively short and complete, a rarity on this site.

A must read for anyone interested in the reincarnation genre. 

wolfgang784
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Brought a tear to my eye - such raw emotion

It has been a long time since I read anything, RRL or published works, that displayed such raw emotion so well. I read the entire story in a single sitting due to how gripping it was. It only took a few pages for me to be too invested to stop. The story even managed to bring a tear to my eye, and I think the last time that happened was the ending of the eragon series. 

Im gonna go check out your other story now. With this level of writing I am sure you could make me interested in any topic. 

oldmannick
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English gimmick is just wrong

As much as I like the story, Jen forgetting English just isn't a thing that happens to people. Even brain injury usually doesn't damage your knowledge of your mother tongue. If you're 16 and pick up a new language, it just won't overwrite your knowledge of the original. That gimmick was off putting for how unrealistic it is. I know it's a fantasy themed story, but it's not that kind of fantasy. 

forseeti
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This novel made me sooo mad

This story kept me engaged from first chapter and was fairly interesting. Author have really interesting approach to the characters change after their journey. Personally some of them make no sense from information given about some characters and u have a bad teste after 2 of the characters are shown in very good light while another apparently smartest is unhinged.

This novel ending is ridiculous. Made me soooo mad and I regretted that I even seen it. I really wanted to give author 1 star because of it but it wouldn’t be fair. I just wish there was a continuation to it as there is room there for some revenge story.

Hippiekiller
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Prepare yourself for a roller-coaster os feels

Spoiler: Spoiler

 

Pale imitation
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Story is okay but could use some polishing. A few plot holes and logic errors.

T_J_K
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Spoiler: Spoiler

 

A brilliant story, if sometimes logically inconsistent. 

Ljsquared
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extremely interesting take on what happens after

Overall a very good story, I'm a bit disappointed that we didn't actually get to see the fantasy world but at the same time it sort of makes sense. There were, of course, things I didn't really like but you don't have to enjoy every single aspect of a story to enjoy the story itself. There were minor grammar/spelling mistakes that my mind nearly automatically filled in for. The only thing I was truly confused about was that Matt made it sound like Carl became a better person within the fantasy world early on in the story which turns out to be the opposite, he thrived within the fantasy world but he had to become a fairly bad person to do so. So, ultimately, I find the story incredibly enjoyable but it takes a darker turn towards the end that I find a rather depressing. If your looking for a light-hearted story about fantasy and magic where everything turns out great, in the end, this may not be the story for you.