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In the war-torn land of Cyraveil, four heroes strove to overthrow an empire. By cold steel and elemental sorcery, they brought peace to a warring land on the brink of destruction. As the flames died, the realm needed strong leadership, and who better than the champions who had saved the kingdom? But when the people sought out their saviors... they vanished.

Matt, Blake, Jen, and Carl: the four mysterious companions, who together had deposed an insane ruler and saved countless lives, were gone—spirited back in a whirlwind of magic to a sleepy suburb in Mellbridge, Oregon, never to return. The friends found themselves home in the real world, exactly as they'd been the night they were taken, as if no time had passed... except only three came back.

  

 


 

Hi there! This was my entry for National Novel Writing Month, because why only write one series at a time? The more the merrier! (meanwhile, my keyboard bursts into flames...)

I'm also the writer of The Last Science, an ongoing low-fantasy/speculative sci-fi series. If you're familiar with that, you know what to expect here: lots of character-focused drama and dialogue, not a whole lot of traditional action. However, I'm writing a bit differently than usual here, and in a very different structure, so there should be some surprises for returning readers. I hope you enjoy it!

 [Discord] — for those of you who want to hang out and chat.

 

Cover art (fullsize): Path of Revelation, by taenaron (Tobias Roetsch), modified by Etzoli. Normally I like to do my own cover art from scratch, but I was in a rush for the contest. Might be replaced down the line if I get time.

[participant in the NaNoWriMo Royal Road challenge]

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aspiringinspiration
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I haven't been so emotionally invested in a book for years. I completely forgot what that feels like and i want to thank the author from the bottom of my hart. while i like a lot of storys on royalroad most feel like they miss deapth. If i ever get to creating my own story i will definetely think back to when I stayed up all night to read epilogue. 

monk
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Instead of sleeping, I read the entire story in one sitting. It ruined my workday but this story was worth it. 

The characters are complex and feel real. The story is tragic, real, epic yet everyday. The perspective is brilliant.

 

Thank you.  

Yeah-uuh
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This is a great story

I would've given a 5 star advanced review, but I don't really want to write much.

All you have to know is that this is a great story. I'm extremely grateful to the author for bring this into our world.

Minishade
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Realistic to a Saddening Degree

First you're story finally got me to leave a review after years of just enjoying content here.

A story of what happens next after the adventure ends done with beautifully crafted realistic characters.Worth a read just like others have said simply due to the fact that it is relatively short and complete, a rarity on this site.

A must read for anyone interested in the reincarnation genre. 

wolfgang784
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Brought a tear to my eye - such raw emotion

It has been a long time since I read anything, RRL or published works, that displayed such raw emotion so well. I read the entire story in a single sitting due to how gripping it was. It only took a few pages for me to be too invested to stop. The story even managed to bring a tear to my eye, and I think the last time that happened was the ending of the eragon series. 

Im gonna go check out your other story now. With this level of writing I am sure you could make me interested in any topic. 

Alessan
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Something Different

Something different, emotional, an impossible background and a real setting making perfect sense. Objectively fantastic, probably subjectively too. I feel unsure, but that’s probably a good thing. A rare 5 star rating.

kao
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Fillory and Narnia Afterwards

If you've read Narnia and watched The Magicians. You'll get a good ride out of this short. 

 

If you've ever wondered..."Can life go on after coming back from that 'other' place?" - Give this a read to see a possible glimpse of it. 

 

This short will be entertaining and at times will shock you. It will also remind you that being human is all you can be. It can be harsh and beautiful. 

 

Best of luck. And welcome to Narnia/Fillory/Cyraveil....please don't mind the lion or that odd wardrobe...

Zethuron
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A Beautiful Tragedy

What a beautiful read this was from beginning to end. One of the best, if not the best short story i have read on royalroad, and fully deserves being so high on best rated. I felt so much different emotions throughout reading this tragedy in the making.

Totally flawless grammar, the author is just skilled at words.

The prose is of high quality, the perspectives are well written, this story is worthy of being published, thats how high quality it is.

 

I felt i just had to give this one a review, despite reading it months ago.

Wholeheartly recommended, this story doenst take much time to read. I also recommend the other stories by the same author.

obladi
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A must read - incredible

It's a must read for everyone, a short story with a incredible plot twist that everyone need to read to get a change of peace from what we can read everywhere. 

oldmannick
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English gimmick is just wrong

As much as I like the story, Jen forgetting English just isn't a thing that happens to people. Even brain injury usually doesn't damage your knowledge of your mother tongue. If you're 16 and pick up a new language, it just won't overwrite your knowledge of the original. That gimmick was off putting for how unrealistic it is. I know it's a fantasy themed story, but it's not that kind of fantasy.