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In the war-torn land of Cyraveil, four heroes strove to overthrow an empire. By cold steel and elemental sorcery, they brought peace to a warring land on the brink of destruction. As the flames died, the realm needed strong leadership, and who better than the champions who had saved the kingdom? But when the people sought out their saviors... they vanished.

Matt, Blake, Jen, and Carl: the four mysterious companions, who together had deposed an insane ruler and saved countless lives, were gone—spirited back in a whirlwind of magic to a sleepy suburb in Mellbridge, Oregon, never to return. The friends found themselves home in the real world, exactly as they'd been the night they were taken, as if no time had passed... except only three came back.

  

 


 

Hi there! This was my entry for National Novel Writing Month, because why only write one series at a time? The more the merrier! (meanwhile, my keyboard bursts into flames...)

I'm also the writer of The Last Science, an ongoing low-fantasy/speculative sci-fi series. If you're familiar with that, you know what to expect here: lots of character-focused drama and dialogue, not a whole lot of traditional action. However, I'm writing a bit differently than usual here, and in a very different structure, so there should be some surprises for returning readers. I hope you enjoy it!

 [Discord] — for those of you who want to hang out and chat.

 

Cover art (fullsize): Path of Revelation, by taenaron (Tobias Roetsch), modified by Etzoli. Normally I like to do my own cover art from scratch, but I was in a rush for the contest. Might be replaced down the line if I get time.

[participant in the NaNoWriMo Royal Road challenge]

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MystraMan
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Just incredible work. This was a NaNo novel? Incredible. I wish I could write something of this caliber. You are a true artist, and don't ever stop writing or let anyone tell you otherwise. I wish there were more, but I understand why you had to stop here. Thank you so much for writing it.

Critstreak
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An amazing post isekai short story

Epilogue is a masterful work of art which follows a group of four whom have suddenly returned to earth from another world. Each of the four characters returns broken emotionally and mentally from the events which occured in the other world. The characters in Epilogue will draw fourth complex emotions which will allow you to feel a sense of identity for each character. The background world building leaves you desiring more which in combination with the extremely well written characters creates a wonderful short story which could be built upon in the future.

Dantalion22
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Brilliant Worldbuilding And Amazing Characters

The three characters are so great here I could read them forever. Please dont stop writing them. I love how you do worldbuilding too. I really want to hear more about Cyraveil and I love how the characters dont just tell me about it. This is the best kind of worldbuilding.

Michael Dale
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The premise of the overall story is quite interesting.  However, the real strength in this story lies in the characters and their interactions.  The three main characters feel like they naturally mesh together perfectly.

I really look forward to seeing where this story goes.

Update:  It's finished now, but I still want more.  Moar!

hhhhhaaaa
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If you read nothing else but this line of this review, then I will tell you that Epilogue is a freaking amazing story whose premise is truly, truly unique. I could rave about Epilogue for hours... The characters Etzoli has written, the backstory and work that must have gone into writing this fiction, the sheer prospect of this idea that the story is built upon is absolutely brilliant! Every chapter has spurred me on to read the next, and the next, to find out what happened to each character, on Earth and the other world, to find out just how they're going to make up for the difference that the seven years they spent there has made. Epilogue is a beautiful story, full of heart and... well, fullness! I heartily recommend it to all who come upon it, especially those interested in reading Etzoli's fictions.

TheGreatOne
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One of the Deepest Stories Ever Told

Everything in this story was indescribably wonderful. In fact, it was so good that I was not satisfied by the ending -- and that was only possible because of how wonderfully the story was written.
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 100% recommend reading.

Also another review mentioned that this deserves some sort of tv series or movie - I don't know how such a wonderful story could be done justice on screen but if possible, that would be insanely awesome.

SonnyChiba
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This story is hard.

Reviewed at: Epilogue

This story is crazy.  I am blown away by the characters, they are real.  They come back from a fantasy world and they are messed up.  If you read a lot of isekai stories, they never really cover the cost to the characters for what they have done.  This story is pretty much a possible epilogue to any isekai story.  I wish as I read this that the characters weren't so broken, that they could protect each other, however, the way the story ends is fitting. 

This story doens't leave you full of hope or optomistic for the future but it does leave you will a feeling that this could be real.

aDragon
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  Definitely got way too emotional reading this. Didn't help that I bothered the author the entire time while reading it. If the description interests you I 100% recommend giving this a read, since it's a relatively short read.

 

HoltHarien
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Can't wait to read the next one!

This has been another great story to read on my breaks at work, except this time it's actually done! Great trio of characters, and the worldbuilding was amazing.

It's not exactly the most original world or anything but it really pulls you in. Also, the story had a brother-sister relationship that was actually well-written and felt like real siblings for once. That's harder to find than you might think :(

Cogcro
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Epilogue is a refreshing take to the isekai genre, exploring what happens when those who were summoned return back to earth. Each character feels unique and real, each with their own feelings and morals.  Would highly recommend to anyone who wants something different from what they might usually read on this website! 12/10 would recommend!