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In the war-torn land of Cyraveil, four heroes strove to overthrow an empire. By cold steel and elemental sorcery, they brought peace to a warring land on the brink of destruction. As the flames died, the realm needed strong leadership, and who better than the champions who had saved the kingdom? But when the people sought out their saviors... they vanished.

Matt, Blake, Jen, and Carl: the four mysterious companions, who together had deposed an insane ruler and saved countless lives, were gone—spirited back in a whirlwind of magic to a sleepy suburb in Mellbridge, Oregon, never to return. The friends found themselves home in the real world, exactly as they'd been the night they were taken, as if no time had passed... except only three came back.

  

 


 

Hi there! This was my entry for National Novel Writing Month, because why only write one series at a time? The more the merrier! (meanwhile, my keyboard bursts into flames...)

I'm also the writer of The Last Science, an ongoing low-fantasy/speculative sci-fi series. If you're familiar with that, you know what to expect here: lots of character-focused drama and dialogue, not a whole lot of traditional action. However, I'm writing a bit differently than usual here, and in a very different structure, so there should be some surprises for returning readers. I hope you enjoy it!

 [Discord] — for those of you who want to hang out and chat.

 

Cover art (fullsize): Path of Revelation, by taenaron (Tobias Roetsch), modified by Etzoli. Normally I like to do my own cover art from scratch, but I was in a rush for the contest. Might be replaced down the line if I get time.

[participant in the NaNoWriMo Royal Road challenge]

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Fl1pstre
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Simply one of the best

Definitely one of the best stories in this site.

The character is the right kind of broken and realistic post isekai type of response. 

Some typos are still there but that is normal in this site. 

Well written and well developed. Characters seem real rather than fake like most isekai stories though.

KoboldPatrol
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Not an easy story to read but intense emotions

RRL is full of stories telling us about people from earth becoming heroes in a fantasy world. Rarely do those people return and never do we hear about how that turns out for them. 'Epilogue' starts where those stories have ended and shows how difficult it is to fit back into your ordinary life after having lived stressful but glorious adventures for the last years. Especially if you didn't want to return.

Style: The story is told in third-person style from an internal view, each chapter rotates between the three protagonists and there are short parts following the police and their missing person case about the fourth dimension-traveller. This shows us the events from multiple points of view, leading to additional nuances in the storytelling.

Story: The whole plot takes place back in our world. What happened in the other world is barely told, just a bit here and there. Bit by bit the reader learns what the characters had to do to survive and none of them is without scars. The things we learn are very deep with complex entanglements and brutal revelations.

Grammar: Good, very few errors.

Characters: The story concentrates on the inner turmoil and the difficulties the protagonists have fitting in after all they have won and lost. Each of them tries to cope in a different way which leads to different problems and they hurt from all those internal contradictions. Those and their relationship to each other are far from simple and this is described in an excellent way. Very rarely is a story this focused on the characters' development.

If you are looking for an easy read to pass the time, you should look elsewhere. This story hits you hard and makes you yearn for closure from these serious experiences.

LilWubWub
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I absolutely loved the story! It was a great read, and it had beautiful closure. Awesome job!

Asviloka
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Read the whole thing without stopping. Extremely impressed. It's not easy to write multiple first-person characters and keep them all feeling distinct, but this story pulled it off beautifully.

 

Quite a few typos, though. I understand it's a 'wrimo book, but it could use a spell/grammar check.

JustAnAddict
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In a way, this story is perfect. It's well written, it's focused, it's dramatic, it's interesting, it's tragic, and, most importantly, it's completely unique. It doesn't belong anywhere below the top 5. The story leaves me wanting more, but I think expanding on this universe would ruin it, so I hope the author will move on.

 

I don't have a single bad thing to say about Epilogue. If you haven't, read it.

CaptainCranberry
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Brlliant, brutal, beautiful

It's exactly what I want, and at the same time so much more. I loved every single page and I want so much more. Can't really talk about this one without getting into spoilers, so I'll just say:

 

READ IT. READ IT NOW.

 

fuck it let's do spoilers:

Spoiler: Spoiler

 

SI hoarder
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I mean, wow. That was a ride. Definately one of the best stories i've read lately. Congratulations to the author, he did an excellent job. 10/10

forseeti
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This novel made me sooo mad

This story kept me engaged from first chapter and was fairly interesting. Author have really interesting approach to the characters change after their journey. Personally some of them make no sense from information given about some characters and u have a bad teste after 2 of the characters are shown in very good light while another apparently smartest is unhinged.

This novel ending is ridiculous. Made me soooo mad and I regretted that I even seen it. I really wanted to give author 1 star because of it but it wouldn’t be fair. I just wish there was a continuation to it as there is room there for some revenge story.

Hippiekiller
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Prepare yourself for a roller-coaster os feels

Spoiler: Spoiler

 

oldmannick
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English gimmick is just wrong

As much as I like the story, Jen forgetting English just isn't a thing that happens to people. Even brain injury usually doesn't damage your knowledge of your mother tongue. If you're 16 and pick up a new language, it just won't overwrite your knowledge of the original. That gimmick was off putting for how unrealistic it is. I know it's a fantasy themed story, but it's not that kind of fantasy.