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In the war-torn land of Cyraveil, four heroes strove to overthrow an empire. By cold steel and elemental sorcery, they brought peace to a warring land on the brink of destruction. As the flames died, the realm needed strong leadership, and who better than the champions who had saved the kingdom? But when the people sought out their saviors... they vanished.

Matt, Blake, Jen, and Carl: the four mysterious companions, who together had deposed an insane ruler and saved countless lives, were gone—spirited back in a whirlwind of magic to a sleepy suburb in Mellbridge, Oregon, never to return. The friends found themselves home in the real world, exactly as they'd been the night they were taken, as if no time had passed... except only three came back.

  

 


 

Hi there! This was my entry for National Novel Writing Month, because why only write one series at a time? The more the merrier! (meanwhile, my keyboard bursts into flames...)

I'm also the writer of The Last Science, an ongoing low-fantasy/speculative sci-fi series. If you're familiar with that, you know what to expect here: lots of character-focused drama and dialogue, not a whole lot of traditional action. However, I'm writing a bit differently than usual here, and in a very different structure, so there should be some surprises for returning readers. I hope you enjoy it!

 [Discord] — for those of you who want to hang out and chat.

 

Cover art (fullsize): Path of Revelation, by taenaron (Tobias Roetsch), modified by Etzoli. Normally I like to do my own cover art from scratch, but I was in a rush for the contest. Might be replaced down the line if I get time.

[participant in the NaNoWriMo Royal Road challenge]

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Rfae
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What happened when ...

I loved it what happened after narnia is a question I always asked myself after the trauma and sorrow after the challenge and elation after being the hero what do you come home to and do you want to be there. This is the story I didn’t know to ask for but always actually wanted thank you for sharing.

The Ark Builder
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I hate this, you gotta read it though

  1. I hate everything about this novel. The stupid characters who make stupid decisions. The characters who just don't speak up about their problems and keep to themselves knowing it will cause more problems for them. The depressing mood throughout the whole story. Lack of a happy or even hinted at happy ending. Mostly the characters

The setting was cool, I like the returned trait. All in all 5/5 book that I utterly hate. Made me depressed and mad at all the characters. I would recommend this to everybody.

 

Even if I hate it, it doesn't mean it's bad. It's good actually. Having induced emotions from the reader is good. Its a good book about flawed people trying to cope in a situation unfamiliar to them.

neganeko
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yes this book is good and I really like it and you should read it because it is good. it rivals my immortal in quality, though not quite as good. it is definitely better than the stories in morrowind however, and doesnt come with the amphetamine binge. This may be positive or negative for you depending on how you view things, but its probably positive. it just won a contest so you should extra read it and encourage him to use more amphetamines to write his works of art so that one day he may surpass the greats like ebony da'arkness raven way or whatever and can finally exterminate the prepz and pozers

ThereAreSomeWhoCallMeTim
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I was sent here and I don't regret it

Web fiction isn't supposed to be this good. I came here from reddit expecting some nice fun stuff, not this pain. Why you make me feel feels, Stzoli? You're a monster and I love you. Also, to all the commenters: Carl is a monster and I don't know how you can support him. You're all crazier than he is. 

Animan
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Extremly Good Story created from super fresh idea!

Engaging and super intesne from the very beggining.

 

Charaters are very skillfully described, and emanate very real vibe. Some of their actions even truely annoyed me - trait characterising real people :D.

If you have read many isekai before, and liked them, just read it. In "Epilogue" autor attacked the idea from completly different angle, and it's completly amazing.

Draxen Beta
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This story is what being addicted to drugs is probably like, if good prose and character development is your poison of choice.

This story will make you experience emotions and your stupid brain can’t get enough of it.

Until it ends.

I was kinda left with that weird feeling of loss mixed with hyperawareness as I read the... epilogue to epilogue, and it doesn’t seem to be going anywhere anytime soon.

Still totally worth it though.

Fl1pstre
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Simply one of the best

Definitely one of the best stories in this site.

The character is the right kind of broken and realistic post isekai type of response. 

Some typos are still there but that is normal in this site. 

Well written and well developed. Characters seem real rather than fake like most isekai stories though.

LilWubWub
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I absolutely loved the story! It was a great read, and it had beautiful closure. Awesome job!

Asviloka
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Impossible to put down

Read the whole thing without stopping. Extremely impressed. It's not easy to write multiple first-person characters and keep them all feeling distinct, but this story pulled it off beautifully.

 

Quite a few typos, though. I understand it's a 'wrimo book, but it could use a spell/grammar check.

JustAnAddict
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In a way, this story is perfect. It's well written, it's focused, it's dramatic, it's interesting, it's tragic, and, most importantly, it's completely unique. It doesn't belong anywhere below the top 5. The story leaves me wanting more, but I think expanding on this universe would ruin it, so I hope the author will move on.

 

I don't have a single bad thing to say about Epilogue. If you haven't, read it.