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In the war-torn land of Cyraveil, four heroes strove to overthrow an empire. By cold steel and elemental sorcery, they brought peace to a warring land on the brink of destruction. As the flames died, the realm needed strong leadership, and who better than the champions who had saved the kingdom? But when the people sought out their saviors... they vanished.

Matt, Blake, Jen, and Carl: the four mysterious companions, who together had deposed an insane ruler and saved countless lives, were gone—spirited back in a whirlwind of magic to a sleepy suburb in Mellbridge, Oregon, never to return. The friends found themselves home in the real world, exactly as they'd been the night they were taken, as if no time had passed... except only three came back.

  

 


 

Hi there! This was my entry for National Novel Writing Month, because why only write one series at a time? The more the merrier! (meanwhile, my keyboard bursts into flames...)

I'm also the writer of The Last Science, an ongoing low-fantasy/speculative sci-fi series. If you're familiar with that, you know what to expect here: lots of character-focused drama and dialogue, not a whole lot of traditional action. However, I'm writing a bit differently than usual here, and in a very different structure, so there should be some surprises for returning readers. I hope you enjoy it!

 [Discord] — for those of you who want to hang out and chat.

 

Cover art (fullsize): Path of Revelation, by taenaron (Tobias Roetsch), modified by Etzoli. Normally I like to do my own cover art from scratch, but I was in a rush for the contest. Might be replaced down the line if I get time.

[participant in the NaNoWriMo Royal Road challenge]

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Zethuron
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A Beautiful Tragedy

What a beautiful read this was from beginning to end. One of the best, if not the best short story i have read on royalroad, and fully deserves being so high on best rated. I felt so much different emotions throughout reading this tragedy in the making.

Totally flawless grammar, the author is just skilled at words.

The prose is of high quality, the perspectives are well written, this story is worthy of being published, thats how high quality it is.

 

I felt i just had to give this one a review, despite reading it months ago.

Wholeheartly recommended, this story doenst take much time to read. I also recommend the other stories by the same author.

hhhhhaaaa
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If you read nothing else but this line of this review, then I will tell you that Epilogue is a freaking amazing story whose premise is truly, truly unique. I could rave about Epilogue for hours... The characters Etzoli has written, the backstory and work that must have gone into writing this fiction, the sheer prospect of this idea that the story is built upon is absolutely brilliant! Every chapter has spurred me on to read the next, and the next, to find out what happened to each character, on Earth and the other world, to find out just how they're going to make up for the difference that the seven years they spent there has made. Epilogue is a beautiful story, full of heart and... well, fullness! I heartily recommend it to all who come upon it, especially those interested in reading Etzoli's fictions.

wayfarer
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Not a story i loved, but absolutely well-written

This story is more of a mystery thriller than high-fantasy, but it is definitely more enjoyable for those who have some isekai novel experience. PLEASE reply to my comment in the last chapter, I NEED CLOSURE!!

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Wow this is the best, so i'm writing this first, but the character are so fleshed out considering it's such a short story. Yes I hate certain characters at times, but that makes it so good, cos I can understand that's really how some people might feel or react, rather than hating the character for being fake or very forced.

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I feel it is a little inconsistent, as sometimes it is first person, yet other times it addresses the audience directly, or seemingly like a jurnal entry. Not sure if it is intentional as it only occurs with Jen as far as i noticed.

Story:
Great story, great thriller, "hate" the ending, but that's just the way mystery thrillers are i guess

Grammar:
Not many mistakes, some minor spelling error. And a language i can't understand haha

 

NeoJax
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This story is pretty unique. I really like how the author deals with what the characters go through after they return from a fantasy land that they have basically spent another life in. The characters play pretty well off of each other and as it goes on you learn more and more of what they went through. I really loved learning more and more about all of them and their experiences with the other world. I enjoyed reading this and would recommend it.

RiceCake
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It was a great story. As I read along the story It just pulled me In deeper. This story Is filled with emotion, but that ending tho... the bittersweet, dark, cliffhanger. But Is a good ending, It fulfils Its purpose.

If you are interested in reading this book, go for it.

Nadia Sarekhan
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Other users said it better than I can. This is a masterpiece worthy of bookshelves and the silver screen. I'm devastated and I wish I had answers, but I'm completely satisfied with what I got. Amazing work, amazing book, and amazing writer.

desologiki
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I wasn't prepared before reading this novel

If there are seven word to decribe this work it is; it that this review cannot do justice. It clearly has the mark of a good writer. The author is someone that can correctly and effectively convey the world stage as well as the motives and descriptions of the individual characters with in the story, while leaving up to the imagination the of what can just lie around the corner. Love it or Hate it there are plenty to say about this novel.

MystraMan
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Just incredible work. This was a NaNo novel? Incredible. I wish I could write something of this caliber. You are a true artist, and don't ever stop writing or let anyone tell you otherwise. I wish there were more, but I understand why you had to stop here. Thank you so much for writing it.

thatgirlinthetrees
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hate you, now I cant enjoy isekai stories anymore. This is too good, and the depth in such a short story is amazing. I want so much more, why won't you give it to me D:

100% recommend, 10/5, best story on RR. 

Alex M
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One of the best on RR

 Great writing. Interesting and different story. Well worth the read. 

This is a well thought-out and complete novel, with a satisfying close. Consisting of three strong viewpoint characters, and a tense plot, it kept me on my toes throughout.