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In the war-torn land of Cyraveil, four heroes strove to overthrow an empire. By cold steel and elemental sorcery, they brought peace to a warring land on the brink of destruction. As the flames died, the realm needed strong leadership, and who better than the champions who had saved the kingdom? But when the people sought out their saviors... they vanished.

Matt, Blake, Jen, and Carl: the four mysterious companions, who together had deposed an insane ruler and saved countless lives, were gone—spirited back in a whirlwind of magic to a sleepy suburb in Mellbridge, Oregon, never to return. The friends found themselves home in the real world, exactly as they'd been the night they were taken, as if no time had passed... except only three came back.

  

 


 

Hi there! This was my entry for National Novel Writing Month, because why only write one series at a time? The more the merrier! (meanwhile, my keyboard bursts into flames...)

I'm also the writer of The Last Science, an ongoing low-fantasy/speculative sci-fi series. If you're familiar with that, you know what to expect here: lots of character-focused drama and dialogue, not a whole lot of traditional action. However, I'm writing a bit differently than usual here, and in a very different structure, so there should be some surprises for returning readers. I hope you enjoy it!

 [Discord] — for those of you who want to hang out and chat.

 

Cover art (fullsize): Path of Revelation, by taenaron (Tobias Roetsch), modified by Etzoli. Normally I like to do my own cover art from scratch, but I was in a rush for the contest. Might be replaced down the line if I get time.

[participant in the NaNoWriMo Royal Road challenge]

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Thecarius
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Why isn't this longer, Etzoli?

I'm going to echo one of the other reviews: this novel has me emotionally devastated. I read the first 10 chapters all in one sitting, and spent the next ~15 days checking for new chapters literally every five minutes.

Etzoli really pulled a new trick out of his hat with this one. Stylistically, his writing has come a long way since he began TLS - Epilogue shows this off in spades. There's still the occasional typo here and there, but they don't affect immersion in the slightest.

This story is unusual: for RRL because it has very high writing quality and character development, and in general because it begins after the story proper has ended; the characters are transported back to Earth after living an isekai story during the exposition, and little is revealed about the other world proper. Even so, Epilogue easily pulls you in and leaves you wanting more of the other world - it comes with its own cultures, languages, and idioms that play a prominent part in character-building.

The characters... I don't know where to start. Without revealing much of their development, Etzoli leaves you wondering. The entire time. He leads you along with tantalizing looks out of their mind's eye, and then snatches their perspective away from you just in time for them to make critical decisions and actions and leave you wondering at their deeper perspective. It's tantalizing, tormenting, and an oh-so-beautiful style of writing. Matt, especially, is an extremely 3D character, and by the end of the novel you'll be just as invested as I was.

Jokmagic
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Epilogue is one of those special stories that drop you into a story right at the end and answer the question of "What Happens Next?" The writing style of the internal monologues and almost diary like writing of each of the three characters is what makes the story. There is no Grand adventure there is no epic fight scene, this series is all about the three characters and their lives after this Narnia esque adventure that they just had and what happens when they have to integrate back into normal society. For one, he does his absolute best to a defdeg,  an it seems like it's working for him. For another he's completely out of place and falls into a dark spiral. And then there's the one that's caught in the middle who tries her best to integrate but due to issues, she is left feeling broken and is therefore not able to integrate back and society. Some of my favorite parts tells of Jen's time at a friend's house for dinner. It shows something that she didn't notice before she left but now with all the things thathappened  to her in this adventure she had she's able to pick up the subtle clues and notice something that is severely wrong. overall what makes the store is the characters and how they interact with the world and their stories after the fact. I  recommend this story as a must-read for anyone who is always wondering what happens after the adventure. 

BigBadPeperoni
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I found this novel after it won NaNoWriMo and decided to give it a chance, and I did not regret that decission. This stroy is extremely good and should be published due to the sheer quality of the work despite being a quick read.

 

Style: The author has an amazing style which keeps the readed enthralled in the story telling and world builing present. It is extremely proffesional, more so than many novels I have read from renounded authors and the writter should feel very proud of this style.

 

Grammar: I have nothing to say about the grammar of this story other than it apears to be proffesionaly Proff read and edited with no obvious gramatical or spelling based mistakes that I noticed.

 

Story: The Author has managed to revitalise an extremly over done trope of 'Sent to a different universe with a fantasy setting'. It includes a seamless use of muliple POV which does not seem repeaditive and highights the character diven components of the story. The only reason that this did not recieve 5 stars is because I personally did not enjoy the thread forum posts which are used to try to express the frustration of Carl due to the lack of information but it was honestly boring to me, but that is a personal preffence. Still amazing work and a tone of prase should be directed towards the Author due to their amzaing use POV to tell a spectacular story with unpredictable twists.

 

Characters: Honestly the best part of the story with the multiple but even POV that the story it told from. This is done in a way to highlight inner conflicts and shows amazing character development. The personalitites feel real with realistic and understandable flaws. The author does an amzing job showing the changes in the reasoning with realisitc and logical thought patterns. Well done, you have my utmost respect for the planning and tallent that is required to make such belivable and three dimentonal characters. Again, well done.

 

Overall, this is a refressing take on an over used trope with intense character driven plot that is both highly realistic and entertaining. To any that have not yet had the oppourtunity to experience the trip the novel takes you on, I would highly recoment this as one of the best I have read on this site, period. 5/5 

The Ark Builder
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I hate this, you gotta read it though

  1. I hate everything about this novel. The stupid characters who make stupid decisions. The characters who just don't speak up about their problems and keep to themselves knowing it will cause more problems for them. The depressing mood throughout the whole story. Lack of a happy or even hinted at happy ending. Mostly the characters

The setting was cool, I like the returned trait. All in all 5/5 book that I utterly hate. Made me depressed and mad at all the characters. I would recommend this to everybody.

 

Even if I hate it, it doesn't mean it's bad. It's good actually. Having induced emotions from the reader is good. Its a good book about flawed people trying to cope in a situation unfamiliar to them.

Seviradi
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Strong 8 to moderate 9/10

I wrote a longer blurb about this elsewhere, so I'll just copy it here:

There's adventure, there's drama, there's a sprinkling of romance, there's even a bit of edginess in there, too. 

Writing quality is fantastic. Release rate is nonexistent since the series is complete, so you can freely binge the entire thing in one go if you care to. Characters portray recognizable tropes on the surface, but have sufficient twists on their personalities/outlooks such that they don't feel like something we've seen a hundred times already. Conflict isn't purely driven by interpersonal drama, and melodrama is kept to a minimum. Characters react realistically to each other given their respective positions and outlooks on events, and everything is tied together in a neat little bundle that's shown from the perspective of different characters for each chapter. Chapters are meaty without dragging on. The entire series is also only 29 chapters long.

Definitely worth checking out, easily one of the best stories I've read all year. 

VacillateWildly
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Fantastic story. Definitely worth checking out.

Reviewed at: Epilogue

At somewhere between 90,000 to 100,000 words this is slim by Royal Road standards, yet for all that it was certainly a tour de force. Fantastic premise, well drawn characters, convincing action done without telegraphing everything to the reader far in advance, I'm not sure what praise I can omit from this one. Who knew a reverse Narnia premise could work so well? Because it certainly did here.

The only two minor grouses I have? The first one is a bit of a spoiler, so read at your own risk:

Spoiler: Spoiler

 

The second being that the police procedural stuff candidly just doesn't reflect my (admittedly limited) understanding of these matters, particularly regarding missing persons investigations.

 

But beyond that? Fantastic read. The second instance of a RR book I may actually read more than once. (The first being the now sadly deleted Author of Eternity...meaning this is the only extant title I'd re-read.)

AmissArcher
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one hell of a ride

Reviewed at: Epilogue

This story was amazing. The way the author threads in small tidbits of the other world through each characters thoughts and actions is flawless.

You're right next to the characters as you try to reason your way through what's going on, and before you know it, you're invested. In the later chapters I was literally holding my breath, afraid to scroll down and read any further. Genuinely afraid. 

I STRONGLY recommend anyone reading my review to give this story a read. It was amazing. (PS: the review by "Evershadow" is right on the money)

Michael Dale
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The premise of the overall story is quite interesting.  However, the real strength in this story lies in the characters and their interactions.  The three main characters feel like they naturally mesh together perfectly.

I really look forward to seeing where this story goes.

Update:  It's finished now, but I still want more.  Moar!

Critstreak
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An amazing post isekai short story

Epilogue is a masterful work of art which follows a group of four whom have suddenly returned to earth from another world. Each of the four characters returns broken emotionally and mentally from the events which occured in the other world. The characters in Epilogue will draw fourth complex emotions which will allow you to feel a sense of identity for each character. The background world building leaves you desiring more which in combination with the extremely well written characters creates a wonderful short story which could be built upon in the future.

Dantalion22
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Brilliant Worldbuilding And Amazing Characters

The three characters are so great here I could read them forever. Please dont stop writing them. I love how you do worldbuilding too. I really want to hear more about Cyraveil and I love how the characters dont just tell me about it. This is the best kind of worldbuilding.