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In the war-torn land of Cyraveil, four heroes strove to overthrow an empire. By cold steel and elemental sorcery, they brought peace to a warring land on the brink of destruction. As the flames died, the realm needed strong leadership, and who better than the champions who had saved the kingdom? But when the people sought out their saviors... they vanished.

Matt, Blake, Jen, and Carl: the four mysterious companions, who together had deposed an insane ruler and saved countless lives, were gone—spirited back in a whirlwind of magic to a sleepy suburb in Mellbridge, Oregon, never to return. The friends found themselves home in the real world, exactly as they'd been the night they were taken, as if no time had passed... except only three came back.

  

 


 

Hi there! This was my entry for National Novel Writing Month, because why only write one series at a time? The more the merrier! (meanwhile, my keyboard bursts into flames...)

I'm also the writer of The Last Science, an ongoing low-fantasy/speculative sci-fi series. If you're familiar with that, you know what to expect here: lots of character-focused drama and dialogue, not a whole lot of traditional action. However, I'm writing a bit differently than usual here, and in a very different structure, so there should be some surprises for returning readers. I hope you enjoy it!

 [Discord] — for those of you who want to hang out and chat.

 

Cover art (fullsize): Path of Revelation, by taenaron (Tobias Roetsch), modified by Etzoli. Normally I like to do my own cover art from scratch, but I was in a rush for the contest. Might be replaced down the line if I get time.

[participant in the NaNoWriMo Royal Road challenge]

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MystraMan
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Just incredible work. This was a NaNo novel? Incredible. I wish I could write something of this caliber. You are a true artist, and don't ever stop writing or let anyone tell you otherwise. I wish there were more, but I understand why you had to stop here. Thank you so much for writing it.

Thecarius
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Why isn't this longer, Etzoli?

I'm going to echo one of the other reviews: this novel has me emotionally devastated. I read the first 10 chapters all in one sitting, and spent the next ~15 days checking for new chapters literally every five minutes.

Etzoli really pulled a new trick out of his hat with this one. Stylistically, his writing has come a long way since he began TLS - Epilogue shows this off in spades. There's still the occasional typo here and there, but they don't affect immersion in the slightest.

This story is unusual: for RRL because it has very high writing quality and character development, and in general because it begins after the story proper has ended; the characters are transported back to Earth after living an isekai story during the exposition, and little is revealed about the other world proper. Even so, Epilogue easily pulls you in and leaves you wanting more of the other world - it comes with its own cultures, languages, and idioms that play a prominent part in character-building.

The characters... I don't know where to start. Without revealing much of their development, Etzoli leaves you wondering. The entire time. He leads you along with tantalizing looks out of their mind's eye, and then snatches their perspective away from you just in time for them to make critical decisions and actions and leave you wondering at their deeper perspective. It's tantalizing, tormenting, and an oh-so-beautiful style of writing. Matt, especially, is an extremely 3D character, and by the end of the novel you'll be just as invested as I was.

thatgirlinthetrees
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hate you, now I cant enjoy isekai stories anymore. This is too good, and the depth in such a short story is amazing. I want so much more, why won't you give it to me D:

100% recommend, 10/5, best story on RR. 

Alex M
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 Great writing. Interesting and different story. Well worth the read. 

This is a well thought-out and complete novel, with a satisfying close. Consisting of three strong viewpoint characters, and a tense plot, it kept me on my toes throughout.

Sorde
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This has to be one of the best stories I've read to date, better than full length, published, critically acclaimed novels. I don't really know how to describe it, but if you feel like getting emotional, read this. You won't regret it.

Aletheia Seeker
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Sets the standard for the 5 star review

This story was utterly amazing, an evocation of raw emotions and complex evolving characters. Amazing story flow, no highs and lows on the story, a buildup to a human, flawed ending.

Kvothe
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This novel is absolutely wonderful. The story is absolutely stunning, realistic and engaging throughout the whole length of the novel. It's an extremely character driven novel, with hints of the characters' past shown and told to us in in a masterful way. It was a great Epilogue. 

I loved it. 

theyank
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I'm glad I picked this up

Warning: Review contains spoilers

Great style. POVs, while written in first person, were each distinctive, though they started to blend together towards the end. No major issues, though.

Story: Great story, pretty good for the most part. Some areas could have been forshadowed better, such as the domestic, but it was really quite good without any overused tropes. I did mention a plot hole in one of the comments, but its nothing too major.

Grammar: A few typos here and there, nothing a proof read wouldn't fix.

Characters: This is where the piece really shines. Each character has their own motivation, their flaws and strengths, their backstories. The backstories were given in bits and pieces and could have been coherent, but nothing that really broke immersion. In the end, there were no protagonists or antagonists, just real life people trying to readjust to the real world.

I don't normally read webnovels, least of all on RRL. But this is really a novel, not a webnovel, and I think its good enough to be seen on the bookshelves. You can count me in for any of your future works, Etzoli

Fasdaff
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A Hard-Hitting Twist on Dark Fantasy

Epilogue is a story with a unique and thought-provoking premise that should catch the attention of anyone with an interest in dark fantasy and similar stories. More importantly, Epilogue carries through with brisk and engaging style which maintains a steady pace of suspense that keeps you turning pages until it's over. It does a fantastic job of exploring its premise by showing its three characters struggle with the same circumstances in very different ways, and the very distinct points of view of each character help to keep the story varied and fresh from chapter to chapter.

Epilogue feels like a much shorter story than its length suggests; it is definitely not a lengthy drama with a drawn-out plot. The story moves very efficiently from plot point to point and wraps up while still retaining all of the momentum it built up over its chapters. For that reason you shouldn't be fooled by the drama/fantasy tags into expecting an epic fantasy story with long plot arcs and gradual character development. It's decidedly concise packs a serious punch and every page is worth the read.

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Ok, I actually only came here to talk about The Last Science (the author's other work), but I checked this out on the off chance it would be just as good. And it is! It's a beautiful small scale drama between four characters that really hits the notes perfect. Pacing is a little weird, but this is a nano novel so I'll let that slide. Can't wait to see how it gets worse for the characters!