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In the war-torn land of Cyraveil, four heroes strove to overthrow an empire. By cold steel and elemental sorcery, they brought peace to a warring land on the brink of destruction. As the flames died, the realm needed strong leadership, and who better than the champions who had saved the kingdom? But when the people sought out their saviors... they vanished.

Matt, Blake, Jen, and Carl: the four mysterious companions, who together had deposed an insane ruler and saved countless lives, were gone—spirited back in a whirlwind of magic to a sleepy suburb in Mellbridge, Oregon, never to return. The friends found themselves home in the real world, exactly as they'd been the night they were taken, as if no time had passed... except only three came back.

  

 


 

Hi there! This was my entry for National Novel Writing Month, because why only write one series at a time? The more the merrier! (meanwhile, my keyboard bursts into flames...)

I'm also the writer of The Last Science, an ongoing low-fantasy/speculative sci-fi series. If you're familiar with that, you know what to expect here: lots of character-focused drama and dialogue, not a whole lot of traditional action. However, I'm writing a bit differently than usual here, and in a very different structure, so there should be some surprises for returning readers. I hope you enjoy it!

 [Discord] — for those of you who want to hang out and chat.

 

Cover art (fullsize): Path of Revelation, by taenaron (Tobias Roetsch), modified by Etzoli. Normally I like to do my own cover art from scratch, but I was in a rush for the contest. Might be replaced down the line if I get time.

[participant in the NaNoWriMo Royal Road challenge]

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mormeg
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Does in 300 pages what most cant in 30k

Reviewed at: Epilogue

If you compare Epilogue with other fictions in RR, Id say its "short" and sweet.

Excellent story & plot, the author doesnt hold your hand and dumps information on you 2 pages after the beginning. 

The characters actually feel like REAL people.

The rest is just wonderful and very enjoyable.

Excellent worldbuilding, that it does feel as if I had read the whole adventures just from the tiny bits of info provided.

Aretae
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I have few extra words for this one. 

Wow.  Hard story to read. I had to stop several times along the way because it was too heavy.  I did finish, but dang, this is a story. 

Short, finished, deep, heavy, painful, beautiful. 

Thanks for writing it.

DragooMind
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So true but yet so sad

Reviewed at: Epilogue


Warning this review will contain spoilers of the general direction of the story. Read at your own discretion.

 

 

A hell of a rollercoaster of emotions. And I'm not quite sure what to think of it. It's a quite realistic depiction of what happens when the teenager living in another world come back to earth.

It's a great story and even thought it's pretty short in comparison u can't help but get engaged in the characters.

 It's show is how the world really is. Not black and white but shades of grey. We face each character's emotions, scars, motivations, regrets and doubts. And the end we get and end that is by no means satisfying. I don't mean that in a bad way as that is intended. You don't get a Happy End or will think it's got that it ended this way. Instead u get the bittersweet taste of reality of uncertainty and maybe melancholy depending who u are. But that's makes is all the more impactful. Because it's so much more realistic because in reality u will never find that closure.

Patwil0818
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Don’t let this one slip by you

Reviewed at: Epilogue

A lot of people have written excellent reviews about this story so I'm not going to repeat them all.  I'm just going to say if you are a fan of character driven literature regardless of genre - read this story!

I read hundreds of stories a year and while most are fun or exciting few move me like this story did. I couldn't put it down.  Literally finished it in a night.  The author makes it so easy to place yourself into the story, to feel the emotions and horror the characters experience.

seriously folks read this story. You won't be disappointed. Hands down the best I've read in years. 

CrimUmbre
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An Emotional Masterpiece

Reviewed at: Epilogue
  1. This story proved that action isnt all that. It led me into a tale of mystery, drama, and hardships. The characters and their backstories were so complex, and the dialogue made me feel like I was with then for that  7 years. By far the best Fantasy Drama on Royal Road.
Razanil
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The story is pure Gold errr Adamantine.

Reviewed at: Epilogue

What happens after you got transported to another world and then you got transported back? No comedy. Just real stuff. If you're fan of this kind of genre, do yourself a favor and read this.

XeroDK
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Greatest Story Since Sliced Bread?

Reviewed at: Epilogue

This story was amazing for what it is, an epilogue to a story that would've been a great read if this was the quality to be expected. This story is so simple and well-executed that it amazes me at how good it is.

I'm about to tell you the entire plot of this novel in a sentence: three teenagers came back from an isekai world after years of struggle and development and they each journey to come to terms with what they've done and what they have to do now. There, if this isn't your cup of tea, I saved you about four hours. But I'm here to say that this story will appeal to a great many looking for good character-driven novels.

Valint
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For those who want something more realistic than 'happily ever after'

Reviewed at: Epilogue

This is the kind of story I've been wanting to read for a while; I'm glad someone finally wrote it.

Epilogue is the story of what happens after the portal fantasy is over, when the kids go back through the looking glass and wardrobe, and have to get used to being normal kids in a mundane world again (or can't).

I thought the characterization was really well done, which is what carries the fic single-handedly for me.

This isn't completely without flaws.  It has the rough feel of something that's more a draft than a finished product.  On the other hand, it's possible that the raw edges give it more of a feeling of authenticity, sort of like a 'found footage' fic.

If you've ever read an isekai or portal fantasy, and wondered what happened next, this is the fic for you.

imnotverysorry
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Disclaimer: I will try to keep this spoiler free.

Overview: Although a short story by chapter count, it is a definite must read in my opinion. The story Epilouge tells is a different flavour of Isekai, however we meet our "heros" after they complete their epic quest, after the end of their odyssey. We get to see how they behave after being dropped back home.

Story: this story has 3 protagonists, each one having had a different experience. Although you never get the full story of their journey, you can easily see how the events that happened on the other side effected each characters opinion of their return and efforts in the 'real' world.

Style: the story flows with each chapter being in a different POV, but it is easy to follow. It is well written, and touches on something few stories do; the mental after effects of something on this scale. As state on the previous section; you never really get fully told their story in the other world, but you get snippets of it, however even then you get Involved with the characters easily.

Grammar: I wasnt able to spot anything that really popped out.

Character: Each character is well defined, with their own personality. It's extremely visible that what they experienced on the other side weighs down on them, and each one has their own unique way to deal with the consequences. Despite all of that it is extremely easy to get Involved with the characters. 

NoDragons
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Single Mean Review (Think About This Every Time You Write)

Reviewed at: Chapter 2 — Carl

This is a good story. Keep it up.

 

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