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In the war-torn land of Cyraveil, four heroes strove to overthrow an empire. By cold steel and elemental sorcery, they brought peace to a warring land on the brink of destruction. As the flames died, the realm needed strong leadership, and who better than the champions who had saved the kingdom? But when the people sought out their saviors... they vanished.

Matt, Blake, Jen, and Carl: the four mysterious companions, who together had deposed an insane ruler and saved countless lives, were gone—spirited back in a whirlwind of magic to a sleepy suburb in Mellbridge, Oregon, never to return. The friends found themselves home in the real world, exactly as they'd been the night they were taken, as if no time had passed... except only three came back.

  

 


 

Hi there! This was my entry for National Novel Writing Month, because why only write one series at a time? The more the merrier! (meanwhile, my keyboard bursts into flames...)

I'm also the writer of The Last Science, an ongoing low-fantasy/speculative sci-fi series. If you're familiar with that, you know what to expect here: lots of character-focused drama and dialogue, not a whole lot of traditional action. However, I'm writing a bit differently than usual here, and in a very different structure, so there should be some surprises for returning readers. I hope you enjoy it!

 [Discord] — for those of you who want to hang out and chat.

 

Cover art (fullsize): Path of Revelation, by taenaron (Tobias Roetsch), modified by Etzoli. Normally I like to do my own cover art from scratch, but I was in a rush for the contest. Might be replaced down the line if I get time.

[participant in the NaNoWriMo Royal Road challenge]

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Zethuron
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What a beautiful read this was from beginning to end. One of the best, if not the best short story i have read on royalroad, and fully deserves being so high on best rated. I felt so much different emotions throughout reading this tragedy in the making.

Totally flawless grammar, the author is just skilled at words.

The prose is of high quality, the perspectives are well written, this story is worthy of being published, thats how high quality it is.

 

I felt i just had to give this one a review, despite reading it months ago.

Wholeheartly recommended, this story doenst take much time to read. I also recommend the other stories by the same author.

Quantum_Mechanic
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I swear I hate the psychological tag, but...

This story has an amazing depth, well beyond just about any other story I've read on the internet, not just RRL. This demands publishing in calligraphied hardback and paperback, not just the typical amazon or otherwise digital release.

I haven't said it for any other story on this site but this qualifies for a movie script or maybe even a TV or Netflix miniseries.

We don't have enough stars for this, I'm gonna have to go back to most of my other reviews and reduce their scores so I can normalize the values.

Blind Snot Dragon
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This story was a real binge in all meanings of that word. It sucks you in and doesn't spit you out until your on the other side with a headache, feeling haggard, and bleary trying to figure out what just happened!

I saw a lot of conflict in the comments over who was the villain in this story with ample blame blown everywhere. That is a fallacy, the story is a tragedy and as such there is no true villian, only broken people making beautiful, heart wrenching and broken choices.

The number of times I thought, if only they had communicated! But that is not how things work in reality and this story based on isekia and fantasy is incredibly faithful to reality. It portrays the shocking truth of what would happen when four teenagers are sent to another world and back. It's a tragedy, it was hard to read at times and I disagreed or couldn't understand the choices some characters made. But that is so true to people and so true to life and at no point did I not care.

Etzoli, thank you for sharing.

TWPM
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I Need an Epilogue

Reviewed at: Epilogue

GOOD LORD!!!!

I created an account just to write this review. This story is absolutely amazing. I came here from a narration channel on youtube and he hadn't completed the story, but I NEEDED more. I never thought I would say that I needed an epilogue for an epilogue, but I do. Technicly, there was one, but it felt more like simply completing the story. What I need is to now what happened to the characters, and boy am I trying hard not to spoil anything. I would also Like a prequal, although it should be labled as something else so no one trys to sneak in more context then they should have, spoiling it for themselves. I know the sequal and prequal will most likely never be written, and that perhaps they shouldn't. However, I will dream.

Starstripe
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A poor inflection of a Review

Reviewed at: Epilogue

Words cannot begin to describe the sheer magnitude nor the sociological effects this created when I first read it. 

Each chapter holds a grand mixture of  deeply enriched meaning, specially tailored to reflect the character represented. The interactions are like a grasp of tentacles mingling together, all leaving traces amongst each other; adequately changing at a pace. This story is a wonder with the portrayals of its characters, and its own setting.  To many it will have adverse effects but in testament, it left a burning sensation in me; like that of a stark madness.

In its entirety, this fiction is one of the top on RR and I could not recommend enough to have a peek inside. The potentially faux mental scars are worth it.

Kvothe
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This novel is absolutely wonderful. The story is absolutely stunning, realistic and engaging throughout the whole length of the novel. It's an extremely character driven novel, with hints of the characters' past shown and told to us in in a masterful way. It was a great Epilogue. 

I loved it. 

Fasdaff
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A Hard-Hitting Twist on Dark Fantasy

Epilogue is a story with a unique and thought-provoking premise that should catch the attention of anyone with an interest in dark fantasy and similar stories. More importantly, Epilogue carries through with brisk and engaging style which maintains a steady pace of suspense that keeps you turning pages until it's over. It does a fantastic job of exploring its premise by showing its three characters struggle with the same circumstances in very different ways, and the very distinct points of view of each character help to keep the story varied and fresh from chapter to chapter.

Epilogue feels like a much shorter story than its length suggests; it is definitely not a lengthy drama with a drawn-out plot. The story moves very efficiently from plot point to point and wraps up while still retaining all of the momentum it built up over its chapters. For that reason you shouldn't be fooled by the drama/fantasy tags into expecting an epic fantasy story with long plot arcs and gradual character development. It's decidedly concise packs a serious punch and every page is worth the read.

theyank
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I'm glad I picked this up

Warning: Review contains spoilers

Great style. POVs, while written in first person, were each distinctive, though they started to blend together towards the end. No major issues, though.

Story: Great story, pretty good for the most part. Some areas could have been forshadowed better, such as the domestic, but it was really quite good without any overused tropes. I did mention a plot hole in one of the comments, but its nothing too major.

Grammar: A few typos here and there, nothing a proof read wouldn't fix.

Characters: This is where the piece really shines. Each character has their own motivation, their flaws and strengths, their backstories. The backstories were given in bits and pieces and could have been coherent, but nothing that really broke immersion. In the end, there were no protagonists or antagonists, just real life people trying to readjust to the real world.

I don't normally read webnovels, least of all on RRL. But this is really a novel, not a webnovel, and I think its good enough to be seen on the bookshelves. You can count me in for any of your future works, Etzoli

desologiki
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I wasn't prepared before reading this novel

If there are seven word to decribe this work it is; it that this review cannot do justice. It clearly has the mark of a good writer. The author is someone that can correctly and effectively convey the world stage as well as the motives and descriptions of the individual characters with in the story, while leaving up to the imagination the of what can just lie around the corner. Love it or Hate it there are plenty to say about this novel.

sandro530
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Awesome and short the way it should be.

Reviewed at: Epilogue

This is a very good and amazingly well written story it deserves the high rating and all but somehow the lack of magic makes it more difficult to read for me. The characters are well displayed and the background story as well but if it had more than 25-30 chapters I would probably have dropped it because of the lack of magic. But it is awesome with it being short enough to want to finish it and not long enough to get bored.