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In the war-torn land of Cyraveil, four heroes strove to overthrow an empire. By cold steel and elemental sorcery, they brought peace to a warring land on the brink of destruction. As the flames died, the realm needed strong leadership, and who better than the champions who had saved the kingdom? But when the people sought out their saviors... they vanished.

Matt, Blake, Jen, and Carl: the four mysterious companions, who together had deposed an insane ruler and saved countless lives, were gone—spirited back in a whirlwind of magic to a sleepy suburb in Mellbridge, Oregon, never to return. The friends found themselves home in the real world, exactly as they'd been the night they were taken, as if no time had passed... except only three came back.

  

 


 

Hi there! This was my entry for National Novel Writing Month, because why only write one series at a time? The more the merrier! (meanwhile, my keyboard bursts into flames...)

I'm also the writer of The Last Science, an ongoing low-fantasy/speculative sci-fi series. If you're familiar with that, you know what to expect here: lots of character-focused drama and dialogue, not a whole lot of traditional action. However, I'm writing a bit differently than usual here, and in a very different structure, so there should be some surprises for returning readers. I hope you enjoy it!

 [Discord] — for those of you who want to hang out and chat.

 

Cover art (fullsize): Path of Revelation, by taenaron (Tobias Roetsch), modified by Etzoli. Normally I like to do my own cover art from scratch, but I was in a rush for the contest. Might be replaced down the line if I get time.

[participant in the NaNoWriMo Royal Road challenge]

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neganeko
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yes this book is good and I really like it and you should read it because it is good. it rivals my immortal in quality, though not quite as good. it is definitely better than the stories in morrowind however, and doesnt come with the amphetamine binge. This may be positive or negative for you depending on how you view things, but its probably positive. it just won a contest so you should extra read it and encourage him to use more amphetamines to write his works of art so that one day he may surpass the greats like ebony da'arkness raven way or whatever and can finally exterminate the prepz and pozers

oldmannick
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English gimmick is just wrong

As much as I like the story, Jen forgetting English just isn't a thing that happens to people. Even brain injury usually doesn't damage your knowledge of your mother tongue. If you're 16 and pick up a new language, it just won't overwrite your knowledge of the original. That gimmick was off putting for how unrealistic it is. I know it's a fantasy themed story, but it's not that kind of fantasy. 

forseeti
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This novel made me sooo mad

This story kept me engaged from first chapter and was fairly interesting. Author have really interesting approach to the characters change after their journey. Personally some of them make no sense from information given about some characters and u have a bad teste after 2 of the characters are shown in very good light while another apparently smartest is unhinged.

This novel ending is ridiculous. Made me soooo mad and I regretted that I even seen it. I really wanted to give author 1 star because of it but it wouldn’t be fair. I just wish there was a continuation to it as there is room there for some revenge story.

T_J_K
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A brilliant story, if sometimes logically inconsistent. 

Pale imitation
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Story is okay but could use some polishing. A few plot holes and logic errors.

LordDelakar
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Truly great work. Probably one of the best or RR, You all more or less know the story that happens before. We have all read it a dozen or so times at least on RR. Characters are well though out and the trauma feels real. This isn't that story on RR this is what happens after that story a true epilogue.