Original ONGOING Contemporary Drama Fantasy Psychological Female Lead Magic Male Lead Multiple Lead Characters School Life Secret Identity Supernatural
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In the war-torn land of Cyraveil, four heroes strove to overthrow an empire by cold steel and elemental sorcery, and brought peace to a warring land on the brink of destruction. As the flames died, the realm needed strong leadership, and who better than the champions who had saved the kingdom? But when the people sought out their saviors... they vanished.

Matt, Blake, Jen, and Carl: the mysterious companions who together had deposed an insane ruler and saved countless lives, were gone — spirited back in a whirlwind of magic to a sleepy suburb in Mellbridge, Oregon, never to return. The friends found themselves home in the real world, exactly as they'd been the night they were taken, as if no time had passed... except only three came back.

  

 


Hi there! This is my entry for National Novel Writing Month, because why only write one series at a time? The more the merrier! (meanwhile, my keyboard bursts into flames...)

I'm also the writer of The Last Science, an ongoing low-fantasy/speculative sci-fi series. If you're familiar with that, you know what to expect here: lots of character-focused drama and dialogue, not a whole lot of traditional action. However, I'm writing a bit differently than usual here, and in a very different structure, so there should be some surprises for returning readers. 

I'm still writing and updating that series weekly, and it is my primary project, so I do apologize if any weird errors slip through in Epilogue here. Rougher! Shorter! Punchier! More prone to continuity slips! Let me know if you spot anything wrong, and I hope you enjoy it.

—Etzoli

 

Cover art (fullsize): Path of Revelation, by taenaron (Tobias Roetsch), modified by Etzoli. Normally I like to do my own cover art from scratch, but I was in a rush for the contest. Might be replaced down the line if I get time.

[participant in the NaNoWriMo Royal Road challenge]

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Dantalion22
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Brilliant Worldbuilding And Amazing Characters

The three characters are so great here I could read them forever. Please dont stop writing them. I love how you do worldbuilding too. I really want to hear more about Cyraveil and I love how the characters dont just tell me about it. This is the best kind of worldbuilding.

Michael Dale
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The premise of the overall story is quite interesting.  However, the real strength in this story lies in the characters and their interactions.  The three main characters feel like they naturally mesh together perfectly.

I really look forward to seeing where this story goes.

Westerfordson
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Ok, I actually only came here to talk about The Last Science (the author's other work), but I checked this out on the off chance it would be just as good. And it is! It's a beautiful small scale drama between four characters that really hits the notes perfect. Pacing is a little weird, but this is a nano novel so I'll let that slide. Can't wait to see how it gets worse for the characters!