The Dungeon Traveler

The Dungeon Traveler

by alstonsleet

Warning This fiction contains:
  • Gore
  • Profanity

I spent most of my life trying to get by with whatever happiness I could, that included alcohol, food, and porn.

My death was unpleasant and humiliating. However, death is something we all need to go through. A bit like a proctology exam; necessary but never anything one wants to go through while it's happening.

However, death was supposed to be the end of it. Either way, the pain, suffering, and failures were supposed to be over. I was supposed to wink out, or perhaps take a trip to a lovely afterlife!

No, I ended up as a small stone, strapped to a table, while a pimple-faced teenager rubbed my facets and told me how 'lovely' I was. Last time I checked, birth wasn't supposed to be as embarrassing as death!

Life as a dungeon core isn't all bad. I like watching lizard love triangles and snooping on militaristic dwarves; though there is that issue where I'm trying to free myself from the entanglements of the Gods....ok, yeah that last one is a bit of a problem.

 



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alianok
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Nice story.

Doesn't walk in the trap of the dungeon story where the author try to describe every part of the dungeon with the utmost detail.

Well written, with an interesting cast.

Lessthan
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Characters were believable. They also conversed naturally (a hard skill to master!).

A unique dungeon core setup, though focus of the story was less about the traps and more about world building and machinations.

The world was interesting. People had amusing, if completely rational, responses to the dungeon. The dungeon also had the best spider's "welcome to my parlor" attitude and snark while they had divers. 

I find the stories where the core still has sexual intent to be creepy and this one had none of that. I'm grateful. (Stones with the power of life and death over sex slaves they've created aren't fun for me to read.)

I liked reading it. You should read it too. :-)

tomereader
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A Great Dungeon Core Novel

The Dungeon Traveler is a great addition to the dungeon core genre.  The author combined humour and more serious themes to create a consistent, engaging tone; the story and characters, although somewhat predictable and traditional, are still engaging, and there were almost no grammatical errors by the time I read it.  I highly recommend this book to anyone who enjoys light LITRPG or dungeon core novels.

My favourite part of the book was its constant, but not overdone, humour.  The author kept the tone light and added jokes without breaking the flow of the story.  The book jumps between viewpoints well, and gives the reader a sense of the wider politics of the world without the need for unnecessary info dumps.

Spoiler: Spoiler

 The story and characters were traditional fantasy fare, done well.  The characters don't undergo any great personal journeys or changes, and tend to follow fantasy stereotypes (although that is hard to avoid in any LITRPG novel).  The story, while hardly revolutionary, is interesting and engaging.  The ending is also rather predictable.  However, overall, the plot was solid and the characters were relatable and satisfying.

The grammar was excellent.  There were practically no grammatical mistakes (I noticed one in the entire book as of January 8-9).

If you like LITRPG, especially dungeon novels, then I cannot recommend this book enough.

Steady
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haha nice i liked story at the end of book 1

Rewrote this review. Spoilers for book 1!

At some point I thought the the plot was too slow, but it ended up having a large payoff. Now I like how the whole of book 1 happened, so here's a new complaint because I can't in good concious leave a review without a valid complaint. It felt like we[the readers] were taken for a ride, and only afterwards were told what really happened. I suppose we were given some hints- like at the end of Ch 28 when Denda feels insecure. I was expecting a climax where it would be some kind of top 10 anime fight or plot twist or something (I mean yeah there was a fight, and a sort of plot twist but also it was just reluctant person A gets strung along by angry church person B trying to kill a dungeon and we were kinda expecting at some point the dungeon to kill the angry one), but the real plot twist instead is ok here's what's really happening. So there's a bit of a disconnect between what the dungeon is thinking/doing and everything that's happening. I guess Denda is more of a main character at this point. Even though the climax wasn't what I wanted it to be ( I wanted it to be more exhilarating or something) the more I think about the story, the more well thought out I think it is. The strength of the story isn't the dungeon, but rather the web of events. It's pretty hecking rad that there was pretty much a reason for everything. I love it! So these complaints aren't quite complaints I guess, just some comments. The dungeon still is something that's just doing stuff. At this point there's way too much focus on the dungeon for how little he does. Like when he's observing how that lizard tribe functions. It's a lot of words, that you can just kinda cut off and I think it would make a better (if you can cut out hundreds/thousands of words out of a story, and the story isn't worse off, then maybe you should delete them. Also I'm not saying to cut it out completely, just abridge/shorten it a bit because it still is world building). Hopefully the dungeon does more/has more choices or something though in the future. But at the end of the day, there's a pretty cool stage being set up, and I can't wait to read the next book.

Matt598
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So far it's been a thrilling read learning about poor ole Dale and how he tries to understand where he belongs in the hierarchy of the world, and the moral consequences of well, being a dungeon.

Rest of this cojtauns spoilers, just just know, it has some great humor and also some interesting godly dynamics and takes on a litrpg.

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stetyson
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Pretty good working towards great.

As with most stories on rd slow improvements as the story progresses with plot, prose, and grammar. Worth the read!

Tel
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huh? what?? OMG giggle

Unique and interesting take on Gods, dungeons, and when reincarnation is more of a facepalm.

Bit of a fast burn though.....

A race between the authors flair for descriptive writing, and plot. Is "rollicking" a word? Because it is a rollicking fun read. Only 30 chapters in but I've laughed a dozen or more times on this magical dungeon dive tour.

 

Who are you neppu
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I very much enjoy this story. The author manages to breath new life into a genre that was dying for me. All his characters are interesting even when you can’t understand them, a trait very few authors can claim to possess. The spelling and grammar are great, I haven’t noticed any mistakes up to this point. I look forward to seeing how this continues. I hope this has helped any potential reader to pick it up.
AyatoRahXephon
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Overall one of the best dungeon core stories I have read. Only thing I'm waiting for is for a goal other than just survive.

Larry
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Haven't finished reading yet. Only on chapter 12.

Very good writing. Love the way the MC swears. Crackers!

Worldbuilding is good.