The Dungeon Traveler

The Dungeon Traveler

by alstonsleet

Warning This fiction contains:
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  • Profanity

I spent most of my life trying to get by with whatever happiness I could, that included alcohol, food, and porn.

My death was unpleasant and humiliating. However, death is something we all need to go through. A bit like a proctology exam; necessary but never anything one wants to go through while it's happening.

However, death was supposed to be the end of it. Either way, the pain, suffering, and failures were supposed to be over. I was supposed to wink out, or perhaps take a trip to a lovely afterlife!

No, I ended up as a small stone, strapped to a table, while a pimple-faced teenager rubbed my facets and told me how 'lovely' I was. Last time I checked, birth wasn't supposed to be as embarrassing as death!

Life as a dungeon core isn't all bad. I like watching lizard love triangles and snooping on militaristic dwarves; though there is that issue where I'm trying to free myself from the entanglements of the Gods....ok, yeah that last one is a bit of a problem.

 



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DrAlt
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Good Dungeon Core Idea, So Why Not Focus On It?

Reviewed at: Epilogue - I'm sorry.

Found this on Royal Road and then I saw author moved over to Kindle.  My evaluation of the first book was it had an interesting premise, MC is reincarnated as a dungeon core and then employed by the local gods as 'dungeon of challenges'.  The modern perspective of pitting your mind against unusual fantasy world classes in designed challenges is awesome and sparked my interest, but it didn't happen ENOUGH.  The dungeon moves every month, and it seems like it should be prime focus of the novel.

Most of the words are about the local gods doing political manuevers which obliquely mention the dungeon, or from the perspective of locals reacting to the new dungeon entrance that just showed up.  Then there are direct perpsective of the adventures themselves in the challenges, which aren't interesting compared to the dungeon's own thoughts.  The more I read, the more I realized I only like the characterization and growth of the dungeon core, and that isn't a high percentage of the novel.  I read the first book here, and reviewed the second from kindle unlimited.  

This was almost a great series, but ended up mediocre.

DarkD
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"No Criticism is too Harsh"... okay.

Reviewed at: Book 2 - Traveling The Dungeon

 I've read all of book 1 and half of book 2.  So basically the dungeon has two components to it, overly easy challenges that offer large prizes for what basically amounts to a game of hopscotch.  And the dungeon's serious death maze which can kill high tier enemies on it's first attempt.  Finally the plot mainly revolves around the protagonist watching alien cultures like he's watching a soap opera and every 30 days, he changes the channel.  

Note I had to delay writing a review for this because Amazon won't let me write a review for some reason despite me owning and reading the books....  So a few of the details are foggy in my memory.  

Honestly, dungeon fictions get off too easy on this site.  People want them, but no one's really made a good one yet so the bar is set to rock bottom.  I've read too many of them trying to find one I actually like, so I may be a bit harsher than others would think it deserves.  

In the former, each challenge is ranked from low tier to high tier.  The low tier tests the absolute minimum level of a stat like agility.  Agility's challenge is basically jump across the platforms.  These get harder at higher levels, but almost no one actually attempts anything but the weakest challenges.  I gave up in the second book reading about these dog people who seemed to be completely ignoring all the challenges.  

The expectation from the author seems to be more focused on exploring unique cultures since the dungeon can spy on the cities of all these towns he's visiting with his dungeon.  Honestly, this element just doesnt work since there's no real plot development in it.  It's more like the author is saying "hey, look at this cool culture I made up.  It's got dog people and they get attacked by monster waves and they got really cool pit traps to fight them off." Honestly, I don't care about your made up cultures.  I'm here to read cool plots and well developed characters.  

For the second "serious death maze" parts are where the storyline actually happens.  And honestly, I wasn't too moved by it.  (minor spoilers) I wasn't too convinced with the "decent into madness" because the reasoning seemed weak.  And the idea that one failed attempt on the dungeon's life makes it unbeatable... 

Because of the above, you've basically just told me that there's no point reading further.  Any further attempts on the dungeons life are going to involve bs plot twists like "a magic device that lowers all defenses" or that all future plots are going to revolve around external events like a world war that blows up everything and the dungeon needs to play the noble hero.  Neither plot line sounds very fun to me.  

The external plot is pretty dull.  The protagonist has an OP scry spell that lets him peer anywhere in the world that he wants only with no sound.  Every 30 days he moves his entrance to a different city then watches the cultures below like a soap opera.  Out of the 6 towns I've seen him monitor, the mages tower was pretty interesting, the kobold and 2 human towns were okay and the rest were pretty dull. 

I mainly don't like the above because nothing happens in most of these towns.  They play out like a kid showing off his imaginary creations in a silent movie.  As in no one has dialog.  

darkseven
Overall

An enjoyable dungeon core story

Pros:

  • A good example of dungeon core litrpg!
  • Spelling and grammer are well done and casual readers won't notice any issues here.
  • The plot is just complicated enough to keep things interesting

 

Cons

  • The deck might be a little too stacked in the MC's favor for some people
  • Descriptions of the actual dungeon building process are sometimes a bit light

 

Overall I would definitely recommend!

ViolentViolet41
Overall

This is a wonderful concept, and I am so glad I found this. Just a few spelling and/or grammer errors, capitalizing and commas mostly. Keep it up!

Sledor12
Overall

Looking forward to more.

I've read up to chapter 23 and so far I really like this story. I'm looking forward to seeing what happens next.

ikorack
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First time I've seen a dungeon story actually finish a full arc. Well done. I hope you have something just as cool lined up next.

Dungeon doesn't go full OP immedietly; explores his new situation more organically and although the pace of his learning is obviously tied to the pace of the story; I don't believe it could be counted as a disservice.

The scale of the story is mostly skirmish level, but it's always quickly tied to the larger scale story going on in the  world at large. Either through other view points or through the MCs ability to see outside his dungeon.

 

Infact I would go so far as to say I'll never read another dungeon story that doesn't have an MC with this level of involvement with the world around them. I honestly didn't realize it was a failing of the genre until this story.

Thank you Mr. Alstonsleet

NobodySpecial
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personally I think this story (currently at chapter 9) has been well thought out so far, there are clear logical reasons for some people having the positions and classes they have, like the rebel king who took over from the tyrant king, there is a lot of back story there that we can deduce, I assume it will probably influence the kings actions towards the dungeon in some way but that just means the king is more than one dimentional

I look forward to seeing where this story goes

Toastforbreakfast
Overall

I swear I read chapter 37 of this. Where is it?

KyuuSyron
Overall

It's difficult for me to think of much besides that I enjoyed it. Yes, it's a dungeon story with 'level-ups'. If that's what you like, then you'll like this. Unfortunately, or fortunately depending on how you feel about it, the story focuses on things that are unusual for a story of this genre. 

Monsters exist, and we talk about them, but they aren't really seen.

Levels exist, and we talk about them, but they don't really factor.

Also it is the first of a series, so any and all complaints of what is or isn't there is kind of moot. You wouldn't fault Rowling for not mentioning Horcruxes in the Philosopher's Stone.

So in short? The book is fun, and if you have complaints about it you're wrong. And so's your face. There.

Phil276
Overall

Ignore the style of the first few chapters

I was put off for a long time since the tone of the story seemed too childish for the first six chapters. After that, it all gets better though and now with the end of book 1 the story is really good.