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Morgan Mackenzie had a very bad day. First at work, then at home, and then her bathtub fell through a portal to another world, with her in it. Now she's stuck thousands of miles from any sort of civilization with nothing but the bathtub and a lace puffball scrubby. But she learned magic, so that's sorta nice. Now if only she could find some clothes...

Cover art by SourMonkey and Tox

DISCLAIMER: This story has multiple characters and different points of view. Morgan is the main protagonist but she does not move through an empty world. This is a bigger story than just one main character fighting the monster of the week.

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Chapter Name Release Date
Chapter 1: The Drop ago
Chapter 2: Survival, with a side of screaming. ago
Chapter 3: Fruits of Thy Labors ago
Chapter 4: End of an Age ago
Chapter 5: Climb Down ago
Chapter 6: Enchantment ago
Chapter 7: Aspect Locked ago
Chapter 8: Crystallized ago
Chapter 9: Run, Fight, or Die ago
Chapter 10: Know Thyself ago
First InterLulude: Defend! ago
Chapter 11: Storm Break ago
Chapter 12: [Skyclad Sorceress] ago
Chapter 13: Sympathetic Reflex ago
Chapter 14: Blood Burns True ago
Chapter 15: First Raven's Roost ago
Chapter 16: [Mage-Eater] ago
Chapter 17: Living Runes ago
Chapter 18: Terrakinesis ago
Interlude: The Broken ago
Chapter 19: Experimentation ago
Chapter 20: Eye of Madness ago
Chapter 21: Glimmers and Glimpses ago
Chapter 22: Incineratus ago
Interlude: The General ago
Chapter 23: Expedition ago
Chapter 24: Bitter Tears ago
Chapter 25: Wanderings ago
Chapter 26: Territorial Disputes ago
Interlude: The Harlot ago
Chapter 27: Shattered Fates ago
Chapter 28: Crimson Ruin ago
Chapter 29: Bounty of the Wilds ago
Chapter 30: Entrenchment ago
Chapter 31: A Slight Miscalculation ago
InterLulude: Hello! ago
Chapter 32: A Fireside Chat ago
InterLulude: Filth! ago
Chapter 33: Under Ashen Skies ago
Skyclad - Interlude: The Dreamer ago
Chapter 34: The Devil's Drum ago
Chapter 35: Aspect of the Harbinger ago
Chapter 36: Thunder and Mud ago
Chapter 37: Reunions ago
Chapter 38: Impact Duality ago
Chapter 39: Dirt ago
Chapter 40: Coronas Judicas ago
Chapter 41: Unending Duty ago
Skyclad - Epilogue: Winds that Whisper ago
Book Two ago
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Feanyar
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Brimming with potential, but a complete mess

This is a hard one, because every category has things it does really well and others where it fails and ruins the good parts. It's a classic case of "winning the battles, yet losing the war", because chapter by chapter the story is good. What it does, it does well but the real issue is what it doesn't do: Stitching those chapters together into a coherent whole.

But let's start with the good things:

The grammar is very good with only few minor hickups and formatting issues, but nothing big. Def. much better than most stories here!

In terms of story, style and characters Skyclad starts strong with many creative twists and promises of something bigger. We get to see Morgans first steps in her new situation after her comically absurd entrance. The narration (3rd person limited) sticks pretty close to her and manages to convey her internal monologue well. In addition we get glimpses of the larger world and how the pieces start moving outside her neck of the wood. So far, so good.

The story starts devolving around chapter 20 with the mini-timeskip. More and more characters get introduced here and the story begins to collapse under it's own weight. No, I am not compaining about interludes. I like interludes and worldbuilding in general, the issue is how that affects this story!

From here on, things get rushed and disjointed. Important scenes glossed over or skipped entirely. Time spent on buildup gets wasted because the payoff and conclusion is dropped off-screen. We no longer see growth, just a brief showcasing of the results and the internal monologue (esp. of Morgan) disappears almost entirely or is left for insignificant scenes but not where it matters.

The presence of many PoVs/Interludes only amplify that underlying problem. They are not the problem story-wise, allthough they might be the issue in terms of writing skill. Juggling too many plates will result only in shards for most people, even though it isnt impossible to pull off.

Examples of such problems below (beware spoilers!):

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  • Blueballing of key moments: Morgan finally meeting people was highly anticiapted by both her and the readers. It got dragged out quite a bit and then she finally rides in on a wave of rock to save the day, gets to meet the Expedition and... cut. The whole "finally meeting people" thing gets summarized in one sentence by a 3rd character. Anxiety/awkwardness at explaining her nudism? Nope. Realization on the Worldwalker situation and how everyone knows about it? Nope. The conversation with Dana? Nope. Excitement? Anything? Nope! There is an entire chapter missing! (pref. before the Lululude "Hello!") where stuff happens that everyone is waiting for and that defines so much moving forwards. Nothing, except one sentence "oh btw that happened but you dont get to see it".
  • Post-dungeon timeskip timeline mess: Chapters jumble from Oracle (spoils dungeon conclusion), Morgana (Dungeon conclusion with Deus Ex Machina), General (now, but before Oracle so her chap spoilers the conclusion here too), The Broken (3months future), Zizzy (now), Morgana (now->3month transition with many open questions), Harlot (unknown time) to a few chapters later back to Oracle (shortly after Dungeon) and Zizzy (unknown timeframe... in between somewhere). All of that spread out over 10 chapters with never more than 2 in a row.
  • Skipping conclusions: Many examples... we rarely get left off without an idea how it ended, but we rarely get to actually see the aftermath. Dungeon? Deus Ex Machina save by FIRE! Then fastforward weeks of incoherency. Zizzy? Defiler dead, Storm broken, Zizzy maybe(?) dead. What was the "important groundwork" again? Nice worldbuilding but no payout. Oracle? Meets the Fortress and collapses after a True Vision. We never get to see them actually meet or interact. We only get told that he is the champion as he's guarding her later.
  • Results without buildup (reverse of above): Why did morgan suddenly want to settle down again instead of searching for civilisation? We dont know. She just chose that valley we never got to see her discover and explore. Why there? We dont know until we get slapped with it much later when her big spire is already done which we never knew she even prepared for until she fired it. No reasoning, no smooth curve of growth, no explanations for her decisions, nothing. But we get a detailed thought process on honey. Yay?
  • Total cheesy leftfielding: BTW, the super OP Crystal Titan is you daddy we didnt even know went missing. What a coincidence! Hey, Dana can pull shit out of her behind after mere 3 months of tinkering. Even the Starfleet (Star Trek) would be jealous! Oh, and there is a big leyline Im tapping into for infinite power, which was my plan all along but I never bothered to tell you! Instead I just appeared to do random stuff on a whim. Err... "Instinct" that never guides me wrong because... Deus Ex Machina.

 TL;DR: The story is well written on the small scale and brimming with potential and fun ideas. Unfortunately it falls flat on the large scale leaving the reader blueballed and deeply frustrated on many occasions. The awkward pacing and bad prioritization on what to go into in detail and what to gloss over with a quick recap doesnt help either.

It bounces too often between things done really well and things done horribly wrong to give it more than an average mark. A pity - it could've been more.

Simbaro Narasa
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Hurried and all over the place.

A well paced main character undermined by schizophrenic character interludes.

The author never gives enough time for any of the numerous side charactere to meaningfully develop, sabotaging the main character in the process.

Intensely uncomfortable structurally as the story moves forward, losing the warmth between the main character and her pet and her struggles. The author seems too hurried to present some sort of grand narrative and world vision.

Read the Wndering Inn for an excellent example of juggling multiple perspectives while letting natural warmth flow from a solid narrative core 

l nimbus
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How to survive a summoning ( buck naked ) 101.

I mean, Morgan is wearing NOTHING but the sky.....and a sentient lace puffball scrubby. For those of you who want confirmation that Skyclad is worth the read, let me be simple.

- It is.
- Why the hell are you still here?
-Oh, a wiseguy, eh? You want me to point out what makes it worth your time? Well then, sit down, shut up and let me tell you why YOU are going to read it.


Now, there are SOOOOO many things wrong with a story where the MC gets her powers from being nude, but i just can't bring myself to care about any of them. Skyclad just might be the first of it's kind, and i reccomend you read it before a few knockoffs come around and spoil the experience.

 

Story:

The image of an iron, soap-filled bathtub falling out of the sky and crushing an entire nest of [Giant Eagle Chicks] will forever be imprinted in my mind. And that's only the second chapter. Storywise, the beginning has SOME similarities to Randidly, but is better done. So, far, its been both a very good serious story and a barrel of laughs.

While we have Morgan ( and her lace scrubby ) tromping through one of the largest, and most dangerous forests in the world, the singular side chapter has given much appreciated perspective as to events happening about the world. I was also quite satisfied with the System, as it provided an interesting read in itself for both casuals and number crunchers. On another note, the usual 'Class Selection' was handled in a VERY unique and satisfying way. Kudos to that. ( I'd like to see some other stories try and rip that off ).

So far, there is a picture painted of a grim world, where humans aren't exactly on the top of the food chain. While limited so far, the monster selection and naming has been good. Tyrannorabbits and Electric eel hydras, anyone? Pass me the charred Shadowlands Lynx, if you would.

Style:

Ah, now we get to this. I usually don't have much to say about Styles, but this one more than gets the job done. It doesn't just vividly paint pictures in your mind, the author's use of wry humor at the right moments injects some lightheartedness and humor into other wise grim situations. The prose and wording flows smoothly, giving you a delectable read.


Grammar:

Nothing so here, people, move along. Yes, yes, its perfectly done, i assure you. Take it up with my lawyers if you want to disagree.

Characters:

So far, a cast of three. Well, more or less the MC, her lace scrubby, and Rella, a side character. But, even with those small numbers, it is surpringly strong. The characters make an impression from their very first meetings with the reader, and only build from there. They're people, they screw up, they do things. They aren't paper cutouts, devices to advance the plot or souless machine moving from one stain to the next, eager to obliterate it. ( Well, maybe Lulu. But hey, isn't that the purpose of it's life? ).

The point is, the characters are great. So, UNLIKE Randidler, the MC isn't an introverted sociopath. Yay. We can actually cheer for Morgan here. And maybe imagine ogling her too. Just for lulz. Before she hands our asses to us.


Conclusion:

A good idea transformed into a great story. I don't know why this isn't Top 100 YET, but it deserves that spot. Keep on trucking.

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Great potential, but the flow needs reworking

The premise of the story is interesting, and brings a little of fresh air to royal road's sword and magic genre. Chapters are well written, great grammar and flow between paragraphs. However, the overall novel is heavily unbalanced with the current premise of Morgan as the main character. Yes, I am talking about the lack of chapters focused in who is considered the MC. This has already been shown by other readers and also you have said it in your author comments. I am against the current delivery of the story and its overall flow. At this moment, world building has been completely stripped from Morgan’s point of view, understandable due to the protagonist situation, but has led to consider Morgan as nothing more than a flat character more interested in watching the world burn than growing as the main protagonist. This dissonance between perspectives and lack of grow from Morgan's side is heavily impacting the flow of the novel. I understand that you want to create an epic narrative following the same recipe given by George R. R. Martin, however, the narrative is heavily disconnected. I am not against multiple POV novels, but from what I have read (up to chapter 25) there is no real connection between all POV. The quick and large number of used POV has thinned out the backbone of the story rather than helping in creating a solid foundation. I would advise to reconsider the current delivery. Remember that most books making use of multiple POVs always stay with a character during multiple chapters instead of tumbling between them just to explain things that will be necessary in the future. Plot has to be built slowly rather than trying to blurt it in one go, this makes impossible for the reader to empathise with the characters, making the reading more like a chore rather than an enjoyable experience. As such, I found the little purr ball more relatable than most of the characters presented (all hail Scrubby). I will probably leave the novel, for the third time, and come back in a few months when I have nothing else to read as I am a little oversaturated of this kind of narrative. Do not feel down as this story has real potential, but think about what you want to deliver and how it affects the readers.

Kikanolo
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Portal Fantasy with a Fun Twist

Edit as of Chapter 40:

I've had to drop my rating of the story in a number of categories.

Morgan was the high point of this story, but when we returned to her most recently she felt more like a plot device than a character in the sense that the author needed certain things to happen and just had Morgan be there to do them.

Additionally, the character POV switches continued to be a serious problem for the story's pacing. I normally love a good multi-POV story or well-integrated interludes, but here all of the POVs we visit either feel irrelevant or like plot devices. 

The problem is that the author seems to be in a huge hurry to get started with a main plotline and has sacrificed the quality of the individual plot threads to get there faster.

I still have hope for the story, but its definitely faltered after a strong start.

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Original Review:

Skyclad is a portal fantasy with the fun twist that the MC's magic needs her to not wear clothes. Its been really enjoyable so far and I can't wait to see how it develops.

The grammar is good, the characters are well-developed so far, and the story is very interesting.

My only misgiving is regarding the style, and the way the story shifts to other POVs for multiple chapters at a time. While those POVs are interesting, Morgan (the MC) 's story has been by far the best part of the story, so I hope that the focus stays on her as the story goes forward. I recognize that the author has stated that the story has multiple POVs in their disclaimer, but its still a bit jarring to get shunted from the compelling story of the MC to new side characters that I don't really about.

djeruknipis
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Verbosity that Hit The Trees

Many authors are lazy. Events happen inside those authors' story are grossly simplified. Some rationalized because some character did particular thing, or setting demand something, all a part of plot that need to happen because it's decided arbitrarily. I would say that this fiction also has thing that arbitrarily decided. But saying its author lazy is not what I would do. Because events unfold with such a great detail you might feel a cog spin behind the scene (if you imagine everything happen on the stage is driven by machinary backstage).

The author has verbosity that hit all the trees.

But failed to hit the forest.

Skyclad is a sort of fiction that has it's main character survive because she's favored by her author. Started with her inexplicable world jump that killed great monster without her doing anything but still credited for it anyway. Double that with specific circumstances without her doing (she can't help it that she's naked when having a bath) but appreciated by the new world God as something admirable, earning her double reward. Triple that by the tree she's ended up is some ancient, sentient, divine tree that thank her because the killed monster happen to fall on its root, reviving it. Quadruple that with such revival event is turn out to be a world shaking event. So on and so forth. Frankly, there's nothing to like from these series of fortunate coincidence. Her introduction as a waiter that is cheated on by her boyfriend also serve no purpose except as impotent opener. Don't mention a convoluted oracle's foreshadowing that she is some malevolence incarnate waiting to be unleashed (Wow, that was a long ass vision, each and every world traveler described in such flowery language). Skyclad is basically a wordier version of Azarinth Healer (other fiction in this website) with maybe more fleshed characterization.

I wondered in my several hours of reading this fiction why I keep going. I particularly enjoy that one interlude when one of the town guard has close relationship with pastry seller and plump priest while she herself is a menace. I also enjoyed silliness of sample Skyclad Sorceress. But everything else felt like a waste of time as it doesn't serve greater purpose. It seems to me Skyclad has unfortunately placed itself in awkward point between epicness and silliness.

Author, you said the world God care about story of its inhabitant, so that you have your character granted miraculous magic when she needed it most (wolf chase scene). But does that God did not care about the wolves? They're methodically hunted your main character, they're powerful as a group, why are they not rewarded with their quary? Are all of this is an excuse to write a naked girl, to pander to boys among your readers? Your skill to describe things are great, but your fiction is a mess.

j03man
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Heavy on plot convenience

The world feels artificial, as if it is just there to facilitate the plot rather than a living place that the story occurs in. To move the plot forward the story relies very heavily on random encounters, prophecy, and stupid choices that conveniently work out. Every new chapter is rife with "okay, I guess that's a thing that can happen?"s and "did anything the character do really matter?"s. 

The characters feel more real but every decision they make is presented as being inevitable or unavoidable. The lack of agency tends to erode the reader's investment.

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I would give the story five stars if it weren't for one little complaint over a very significant issue. That is: The world map. Yes, the author told us he was no good at cartography, but even with the disclaimer of the scale being off I feel as though the author needs to redo the map entirely just to attempt to fix the scaling before he gets further into the actual story.

Edit: 1/27/2019

Used to really like this story, now I'm thinking the story is not the best. The reason? Interludes. They are used so often and they don't even frame the events that have occurred or are going to occur relatively quickly.

In actuality they are side-plots but the issue in including them is that the story has not taken off yet. Consequently, the readers are subjected to one or two actual chapters of plot progressing content with a character that is 'alive' and then the action gets interrupted in an inconvenient spot in favor of introducing content that I quite honestly couldn't care about because it doesn't impact the story yet.

Spoiler: Spoiler
Fallion
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Love Morgan, ‘side chapters’ not so much

I absolutely love the chapters about Morgan but all these ‘side chapters’ feels like a chore I have to do, to get to the content I actually enjoy.

I understand that they might be necessary for the storyline but that does not make them any more enjoyable to read for me.

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Review written after finishing chapter 12.

This contains spoilers.

 

Style:

Nothing to scoff at. The style revolves mostly around following the main character with as of yet three chapters dedicated to wider world building focused on other characters. I find this ratio to be perfectly acceptable and the focus on the side characters does not overstay its welcome, getting back to the main character that should be the focal point without requiring too much wait time. All in all the style is perfectly serviceable. Could it be better? Maybe? But since I can’t articulate how then I can hardly fault it for that. Chapter lengths also have plenty of meat to them, no one wants to follow a story, see there is a new chapter and only find out there are a few hundred words to read.

 

Story:

Well the overall premise, the ever prevalent ‘Isekai genre’ as it has become known as, is getting to be so pervasive in so many forms of written media that I can’t help but knock the story for using it in the same way you’d find eating your hundredth steak of the month to be a little tasteless. That being said it does have a few unique things to keep it interesting. The nudity without overly sexual content was a distinctive way to go and the anthropomorphised loofah another thing I’ve never seen before.  The life threatening situations feel weighted enough against the established systems and skills Morgan has at her disposal to not feel too ‘plot armor-y’ when she survives. The explanation of the inner primal aspect of herself facilitating her own survival might also go some way towards explaining the lack of mental breakdown I’d assume your average person to suffer when faced with things biting off limbs or shattering knee caps when running from huge wolves or giant rabbits.

 However adding to the negative aspect of ‘oh another Isekai’ would be two things I wish to mention. First is the idea of power via tattoos, by no means an original idea as I’ve seen more than a few stories on this very site go the exact same route. I understand the draw, tattoos are cool and the physical depiction of a power a definite expression of the author’s desired explanation of it, but…well…like my qualms with the whole Isekai genre it’s a case of unoriginality. The next I would like to bring up is a potential pitfall for later chapters. The isolated aspect of Morgan’s situation is expected when one is dumped into a strange forest in a strange world. The problem is that a story without dialogue can grow stale quite fast and there is only so much talking one can put into a story between the main character and herself or the main character and something that can’t reply before it becomes taxing. I am interested to see if the author agrees with this sentiment and if so how they plan to affect its change in coming chapters.

Grammar:

At most I saw maybe two or three spelling or grammatical errors in the whole thing thus far and since I can’t even remember them precisely, a perfect score is all I can give.

Character:

Morgan appears to be a rather typical Isekai protagonist, albeit female. Down on her luck, cheated on, described as smart but apathetic, there really is nothing new here. Is that to say it’s bad? Well perhaps not, but I would hardly call it an amazing thing. While she doesn’t turn into a bawling, shivering mess like I’d expect most underpaid waitresses to when they find themselves almost dying several times in a single day, she doesn’t go full ‘sudden rambo’ as so many Isekai protagonist’s do. She makes mistakes, lets her emotions cause problems and maintains a functioning level of fear even after acquiring super human abilities, all of which keep her as an identifiably human protagonist and thus relatable.

 While we haven’t seen much of other characters yet I would like to mention that getting your brain exfoliated to death sounds like a horrific and highly inventive way to die, so kudos to the author.

 

Overall:

A good story. Is it my favourite? Not at the moment, but I will follow and continue to read it in to see where it goes. I see potentially interesting things on the horizon (how the author will deal with Morgan’s first contact with another human will be interesting to see) but also potential hazards (my aforementioned bit on lack of people to converse with). There are good points and bad points in my mind, though I would say the good outweighs the bad and I would recommend you give this a go, though please do remember everything written here is simply my own opinion and you might disagree with it entirely.