RE: Trailer Trash

I never really do 5-star reviews. Because I think no story really deserves it. But I am going to do it anyways to bring more exposure to the author. The advanced review is more a reflection on the story than the overall.

 

The is actually really good, as someone who lived a life close to the protagonist in this story, I can follow her thoughts and her way of living. She took the leap I never did which I used to hate myself over when I was younger.

But enough of that, its a really good slice of life story tossed into the reincarnation genre. And makes it work really well. She is not suddenly overpowered, but she uses her knowledge of 60 years to her advantage, though sometimes slightly immature it is highly realistic.

Grammar wise, I personally haven't seen any glaring mistakes. There is most likely some found if I look closely but on an overall view no mistakes as of chapter 7. For that, I will give it a 4½/5. When I do check the story over a second time I will update this score to reflect it.

 

As mentioned above, the protagonist is quite fleshed out and realistic, though slightly immature at times which does not reflect her real age at all. Thus I will give it a 4/5 for a very well made main character.

 

Story-wise is where it gets top marks. This story is a wish come true from my personal inner feelings. I like how it is going and how it has gone so far. It is simply superb.

 

The author's style of writing is not yet getting fully shown so I will give it a 2,5/5 for now and update when the story gets further and the authors writing style gets more fleshed out.

It's the ultate wish fullfilosrory. You have a character with a lot in life almost certainly worse than your own get the chance to do better. And she does!

Now in addition there is good writing  good characterisation, good dialogue and a good new spin on an undead horse trope.

 

5/5 would binge again  

Absolutely amazing start. Keep up the good work! The MC feels very real, with clear problems and trials she is dealing with. Only thing though is for someone that lacked the motivation and self control in one life to fix their life and was forced to under threat of death... the personality shift is bit much. Not a big deal, and honestly is fine. Just hoping these abrupt character changes dont happen too often in the story. Keep up the excellent work.

*sniffle*

10/10 Would use up some tissues during chapter 6 again

Okay, I actually didn't like the start of the story and some of the reviews were so-so. Though there are not so many stories I like on the website so I decided to give more of my time to this one. The result is fine: there are some places which I don't like but it is a decent story that I will  follow from now on.

p.s. I still don't get what is Marines Science and why anybody would add it as a separate study for schoolers if they already study geography and biology. Possibly, some American thing? Though it would be nice if the author made a tip with the explanation. 

Introduction

A compelling 'contemporary' web fiction that explores a subdued second chance at life concept. I say subdued but in relative terms to her peers, she is 'overpowered' through the grace of life experience. The second life begins when she is a teenager and is a do over she has the same body.

Setting 

A distinct and well realised 1990's 'North American' setting. Sufficently described in location but also expanded upon and given nauce in character interaction. 

Personal opinion 

The same body leads to the rather controversial approach the author takes the main characters 'fat' body.  Now I have a 'thin' body so my comments should be understood in this light. I think the author fat-shames extent a certain extent, and I do believe the author could do more to portray that 'thinness' isn't the way to happiness. Unpopular as this opinion may be it is limited to the story not the author's explict intentions which is to show how becomming 'thin and pretty' can backfire. 

The author does write a sophisticated representation of self hatred. From the main characters self view as 'trash' which is even in the title, to her idealisation and unrealistic expectations of what she is supposed to do to be happy and liked. In that she cannot and does not see her own efforts as good enough. 

In terms of capturing 1990's America culture such a fat-shaming view was common again to an extent and it continues to today. The main character as such is believable and her motivations are understandable. Her beliefs and reactions are exaggerated but not wrong in her social relations the people she interacts with  everyday. She makes for an excellent character. 

Caveted by the understanding that self-hate, that hatred is a human condition. That hatred of others is an act, that hatred of particular groups of people serves the interests of the hating. That the hated group will come to believe that the hatred Is justified and the 'reasons' for it are valid because they are told it almost everyday from loved ones to strangers to the fiction they read. That to create a social group, to make them out as subhuman, as not 'normal', to separate them or eliminate them is hate. To point out the apparent 'flaw' and insult them or to with good intentions ask then to eliminate their say for example 'fat' is shaming.

On a more review relevant note the setting is detailed and the writing quality sufficient. This is a very interesting story that boldly walks a very thin line. 

I've been reading this for the past year already and since I made an account, I figured I might as well review this.

Style/Story (Idk how to review style tbh) :
This fiction does a really good job in grounding the plot. Despite it being a Do-over type story, it doesn't unnaturally have the main character go "wow I remember this lottery number from back in the day" or "I must prevent every major crisis while I'm here". She (understandably) doesn't have knowledge of all the lottery numbers from 47 years ago, and she is in no position (yet) to stop the major crises from happening. Instead the plot focuses more on her trying to change her direct surroundings, such as herself and her strained relationships with her loved ones. This type of story is (admittedly) a guilty pleasure of mine so (admittedly) my score for th(is/ese) categor(y/ies) is not the most unbiased.

Grammar :
Prob ab lee teh e see est cat eh gory to ace. Honestly, on this site, having little to no grammatical errors is more than enough. Also, I can't really recall any time where the author did one of those confusing shifts from present to past tense mid-paragraph so I'm going to assume that it either doesn't happen in this story, or it rarely does.

Characters :
Like the plot, the characters are grounded. They are done reaaaaaally well. I cannot stress enough how good of a job the author did here. All the main/side characters are easily distinguished (not counting the Taylor sisters, the 4 cousins and Ms Macintire/Matthew's mom. I honestly don't know if there's an established difference for that first one). All of the character's have a believable motivation and thought process for the setting. None of them feel two dimensional at all.

So yeah. I really think this is one of the best stories on this site and I heavily encourage reading it and putting up with the monthy release schedule for the chapters.

It's a decent story and I gave it a fair set of ratings for that...

 

But in it's current state it's not worth a read. It's not particularly fast paced, 13 chapters in and we are still barely at the beginning.

 

Couple this with the monthly chapter schedule and now we have a story that might be worth reading in 5-10 years, but not yet, not today. So I am dropping it till then.

Story could rock but it doesn't.
The MC is too much of a Mary Sue and the rest of the characters are there to follow the plot of her emancipation from her horrible family/poor background.

It was kinda childish and boring.
Let's see how long before this review is deleted.XD

 https://youtu.be/-TGj227OVKY

The above link is a comedic take on the moral implications of time travel. I've read the first few chapters of this story, and it's not bad, but it completely disregards the implications a reasonable person would experience when travelling back to live in 1998. 

The main character appears to only be interested in changing her personal history, and even then only in a very specific way. There's no plans for "Back To The Future" style sports betting, or trying to be an early investor in successful companies, e.g. Amazon or Netflix or whatever. The character doesn't seem to be interested in trying to influence politics or society. No mention is made, at least in the first few chapters, of trying to prevent any tragedies or mass deaths.

In every other "redo your life story" I've read, the protagonist either tries to use their future knowledge to save the world, they live in a world that doesn't need saving, or they have only imperfect memory of the future. I think that's because having a protagonist that remembers the future but only focuses on their personal life has unfortunate implications.