RE: Trailer Trash

by FortySixtyFour

Original ONGOING Adventure Contemporary Drama Historical Female Lead School Life Slice of Life Supernatural
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In the year 2045, an MRI mishap transmits Tabitha Moore's mind back into her body in the past. Now it's 1998, she's thirteen years old, and she has to confront her long, miserable lifetime of failures—and once again being trailer trash—all over again.

...Or, does she?

/// A re-do story, everyone's guilty pleasure. Updates every month.

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ezBoi
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First of all, I just wanna say that I really love the concept. I’ve read up to chapter 4 so far, and clearly there’s been a lot of effort put in. However, I had to stop after 4 chapters.

Before I get to my main crticism, one other thing that threw me off was the dialogue and character interactions. Some come off kind of stilted. But really, it’s not a big deal and I wasn’t that bothered (I feel like the author probably obsessed over it a long time until she couldn’t tell what feels natural anymore, I’ve been there).

What really turned me off was the main character being so... like, teenager-like. Idk, like she’s standoffish for no reason, unrealistic of her actual senior age. It almost feels like she’s the typical angsty teen who thinks she knows more than anyone else. The only reason I’m turned off by it is that I feel like an actual elder who has experienced life would be wise and laid back enough to smartly plan things out without being so... like YA novel teen protagonist-ish. And then I read this:

“As an English Major, I could write a dissertation expounding and elaborating on any one of these terms. As a former aspiring author, I have personally worried each of those ideas down to the bone to comprehend every last nuance of profundity from the marrow therein!“

And then just cringed. I can’t read anymore, I’m sorry. The concept overall is super enticing though.

Lord of a Thousand Blades
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Look, it's incredible, just read it.

A story of inprovment, ability, and hope. This story is very-very good, please take your time to read it, not much matches its spicific nich. 

A girl who goes back and changes it all to who she wants to be, thats really all there is to it--and yet it is almost impossibly good . . . perhaps not 'Good Student or 'Mother of Learning' good, but still nigh to impecible. 

P.S. I want more please.

P.P.S.  5 in 'over all' for the aforementioned reasons / 4 for style: the writing flows well but is not identifiably the authors / 3 for story: it's a very basic premise in honesty / 5 for grammar: personally I have noted no errors / 4.5 for characters: believable characters but without the spark to make them thier own entities, to make them come alive.  Again, over all an incredible story.

JeanDRacc
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There are already lots of reviews done so will try to make a poem:

Walking in circles,
living a failure,
she steps in the MRI,
she listens to a partiture.

Her past written by forty,
with pencil or keys,
since she can repeat it,
Forty will write it again.

So she travels away,
homecoming to school, 
She repeats those very years, 
That she was a fool. 

Struggle and trouble, 
Friendship snuggles,
Betraying experiences, 
A memory of thirteens. 

Nothing but flaws,
A character's gold, 
Call it a bracelet,
But it won't be sold.

Designs and ideas,
A jet show in wait, 
of Ashlee in dire, 
Tabitha's awake. 

And you dear reader, 
The one undecided, 
Push the start trigger, 
Or you'll regret being meager. 

Since a raccoon doesn't rhyme, 
it will return to its hoard, 
In a lil' bit of time, 
It has hidden inside cardboard. 

(It's writing with rhyming ruining tempo on purpose. To represent something too.)

 

Awyn
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Realistic novel with deep emotions.

Reviewed at: 29: The birds and the bees.

Now this was refreshing. A realistic novel with time-travel elements. The resolve of Tabitha to change, her plans, problems, suffering, new friends. The turmoil she goes throught.

 

A lot of people want to have a second chance in life, to change something from their past, to do better or any other reason, but the reality of it could be cruel. I reallly liked how it is shown that, even if you go back to the past, things won't be as easy as most people assume them to be.

 

Story:

We follow our MC, Tabitha, as she goes back to the past from 2045 to 1998. That travel comes from nowhere and she doesn't know what to make out of it. For starters, she tries to change her life for the better. The problems she gets, the suffering and the hopes she carries, all come to you like a wave of beautifully made story with depth to it, that shows you that life isn't ever easy.

 

Style:

Flows smoothly enough, as the author shows us a realistic novel in its full glory. It's not elaborate, nor is it a unique style, but it's enough for what its intented.

 

Grammar:

I saw a few typos, but that's normal for most of the novels, except if you don't have dedicated editors. As a whole, the grammar is on a good enough level.

 

Characters:

With a lot of depth, even for the side characters in the story, It can be seen that the author had worked a lot on them and their interactins, perspectives, thoughts and so on. I have no complains here.

 

Conclusion:

A realistic novel, showing the good and bad in our community as wel as the struggle for a second chance. It's definetely worth reading and a good distraction from the most novels on this site. Don't get me wrong, I like dunggeons, swords, magic and so on, but sometimes we just need a change of genre, something different to read and if you feel like that, then you should check this story!

Adam Carheden
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Excellent fantasy, but not in the D&D sense

Reviewed at: 7: The goblin artist.

It's incredibly refreshing to have a story not set in a video game. I still call it fantasy because I at least have though many times about how I might do things differently if a had the chance.

I keep coming back to this one. It's not a suspenseful page turner you can't out down, but every time I do I eventually think, "huh, I wonder if Tabby ever made it" and read the next chapter.

I gave it a 4 instead of a 5 because I thought her night-and-day transformation over the summer was a bit unrealistic, even with a lifetime of experience to motivate her, and I really want this story to be realistic (save the whole time travel thing, of course). If Tabby breezes through life the second time, I'm afraid that will just amplify my regrets whenever I think "if only I had just...". I want her to find that fate and chance and such have their way despite her foresight to remind me that I need not be perfect and to instead roll with the punches. But perhaps I just haven't read far enough.

Fool
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Solid prose and style with few errors. I really didnt know what to expect with the name or the premise. 

The meat and bones of this novel start with Tabs getting a chance at doing her life over. Unprepared for the opportunity, she sets relatable goals and establishes their importance every step of the way. Not armed with f22 schematics or the key to clean energy, she uses her experience to improve her life, influence the lives of her community, and lift up the fates of her family. The time period and references are solid and the story reads like any number of the award winning coming of age classics that are so vital to our education. It wouldn't surprise me if the book itself ends up being a school library favorite. 

As an author myself, reading this has been very helpful in honing my own thoughts on character depth and integrity. 

Tldr? Outstanding. 

Cheers

Varkt
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I love it!  The consept is so interesting and the plot is unpredictable at times.  I love how deep and moving the characters are too.  The author really puts thought and time into each chapter.  I just wish I had more.  

 

All in all, great find and great novel.  Please keep going!

some_total_kretin
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I love the start of this novel. It's great, it has something to itself that makes it seem human.

I like how the author writes, but I'm starting to get bored with it. The problem I have is the bullying problematics that the author tries to get across in the latter chapters and the sudden shift to focus on theatre for the MC. Those are my personal problems with it. Still, it's one of the better pieces of literature I've had the pleasure of reading.

Bored monster
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We basically see a trailer trash who did not do anything significant in her life change after an accident gives her a redo of her life. This story is real, it's emotional and captures the essence of the characters while showing her daily struggles. 

I loved the story and I want more.

djeruknipis
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Triumph is seemingly one emotion people craved. Maybe I projected myself too much; but reading Tabitha Moore (the main character of this story) attained the first of her many goal, unfailingly filled me with warm fuzzy feeling. Written in realistic style, through realistic means, this fiction arguably deserve the high rating it has here in Royal Road.

But I'd like to say high rating in RR doesn't tell much in regard to its ability to give you a pleasurable reading experience.

In this fiction, for instance, you will find something that is quite unbelievable you have to stop reading a few moments just to chalk it up as fiction being fiction. First, there's a thing called Kubler-Ross model, or what I called stages of grief before I consult wikipedia. When faced with something greatly unagreeable, people go into denial, angered, try find some sort of hold, depressed, all before accepting things as what life has dealt you with. Tabitha Moore seemingly ignore these stages. She shows great anger and denial when she realized she's sent back to her past, imagining prospect of reliving the least favorite phase of her life. But moments later, she's miraculously alright with it. I don't believe she ever felt sadness before she eventually decided to move on.

On that chapter, I mumbled, "Huh?" OK, maybe author dislike to dwell on it. Or, maybe the author want her to be uber resilient character who bounce back readily without any help of outside influence. But I say that's unbelievable. I never met someone not having lingering feeling of hurt days after got shocked that fiercely. That's why Tabitha Moore, from then on demoted from character that has potential to be lived in, into a figment of imagination I am willing to indulge.

There's also questionable motive that encourage her to keep going (who's Julie? Why Tabitha was so hurt when she suicide?) which lead to unawareness of causality (if Julie is Tabitha's yet to be born sister, why she think she would be born at all, with her acting differently toward her mother?). I also have problem that her grandmother character is ever so kind. Stated before Tabitha's interaction with her, the two has never been close. Tabitha reservation from asking her aid is quite nice to read, but their following interaction that is devoid of distance is not satisfactory. I'd like to see the grandmother treat Tabitha with caution before rendering aid (she's a mid-schooler that may not know what she need). Or Tabitha visibly relieved that her grandmother decided to go along with her. Author did not need to go into detail with it, some readers do not like to attend a discourse on fictional character's inner turmoil. Author only need to show that those emotion exist during such interaction; so that reader can see why the story goes the way it goes.

I am aware that it's not the author did not attempt to explore facets of the story I expanded. In fact, in many places the author did it really well (I'm very pleased with how Tabitha's father and her many rapscallious cousins turned out. I'm also pleased that there are multiple level of language articulation between characters; Tabitha's English is a treat, most of the time) It's just that I lack the eloquence to say that what he did is not enough in some other part.