RE: Trailer Trash

by FortySixtyFour

Original ONGOING Adventure Contemporary Drama Historical Female Lead School Life Slice of Life Supernatural
Warning This fiction contains:
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In the year 2045, an MRI mishap transmits Tabitha Moore's mind back into her body in the past. Now it's 1998, she's thirteen years old, and she has to confront her long, miserable lifetime of failures—and once again being trailer trash—all over again.

...Or, does she?

/// A re-do story, everyone's guilty pleasure. Updates every month.

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CremeCrimson
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Excellent grammar and mechanics, haven't seen a typo. The characters feel like real people and not just plot devices to harry the main character.

 

the story is pretty bog-standard, but the reader can't help but feel like they ought to pump their fist in the air for Tabitha's success. A zero to hero story minus the blood-letting. 

 

A good read to pass some time. 

monoliith
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Fantastic, and not a power fantasy

This story is absolutely fantastic. I would STRONGLY suggest you take any sub 3 ratings with a strong grain of salt. You need to take your audiance into account. 

You are posting a VERY realistic fantasy, about losing weight and making life changing positive but hard decisions, around the age of early high school. On a website full of people in early high school who are doing the exact opposite of that. A lot of the readers on RR will feel incredibly insecure reading this story, and will lash out. I can't stress enough how badly you need to post this story in other locations as well. It's fucking fantastic and I intend to spread it around in discords and facebook I'm a mod for, just remember where your posting. The audiance that sees it here is looking for power fantasies that  make us feel good about doing very little most of the time. Not a story about a young woman accepting that SHES the problem, and taking action to solve the issue. 

Harmonious Arkos Sloth
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The Bridge Across the Wealth Gap: Time Travel!

Reviewed at: 19: Friends, foes, and fighter jets.

Batman is considered one of the most relatable superheroes in media today. He’s just a regular guy with an unshakable will and the seemingly impossible, self-appointed mission of making his city safe one captured criminal at a time.

All while only using a full one percent of his power: His bank account.

Much like Batman, the protagonist of this story is also completely ordinary. However, unlike him, she starts out without even 1% power. If anything, she’s in the negatives in every conceivable way: A fat, dirt-poor, social pariah living in a trailer.

Hence the title.

Because of this, her goal is both as seemingly insurmountable as Batman’s, and so mundane, most people take it for granted: She wants to have a normal life, and be treated like an actual person that matters to those around her.

Unlike many time-travel stories involving fantastical settings, or power trips with the ultimate goal of “winning everything”, this story completely subverts several of the common tropes of the genre.

There are others it abuses for the sake of the plot, but that’s a given for these types of stories. With something so focused on characters and the conflict between them rather than a world-ending event, tension has to be manufactured from other sources.

The good thing about having a character that is as painfully average as the protagonist is that she is easy to relate to. Each of her victories will feel like the reader’s victory, because her goals are ordinary things, or accomplishable by ordinary means.

No saving the world, or plotting economic domination for this girl!

At its core, this is a story about a young woman’s fight against her own flaws and limitations in a desperate attempt to break out of her societal mold, and the impact her struggle has on those around her.

The main cast is of a manageable size and are well-developed. Each personality is distinct, and fleshed-out. Everyone has their own unique voice and clearly defined motivations.

Unlike many similar fictions, the teenage cast are believable representations of their age group.

Speech, mannerisms, a lack of critical thinking skills, the desire to establish themselves in a social hierarchy, and the willingness to disregard basic human empathy in pursuit of status combine to paint a morbidly accurate representation of the typical modern teenage girl.

Unfortunately, it is so realistic that the pacing suffers for it, becoming bogged down in the same conflict loop of teenage angst and drama for most of the story. The shallowness of the conflict is matched only by the emotional depth of the cast.

While the plot does move forward, it feels like very little impact is made on the world at large because the conflicts the characters face are largely small and petty.

This will be at times frustrating for adult readers who will likely be quick to recognize the ultimate futility in much of the external conflict the characters are facing.

Such is the nature of teenagers characters in an ordinary high school setting.

Something else that impacts the flow of the story is weak scene, and chapter transitions. Several of the later chapters in particular end so abruptly, they read as though part of the scene is missing.

The abruptness is comparable to the series finale of The Sopranos.

This also happens a few times with external conflicts within the story, the climaxes lacking buildup and tension, coming from seemingly out of nowhere.

This lessens the emotional impact considerably at some points.

Despite these issues, there are very few grammatical problems, and what few exist are likely easily overlooked while reading, aside from a few missing scene breaks.

As the author mentions in the summary, redo fiction is everyone's guilty pleasure, because it is so relatable.

The ordinary setting, and protagonist mean that is even more true here. The characters are so well-written that the reader cannot help but identify with them in some way, both good and bad.

The realistic and immersive setting will instantly transport the reader to their own high school days, making the emotional payoff of the conflicts more meaningful, in spite of a few misses.

One can't help but feel as though they are back in time, growing up right alongside these characters.

This story is worth binge-reading, more than once. It deserves every star of this rating, despite its flaws.

It is the best kind of power fantasy, because there is nothing fantastical about it. It is heartwarming, relatable, and unapologetically normal.

Definitely worth breaking my nap cycle for.

RockyBst
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Far too good for this site, frankly. Takes a common premise and turns it into a wonderfully emotional story.

Elaikases
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the story takes a small change and lets it ripple. 

Realistic, driven, hopeful and moving. 

So very, very good. 

sedael1
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Unique Take on the Time Loop Story

Most stories on this site quite fairly focus on writing grand fantastic stories that are more focused on advancing a plot rather than any form of deep characterization. re: Trailer Trash is not those other stories, instead it is a deep cut into a slice of life about a profoundly unhappy woman that is easily relatable and highly emotional. 5/5.

CasualReader411
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Great story, my only problem is that it does not update quick enough.

Lorraine V
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What would you do different if you had a second chance?

some_total_kretin
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I love the start of this novel. It's great, it has something to itself that makes it seem human.

I like how the author writes, but I'm starting to get bored with it. The problem I have is the bullying problematics that the author tries to get across in the latter chapters and the sudden shift to focus on theatre for the MC. Those are my personal problems with it. Still, it's one of the better pieces of literature I've had the pleasure of reading.

WntrDrgn
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Excellent story so far, chapter 9. Very good grammar skills, which is rare these days for amateur writers. Characters are engaging and definitely helped draw me into the story. Seriously looking forward to more.