RE: Trailer Trash

by FortySixtyFour

Original ONGOING Comedy Contemporary Psychological Satire Female Lead Martial Arts Secret Identity Slice of Life Strategy Strong Lead Supernatural
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In the year 2045, an MRI mishap transmits Tabitha Moore's mind back into her body in the past. Now it's 1998, she's thirteen years old, and she has to confront her long, miserable lifetime of failures—and once again being trailer trash—all over again.

...Or does she?

/// A re-do story, everyone's guilty pleasure. Updates every month.

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Jazehiah
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Realistic Fiction on Royal Road? I'll take it.

This is a story of someone who's given a chance to redo their entire life starting at the last few days of middle school. Aside from that, it's realistic fiction. Because it's realistic fiction, instead of high fantasy or a LitRPG, the author has time to develop characters and avoid cliches.

In a lot of novels, the author describes their character as "hard working," only for the character to never actually work for their accomplishments. Not this one. The entire novel is about the work it takes to change your life.

In a lot of novels where a character is sent back in time, they make use of some supernatural memory of specific dates to change history. Not this time. Fifty years (or more) is a lot of time to forget important details of major events in history, let alone your middle school class schedule.

I hope this story gets regular updates. This is one that I want to see succeed.

thecritic
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Strongly Suggest this one

It's an interesting context that the author choses. The idea of a redo for your life after living would be appealing to many. That said the author choses some outlandish timetables for the redo and establishes, creating a character that can reshape herself in months. While this is very optomistic for the character I personally think that an allowance of the improvable/impossible is the very reason this site exists. The characters are well thought out, with believable backstories and the author has the ability to accurately portray the multitudes of P.O.V. that crop uI All in all, I have experienced this authors' writting ability and have found myself entertained by the stories that he has created and hope that others will at the very least test it out for themselves. I find these stories to be as well thought out and written as my other favs such as Savage Divinity, Forgotten Conqueror and in a rather new case the Mother of Learning. I realize this may seem like I've jumped to conclusion but there have always been a very small number of personal favorites that I have managed to find on the internet. This author is one of the select few I thoroughly enjoy reading from.

Sir Bear
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A story to enjoy and reflect about, a MUST read

Okay, this is is my first review, so it will probably not be too good, but here I come:

On overall, the story is great, it has a descriptive approach while skipping enough details to not resemble a Silmarilion. Most characters are secondary and shown shallowly, but the ones the story threads around, though? Those are well defined, even if details are missing, or characterization is needed, it can be explained by the fact that it only has 6 chapters as of yet.

The story is completely diferent from anything else on RoyalRoad I've seen. Even though it contains the "time travel" thread argument that some stories on RR use, it doesn't share some failures on the application of it. For example, people are weirded out about our MC's new behavior, because we're dealing with a sixty year old in a thirteen year old body. It's obviously going to freak them out. People around the MC doesn't take everything she does for granted as if she was destined to change suddenly and they were to accept it just like that. By using realistic reactions and then have our MC challenge herself to not seem overly suspicious, the story drags into the realms of realism. Having realistic interactions, and thoughtful approaches on several subjects that deal with our reality, the story has us convinced it could be true.

Now, I scored it a 4/5 not because it's not good or anything, but because I'm not used to these kind of stories, and thus I'm not sure how it should go. Anyway, I'll keep reading as our author updates the story, and edit this accordingly, because I feel that, for a story not dealing with monster and superpowered individuals, this is getting me hooked-up pretty badly.

Style and grammar are easy to score. The author nails it. I've just seen 1 mistake (which I'm not even sure it is a mistake due to english not being my native language), and it was just a confusion between two resembling words, both of wich have several different meanings. I myself have often confused two similar words on my own language, and my language has less multiple-meaning words than english.

So, to sum it up? Read the story, but don't expect super-heroes or villains, or you'll be disapointed. Take it easy, because it is a story of self-improving, and maybe you can get something out of it other than entertainmen.

Celinor
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A particularly good Do-Over story

A great start for this Do-Over story, I really like what you did with the character of Tabitha: wholesome and focused but not to the point of becoming a Ms Perfect, a real danger in the genre. Also appreciated the references to its common traps (and tropes), like the stockmarket, and that you focused on the contrary on character interaction. In this case, ordinary is good, in light of the drastics changes you depict in Tabitha's life.

I already am hooked to the different characters of the family, even the little cousins always taken together, which make sense. For now there is maybe one minus to this perfect score : her father who seems just a little flat, but it is still the beginning.

If I need to find a fault, it is the rythm a bit rushed ; I hope that down the road the story will take its time a little more. In fact, seeing the care of the incipit, it looks like you are in for the long haul, so don't hurry and instead keep up the goodwork! And maybe search for a better title? This one is honest, true, but in terms of attractiveness for new readers, I'm sure something better can be found.

Nicholas Obviouslyfakelastnamebecauseprivacy
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The story is absolutely perfect

 Let me elaborate:

1. We have a naturally likable protagonist, and while she doesn't seem to have any outstanding flaws, she doesn't feel like a perfect Mary Sue and had to work hard to lose weight. Although the MC is erring dangerously towards a Mary Sue, she's still relatable and likable.

2.  She has no OP "advantages". She doesn't know stocks (although how brain-dead do you have to be to remember that apple rose quickly) and she doesn't know lottery numbers. If this is a wish-fulfillment story it's a very good one. The character is goal-oriented and doesn't just screw around with mountains of cash

3. No litrpg elements. 'Nuff said. She resisted the temptation to fill a story that doesn't need litrpg elements with them.

 

All is great. Except for the update schedule, we need MoOOOOOAR!

 

 

slatsau
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This story is excellent. It is a typical concept with a twist done well. It makes you think how hard it would be to do what this MC wants to do.

If you could go back to when you were younger what would you change?

How much do you relaly remember about your high school friends or classmates? 

How useful is your knowledge of 'the future' really? And who would listen to you if you tried to later it?

This is the story I look for eagerly on RRL right now. I thoroughly enjoy all the others, but this one stands out, it is different, well written and easy to picture in my mind as I read it. The author knows to write characters that have flaws, have positives and negatives, and are clearly shown to be influenced by society and the times they live in. 

This is one of the few stories on this site that makes me actaully think about it when I'm not reading it. 

 

Winged Thing
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Where the hell do I even begin? In describing some of the novel I'll spoil parts of it and that'd be robbing anyone who reads this review of the enjoyment of finding out for themselves. 

TDLR: This novel is worth your time, read it and enjoy it as I have. With each chapter read I felt myself drawn further into the web the author has spun, at only four chapters I'm hooked.

 

Dorrin
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Excellent story so far, as of chapter 6.  No magic or cultivation to speak of, just a simple second chance story.  A bit out of place among its many sub par peers, this is a diamond in the dark.

UrobrouS
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A do-over story; so many try, so many fail.

 

This one is the story of a trailer trash elderly woman getting a second chance, clawing her way out of her old life by the skin of he teeth. the struggle is real; more than any other dragon-slaying quest.

 

Give it a try - I did so on a whim, and I regret scoffing at the title when I first saw it on the latest releases page a month ago.

Harmonious Arkos Sloth
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The Bridge Across the Wealth Gap: Time Travel!

Batman is considered one of the most relatable superheroes in media today. He’s just a regular guy with an unshakable will and the seemingly impossible, self-appointed mission of making his city safe one captured criminal at a time.

All while only using a full one percent of his power: His bank account.

Much like Batman, the protagonist of this story is also completely ordinary. However, unlike him, she starts out without even 1% power. If anything, she’s in the negatives in every conceivable way: A fat, dirt-poor, social pariah living in a trailer.

Hence the title.

Because of this, her goal is both as seemingly insurmountable as Batman’s, and so mundane, most people take it for granted: She wants to have a normal life, and be treated like an actual person that matters to those around her.

Unlike many time-travel stories involving fantastical settings, or power trips with the ultimate goal of “winning everything”, this story completely subverts several of the common tropes of the genre.

There are others it abuses for the sake of the plot, but that’s a given for these types of stories. With something so focused on characters and the conflict between them rather than a world-ending event, tension has to be manufactured from other sources.

The good thing about having a character that is as painfully average as the protagonist is that she is easy to relate to. Each of her victories will feel like the reader’s victory, because her goals are ordinary things, or accomplishable by ordinary means.

No saving the world, or plotting economic domination for this girl!

At its core, this is a story about a young woman’s fight against her own flaws and limitations in a desperate attempt to break out of her societal mold, and the impact her struggle has on those around her.

The main cast is of a manageable size and are well-developed. Each personality is distinct, and fleshed-out. Everyone has their own unique voice and clearly defined motivations.

Unlike many similar fictions, the teenage cast are believable representations of their age group.

Speech, mannerisms, a lack of critical thinking skills, the desire to establish themselves in a social hierarchy, and the willingness to disregard basic human empathy in pursuit of status combine to paint a morbidly accurate representation of the typical modern teenage girl.

Unfortunately, it is so realistic that the pacing suffers for it, becoming bogged down in the same conflict loop of teenage angst and drama for most of the story. The shallowness of the conflict is matched only by the emotional depth of the cast.

While the plot does move forward, it feels like very little impact is made on the world at large because the conflicts the characters face are largely small and petty.

This will be at times frustrating for adult readers who will likely be quick to recognize the ultimate futility in much of the external conflict the characters are facing.

Such is the nature of teenagers characters in an ordinary high school setting.

Something else that impacts the flow of the story is weak scene, and chapter transitions. Several of the later chapters in particular end so abruptly, they read as though part of the scene is missing.

The abruptness is comparable to the series finale of The Sopranos.

This also happens a few times with external conflicts within the story, the climaxes lacking buildup and tension, coming from seemingly out of nowhere.

This lessens the emotional impact considerably at some points.

Despite these issues, there are very few grammatical problems, and what few exist are likely easily overlooked while reading, aside from a few missing scene breaks.

As the author mentions in the summary, redo fiction is everyone's guilty pleasure, because it is so relatable.

The ordinary setting, and protagonist mean that is even more true here. The characters are so well-written that the reader cannot help but identify with them in some way, both good and bad.

The realistic and immersive setting will instantly transport the reader to their own high school days, making the emotional payoff of the conflicts more meaningful, in spite of a few misses.

One can't help but feel as though they are back in time, growing up right alongside these characters.

This story is worth binge-reading, more than once. It deserves every star of this rating, despite its flaws.

It is the best kind of power fantasy, because there is nothing fantastical about it. It is heartwarming, relatable, and unapologetically normal.

Definitely worth breaking my nap cycle for.