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In the year 2045, an MRI mishap transmits Tabitha Moore's mind back into her body in the past. Now it's 1998, she's thirteen years old, and she has to confront her long, miserable lifetime of failures—and once again being trailer trash—all over again.
...Or, does she?
/// A re-do story, everyone's guilty pleasure. Updates every month.
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Great story, my only problem is that it does not update quick enough.
I really enjoyed reading through the first twelve chapters and will certainly come back for more.
I like that what starts out as wish-fulfilment for an old woman given a second chance at being the girl she might have been, turns rapidly darker. She displays signs of borderline anorexia and narcissism that feel both natural to the character and save her from being a Mary Sue.
The insight of the author into what a cosmetic change won't affect - High School politics! - feels profound without being overdone. And the cast of supporting characters, from Grandma Laurie to EE-leh-na is well-drawn and convincing.
As a first draft, this is great work that feels very publishable, despite the hackneyed re-do premise. The only thing I would encourage the author to add are more immediately obstacles. I'm assuming, here, that the narrative arc won't take Tabby all the way back to being 67 (except, perhaps, in an Epilogue back in the MRI in 2045). Up to chapter twelve, we're practicall getting a day-by-day account of her first year in high school, so my assumption is we're not going to get any further in this arc than her sophomore year at most. Maybe the author plans a Harry Potter-style "academic year by academic year" series?
Regardless, by chapter 12 we have resolved the only major obstacle - the death of the police officer - and it wasn't one that directly affected Tabby the first time around, so doesn't feel climactic.
To really pull it together, then, my sense is that we need two more significant obstacles: one thing that happened, first time around, and Tabby doesn't want it to *not* happen (but the butterfly effect puts its happening in jeopardy); and one thing that happened that she doesn't want to happen (like the shooting, but more directly-affecting, such as the death of someone close to her).
She may then have to draw in allies to help her address these and come to terms with the consequences of her success or otherwise.
Still, loving the story and following along all the same.
The idea in itself is appealing, but it's presentation is actually well done. The psicological side, which truth be told is half of my interest in novels in general, is deep enough for me to get my head into it's pool of content.
For gramatics this novel is actually way above many I've seen around, and considering the character the author made, that quite helps in immersion.
The story itself has it's own pull. Both from wanting to know Tabitha's story and wanting a redo for my younger days, and I'm still 16! Time travel is normally not used like this in stories I've read so far. The character here seem much more... Like she actually wants to be part of this and go forwards even as she loses whatever hope and knowledge she has of the future. Not just the main character though, her father is cobfusrd and worried, her mother indignant, self blaming and loves comfort food while being consiousc of that, her black friend has obvious misconceptions about white people and how everyeve that is beautiful has no problem while watching the same time thinking herself to understand people's hearts, which she actactua has a knaco for if not for when her biased point of view kicks in. Every part so far is appealing to a reader of this gender and I would recommend it to others. If it had friends.
This story is definitely not without error, but I am simply not qualified to get those out. I am doing this review at the start of the story, so some things might end up just being me taking shit out if my ass because I tend to think too much, but i am most conviconv the author of this story deserves some recognition for his work, and that the guy should stop trying to compare himself with people with much more experience than him or he will get a inferiority complex before actually turning into a full fledged author if how well he can ingrane the self loathing in his character is any indication.
I am a royal-road newbie. I only discovered web-fiction less than a year ago. (Yes, I know I am late). I started with the Wandering Inn, the Mother of Learning, the MetaWorld chronicles. Those are the few well-written ones (even if they have several sections of questionable quality). With apoloiges to the writers, the vast majority of stories on RR are utterly terrible. I mostly read through a few chapters, wince and then give up. I don't bother with bad reviews.
And then I come across this Gem. Our MC is just a woman, but one who is utterly determined to change the course of her life - the second time around. Yet, in changing herself, she has also begun to change the world from what she remembers. Her story is vivid and utterly captivating and her resolve speaks to you in a primal way. A second chance story may have been told many times before, but her story hasn't and she makes you want to listen to her.
Just caught up and im loving this series. The Mc's struggle to change is something that many can relate to or at least emphatize. I am hoping more things in happen in the story so there can be less skips +though because this is a web novel I know I don't have to worry about page/chapter limit) & I did dislike how she spoke to certain carachters but the more I read the more I see that those bits are just a small part of a very fun read. I especially love the fact that I'm more than 10 chapters in and I have no clue which path the story will take. As someone who has been reading manga, fantasy and Sci-fi for years the endings are usually a bit predictable. But i digress, I subscribed and looking forward to more.
'Tis but the best time travel storyi have read so far. Its complex. The relationships Tabitha has with people is so interesting. The Storyline, events, and the way you fill the gaps with information that is 100% relavent to the story is so professional.
KEEP IT UP MY DUDE
I never really do 5-star reviews. Because I think no story really deserves it. But I am going to do it anyways to bring more exposure to the author. The advanced review is more a reflection on the story than the overall.
The is actually really good, as someone who lived a life close to the protagonist in this story, I can follow her thoughts and her way of living. She took the leap I never did which I used to hate myself over when I was younger.
But enough of that, its a really good slice of life story tossed into the reincarnation genre. And makes it work really well. She is not suddenly overpowered, but she uses her knowledge of 60 years to her advantage, though sometimes slightly immature it is highly realistic.
Grammar wise, I personally haven't seen any glaring mistakes. There is most likely some found if I look closely but on an overall view no mistakes as of chapter 7. For that, I will give it a 4½/5. When I do check the story over a second time I will update this score to reflect it.
As mentioned above, the protagonist is quite fleshed out and realistic, though slightly immature at times which does not reflect her real age at all. Thus I will give it a 4/5 for a very well made main character.
Story-wise is where it gets top marks. This story is a wish come true from my personal inner feelings. I like how it is going and how it has gone so far. It is simply superb.
The author's style of writing is not yet getting fully shown so I will give it a 2,5/5 for now and update when the story gets further and the authors writing style gets more fleshed out.
It's the ultate wish fullfilosrory. You have a character with a lot in life almost certainly worse than your own get the chance to do better. And she does!
Now in addition there is good writing good characterisation, good dialogue and a good new spin on an undead horse trope.
5/5 would binge again
Initially, I left a 5 star score, but didn't write a review. Now that I'm changing my score, I figure its a good time to actually write a review and explain why its so low.
First, let me say, this is a phenomenally written story. It draws you in right from the beginning, making you immediately sympathetic to the MC, and interested in the peripheral characters. However, things begin to go sideways around chapter 15, and it has gone downhill ever since.
The description includes the line. "A re-do story, everyone's guilty pleasure." This was absolutely true for the first 14 chapters. After that, it slowly became less true, and more of a grind. Every chapter still has that polish that made the earlier ones great, but the story has gone to a very dark place. Its no longer fun! Its a good story still, just not guilty pleasure good.
I don't want to get into specifics or spoilers, so I'll leave it at this. Naturally this is simply my opinion. I'm still reading the story. I'm hoping it improves back to a guilty pleasure.