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In the year 2045, an MRI mishap transmits Tabitha Moore's mind back into her body in the past. Now it's 1998, she's thirteen years old, and she has to confront her long, miserable lifetime of failures—and once again being trailer trash—all over again.
...Or, does she?
/// A re-do story, everyone's guilty pleasure. Updates every month.
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This is a story of someone who's given a chance to redo their entire life starting at the last few days of middle school. Aside from that, it's realistic fiction. Because it's realistic fiction, instead of high fantasy or a LitRPG, the author has time to develop characters and avoid cliches.
In a lot of novels, the author describes their character as "hard working," only for the character to never actually work for their accomplishments. Not this one. The entire novel is about the work it takes to change your life.
In a lot of novels where a character is sent back in time, they make use of some supernatural memory of specific dates to change history. Not this time. Fifty years (or more) is a lot of time to forget important details of major events in history, let alone your middle school class schedule.
I hope this story gets regular updates. This is one that I want to see succeed.
It's an interesting context that the author choses. The idea of a redo for your life after living would be appealing to many. That said the author choses some outlandish timetables for the redo and establishes, creating a character that can reshape herself in months. While this is very optomistic for the character I personally think that an allowance of the improvable/impossible is the very reason this site exists. The characters are well thought out, with believable backstories and the author has the ability to accurately portray the multitudes of P.O.V. that crop uI All in all, I have experienced this authors' writting ability and have found myself entertained by the stories that he has created and hope that others will at the very least test it out for themselves. I find these stories to be as well thought out and written as my other favs such as Savage Divinity, Forgotten Conqueror and in a rather new case the Mother of Learning. I realize this may seem like I've jumped to conclusion but there have always been a very small number of personal favorites that I have managed to find on the internet. This author is one of the select few I thoroughly enjoy reading from.
The story is absolutely perfect
Let me elaborate:
1. We have a naturally likable protagonist, and while she doesn't seem to have any outstanding flaws, she doesn't feel like a perfect Mary Sue and had to work hard to lose weight. Although the MC is erring dangerously towards a Mary Sue, she's still relatable and likable.
2. She has no OP "advantages". She doesn't know stocks (although how brain-dead do you have to be to remember that apple rose quickly) and she doesn't know lottery numbers. If this is a wish-fulfillment story it's a very good one. The character is goal-oriented and doesn't just screw around with mountains of cash
3. No litrpg elements. 'Nuff said. She resisted the temptation to fill a story that doesn't need litrpg elements with them.
All is great. Except for the update schedule, we need MoOOOOOAR!
A great start for this Do-Over story, I really like what you did with the character of Tabitha: wholesome and focused but not to the point of becoming a Ms Perfect, a real danger in the genre. Also appreciated the references to its common traps (and tropes), like the stockmarket, and that you focused on the contrary on character interaction. In this case, ordinary is good, in light of the drastics changes you depict in Tabitha's life.
I already am hooked to the different characters of the family, even the little cousins always taken together, which make sense. For now there is maybe one minus to this perfect score : her father who seems just a little flat, but it is still the beginning.
If I need to find a fault, it is the rythm a bit rushed ; I hope that down the road the story will take its time a little more. In fact, seeing the care of the incipit, it looks like you are in for the long haul, so don't hurry and instead keep up the goodwork! And maybe search for a better title? This one is honest, true, but in terms of attractiveness for new readers, I'm sure something better can be found.
Where the hell do I even begin? In describing some of the novel I'll spoil parts of it and that'd be robbing anyone who reads this review of the enjoyment of finding out for themselves.
TDLR: This novel is worth your time, read it and enjoy it as I have. With each chapter read I felt myself drawn further into the web the author has spun, at only four chapters I'm hooked.
Okay, this is is my first review, so it will probably not be too good, but here I come:
On overall, the story is great, it has a descriptive approach while skipping enough details to not resemble a Silmarilion. Most characters are secondary and shown shallowly, but the ones the story threads around, though? Those are well defined, even if details are missing, or characterization is needed, it can be explained by the fact that it only has 6 chapters as of yet.
The story is completely diferent from anything else on RoyalRoad I've seen. Even though it contains the "time travel" thread argument that some stories on RR use, it doesn't share some failures on the application of it. For example, people are weirded out about our MC's new behavior, because we're dealing with a sixty year old in a thirteen year old body. It's obviously going to freak them out. People around the MC doesn't take everything she does for granted as if she was destined to change suddenly and they were to accept it just like that. By using realistic reactions and then have our MC challenge herself to not seem overly suspicious, the story drags into the realms of realism. Having realistic interactions, and thoughtful approaches on several subjects that deal with our reality, the story has us convinced it could be true.
Now, I scored it a 4/5 not because it's not good or anything, but because I'm not used to these kind of stories, and thus I'm not sure how it should go. Anyway, I'll keep reading as our author updates the story, and edit this accordingly, because I feel that, for a story not dealing with monster and superpowered individuals, this is getting me hooked-up pretty badly.
Style and grammar are easy to score. The author nails it. I've just seen 1 mistake (which I'm not even sure it is a mistake due to english not being my native language), and it was just a confusion between two resembling words, both of wich have several different meanings. I myself have often confused two similar words on my own language, and my language has less multiple-meaning words than english.
So, to sum it up? Read the story, but don't expect super-heroes or villains, or you'll be disapointed. Take it easy, because it is a story of self-improving, and maybe you can get something out of it other than entertainmen.
This is like nothing I've read. I haven't found anything like this. It is good enough my wife started reading on the site as well. Found nothing else she liked and sticks with her Harry Dresden or quidditch friendly worlds. But this resonates. That's a unique, valuable and worthy thing. So I just want to contribute in a small way and say thanks.
Wow, just wow. Rarely does a story leave you speechless, rarely does one make you laugh out loud and then cry the next chapter. Not to mention the times I've had to put my phone down and give myself time out because I've become so invested in the character and her struggle.
As someone who normally reads the litrpg and fantasy stories on this site, I wasn't sure if a plot like this would be for me but i can safely say this story has skyrocketed to one of my all time favourites, not just on RR, but of all stories.
There is no min/maxing, no optimisation of her life or peak efficiency in her do-over. Its a powerful story of the very real struggles of life and picking oneself up despite so much around you trying to drag you down.
Character and Story deserve more than a 5. Not just the MC, Tabby, but all the side characters are so real, so fleshed out that when major events happen throughout the story, you get sucked in. Sleepless nights as you can't help but hit next chapter? Check.
Grammar and spelling is all there. Didn't notice errors!
Style - yes. Just yes.
I only wish I could give this story more than a 5/5.
The ache brought back a world she left behind.
To fix the pains, she faced the MRI
Adrift amidst an old Tabby's shamed mind,
She spurned to face the world nought but a sigh
Friends old, friends new, betrayèd, she grew lean
And so follow we to her quest to grow
Not as she was, but a fresh dawn: thirteen
Onward, ever onward, Tabitha's show
Numbers' strong prose does ease with joy the pain
So sure be the passion, I must read on
Though characters are strong, the flaws yet stain
Odd breaks of scene, lost plot, and more may spawn
So yes, I say, read this fierce bold diction!
Dare I compare: Bruce Wayne in this fiction?
This story is excellent. It is a typical concept with a twist done well. It makes you think how hard it would be to do what this MC wants to do.
If you could go back to when you were younger what would you change?
How much do you relaly remember about your high school friends or classmates?
How useful is your knowledge of 'the future' really? And who would listen to you if you tried to later it?
This is the story I look for eagerly on RRL right now. I thoroughly enjoy all the others, but this one stands out, it is different, well written and easy to picture in my mind as I read it. The author knows to write characters that have flaws, have positives and negatives, and are clearly shown to be influenced by society and the times they live in.
This is one of the few stories on this site that makes me actaully think about it when I'm not reading it.