Grand Design

by TMarkos

Original COMPLETED Action Adventure Sci-fi Female Lead Post Apocalyptic Space Opera Strong Lead
Warning This fiction contains:
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Humanity once ruled space, building an empire that stretched across hundreds of stars.  Now Earth is a cold cinder in the void, its colonies and ships annihilated in an instant.  For five thousand years the surviving races have huddled in the dying light of those few stations which avoided total destruction, eking out their existence in the shadow of the long-dead humans who built their homes.  When a piece of that lost legacy resurfaces, the few who still remember humanity have one last opportunity to find the truth and avenge the fallen.

 

Cover by Harry Rowland - https://www.instagram.com/rowl_art_/

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l nimbus
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Pffft, Forget Mass Effect. THIS is Epic Sci-Fi.

Actually, don't, that might be a bit of a stretch here. But still, my point remains. I've never been a fan of sci-fi, just a casual observer of the genre. But this story just might change that. And in a good way.

Grand Design is something new in the genre, something that will please both fans and outsiders alike. It is something daring, spanning an entirely new, unexplored stroyline. One that might put reader outside what they've come to expect from the genre. And i love that.


Story:

Post-apocalypse. Post SCI-FI Apocalypse. That's what comes to mind when i think of this story. Oh, i kbow that the description doesn't do the story justice, with it's deep, complex gistories and fascinating mythos, but that's what i sum it up as. It tells the story of Jesri Tam, and artificial life form, set on completing a mission she and her sisters were built for by the most brilliant minds Earth had to offer.

After humanity is dead, gone and forgotten. I personally love this narrative, the brilliantly done backstories and the very real feeling of an impossible mission with the highest stakes imagineable. No one knows her and her sisters fight and struggle, and most don't care. Yet, there they are, soldiering on through the eons, always laboring to complete their task.

The very first impression the storytelling makes, and one that stays with it right up to the current chapter, is Quality. Plain and Simple. Instea dof falling back on old plot lines and stereotypes, the author creates something new. So far, we haven't seen the threat they face, yet it feels very real, the effect of it's decimation of humanity still felt centuries after it happened. Go ahead and put THIS galaxy as one of the top five places you WOULDN'T want to live in. That's how dangerous it is.


Style:

With a great story, comes a great style. I neevr say much regarding style in my reviews, and I have to say, i like this author's unique touch. The information and description are spaced perfectly, never semeing to drag or rush along the plot. Keep it up.


Grammar:

Again, flawless. A much better job than i myself have done.


Characters:

Fug, where do i even start?

Okay, the short version. They're awesome. That's all you need to know.

And now, the long version. They feel like people. Like real, live, people. With strengths, weaknesses failings, times when they hesitate. When they lose their way. When you might, for a minute, stop cheering for them, then look back and realize you couldn't have done anything different.

Jesri is someone i both like, and admire as a fictional character. Despite the experience of eons, and mountains of bodies dragging her down, both friend and foe, she soldiers on. She's not cold to the world, but has the feeling of someone who, despite having danced this dance before, is willing to try it again. She's a good person, recognizing her own shortcomings and failings, but sometimes forgetting to adress them. She's not invincible, won't always find that burst of strength at the final moment, yet is someone you want to cheer for.

Anja, is a sharp contrast to her. She's someone who is more effected by what they've gone through than Jesri is, and is harsh and at times, uncaring. The cast slowly grows from there, showing the lives of the mostly ordinary people ( and robot dogs ) that get caught up in a struggle far too big and dangerous for them.

Even the villians, when shown, can be people who view wgat they are doing as the right thing, or making actually logical points about their deeds. I won't spoil, but the latest villian managaed to surprise me somewhat. I mean, i could see what she was going to be a few chapters ahead, but her actual reasoning made sense to me.


Closing:

Whatever your doing, wherever you're getting this inspiration from, keep it up. We need more stories like this, even if RRL doesn't realize it yet.

Cheers, L.

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Sci-Fi Space Opera 5/5

(review to part 10)

This is an above average sci-fi space opera with a hint of HFY. I highly recommend you read Part 1 and see if it hooks you like this managed to hook me. Quality is quite high.

touchstone
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Coming soon from Tor? Ace?

Okay, so, here's the deal.

Sometimes I read a story here and think, "Man, this is really good for RRL." 

This isn't one of those. This one is just good, period. If I'd bought it in paperback from...hmm, Tor, probably, I would have considered it money well spent. This is novel-grade, publishable writing and the author should probably consider getting an agent.

The characters are interesting and have some inner depth. We're well beyond "no grammar errors" and into "skilled use of language and imagery". There are some nice turns of phrase; the craft of the story is good.

Read it.

Jukonon
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Why do I only see this now?

Great premise, good writing, no grammatical mistakes, as of now likeable characters. It's all in all a rather uniqe story and I am excited to see where it leads.

Dear author, I hope you will keep this up and continue to write, you deserve a spot in "Best Stories".

Small critique, the premise is a bit misleading. The MC is in the holding cell for maybe half a page and it's not really a city.

I won't spoiler anything, go read it yourself.

Aereic
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Follow an ancient synthetic being on her grand adventure: facing space bandits, squaring off against epic navies, and facing betrayal with her trusty doggo.

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What sci-fi genre can be - art.

 First of all, the first chapter gets you hooked, the rest of the story just finishes you off. There is no other way.

To split this all by categories:

Characters: Beliveable and impressively varied, with very well executed insights into a character's thoughts. Each and every being feels unique, a bit of spice to their thoughts and actons, carefully revealed over the course of the story itself.

Grammar: There isn't really much to say. Grammar in this fiction is impeccable. 

Story: Deep, with a surprising amount of its own history to make all the delicious and heartwrenching plot twists even more believable. Starts off fairly meek, but soon you get pulled along for the ride, and what a ride it is...

Style: Perhaps better explained in the upper two categories, tbe style of this story is amazing, making for a smooth and enjoyable read. 

Overall, this fiction is a piece of art I would definitely recommend. 

Flavar
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Wow, what a great story. I can't wait to see how it goes on.

It's the best sci-fi story I have read on royal road so far and I will hopefully be able to buy it as an ebook one day.

Don't miss out on this,

Ciaina
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Let's be brief.

Sci-fi. Amazing ORIGINAL story.

Great world building and characters.

Professional level. On this site the only other works on this level are "the wandering inn" and to some extent "savage divinity".

You owe it to YOURSELF to read this work. Don't fail. 

wolfgang784
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I never knew I needed this

The story is just amazing. The world has such depth, large amounts of backstory and knowledge are introduced without it ever feeling like an info dump and the characters feel so real. Its been a long time since I found a story where the characters really felt REAL and that is the best part.

Plus the setting is unique for this site and its been years since I read a good sci fi novel. Ill have to come back later and make an in depth advanced review since its hard to type on a phone but I had the urge to post something now so the word gets out faster.

 

FULL REVIEW FROM HERE NOW THAT IT IS OVER. 

Style: Has to be one of my favorite parts of this story. The points of view are beautifully balanced, the text is easy to read and know who is talking and what is happening. 10/10

 

Story: Very unique. 99% of this website is composed of VR, LITRPG, OP MCS, harems and self inserts. This is one of the rare stories taking up that 1%. Good scifi stories are rare but the world was entirely unique without any copied ideas I could notice. The end big bad was something ive never seen in any work be it book, movie, game, or whatever. World has EXTREME depth too. Just as a reader there is easily enough world built in the story for me to attempt a side story from a different race or something. 

 

Grammar: Full disclosure. I have to use grammarly for my own stories and confuse my your youre their theirs theyres and so on. My shabby grammar skills however have noticed no issues, reads like a book id buy at barnes and nobles. 

 

Character: Easily the best part. Anyone can world build and anyone can design characters. Actually bringing them to life though? Making the readers truly care? Everbody has SO MUCH depth to them its unreal. 

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The most professional story I've ever read online,

I think there is a lot of reviews telling you what the story is about, so I'll skip that and go right to why I think this is the most well written story story I've read on RL. 

The major elements of the story was clearly plotted out in advance, and it has a hugely positive effect on the pacing. There is none of the janky everything happens at once then several chapters of slow exposition that plagues so many web serials. The characters are fully fleshed out from the start. The author have mastered show - don't tell ,allowing the reader to slowly learn more about the characters, and infer more about them from their actions and words. 

The writing is not only practicly flawless, but also flows smoothly. This is more comparable to a bestselling book than a web serial. In terms of writing - grammar, flow, sentence structure, etc, it is on the same level as Worm, The Wandering Inn and other such renovned web serials. However in terms of introduction (the first arc(s) of those web serials are subpar compared to the rest) and the pacing this is even greater. A closed, relatively short, story such as this may not be as complicated and intricate, but it has that advantage. 

If the story sounds interesting, if you like HFY or if you just dig a good story, give it a read.