The Outer Sphere

Ok, let's start with style cause its the first one in the box thingie.

Starts off a little shaky not gonna lie. There's a little weird transition before the story really gets going. But once it gets going it really gets going, the author finds his sea-legs really fast and even the 'shaky' part is better than 90% of the crap on this site. The author has a really good grasp of the 'show don't tell' rule, I can't remember ever being told about a character except in one place where a species trait is discussed.

(However, the character of the species in question continuously makes choices in line with the stated characteristic so even without the description it's obvious). Nothing seems contrived or plot-armoury, the MC is no god-in-5-chapters and honestly not even really that 'strong' even now. It has, quite frankly, amazing pacing in my opinion. All the chapters have meaning and aren't just padding but the author understands that 'meaning' doesn't mean 'give MC a new OP ability every chapter'. yea style is great after like...chapter 2? 3ish? not a problem AT ALL

Next up is the....story.

Okey-doke the story kicks ass, its great. The setting, the way shit works and how its put together just...makes sense y'know? You ever read a story where the first thing that happens is, and I damn near almost quote, "MC fell into a spatial rift and magically fused with the seventh taigam buttplug of power, complete with an AI system. He's also a master of every magic". Gets old fast huh? Yea this isn't that at all. Everything that happens has reasons, there's no "Huh, that was really fuckin lucky" moments. Like, sure, SOMETIMES the MC gets lucky, but its always believable luck, like finding a penny, not winning 6 lotteries in all the states. I mentioned this in style but in retrospect, it should be here, the pacing is fabulous. There're no wasted chapters here, every paragraph has a clear purpose and is mostly fluff free. You won't find people talking about their "Silky chocolate hair, almond-shaped eyes with a small smattering of freckles, she uses listerene grape flavour and has a mole on her left tit" yea none of that shit. You won't be enlightened to the colour of the MCs' taint anytime soon. It's just solid, read the damn book.

NEXT....Grammar.

Didn't notice anything wrong and the authors a cool guy so would prolly fix it if you found something. 'Nuff said.

AAAAnnnddd...now the Characters!

The characters are my personal 'most important' part of a fiction. And I am pleased to announce that these characters are really good! They all have unique and pretty fleshed out personalities and I have never seen any of them get possessed by the spirit of plot convenience even once. They act like ACTUAL PEOPLE which is fucking rare on this site. The MC is not some naive 'gotta free all da slaves and adds to my harem that I'll never fuck cause I'm a fuckin tool' he's a pretty good guy but he's smart. I cannot state this enough, the MC is smart. The reason I'm so happy about this is that the author knows how to write smart people. Most of the authors on this site handle smart characters either by making them nigh-omniscient or by having them dumb as a rock until the plot needs them to decipher some aliens porno mag. This MC has got his shit together, he's no Sherlock Holmes but he can plan ahead and take steps to achieve his goals in a logical manner. Which brings me to my final point about the characters and another thing I love. The characters are proactive characters and not reactive characters. Now, you might ask: "What the fuck are you on about drone? I ain't buying your exfoliating scrub, get that weak MLM outta here!" Yea I hear you people but let me explain what I mean. The MC and the side characters DO THINGS that have EFFECTS. How many MCs have you read about who just react to shit? He killed my father! The maiden is in danger! A problem, I must fix it!, yea this MC has like a proper goal for his life. It's not fancy or elaborate, and it could maybe use a little bit more explanation, but he HAS SOMETHING. He doesn't just react to events, he MAKES EVENTS HAPPEN. For example, with a reactive MC the story might go: "A screaming woman runs into the MC out of an alley, this leads to the MC eventually taking down the criminal underbelly." whereas a proactive Mc story might go: "The MC rides up to the city with a stolen tablet under his cloak. For a couple of hours, he probes the patrons of a shady bar for information on who he might sell his stolen tablet to. After a couple deals with the shady organisation, he discovers a secret slave trade! The MC destroyed the organisation." Big difference see? In one the plot only moved forward by a freak moment of luck, in the other, the plot moved forward because of the MCs decision. I'm firmly in the camp that proactive characters are way better.

Finally...

Yea, there's no section for this but I feel it's important. The author is really friendly and totally open to criticism and new cool ideas you have. He usually responds to comments pretty quick and I feel thats pretty cool. A lot of authors might get a bit pissy if you try to give ideas, and I get it, it can be annoying. But I've personally put like 3 great walls of text in this dudes comments and he's cool with it.

4.5/5 Definately recommended.

I think most of us know magic system apocalypse stories. A few have found a permament place amongst the top 20 of RR. But most of them have either unsympathetic protagonists and/or overpowered protagonists.

This isn't the case here. The protagonist is neither a psychopath, nor an unredeemable White Knight. He's a smart person, thrown into a shitty situation and given a decent cheat. And that's all it is. Not an insurmountable advantage, not a god-mode. Overall the guy largely succeeds on his smarts. He's the guy to use traps and run away or surrender if necessary.

As for the story it's a sytem/mana apocalypse setting. The protagonist is basically just trying to survive and thrive. Friends and enemies derive from either the setting or his quest for survival. That said his ultimate goal is to find love and live a happy life, not to become the ultimate power.

There's some hints of more plot behind this, but as of chapter 35 it's still largely about adjusting to the apocalypse.

Alright it started with a literal bang which is always nice, no op character just a bloke in a bathrobe caught in the apocalypse. It stays that kinda gritty fantasy for oh about 7 chapters. It switches fairly fast from there

Losing the gritty no free lunch litrpg feel to the more standard litrpg tropes. Main character gets a power instantly is able to get it to an op level where he can disable hundreds of enemies at once with no real draw back as it seems allies are able to easily escape but enemies are stuck. Main character comes jnto large amount of money and ie power, while thinking of basic economic schemes to get rich quick. At this point in the story the author has dropped the dimensional teenage girl side character that had some nice back and forth quips  and her own chapter in favor of a shapeshifting sucubus that likes to ahow of her boobs and ass for paragraphs. 

Is it good: ye ive enjoyed it even if it went from a good read to just another bookmark read. I imagine id enjoy it more if i liked sex scenes in my books so hey if you like lit rpgs and tits its a good read

It's a really good book. I haven't felt excited for one ever since The World Seed came out, as druids are badass. While the system isn't the same, the seemingly endless possibilities that magic can do is how it's supposed to be. 

Every update puts a smile on my face (no homo) and has great characters that seem to react like people who would live in the situations, hard asses and smart people. 

Read it and see for yourself. It gets better after a couple chapters, so read it at least until chapter 10 to see if you don't like it. 

Good job author man, keep it up!

The first chapter or two start off a bit shaky in terms of style, but gets going pretty quick afterwards.

The gibbering insanity, entrenched economic powers and pleasant interactions with natives strongly remind me of the Great Tower, which is a very good comparison.  One of my new favorites, and the update speed is looking good.

if you need an editor, let me know.

I've read all chapters that have been released so far (up to 30) and quite like this story. It's interesting because it's a bit different from most other stories here on RR. The author makes some choices that makes for interesting reading. I like the main character. He isn't a mary sue, "evil" (I often find evil comes off as stupid in stories on RR, like punch your nose to spite your face kind of stupid), or an idiot. In fact, the MC seems quite normal and smart. 

I found the one sex scene (so far) to be quite... lackluster? I don't know really, I just wasn't feeling it. It's not easy to set the right mood for a sex scene in a story. Just look at published authors like Michael-Scott Earle, J.A. Cipriano or Blaise Corvin for examples of failure. I recommend that the author of this story read chapters and sex scenes from authors like A.J Markham, Randi Darren (William D. Arand) or maybe Archibald Bradford. Otherwise a "fade to black" might be better.

Anyhow, if you're looking for something new to read thats on the level of Daedalus (ish) if you've read that then look no further. 

4/5 stars. Room for improvement but enjoyable!

There are few stories that can get me hooked but this one succeeded beyond my wildest expectations. I'm writing this review as of chapter 58 so for those reading this please accept that there will be spoilers.

Normally the story of a system coming to a world and making every piece of tech useless so that people get to rely on magic and prevent the militaries from nuking the demon lords into oblivion would be antithesis to me as it's basically just the author to show us his own opinion of how would human nature develop when the pillars of our society fell which gets boring after a while but this story does things differently. I also love the fact that guns still work and prove to be useful, at least in the beginning.

In this story electricity no longer operates but has the potential to do so with the right applications, the Internet can be replaced and the creature comforts can be remade and even improved upon with magic which are all good things in my book but the most important factor I saw into this was that Humanity's achievemnts like the cities full skyscrapers remained. They weren't destroyed nor butchered but still stand as a monolith of what human science could do which is something quite apealing to my sensibilities.

I won't discuss grammar as I'm not adept enough at it to do so.

I like your writting style which shows us enough to form ourselves an idea without being overbearing, also as a side note I  absolutely love the way you made the Wilson Mono/Dialogues go and how other people react to them.

Now for the main dish , the character and the only part of the story I felt only deserved 4 stars.

I looove Sandy and the way you made her be the bombshell farm girl that had gotten so used to our MC's shenangians she just shrugs at him whenever he does weird stuffs and the new pregnant parts is just the topping on the cake. 

Tzetin is weird as a character but in a good way strangely. Normally one would have characters try to better themselves to become upstanding citizens but her case is exactly the opposite in which she is trying to become in the mc's own words a scumbag. Her race is presiposed to becoming goodie 2 shoes and unlike the few stories that try to show it her struggle is not played for laughs but shows jsut how hard it is and the beggining of the consequences to her psyche.

The MC's master(I didn't even bother to rember his name) is an interesting character with some quirks but honestly? I'm not really impressed with him. He is in my eyes just the standard master archetype which came out of nowhere and offered the MC the chance for power and also all but made him an official outlaw for little gain so far from his point of view even if his advice proves useful in time his pressence so far had been naught but a detriment in the long term with his influence giving the MC other enemies. Sure the fact that you added your own twist to his style of OP is good but quite honestly I jsut plain don't like the archetype even if the character itself is good.

The MC, Garth... Well that's a guy after my own heart. He is exactly what I expect people to be when placed int o such situations. He is not a megalomaniac after power and all the fame and women which he earned due to his heaven defying cheat abillity he got for doing nothing of importance but a honest to god human beeing that got given a little cheat to help him around and now tries to make himself a home after he forsake his old one. I can truly relate to the guy because as he is trying to survive,he makes mistakes but succeds desipte them in a believalbe way. His ideas are good and smart and while so far they haven't come to bite him in the ass to much they only reinfoce my point that he is human and you have no idea just how much that improves this story from my perspective.

The side character are good and I love how they don't feel like automatons but almost living, breathing humans which was a nice touch.

All in all I love this story and hope to see more of it.

Found it novel and interesting at first. Moves pretty rapidly, discarding some characters pretty readily. Not bad in of itself, but my main issue is with the MC's rapid change in character from smart and pragmatic to somewhat silly and flippant, to just stupid and annoying. He has dumb smart guy syndrome and I feel no sympathy for him.

More planning was needed to maintain a coherent story. Not enough time was spent fleshing out the MC's motivations for some of his frankly stupid decisions. The other characters are still fairly interesting, but they are side characters and do not require the depth of character needed for a MC. Couple that with rapid and large time skips with random seemingly inconsequential foreshadowing and I just stopped enjoying the story. Read up to Ch 32 before calling it quits.

It has some minor issues, but i really enjoy it ^-^

The Novel 'The Outer Sphere' it reminds me of 'Brimstone Fantasy' it has the type of writing that plucks a few heartstrings that make me want to walk into the world. The magical system is similar to others but has the sparkle to it that feels like a true Wizard whom is in the process of mastering his/her's Magic and twisting it to their use. As I said in the begining it reminds me of 'Brimstone Fantasy' as it has the vibe of wonder and amusement as the start of it both are people whom feel terrible what has happened to them or occured, but overcome it. They also have gods and goddess that give a partial of their power to the ones they choose. But each power they give is quite powerfull. In the beginning you would think Garth is going to die as someone who became quadriplegic would not survive at all in our world has it's physics turned upside down but he does with the determination to live. In the later parts of the story he has a choice between 3 gods and goddess Hastia, the goddess of fire, destruction, power and beauty - Entramond, the god of chaos, opportunity, swiftness, and greed - Beladia, Goddess… of…Hearth, nature…love and fertility: In each of his choices he gains a gods bounty or a gift of power, he chooses Beladia since she will give all of her bounty to him. You would think that gaining a whole gods bounty makes you a demi-god but sure enough it does not make Garth immune to getting hurt but it gives him the ability of a Druid. 

So far in the story it's quite good and I am definitely going to keep my eye on this book as it has caught the same amount of interest I have for 'Brimstone Fantasy'.

Please continue on writing Macronomicon.