Feral: The Story of a Half Orc

by Mahmoud Schahed

Original ONGOING Action Adventure Fantasy Sci-fi Magic Male Lead Non-Human lead Supernatural
Warning This fiction contains:
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  • Profanity
  • Sexual Content

Char has lived in Jarvin his entire life, subjected to hatred and suspicion for his Half-Orc heritage. He avoids the crowd, only wanting to focus on his blacksmithing and runes. Right up until the girl who is prophesized to save the world decides to become his friend, pulling him into assassination plots, conspiracies, and caves full of giant spiders. Yay?

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Vokivas
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Standard high fantasy races. Orks, humans, elves, dwarves,   and halflings. Plus a few extra. My main message is that you should take 10 minutes and read the first chapter. There are rare spelling mistakes that can be attributed to rushing things out. I’m too lazy to do a proper, fleshed out review so I’ll just tell you what to expect. 

The story starts with some action! There is more action spaced throughout the story as well.

Char, our protagonist, is no noobie. He is more than proficient at his job. He is near the level of grandmaster. Yet he still thirsts for knowledge to improve his craft with magic. Char isn’t blessed with everything though, he is very weak in ‘spiritual’ magic.

There are two types of magic. Spiritual, which can have different outcomes based on your intentions, feelings, and imagination. And physical magic, which represents the real life physics we live with. Physical magic is all about manipulating things in a set way in order to achieve a predictable outcome. As physical magic is more based in reality, spiritual magic is what we’re looking at in fantasy. I’m talking fireballs, lightning bolts, and more. 

I think that should about do it. I might’ve gotten carried away. 

Oh well.

Oh yeah, the chapters are mega sized. It took me hours to get to chapter 6. As that is the most recent chapter released. 

wragged
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I have a hard time explaining why you should read this story beyond saying that it is a good story. The author has a obviously clear understanding of how to write, with a few hiccups here and there, and the characters are a delight.

The only reason that I have not given the story five stars across the board is due to a sprinkling of misspelled or missing words and the first couple chapters being a little heavy on exposition, and I never give a five star story score to an unfinished story. However, once this story is done, I think it could be published with very little editing, and I would buy it.

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soo... to upgrade the score with an actual reveiw.

 

The style is solid. the author uses 2 magical systems in his world, a "softish" spiritual magic system and one "hard", it those are terms familar to you. both well balanced with it's own proes and cons. and the inworld philosophical discusion between mages about them, and why a true true mage knows both is well thought out. religion and goverment is clearly thought out, witouth being slamed into our faces. racial tensions exist, and are well thought out and ofthen even have a decent explenation in different cultures 

 

Story: yet again, solid. everyone is rational. their thoughts and plans make sence from their own perspectives, sure the hero is less racist than almost everybody else, but she has reasons for it, such as acctually trying to live what is pretched. bit naive, but still shown as inteligent and capable of learning. The sexual content part is pretty much a lie though. romantic undertons and bordelo workers that dress slightly skimpy is about as far as it goes.

 

gramma: solid

 

Characters: Very, very solid. as stated in the story, everyone is rational. their thoughts and plans make sence from their own perspectives. if they act like an idiot, they probably have a reason for it. sure, not always a good reason, but sometimes the racist lynchmob realy just hate those darn greenskins, and thinks a filthy halfbreed is should stay away from their hot arian women. the corrupt official is more likley to bring down his extortions on a dude of collour.  their likes and dislikes makes sense, and not everyone will agree with decitions but can still act mature about it. hollywood rarly makes their characters this solid or real

 

solid 5/5.

Bima Agung
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Good... Chaps was long and not boring at all. 

Faustian
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Best damn story out there!

Addictive and compelling story. A must read!