The Raven and the Snake

by Sociable Hermit

Original ONGOING Action Adventure Fantasy Male Lead Martial Arts Reincarnation Strategy
Warning This fiction contains:
  • Gore
  • Profanity

A prince sent into exile, without the means to fight back.

A young man trapped in an unfair world, without the status to bring about change.

Combined, they will have both means and status.

Armed with advanced knowledge from a strange world, will Prince Corco be able to cut through the injustice, regain his birthright and turn the country of his ancestors into a paradise of true peace, equality and prosperity?

"Okay, first step: Let's make some Brandy."

...that's a maybe then.

 

Author's note: I love the idea of kingdom-building novels and think the genre has a lot to offer, but I don't think many authors do them very well. Here is my attempt. The novel has a strong focus on politics and kingdom building, with occasional action and a bit of humor. Have fun.

 

Cover was made by MrZombie

 

Updates Tuesday-Thursday-Saturday.

 

My discord server, come hang out: https://discord.gg/2N7qzcy

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Table of Contents
Chapter Name Release Date
Maps and Illustrations ago
Prologue [REWRITE] ago
Book 0, Ch. 1 - A Dilemma ago
Book 0, Ch. 2 - Alchemist Bombasticus ago
Book 0, Ch. 3 - First Experiment ago
Book 0, Ch. 4 - The Smell of Hope ago
Book 0, Ch. 5 - Their Respective Plans ago
Book 0, Ch. 6 - Marketing ago
Book 0, Ch. 7 - Second Product ago
Book 0, Ch. 8 - Cultivation ago
Book 0, Ch. 9 - Fake Seer, Fake Physician ago
Book 0, Ch. 10 - Safety Net ago
Book 0, Ch. 11 - Business Partners ago
Book 0, Ch. 12 - First Major Haul ago
Book 0, Ch. 13 - Inventions ago
Book 1, Ch. 1 - A Triumphant Return ago
Chapter 2 - Blue Cloth for the Funeral [REWRITE] ago
Chapter 3 - Unequal Negotiations [REWRITE] ago
Chapter 4 - Allies [REWRITE] ago
Chapter 5 - Brandy [REWRITE] ago
Chapter 6 - Electoral Campaign [REWRITE] ago
Chapter 7 - Music ago
Chapter 8 - That Magnificent Beard [REWRITE] ago
Chapter 9 - Little Bro, Let's Drink ago
Chapter 10 - A Chat in the Garden ago
Chapter 11 - Life Insurance ago
Chapter 12 - Accomplice ago
Chapter 13 - To Cancel Out the Double Negative ago
Chapter 14 - Into the Underworld ago
Chapter 15 - A Chat Between Father and Son ago
Chapter 16 - A Long Day of Work ago
Chapter 17 - Making Plans ago
Chapter 18 - A Claim to the Throne ago
Chapter 19 - A Great Hero ago
Chapter 20 - Streak of Light ago
Chapter 21 - A Moment of Peace ago
Chapter 22 - The Merchant Prince ago
Chapter 23 - Beyond the Clouds ago
Chapter 24 - Stargazing Brawl ago
Chapter 25 - Fire Seeds ago
Chapter 26 - Looking Back ago
Chapter 27 - Witch Doctor's Curse ago
Chapter 28 - The Ape King's Banquet ago
Chapter 29 - How to Rule a Country ago
Chapter 30 - Going Home ago
Chapter 31 - Conspiracy ago
Chapter 32 - Collecting Pieces ago
Chapter 33 - The Final Vote ago
Chapter 34 - Resist or Submit ago
Chapter 35 - Washed Away by the Rain ago
Chapter 36 - Ancestral Assembly ago
Chapter 37 - One Down, One To Go ago
Chapter 38 - Uncovering Truths ago
Chapter 39 - Miracle ago
Chapter 40 - Rift ago
Chapter 41 - The Ancestor's Goals ago
Chapter 42 - A Reward for Good Deeds ago
Chapter 43 - Truth and Deceit ago
Announcement ago
Chapter 44 - Dark Omens ago
Chapter 45 - Plans for the Future ago
Chapter 46 - Nobles' Assembly ago
Chapter 47 - A Duel Between Kings ago
Chapter 48 - A Duel Between Kings (Part2) ago
Book 1, Epilogue 1 - Cortege ago
Book 1, Epilogue 2 - His Role ago
Book 2 - Intermission ago
Book 2, Ch. 1 - River King ago
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Stultus
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Good grammar

Good idea

Adds up to good potential

Look forward to seeing more.

kingleo8
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Don't believe me because I am sucker for Kingdom building but this is truly awesome. The MC has flaws! He has a family too! And guess what they real too!

Okay, enough jokes. The story is good with good grammar but the world building is little lacking. The whereabout prince before coming back from is missing and honestly works like deus ex machina. Not a problem for me though but I would have appreciated some side story about it. Anyway, other characters are good and believable. 

That's all and be sure to give it a try because you will be hooked to it! 

Edit: Well the Author continues to surprise me yet again. We have the backstory now. I really never thought that the backstory would be this amazing and not only that but the Author writes this so good that I am hooked on it. I can't give you extra now though. Alright, now it time for me to read chapter 47. 

Melcontent
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Firstly, I only read up to chapter 10 of this book. The author told me that the plot picks up after the 10th chapter but I have a lot of reviews to do so I am only reviewing the initial start.

Now that I got out the part where I am only reviewing the prelude and up to chapter 10, let's get some things out of the way.

Plot: The plot appears to center around the MC the prince and his rise to power. After coming home after being exiled, MC goes on a quest to gain his empire back from his brothers.

Characters: The main character feels like he could either be an early dictator or a hero depending on the later chapters. It is still early days and we are just getting more characters. Not much a supporting cast, yet, but more like a few name drops.

Gramma: I am going to be honest I didn't notice many and the author fixed what I did find pretty quickly.

What I like: It is different compared most of the repetitive works on this site, it actually feels like a proper novel, with an actual plot and everything. The author put a lot into world building, I do think that he could have taken an extra step and it would have been like "Woah."

What you might not like: Best to rip off the band-aid, it's slow. It is meant to be a political intrigue book. While there might be epic sword fights in the future, the first chapters are an acquired taste. So, yeah. Less Treasure Island and Tolkien and more like War and Peace.

Those of you who like Destiny's Crucible series might enjoy this as well.

Mirrored
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Pretty much professional level

Reminds me more of a BAEN Books novel than something on Royal Road.

Strengths: Well crafted and sympathetic characters that aren't cliches or overdone. Good worldbuilding with distinct cultures and realistic human behaviour. An engaging plot that doesn't pander to the main character. 

Flaws: A lack of foreshadowing and exposition makes some events seem to come from nowhere. Very important characters, laws or rituals just appear without any real context. For a hyper realistic novel such as ths one, the main character's immunity and complete indifference to assination is a little offputting. Assasins seem to have been made completly inept to make up for the lack of MC powers. Especially considering the existence of low powered superhumans that could kill the MC with a single punch or arrow. The existence of said cultivators is also a little odd and underdeveloped.

An interesting read. Excited to see where it goes. 

Diodato Adinolfi
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How to say, maybe this novel is the first that introduce different nations, with different religion and way of life, and actually follow that in their action. Everything is well fleshed, and we can perceive that it's not something written casual. The story is captivating, the characters have all different way of thinking and not just some random names who talk and do things like everyone. I don't understand why this novel isn't in trending, but I'm sure that it'll continue to grow and catch followers as long as the author continue this way. 

If I have to say something that I didn't like about the novel, (but I have to be really hard to find it and just because I want to find one thing) it's about cultivation of mc and in general in the novel, we can't understand how it works and what are the consequences, I mean, we understand it give you strenght and help with age, but how much? are there really no different level? 

In conclusion I really advice you to read it and let the author take you in the journey of our mc, and be sure, you'll enjoy it.

Swish Fish
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This is some good shit. 9/10 saw some spelling errors. And the prose was a little rushed in the first 10 chapters. More show, less tell. Other than that, it's a well-seasoned dish. The MC has a bit of loose mouth and info dump syndrome, and if any of the characters died I wouldn't be emotionally affected. Improve your vocabulary and pacing, humor is a little dry. 

Blackbird0
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Medieval politics and scheming: fantastic!

Wow, this is really good! The politics are fantastic I absolutely love all the scheming that goes on. The grammar is fantastic and characters have depth and feel very real. If it's not already published, it definitely should be!

Lord Zaika
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It's well written, and I didn't have any issues with grammar. I do like the premise of the story, and the MC who uses their brains to overcome their obstacles. I am very curious what other modern knowledge the author is going to use obtain an advantage. Maybe mass production method of steel, or crucible steel? Using lead in glass production to make crystal glass? Or perhaps make guncotton? dynomite? There's a lot of cool things he can do.

Ice cream!

Roarro
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Very very good story. Well written,with interesting characters and pretty good plotline. Ive read all of it,in one sitting and book one just just give me hunger for more. Its a publishable material quality novel.