Enlightened Empire

Enlightened Empire

by Sociable Hermit

Warning This fiction contains:
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A prince sent into exile, without the means to fight back.

A young man trapped in an unfair world, without the status to bring about change.

Combined, they will have both means and status.

Armed with advanced knowledge from a strange world, will Prince Corco be able to cut through the injustice, regain his birthright and turn the country of his ancestors into a paradise of true peace, equality and prosperity?

"Okay, first step: Let's make some Brandy."

...that's a maybe then.

 

Author's note: I love the idea of kingdom-building novels and think the genre has a lot to offer, but I don't think many authors do them very well. Here is my attempt. The novel has a strong focus on politics and kingdom building, with occasional action and a bit of humor. Have fun.

 

Cover was made by MrZombie

 

Updates three times a week.

 

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384 Chapters
Chapter Name Release Date
Maps and Illustrations ago
Prologue ago
Chapter 1 - A Dilemma ago
Chapter 2 - Alchemist Bombasticus ago
Chapter 3 - First Experiment ago
Chapter 4 - The Smell of Hope ago
Chapter 5 - Their Respective Plans ago
Chapter 6 - Marketing ago
Chapter 7 - Second Product ago
Chapter 8 - Cultivation ago
Chapter 9 - Fake Seer, Fake Physician ago
Chapter 10 - Safety Net ago
Chapter 11 - Business Partners ago
Chapter 12 - First Major Haul ago
Chapter 13 - Inventions ago
Chapter 14 - Matters of Faith ago
Chapter 15 - Prey ago
Chapter 16 - Three Captains ago
Chapter 17 - New Era ago
Chapter 18 - A Man of Few Words ago
Chapter 19 - Faith and Greed ago
Chapter 20 - Modern Siege Tactics ago
Chapter 21 - Manufactured Morale ago
Chapter 22 - Fallibility ago
Chapter 23 - Peace Offers ago
Chapter 24 - Greed and Motivation ago
Chapter 25 - Fake Pirates ago
Chapter 26 - Consequences ago
Chapter 27 - The Best Laid Plans ago
Chapter 28 - What Really Matters ago
Chapter 29 - On the Prowl ago
Chapter 30 - The Big Fish ago
Chapter 31 - Payoff ago
Chapter 32 - Talent, Success, Truth [End of Book 1] ago
Chapter 33 - A Triumphant Return [Start of Book 2: The Raven and the Snake] ago
Chapter 34 - Blue Cloth for the Funeral ago
Chapter 34.5 - Bandits ago
Chapter 35 - Unequal Negotiations ago
Chapter 36 - Distribution of Wealth ago
Chapter 37 - Allies ago
Chapter 38 - Electoral Campaign ago
Chapter 39 - Music ago
Chapter 40 - That Magnificent Beard ago
Chapter 41 - Little Bro, Let's Drink ago
Chapter 42 - A Chat in the Garden ago
Chapter 43 - Life Insurance ago
Chapter 44 - Accomplice ago
Chapter 45 - To Cancel Out the Double Negative ago
Chapter 46 - Into the Underworld ago
Chapter 47 - A Chat Between Father and Son ago
Chapter 48 - A Long Day of Work ago
Chapter 49 - Making Plans ago
Chapter 50 - Claim to the Throne ago
Chapter 51 - A Great Hero ago
Chapter 52 - Streak of Light ago
Chapter 53 - A Moment of Peace ago
Chapter 54 - The Merchant Prince ago
Chapter 55 - Beyond the Clouds ago
Chapter 56 - Stargazing Brawl ago
Chapter 57 - Fire Seeds ago
Chapter 58 - Looking Back ago
Chapter 59 - Witch Doctor's Curse ago
Chapter 60 - The Ape King's Banquet ago
Chapter 61 - How to Rule a Country ago
Chapter 62 - Going Home ago
Chapter 63 - Conspiracy ago
Chapter 64 - Collecting Pieces ago
Chapter 65 - The Final Vote ago
Chapter 66 - Resist or Submit ago
Chapter 67 - Washed Away by the Rain ago
Chapter 68 - Ancestral Assembly ago
Chapter 69 - One Down, One To Go ago
Chapter 70 - Uncovering Truths ago
Chapter 71 - Miracle ago
Chapter 72 - Rift ago
Chapter 73 - The Ancestor's Goals ago
Chapter 74 - A Reward for Good Deeds ago
Chapter 75 - Truth and Deceit ago
Chapter 76 - Dark Omens ago
Chapter 77 - Plans for the Future ago
Chapter 78 - Nobles' Assembly ago
Chapter 79 - A Duel Between Kings (Part 1) ago
Chapter 80 - A Duel Between Kings (Part2) ago
Chapter 81 - Cortege ago
Chapter 82 - His Role [End of Book 2] ago
Chapter 83 - Middle of Nowhere [Start of Book 3: Beacons in the South] ago
Chapter 84 - River King ago
Chapter 85 - Saniya ago
Chapter 86 - The Captain's Homecoming ago
Chapter 87 - Extended Family ago
Chapter 88 - Close Family ago
Chapter 89 - The Lord of Saniya ago
Chapter 90 - Smiles All Around ago
Chapter 91 - Adventurous Spirit ago
Chapter 92 - Plans Between Friends ago
Chapter 93 - Beacons ago
Chapter 94 - Gifts ago
Chapter 95 - Ronnie and Bombasticus ago
Chapter 96 - Free City ago
Chapter 97 - Standardization ago
Chapter 98 - Businessman and Lady ago
Chapter 99 - Two out of Three ago
Chapter 100 - Battle in the Mountains ago
Chapter 101 - Hope Dies Last ago
Chapter 102 - Rumors ago
Chapter 103 - Triumvirate Meeting ago
Chapter 104 - Checkup ago
Chapter 103 - Between a Rock and a Hard Place ago
Chapter 106 - Time Flies ago
Chapter 107 - Financial Troubles ago
Chapter 108 - Transit ago
Chapter 109 - Lord, Governor, King ago
Chapter 110 - Aperitif ago
Chapter 111 - Uninvited Guest ago
Chapter 112 - Hidden in Plain Sight ago
Chapter 113 - Blemishes ago
Chapter 114 - Three Kinds of Trouble ago
Chapter 115 - True Nature ago
Chapter 116 - How to Salvage a Disaster ago
Chapter 117 - Two Sides ago
Chapter 118 - Chances Missed, and Taken ago
Chapter 119 - Surrounded ago
Chapter 120 - Power Struggle ago
Chapter 121 - Mortal Danger ago
Chapter 122 - Light and Dark ago
Chapter 123 - Grand Finale ago
Chapter 124 - Perspectives ago
Chapter 125 - Opponents ago
Chapter 126 - Old Friends [End of Book 3] ago
Chapter 127 - Bandits in the Forest [Start of Book 4 - Divided, Unbroken] ago
Chapter 128 - Old and New ago
Chapter 129 - Precision ago
Chapter 130 - Recruitment ago
Chapter 131 - Secret Alliance ago
Chapter 132 - First Invention ago
Chapter 133 - Cheat Codes ago
Chapter 134 - Preparations ago
Chapter 135 - Loyalty ago
Chapter 136 - Inevitability ago
Chapter 137 - Pettiness ago
Chapter 138 - Burden ago
Chapter 139 - Weaklings ago
Chapter 140 - Opening a Path ago
Chapter 141 - Glory ago
Chapter 142 - Purpose ago
Chapter 143 - Supply and Demand ago
Chapter 144 - Unfounded Worry ago
Chapter 145 - Superstition ago
Chapter 146 - Splitting Up ago
Chapter 147 - Pessimist and Optimist ago
Chapter 148 - Change in Direction ago
Chapter 149 - Spread Thin ago
Chapter 150 - Stubborn ago
Chapter 151 - Underwater ago
Chapter 152 - Family Ties ago
Chapter 153 - Loyal or Stubborn ago
Chapter 154 - Vice ago
Chapter 155 - Travelers ago
Chapter 156 - Weather ago
Chapter 157 - Reunions ago
Chapter 158 - Turning Winds ago
Chapter 159 - Antipyretics ago
Chapter 160 - Gift ago
Chapter 161 - Plans to be Foiled ago
Chapter 162 - Plots and Plans ago
Chapter 163 - Two Meetings ago
Chapter 164 - Plans and Ploys ago
Chapter 165 - A Sacrifice for the Future ago
Chapter 166 - Conspiracy ago
Chapter 167 - The Fog Clears ago
Chapter 168 - Back Home ago
Chapter 169 - Cleanup ago
Chapter 170 - Exiles ago
Chapter 171 - Landing Operation ago
Chapter 172 - Disruption ago
Chapter 173 - Opportunists, Cowards ago
Chapter 174 - New Toys ago
Chapter 175 - Starvation Tactics ago
Chapter 176 - Chance at Glory ago
Chapter 177 - Accompaniment ago
Chapter 178 - Maybe ago
Chapter 179 - Real Enemy ago
Chapter 180 - Cold ago
Chapter 181 - Demons and Mortals ago
Chapter 182 - Surprise Visitor ago
Chapter 183 - Strategic Maneuvers ago
Chapter 184 - Breaking Out ago
Chapter 185 - Secret Deal ago
Chapter 186 - Course Correction ago
Chapter 187 - Sowing Discontent ago
Chapter 188 - Skirmish ago
Chapter 189 - Standoff ago
Chapter 190 - Charge ago
Chapter 191 - Collapse ago
Chapter 192 - Sinister Omens ago
Chapter 193 - Breaking the Siege ago
Chapter 194 - Change of Heart ago
Chapter 195 - Guerilla Tactics ago
Chapter 196 - Making the Rounds ago
Chapter 197 - Revenge ago
Chapter 198 - Final Preparations ago
Chapter 199 - Opening Gambit ago
Chapter 200 - No More Probes ago
Chapter 201 - Real War ago
Chapter 202 - Counter Offensive ago
Chapter 203 - Confrontation ago
Chapter 204 - Failed Ambition ago
Chapter 205 - Reunion ago
Chapter 206 - Forceful Negotiations (End of Book 4) ago
Chapter 207 - Trade Trouble (Beginning of Book 5) ago
Chapter 208 - Trade Trouble (Part 2) ago
Chapter 209 - Armistice ago
Chapter 210 - Always More Banquets ago
Chapter 211 - A New Era ago
Chapter 212 - Office Politics ago
Chapter 213 - Projects and Goals ago
Chapter 214 - A New World ago
Chapter 215 - Trouble in Paradise ago
Chapter 216 - Modern Transportation ago
Chapter 217 - Back to Basics ago
Chapter 218 - A Route to the Stars ago
Chapter 219 - Lessons Between Lessons ago
Chapter 220 - Overtime Work ago
Chapter 221 - Freedom and Burden ago
Chapter 222 - Please Stay Behind After Class ago
Chapter 223 - Strengthening the Alliance ago
Chapter 224 - Change in Fortune ago
Chapter 225 - Servility ago
Chapter 226 - Real Power ago
Chapter 227 - Honorable Battle ago
Chapter 228 - Beasts of War ago
Chapter 229 - Two Types of Battle ago
Chapter 230 - Hidden Smile ago
Chapter 231 - Back Again ago
Chapter 232 - Union ago
Chapter 233 - New Weaponry ago
Chapter 234 - Shadows ago
Chapter 235 - In Search of a Future ago
Update: New Chapters Coming Today (and tomorrow, and...) ago
Chapter 236 - Worthless ago
Chapter 237 - Looking Around ago
Chapter 238 - Paper, Also Worthless ago
Chapter 239 - New Business ago
Chapter 240 - Government Interference ago
Chapter 241 - Fight For Power ago
Chapter 242 - Convincing the Holdovers ago
Chapter 243 - High Politics ago
Chapter 244 - Still Searching ago
Chapter 245 - Catching Up ago
Chapter 246 - Cold War ago
Chapter 247 - No Place Like Home ago
Chapter 248 - Secret Operations ago
Chapter 249 - Meeting the Boss ago
Chapter 250 - Family Vacation ago
Chapter 251 - Setting Things in Motion ago
Chapter 252 - Infiltration ago
Chapter 253 - Opponents Far Apart ago
Chapter254 - Fire Safety ago
Chapter 255 - Breaking the Net ago
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Chapter 280 ago
Chapter 281 - End Times [End of Book 5] ago
Chapter 282 [Start of Book 6 - The Verduic Wars] ago
Chapter 283 ago
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Chapter 302 ago
Chapter 302.1 - Everyone Has a Plan ago
Chapter 302.2 - Decoys ago
Chapter 303 - Fireball ago
Chapter 304 - Melee ago
Chapter 305 - End of the Battle, Start of the War ago
Chapter 306 - War Reaches the Island ago
Chapter 307 - 309 - Takeover; Behind the Scenes ago
Chapter 310 - Conspiracy ago
Chapter 311 - The Power of Rumors ago
Chapter 312 - Taking Control ago
Chapter 313 - A New Age ago
Chapter 314 - Medical Research ago
Chapter 315 - Medical Research ago
Chapter 316 - So Many Plans ago
Chapter 317 - 319 - Parting Gift; Journey Through Sachay; Hidden Courtyard ago
Chapter 320 - East Point ago
Chapter 321 - Distant Threat ago
Chapter 322 - Buying Support ago
Chapter 323 - Old Force Opposition ago
Chapter 324 - Securing the Landing ago
Chapter 325 - A Search for Meaning ago
Chapter 326 - Stuck in the Mud ago
Chapter 327 - Secret Operations ago
Chapter 328 - Finding Meaning ago
Chapter 329 - Felian Northdale, Victim of Workplace Abuse ago
Chapter 330 - War Against Nature ago
Chapter 331 - Two Sides of Progress ago
Chapter 332 - Tricks of the Commoners ago
Chapter 333 - House Ogulno Breaks its Isolation ago
Chapter 334 - Unhappy Clergy ago
Chapter 335 - Modern Education ago
Chapter 336 - Bent and Upright ago
Chapter 337 - Felian Northdale, Really Trying to Keep it Together ago
Chapter 338 - Guerilla Warfare ago
Chapter 339 - Modern Warfare ago
Chapter 340 - Focus ago
Chapter 341 - His Entire World ago
Chapter 342 - The Final Piece ago
Chapter 343 - Machines ago
Chapter 344 - Reigning in the Opposition ago
Chapter 345 - Open Contempt ago
Chapter 346 - Fires Everywhere ago
Chapter 347 - Unexpected Enemies ago
Chapter 348 - Interview With the Devil ago
Chapter 349 - The End of His Patience ago
Chapter 350 - Welcoming the Visitors ago
Chapter 351 - The Final Talks ago
Note Concerning Chapters Today and Tomorrow ago
Chapter 352 - Chaos in the City ago
Chapter 353 - Emergency Meeting ago
Chapter 354 - A Round of Drinks ago
Chapter 355 - Two Masks ago
Chapter 356 - War for the City's Soul ago
Chapter 357 - Chamber Music ago
Chapter 358 - Support ago
Chapter 359 - Treasure Hunt ago
Chapter 360 - The Dangerous Life of a Treasure Hunter ago
Chapter 361 - Switching Sides ago
Chapter 362 - Gathering Allies ago
Chapter 363 - Quiet Resistance ago
Chapter 364 - Silent Ultimatum ago
Chapter 365 - During the Festival (Part 1) ago
Chapter 366 - During the Festival (Part 2) ago
Chapter 367 - Saniya's Longest Day (Part 1) ago
Chapter 368 - Saniya's Longest Day (Part 2) ago
Chapter 369 - Saniya's Longest Day (Part 3) ago
Chapter 370 - Last Chance to Repent ago
Chapter 371 - Miracle ago
Chapter 372 - Consequences ago
Chapter 373 - The Morning After ago
Chapter 374 - Breaking the Isolation ago
Chapter 375 - Regret ago
Chapter 376 - Full Control ago
Chapter 377 - Moral Highground ago
Chapter 378 - New Role ago
Chapter 379 - Forced Hands ago
Chapter 380 - Hubris ago
Chapter 381 - Surprise ago

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Too much politicking, too little kingdom building

Reviewed at: Chapter 282 [Start of Book 6 - The Verduic Wars]

First, let me get this out of the way. The story is enjoyable. I've read up to chapter 283 or something, 2 chapters into book 6. That's maybe 2.8k pages and if there was nothing to hook me I would've dropped it ages ago and not after 5 books. That's why the 4.5 stars for the overall score.

However at this point, the story falls so badly, I don't have enough patience nor will to continue with it. There are a bunch of reasons, but first, let me get the good things in order.

Grammar: Impeccable as far as I am concerned, as a non-native speaker. The read was smooth enough and the author was able to get the general feel of the scenes across to the reader properly. Other than a few typos here and there, I've seen no other mistakes. Technically, the story is sound and you won't have to go through the extra effort to read it.

Style: I really like this. The author includes just the perfect amount of povs.Therer are some cliffhangers, and other tricks throughout the books. However, everything is done in moderation and does not take away from the Story.

Ok, now comes the bad. And ooooh boy, there are a lot of bads to be had. This story, is without a doubt, flawed. The author made a note in the story synopsis on how this was his attempt at the kingdom-building genre, and that a lot of other authors don't do it well. Here's my opinion on that after reading 5 books, 

This novel gradually takes all the fun things about kingdom building away, and more and more focuses on mercantile and court politics. If you like kingdom-building, you 'might' like this book. However, there are a lot of better books around. (My opinion only).

Let me explain, as this concerns why I have given the story score only 3.5

Book 0 is nothing about the kingdom building side, and only about trading and escaping. Yes, there is technology developed, but that is a different thing from kingdom building. Related yes, but not equivalent.

Book 1-2 is about hard politicking. No kingdom building to be had.

Book 3 is the start of the kingdom building. But just barely. It focuses a looot more on the war.

Book 4-5 Shows some proper kingdom building. But even in these books, politics take up more than 50% of the story.

All in all, maybe 10-15% Of the total chapters are about proper kingdom building. The rest is not. We get to see the effects of various technological development throughout the whole story and a lot of chapters, but in those chapters, the main focus was something else and the developed tech was only used as a fulcrum at best.

This, in my opinion, is the first place where the story suffers.

Kingdom building here is 'realistic'. It isn't a city simulation like a lot of other stories, as said by mc Corco himself. The process of developing technology is skimmed over, only the conclusion and result is shown. Yet all the nitty-gritty details on what the problems of developing Saniya (the main city of the mc) is shown, a lot.

The MC has knowledge and people. But there are so damn many small minor problems to be tackled before the proper base building can even start is mind-boggling. The reason why I like kingdom building is that I like to see the lives of the oppressed people improve, enemies, getting rekt by superior tech. breaking archaic traditions for modern humanitarianism, etcetera.

This book fulfills all those at the barest minimum. 2.5 pages in and the MC has only developed his own territory and not even the whole thing. All his allies either betray him or are getting betrayed by their other allies. Every time Corco puts the sword or gun down to develop his own territory, every damn possible minor problem crops up at the same time. 

Basically, everytime kingdom building has a chance to properly happen, the author shifts focus away and writes chapters about why kingdom-building realistically is so hard. Followed up by a bunch of chapters about politics, trading. Failure after failure after failure after failure. Some minor victories. Plot armor for a major win. Then the failure galore begins again.

The story 'was' enjoyable. At chapter 283, it is frustrating as fuck to read. All the fun parts of a proper base building series gone, then comes all the not-so-fun parts for a kingdom building novel being highlighted, chapter after chapter because 'realism', in a fiction. I don't want realism if it means a realistic kingdom-building novel will become boring as fuck. What I want is believability. If it isn't realistic, yet is still believable in the context of the whole setting of the story, then that tops a 'realistic' novel any day of the week.

Next, Characters, another avenue this novel suffers in.

Let me start by saying, Corco, the main character, is REALLY unlikable. Because of one reason. HE NEVER FUCKING LEARNS! The author portrays the mc as someone really humanitarian. He plays by all the rules. He wants change but doesn't break a lot of traditions. He is 'fair' to his enemies as he is to his allies. The most major victories he got over his enemies at book 2 would be some good comebacks to their insults. While his allies on the other hand were busy being killed by his dirty playing enemies.

This is how most conflict arcs are set. MC is busy developing his kingdom. A bunch of his allies betrays him in secret. They break all the rules. In the background, new enemies show up. MC is really disadvantaged. His real ally dies to protect him etc. Character development happens. Mc is like, "No more mister nice guy", then proceeds to be the nice guy. Enemies break all the rules in the game possible, mc stubbornly sticks to the rules. More of his people get gutted.

Another character development happens. MC be like, "Ok THIS TIME, no more mister nice guy." then proceeds to be even nicer to his enemies than before. Even if he doesn't proactively help them, his inaction towards threats and his 'fair to everyone' policies, again and again, causes his enemies to gain the upper hand. 

Can you imagine how frustrating it is to read a book where the enemies can break the rules without any consequences, while the MCs main reason to not break the rules is that he is afraid of said consequences?

The MC NEVER learns.

And finally, after all those scenes were set up, and at the onset of the war or conflict with the mc being betrayed, again and again, he STILL WINS. Mostly because of his modern techs.

Most enemies are shown as greedy and incompetent. But they still manage to gravely injure the MCs side because of MCs own actions, yet in the end, they still lose cause they are stupid as fuck. Of course, the author doesn't forget to kill of a few allies of the MC, mostly off-screen (meaning we don't get to see the scene of them dying), to show that the conflict was indeed won with a hard struggle, not with plot armor.

The MC is stupid, his allies are worse. The enemy are ONLY EVER greedy and power-hungry. Mc makes the same mistake over and over, the enemy capitalizes on those mistakes over and over. Yet the MC still wins.

Welp, gonna drop this now. Good luck to the author. But in my opinion, this attempt at kingdom building has been a resounding failure. It's a good novel in the court politics genre, a bad one in kingdom-building.

Sageoflore
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Can't read anymore just skipped 10ch out of annoyance with Corco once again being unable to do anything better than his brothers, somehow. I'm going to cool off and maybe come back a Continue in like a week, I stopped at "everyone has a plan" so I'm pretty far in.

Style: Amazing to me at least, with a bit cutting down of description and more dialogue would be good though.

Story: really annoying progress of politics and civilization. The overarching plot is fine but the way in which everyone besides Corco's group gets away with doing "bad/ dumb" things is really tiring. I feel like there's zero meaningful consequences for the antagonists and every consequence under the sun for Corco and his tiny kingdom.

I don't count him as ruler of the south cause I just know the author will make the other Southern nobles betray him. I just don't see any win that Corco gets as meaningful because I just know his plans will get easily foiled. 

Grammar: perfect until some of the later chapters where words are missing.

Characters: MC has flaws that don't seem to develop in a positive way at all. The side characters are in-depth if it's the MC's friends that is. All other characters are just copy-paste, unfortunately. The only redeeming character with difference is the Green king who

unfortunately dies because of plot reasons or overconfidence in his own position in the verdant isles and somehow the other kings movements escaping his sight??

I think the overall quality of this story is good but it fails to reward the reader with any meaningful progress and victory, they are all half or quarter victories. This is hard to read through with painful lengths of 40-50ch of brutal defeat and then one insignificant reward from a victory. I will continue to read as it still has engaging plots and stories I just wish it could feel like the MC got more than a conciliatory win that overall means little. Kind of agree with Kenoby's failure porn comment.

A.Bel
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It's well written, and I didn't have any issues with grammar. I do like the premise of the story, and the MC who uses their brains to overcome their obstacles. I am very curious what other modern knowledge the author is going to use obtain an advantage. Maybe mass production method of steel, or crucible steel? Using lead in glass production to make crystal glass? Or perhaps make guncotton? dynomite? There's a lot of cool things he can do.

Ice cream!

scorpia95
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War is used to drive the technological progress of this story. And it just never ends. It doesn't leave you with desire to know what happens next.

We never really get to experience anything exciting about this new world. Nothing about cultivation, magic, flora and fauna, etc. 

The story is good. Royal road good.

 

technobread
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Political mixed kingdom building and low fantasy

Reviewed at: Chapter 342 - The Final Piece

This story is incredible with its positives and negatives. I might take some personal bias of the score here as I might give the story higher grade than what I might say about the story. I've read up to latest chapter on Patreon chapter 374. But in the beginning I struggled to like the story it took me twice just to read it, eventually hook it me. I binge read it for 4 days straight. I give the story overall score 4.

 

Grammar: As far from reading from royalroad and Patreon other than minor typos and spacing of some words that made me bit annoyed, it was great. The author expresses general direction of the story from each scene and you won't have the effort reading.

 

Style: The story is moderate pace of different character perspectives for what’s going on the story. Giving a nice pace of general effects without losing interest about characters. What story lacks was the pace of time, given not exact years, months, or days on the timeline is quite annoying sometimes given vague details on how much time has passed between each scene.

 

When contracts for mercenaries and craftsmen are said to expire 5 years time but it’s said that his doctor were going leave at said time when he made contract with the doctors couple of years after craftsmen was quite confusing.

When his admiral left to travel toward the known word we were given “few years” nothing precise or how much time has passed in book 0 to develop his merchant business.

 

Story: Overall the story is a face pace political story of gaining power through the use of modern tech and ideology with hints of cultivation. It might me being nitpicking. To me the author does bare minimum at the notion of “kingdom building” we failed to see the interaction of the effects of what the kingdom does to itself and rest of the world. Where we only see the results not the journey that people face as technology gets better. Where is the struggle of finding new tech and how hard it might take to create said tech. The perspective of the commoners, warriors, and nobles are barely explained on how they feel about them from mathematics, chemistry, medicine/biology, engineering, etc on daily there lives. Then the darker side of society are never shown for people on how they might try to exploit the new system the Mc has created. These important “details” are glossed over course of the story for more interaction of the main and side characters in the political and merchant side. The author does eventually includes some of these elements as story continues but it’s way later. The political side of the story was in depth on the struggles of creating a new society with old trying to stay in power and what one might face against towards being “realistic”.

 

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The elements that bugged me the most are military and cultivation. The interaction of his forces towards logistics or different branches of his military was never expanded other than the basics. While he’s using commoners as the basis of his army, where’s the use of cultivators in the military. There is so many applications for them as special forces. Even his own secret service is explained multiple times they are spread thin what does he do to increase there numbers. While cultivators are only used as scouts, spy, police captain.

 

 

 

Character: Next the characters.

 

Main

The main characters is a flawed man that’s combination of his two personalities the young faithful prince and semi-knowledgeable modern man both naive while trying to keep “fair” character in a greedy world. He’s too nice towards people especially those he consider family. Many times before it’s been explained that he will no longer be the nice guy but it’s been shown that he never really punish the actions of greedy and power hungry men as he loses another ally in the struggle of power. It been shown before of his Isekai knowledge towards his cast but no interaction is explored on how they feel about it, always glossed over.

 

Side

As for side characters. They been used for multiple of different ways without losing interest with using small stories and there general feel towards the Mc and rest of the world as they change. Of course making it harder for new characters to be introduced. The small stories I have mostly liked and few disliked. While some characters forgotten.

His uncle that allowed him to pass the narrow sea is never explored again with his family. While spy being stupid immediately exposing herself without the struggle in Ichilia house to give the message made me quite annoyed.

 

The romantic interest did annoyed me on how she acted in the story to the point of dislike. Eventually I got use how the character acted and loved her interaction with the Mc on how they supported each other.

 

Enemies

Enemies in the story feel like cartoon villains always coming back to bite you in the ass. Though it show how “realistic” the world is former allies become enemies former enemies being ally towards some time. While each opponent develop as person presenting new problems to be faced while others stay the same being dumb and incompetent for the sake of pride for short term benefits never seeing the bigger picture of long term. I do hope they defeat some these enemies eventually since there first appearance.

Mirrored
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Pretty much professional level

Reminds me more of a BAEN Books novel than something on Royal Road.

Strengths: Well crafted and sympathetic characters that aren't cliches or overdone. Good worldbuilding with distinct cultures and realistic human behaviour. An engaging plot that doesn't pander to the main character. 

Flaws: A lack of foreshadowing and exposition makes some events seem to come from nowhere. Very important characters, laws or rituals just appear without any real context. For a hyper realistic novel such as ths one, the main character's immunity and complete indifference to assination is a little offputting. Assasins seem to have been made completly inept to make up for the lack of MC powers. Especially considering the existence of low powered superhumans that could kill the MC with a single punch or arrow. The existence of said cultivators is also a little odd and underdeveloped.

An interesting read. Excited to see where it goes. 

Zethuron
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Great kingdom building, hard to get hooked to this

Reviewed at: Prologue

Ill first state that this story is one of the best kingdom building stories on royalroad, for quite good reasons. The author has put a lot of effort into creating this story. However its not perfect and i rather really wanted to like this story more, but alas.

Corcopaca Titu Primu Pluritac, rather known as Corco, is a prince of the faraway lands of Medala, who has been exiled out of the empire to Arcavia, the land where his ancestors once came from, before they fled,  Corco finds himself lost, with no purpose, with barely any followers who went with him in his exile. Then one day, when he has lost all hope, Corco suddenly finds himself awakening with strange memories, of a foreign world called Earth, of fundamental knowledge about many major concepts, that could change civilization forever. Armed with that knowledge, Corco finds a new goal, to change his nation for the better, and eventually the world at large, but such knowledge does not suddenly make everything easy, for there are many obstacles in his path.

I rather like him as a character, even if he is by no means perfect. He is a person who honestly wants to change the livihood of his people, and even the world at large with the knowledge he got from another world. While he may have such knowledge, that does not make him overpowered, it just puts him ahead of everyone in that aspect, he still has to actively use that knowledge to his advantage, and is not afraid of sharing specific technologies as long as it does benefit him and will not backfire, Corco is also rather a traditionalist, who respects the old traditions, but is not afraid of breaking them, if they are in the way of his plans for the betterment of society. There are his many followers, some of which do follow him out of loyalty, others because of what he could achieve. Even if i like quite some of them as a character, still i feel like they could have done better, some of them fall rather flat, i just dont know why.

While Corco is set up to win, in the plot so far, it hasnt been made easy for him, with him having many enemies that he must defeat or outsmart, and at times, things take a rather unexpected turn, forcing him to change some plans. As said, im liking the fact that even through Corco has all that knowledge, it does not make him infallible at all. A decision that i like, is to make the MC not reincarnated at all, but rather a native of the world, that got the memories of a dead person of earth, this rather improves the story by leaving much of the problems that generally come with Isekai stories out of the story.

The world is simply the best part about this story, its so detailed and thought out, there are a lot of cultures and nations that are very well developed and done realistically as much as possible. Though at times i wish that some nations and cultures got explored already, but there is no doubt, that the author has plans to eventually get to those.  This story also does have cultivation elements, but they are a rather minor thing, not overwhelming like in many cultivation stories one can find, cultivators are for sure strong, but are not invicible at all, and quite costly to maintain.

The author has put a lot of research in the required topics for this story, for the MC's 'discoveries' to make actual sense. Though at times, it can be seen that the knowledge the author has gathered about those topics, is not perfect, and that does seriously show itself at times, but i consider this a rather minor issue, though it still could be improved.

Grammar is overall good enough, with there being just few errors, which are puncuation errors, wrong capitalization, missing spaces at times, all those dont feel like actual problems, but there is also the fact that at times, i felt like a sentence could have been worded better. Normally a reader should not have any problems while reading this story, since those mistakes barely do bother the reading experience.

Overall the author has a readable writing style, that does its job quite well, with a good balance of story elements. I also have barely any complaints about the pace of this story so far, its a kingdom building one, the slow pace fits well with that.

However there are sadly some major problems with it, the writing barely did hook me at all in the start, maybe this is due to me not being that interested in kingdom building, even if its one of the genre's i read. This is a big problem with book 0 and a major part of book 1, with to a lesser degree the later ones. This does not help the story at all with attracting new readers considering many want to get hooked instantly.

To add on this, book 0 is rather a additional book that the author wrote later in when he was writing book 2-3, its not fully required to read it, but it could still give a introduction to the story, even if it does not have much ongoing in it.

Overall, this is for sure a very good kingdom building story, i recommend people to atleast give it a try even if it can be boring at times. For fans of kingdom building however, they should just start reading this story, its exactly the kind of story that they want, with a normal MC.

Linconomics
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Because of COVID-19, I've been scouring the web for noteworthy and interesting stories: I'm happy to have stumbled across this one. Englightend Empire presents an interesting twist on isekai and most epic stories by focusing on the politics and economics of a story as much as the military and cultivation. There is no excessively overpowered main character and the author presents a somewhat balanced view of relatively new military technology. As an economist, I also appreciate the author's attempt at incorporating economic policymaking into a story when few do because of the difficulty. 

In short, I'm a massive fan of this story, so much so that I've read all 255 chapters in the last three days (rip productivity). Please keep up the good work! I wish the story will encourage other authors to similarly give as much importance to the economics and politics as the military and shinny weapons. 

Kenboy
Overall

Failure Porn (Read up to book 4)

Reviewed at: Chapter 336 - Bent and Upright

I honestly root for the MC but at some point I kinda gave up because this author has a sadistic streak. Same recurring trope of annoying merchants and nobles that ruin all plans. The naive MC spouts mutual interest at every turn, but there is only one character template - selfish and greed. You should've stuck with Raven and the Snake as the title instead of the enlighted empire because its literally one enlightened MC + a couple followers.

Story is basically 300 chapters of failure porn. First he fails in Arcavia because of pestering merchants and nobles. Then he fails the succession because of great granddaddy. To top it all off, he loses all composure and charges into the front line and still doesn't kill the duke that chased him across an entire sea. Each book never get a satisifying end.

The only redeeming factor is the grammar and the cultivation intrigue.

highblast21
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Too much drama, not enough kingdom building

Reviewed at: Chapter 363 - Quiet Resistance

After binge reading it again( more like speed reading actually), I forgot how this novel reminds me of Chinese novels where everyone and their mother disses the MC. But unlike those novels, here the MC just grits his teeth and accepts it like a dimwit. He keeps talking that he'll make an empire of renown but lacks the spine to, at the very least diss back at his conspirators. 

If I wanted political drama I would've watched a congressional hearing on the internet. I'm again reminded of why I dropped this one in the past. I came to read for kingdom building, inventions and action. Sadly this novel has far and few between any of them.