Re: Rabbit Eyes
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The new world crafted like a familiar game was, to a certain extent, expected to be any ordinary restart. Starting from Level 1 again, living the tales of fantasy in his novels. White, the 18-year old introvert sincerely hoped so. And yet a curse never leaves his side. His blemish in his life is the crimson eyes that he possesses----
[Mania Eyes], red eyes which invokes inner desires and deep, hidden darkness of the invoked.
A traumatic past prevents him from thinking favourably about them, the cause of his loneliness was never for him to decide. So now that he could, he would live a isekai-worthy life and forget about his past here where no one knew him or his special constitution.
That was what had to happen. Unfortunately----- In a world where monsters and big players like the hero and demon king become inevitably tangled with him, is his passive way of living still correct?
Does trying to play by the rules matter anymore? Is saving the heroine still the right choice? Finding 'affinity' with many girls around him, White inevitably digs up the darkness they hold deep inside... each one just as filthy as the next.
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I really like this history and honestly want to help it to be better, and constructive criticism helps, sooo let it go.
Well, my first review in this site and i’m not a english native speaker, so please bear with my mistakes, but i really enjoy your history, it kinda makes me pissed sometimes though.
So first things first, as i’m not 100% fluent in, not gonna criticize your grammar, for me, at least, is good.
Hummm, i like the way you write, but it kinda confuses me sometimes.Take Soma’s origin as an example, has a beginning, middle and end, at least until she becomes an adventurer, it was an excellent history, sad indeed, but i liked it, i could understand more about Soma’s character and personality. And other thing, please focus a little more in Rien Tokuzaki, i understood she was crazy about Soma and a very possessive person, but it was too subtle for me, as i didn’t see any attitude that could justify this, it was just told to us, not shown. So, i thing it’d help us understand Soma even more if you fleshed out Rien’s character more, since her possessive personality was inherited by Soma(and honestly i’d love to read a Rien’s POV, her all possessive and crazy about Soma, it’d be awesome).
Now, about volume 2, especially about Lestia’s origin(it was so frustrating to me that i had to leave a comment, sorry about the harsh words though). So, reading her origin i sensed where you wanted to go, but don’t think that it’s enough, i wished you’d wrote more about that because honestly it felt incomplete to me, that more needed to happen until Lestia turned into who she is. I don’t know if you’d come back to that later in the history, but it was very frustating not to know her whole origin in her origin chapters!
Actually, Lestia’s origin is kind too big to be in interspersed chapters, if you added an volume 1.5 explaining her origin with more details it’d be simply perfect, she deserves it.
So, also don’t know if you’d add this to the history later(please earlier), a chapter about White’s past, when his life still was happy, because it’d add an excellent contrast with the him later in the history.
Really like this history, please don’t abandon it Sin, i’m cheering for you and hope this history will be even more awesome.
also please post the NSFW chaps more often