Liminal Radiance: Path Of Old Dreams
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“Bring your brother back alive.”
With these words, her family had sentenced their unwanted daughter to death. Frail and broken in more ways than one, she was ill-prepared to face the post-apocalyptic nightmares of the fallen capital.
Yet legends are forged on the anvil of adversity. When the last heroes are dead and the powerful dance in madness, a chance encounter with an old friend set this tormented girl on a path to change destiny. Now the weak must become the strong as wit prevails. But sanity is a scarce commodity when the skies are ruled by a false star and primal entities awaken from slumber.
[This is an action-horror story set in a gothic scenario. It includes some Yuri-Romance elements in a grimdark setting.]
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If all works were as well written on RR as this one, I would be a happy reader. It is a polished writting exhibiting great deal of effort and talent.
Story: very interesting story with great world building. Monsters are brilliantly done and feel original to me.
Style: it's a bit slower paced than what I would like it to be. I would have liked more action / events happening as opposed to introspection. It gets bogged down in some spots.
Grammar: missing commas, some sentences are a little awkward. Nothing I'd would worry about too much.
Character: The characters are well fleshed out, if not too much. Is that possible?
Style: This is the only concern I have. There is much more telling than I prefer. It can make the read seem slow at times, but more importantly, at some points the characters feelings and emotion are specifically stated. Personally I prefer to be able to draw my conclusions from their words and actions, but with Tharia I can see in particular how it is necessary since her words often belie her thoughts. That being said, I do really enjoy the actual pacing of the events, the dialogue is smooth and the characters have personalities.
Story: The story is a slow build, and it's a build in both the relationship between Tharia and Annabelle and their quest. This works. I love the monsters, they are creative and well thought out. They were kind of my favorite part, they seem to shape the environment and allow for the characters to have a backdrop upon which their story can be played without overshadowing. The quest itself is vague enough to be interesting while not being so vague as to be confusing.
Grammar: I'm never quite sure what to say here, I'm not an expert, I'm not a copywriter. Nothing I read threw me or confused me, and that's all I'd ask is that the grammar doesn't break the flow.
Character: This is where the book shines, and the difficulty that I am imposing in the style section is not lost on me. These are excellent characters, they are written in such a way as to be whole and multifaceted. Particularly Tharia, I love the way she is broken and I actually quite enjoy her introspection, if not always her relentless dialogue. Quirks like that make characters, but what really makes her special is the way she is damaged emotionally. I've known people in real life who had lived through abusive relationships, and the stiff upper lip exterior is spot on. My concern in style about there being too much introspection is sort of contradictory, but it is a fine balance. If the author can find more ways to show rather than tell, that would be fantastic, but as is, it is still very good.
Overall: I would say this is a very good read, if for no other reason than the characters, and there are many other good reasons. The monsters stand out to me as well, the descriptions and the sheer horror of some of them makes for a fine blend of darkness and action.
Very well written, much better dialogue, character development than most on this site. Very impressive. It is easy to visualize the combat, and we see hints of the backstory as we progress. The slow burn romance and issues both characters struggle with are brilliant, it is nice to see characters with a mixed set of feelings. The action gives you a very Dark Souls like vibe, so does the setting. You can see the inspiration, but this is its own story and very well done.
As the title of this review goes. This story is basically all those elements pulled together. First, the blurb is weak af, read the first chapter instead. Second, this is very wild and out there, sometimes confusing, sometimes nonsensical and that is okay. And unlike those traditional lovecraft stories that were more horror and mystery, this one also manages to add in action, relationships, and tension to almost every chapter. Let me just say that despite sometimes not understanding the story, the sum of its parts was definitely worth the read.
TLDR: Read this story at least for 2-5 chapters.
In a few words: This follows two girls in their quest across a city struck by an apocalyptic catastrophe. The characters are well fleshed out and the scenes vividly described, making this an immersive and enjoyable story.
This is one of the most well written and well crafted stories on RR. I enjoyed every chapter. I wish more people read this story. I understand it doesn't have the largest target audience, especially on RR, but it is so good.
Story: A unique premise with amazing, albeit sometimes vague, worldbuilding. The story hinges on a lot of events that happened in the past, but not all of them are completely explained, which is ok, but can be slightly confusing. The various monsters and enemies are also top notch.
Style: I don't know what to put here other than I had no issues while reading it. I think the length of the work is perfect, any longer and it might begin to drag on, but at the same time there is no excess content to cut.
Grammar: Nothing that I notices, but I wasn't particularly looking for errors. There may have been the odd missing comma, but nothing egregious or that took away from the reading experience.
Characters: multifaceted and well developed. The broken charcaters match the broken world right now. The actions of both the main characters and the various side characters are believable and fit well with the setting.