Drunk Dungeon

by Mocha

Warning This fiction contains:
  • Gore

This is a story about a man who not only enters the dungeon drunk, but the dungeon indirectly supports this habit. The only question now was what would kill him first, the dungeon or his liver?

Author: This is a story based on a daydream I had after reading some dungeon stories. It's also in first person past tense.

Cover art by Julian the Apostate#7406 on Discord.

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Laevo
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If you drop this, so help me..

I will get you shitfaced and toss you into a dungeon. Story is very well told and a newish take on the genre. Rather than individual dungeons it seems to be one massive labaryth where the gods can mess with mortals. 

Please keep up the good work.

Necamijat
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No nonsense, no tables. Maybe some cheats.

A Dungeon story where the protagonist is not a Dungeon itself or connected to one is a relatively uncharted territory and Vocaloid's storytelling is both riveting and concise enough to push through.

The main character has inherent flaws and a goal to work towards to, and the attention to detail makes it an interesting read.

Adding to that a steady release date of sizeable chapters, and the story is being put together nicely.

There's an odd sense of rooting for the underdog when reading through the story of the main character, and the author plays to the strengths of the genre and the novelties of the story well.

LockYourDoors
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IN THE NAME OF THE LORD DO NOT DROP THIS BOOK

I don't usually drop reviews, and actually have only done so for 1 or 2 other fictions, but damn, I feel this needs encouragement just in case it ends. I've seen too many good fictions fizzle out, and by Odin this one shall not be one.

The story is amazing, not overly complicated, and probably will not. This review is as of Chapter 20, in the fiction's early stages. The trope of dungeons and adventurers is sorely overused, but the premise to this story is wonderful and a real breath of fresh air. It's not some OP character (which we're all a little tired of at this point TBH) or some high-horse moral-conflict edgy-teen romance-harem story. It's about one guy, trying hard to survive with ocnstant alcohol poisoning, with the only cure being doing something equally dangerous, and drinking even more alcohol than he would otherwise.

The writing style is great. The character isn't some newbie, innocent character that people love to start stories out with, but is a cynical pragmatist street rat,. It's amazing how easy it is to sympathize and relate to him. Emotional conveyance is really smooth, and the kind of underdog character doesn't randomly transform into a force for good and become a bastion of hope for all that is holy. He's just a regular dude. The character really lends itself to the style of writing, and the first-person POV gives a really in-depth view of the character dynamic and overall experience.

HIGHLY RECOMMEND READING. VOCALOID, IF YOU'RE READING THIS, PLEASE DON'T DROP IT I BEG YOU.

Jaksterzoo
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Quality writing, a must read.

Quality reading.

I usually don't even rate much less decide to give a bais review, but I had to review this one.

Style Score: 5/5 

I personally read to read a type of story, to imagine the place where the MC is at, and to imagine the scence. This story (for me) was perfect because it didn't forget to describe where the MC was. Don't want to spoil and I won't, but it felt that no matter where he was I knew he was there and the mood of the setting. Personally I loved that part the most because it never seemed to stray from the topic at hand. 

Story Score: 4.5/5

Now, this one is slightly bais. I took .5 off because it was a dungeon story, and because he had parent problems (technequelly?) so I wasn't really sure if I should of. Why?

It is because the MC is (FOR ONCE) a grown man! (Would you look at that!) He also loves to drink, which usually isn't seen often, and the 'dungeon' is technequelly not separate ones like usual. (that we are told at least). Can't go much further without spoiling, but the story itself is unqiue and pretty easy to fall in love with. Still not sure if I should give it a five or not.

Character Score: 5/5

This isn't really even debatable for me, if you read the story you would see my point. 

For negatives- He survives all his encounters. (There is a reason why he does though, besides the 'he needs to live for a story' deal.)

I am not going to eleborate (which I would reuse points from the story score) but the character is unique, loving, has a bais for himself, and feels like an actual human being that wants to do good but can have a backbone. There is also a little mystery in the book that is left unsaid, creating a type of suspense or letting the reader think for themselves. Few negatives I can give if any.

Grammar Score- 5/5

This I am usually leineit on. If I can't find any basic errors or weird sentences, than in my book it is a five. I didn't see any basic if advance errors, (although I wasn't looking for them intentionally) so this is a five. I also like the diction in The Drunk Dungeon as well, more fun to read for me. 

Overall, I loved the novel so I might be a bit bais. Personally, I would recommend the book to anyone who likes fantasy and adventure. Really loved this book as a whole, and I hope the author keeps up their great work! 

Definatley worth a 5/5 for review and a book that I would ask others to read. Just overall a good book in my opinion. Feel free to feel otherwise. The author did a terrific job! 

 Side Note:

Now, before ending this review, I would advise the 'quick readers' who want updates every day/week to wait to read on this piece of fiction. I perfer quality over anything, so I'm not bothered but I know some people just hate slow releases and feel like their cheated or should be given chapters because they are reading the novel. The author can do what they want because guess what?

The author is also a person and probably has a separate life that they attend to, so they don't owe anything unless the pledge it. There has been some slow releases as of today (11/15/2018) so don't expect fast releases (As I have seen.) Personally I hope the author just keeps up their quality writing/typing!