The Law of Averages

by mcswazey

Original ONGOING Adventure Comedy Fantasy Sci-fi
Warning This fiction contains:
  • Profanity

What young boy doesn't crave adventure? What young man doesn't wish to be a superhero?

But time marches on, and life grows dull with responsibility. Is it any wonder that old dreams are forgotten?

Welcome to The Law of Averages: In which a man is dragged solidly out of his comfort zone. Be careful what you wish for, you never know when it will come true.

This story follows Daniel Newman as he adjusts to a strange new world. One where superpowers are for sale, where heroics are frowned upon, and where life is constantly defying Daniel's expectations. Dan always thought that he was destined to be normal, but one world's normal is another world's special.

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obran
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Joe Average gets superpowers

As of chapter 14 there hasn’t been a lot of action.  This is on purpose, in the world the author has created, while extra human modifications are popular, downright superhuman powers are considered gauche are restricted by the government.  Action involves villains and society wants none of that.

Enter Daniel, a man who has lucked into having a full blown teleportation skills, not just the common line of sight.  Daniel dreams of being a superhero but this world no longer wants superheroes.

It is a fun story so far.  More character building and world building than action scene after action scene.  And while it does show a sign if picking up, I have to admit I like the quiet pace of self-improvement and introspection so far.

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Parallel universe, perpendicular character

Review as of CH.16:

The author leads in with a well written hook, pulling the reader into a fleshed out world. They are versed in the use of proper spelling, grammar, and literary devices. The story lacks the feel of a professionally edited serial, but does maintain a high standard grammatically. The author obviously proofreads their work for any obvious mistakes, and it shows.

The style of the story is intentionally bland and boring to start off. The author does a great job of conveying apathy via tone rather than exposition. As of chapter 16 the story is starting to pick up slightly. Daniel starts to slowly morph away from his initial average, developing nice things like opinions and a spine. That said, Daniel does come off the starting line as a truly two-dimensional character. Forget redeeming attributes or interesting quirks. Expect a total lack of substance from the main character for around the first hundred pages. Despite the negative connotations this has, in context it comes across as intentional and leaves the door wide open for plot-shaking levels of character development moving forward.

The story is enjoyable to read, despite the long windup towards primary character development. Secondary characters have depth, motive, and interesting quirks; frequently moreso than Daniel. Despite the advent of superpowers being a slight Deus Ex Author with the appropriation of "Cosmic Radiation" as a cause, the worldbuilding forms a solid backbone to an already enjoyable story.

Overall, I enjoy what has been written so far. Points off in story and character due to the issues mentioned above; however, that may change in the future depending on the direction the author develops.

I look forward to seeing more of mcswazey's great writing.

 

 

Gur_Qentba
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I really want to know what happens next

(As of ch 16) You should definately read this.

uictoriam4
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A nonstandard superhero fiction with great writing...

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So few stories grab me as quickly as this one. Easy recommendation to any who love super hero stories with a great sense of humor and an entertaining world. The interactions between all that characters are funny and always leaves me smiling. Jeep it up