The Law of Averages

by mcswazey

Original ONGOING Adventure Comedy Fantasy Sci-fi
Warning This fiction contains:
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What young boy doesn't crave adventure? What young man doesn't wish to be a superhero?

But time marches on, and life grows dull with responsibility. Is it any wonder that old dreams are forgotten?

Welcome to The Law of Averages: In which a man is dragged solidly out of his comfort zone. Be careful what you wish for, you never know when it will come true.

This story follows Daniel Newman as he adjusts to a strange new world. One where superpowers are for sale, where heroics are frowned upon, and where life is constantly defying Daniel's expectations. Dan always thought that he was destined to be normal, but one world's normal is another world's special.

 

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obran
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Joe Average gets superpowers

As of chapter 14 there hasn’t been a lot of action.  This is on purpose, in the world the author has created, while extra human modifications are popular, downright superhuman powers are considered gauche are restricted by the government.  Action involves villains and society wants none of that.

Enter Daniel, a man who has lucked into having a full blown teleportation skills, not just the common line of sight.  Daniel dreams of being a superhero but this world no longer wants superheroes.

It is a fun story so far.  More character building and world building than action scene after action scene.  And while it does show a sign if picking up, I have to admit I like the quiet pace of self-improvement and introspection so far.

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Parallel universe, perpendicular character

Review as of CH.16:

The author leads in with a well written hook, pulling the reader into a fleshed out world. They are versed in the use of proper spelling, grammar, and literary devices. The story lacks the feel of a professionally edited serial, but does maintain a high standard grammatically. The author obviously proofreads their work for any obvious mistakes, and it shows.

The style of the story is intentionally bland and boring to start off. The author does a great job of conveying apathy via tone rather than exposition. As of chapter 16 the story is starting to pick up slightly. Daniel starts to slowly morph away from his initial average, developing nice things like opinions and a spine. That said, Daniel does come off the starting line as a truly two-dimensional character. Forget redeeming attributes or interesting quirks. Expect a total lack of substance from the main character for around the first hundred pages. Despite the negative connotations this has, in context it comes across as intentional and leaves the door wide open for plot-shaking levels of character development moving forward.

The story is enjoyable to read, despite the long windup towards primary character development. Secondary characters have depth, motive, and interesting quirks; frequently moreso than Daniel. Despite the advent of superpowers being a slight Deus Ex Author with the appropriation of "Cosmic Radiation" as a cause, the worldbuilding forms a solid backbone to an already enjoyable story.

Overall, I enjoy what has been written so far. Points off in story and character due to the issues mentioned above; however, that may change in the future depending on the direction the author develops.

I look forward to seeing more of mcswazey's great writing.

 

 

themell
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I'm currently on chapter 24.

The biggest issue I have with Daniel is that he doesn't explore his power. He doesn't try to come up with new ways or plan ideas around his powers. He doesn't see if he can try to make his power stronger. He doesn't think about what his strengths or his weaknesses are. The scientist had to force Daniel to experiment on what his power's limitations and Daniel complained the entire time. It feels like he's just waiting for other people to do things for him. I don't understand why he's trying to train his body (besides being a plot device to meet an obviously attractive woman to serve as his love interest).

It's possible that Daniel is written this way to show his character growth, but it's still really annoying to read. The writing is good, and it has potential.

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It isn’t a usual story about super powered human beings as a result of uncontrolled radiation. Author has taken a realistic approach to it rather than that of an angsty or naive teen’s wish-fulfilment fantasy. Characters are fleshed-out, and the world background is not only unique but also stable if held to scrutiny. It is written well, and as all good stories do to a reader, this one will also make you thirst for more chapters. MOAR PLEASE!

Kikanolo
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Fun Story with Likable MC

This is an enjoyable story with a likable main character. It has a very interesting and well-executed take on a superhero world/powers.

The writing style is easy to follow, there are no major grammar issues, and the side/supporting characters are fun to read as well. 

My only concern is that recently releases dropped from twice a week to once a week, and since chapters aren't that long, this might slow down the story. 

I would strongly recommend this story, since it is well-written and has a lot of potential

 

(as of Chapter 68)

Gur_Qentba
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I really want to know what happens next

(As of ch 16) You should definately read this.

uictoriam4
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A nonstandard superhero fiction with great writing...

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So few stories grab me as quickly as this one. Easy recommendation to any who love super hero stories with a great sense of humor and an entertaining world. The interactions between all that characters are funny and always leaves me smiling. Jeep it up

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Solid Writing Worth a read

The author proves themselves to be one of the better writers on royal road.  The dialog and scene description is on point.  The plot/tone of the novel is a little all over the place, but that is easily forgiven, in light of the things which are done well.  It is a fun, mostly light-hearted rambling slice of life adventure in a semi dystopian sci fi parallel world with super powers.  Easily 5/5 for RoyalRoad.  The author clearly has the chops to go beyond amateur fiction.

Arin Vale
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Takes time to get into

Style: The writing style is easy to read and understand, not fancy but with decent phrasing. In short, it neither stands out nor detracts from reading.

Story: This pacing is slow, not buts about it. The extended prologue lasts for at least 10 chapters, I’d say even longer before any real action occurs in the new dimension. Also, some conversations last a long time, taking up a full or even beyond a chapter. But similarly, long trains of narration without dialogue or even action aslo occur. So some balancing is needed to make the progression more dynamic. The alternate world/dimension is interesting, but it feels lacking in parts. For instance, even though the worlds are said to be alike, it oddly feels like all the people know of Dan’s Earth far too well. Although I’m not so keen on the modern day superhero kind of story even though this has some sci-fi elements thrown in, the idea isn’t too common. But the idea of becoming that superhero rather than living an ordinary life is all too clear and expected.

Grammar: Pretty good. I can see the author makes an effort to polish his work.

Character: Dan is the complete opposite of OP MC as it gets. Countless times the reader is reminded of how plain, boring and lazy of a man he is without ambition. This makes it feel very staged in and of itself as well as the actions he take which are sometimes opposite of it or simply deviates from this crafted image. To me, he comes across as actually somewhat childish in his reactions. He gets easily annoyed, bored, frightened, and pleased, literally like a child including the lollipop he took. He has spurts of wanting to be more than average, to be a hero. But in his first attempt, he throws up and knocks himself out and somehow knocks out the armed offender too. At the very least, this attempt is realistic in terms of the narrative we are told of him. But it doesn’t make it any less inconsistent in how his character is being described. It all feels very staged. Now in a sense this ‘plain’ character makes for good character development, but rather than development, this is more formation of one as Dan never really had a sound character and understood personality in the first place. The story attempts to delve into his mind and past a little, but to little success or significant content gained. Most of the time it’s the rehash of average life, kinda want to be more than average now because I have powers.

Overall: The ideas aren’t bad, but unfortunately the characters aren’t gripping and act in staged ways. The events and characters actions as well are expected and therefore lacks excitement. There’s some humor, but it often feels stale or not taken complete use of its potential. This story DOES get better as one goes along. But it’s quite painfully slow when it doesn’t have to be even while keeping the idea of step by step narration and plain to hero character development. In short, I’d like to continue, but if a story after 20 chapters still moves in this slow manner without anything to really to thrill (suspense, thought provoking, surprise), then I’d rather not spend all the time getting to when the story really begins. This happens to be one of them where the subpar execution unfortunately detracts from the greater potential of the story.