Immortal Mage - or - How a Reincarnated Immortal Became an OP Mage and Conquered a LitRPG/GameLit World

by edwardcastle

Original ONGOING Action Adventure Fantasy LitRPG Magic Male Lead Martial Arts Reincarnation Secret Identity Strategy Strong Lead Wuxia

Formerly an Origin Immortal, Aaron Ironblood went to a foreign universe, conquered a world in it, and went for the next challenge.

Now reborn in a place where magic reigns supreme, he must once again rise to the peak to save first the world and then, the universe itself.

Follow Aaron as he employs eons of experience to master magic, crush all opposition, and conquer all in his path.


OP MC is OP
- The main character has some morals
- Wuxia/Xianxia elements (including flashy martial arts later in the story)
- LitRPG/GameLit world with game-like windows and game-like skills (e.g. Check Level skill)


This fiction will never be removed from Royal Road.
Even if I decide to sell it as a book or something, all chapters shall remain available here for free, and keep being released until the story is complete.
Pauses might happen if needed, but I will finish the story.


Current release schedule: 1 chapter every Saturday.

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Psiioniic
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Immortal Mage, Fatal Naivety

Review as of CH. 17

Despite the title, story avoids most cliche traps and starts off on the right foot. The tone is rather forced initially; however, it settles in well and is rather enjoyable to read. The caveat to that description is the worldview and personality exhibited by Aaron, the protagonist.

Aaron is a self described immortal, survivor of countless battles and manipulator of cosmic energies. Despite his supposedly advanced worldview, he falls for simple tricks and is rather out of touch with reality. The author has no trouble connecting the different parts of a complex world yet seems to run into a roadblock when incorporating that 'bird's eye view' mentality.

The author WANTS you to see Aaron as the reincarnation of someone who fought his way to the top of the totem pole in Earth's universe while surviving trials, tribulations, plots, and infinite tides of cosmic lemmings. While reading the story; though, the reader feels that he errs more towards the Mad Scientist archetype than the battle hardened immortal (Compare Ben, "The Immortal Scientist" with Dirge, "Devourer of Destiny").

Lastly, his reactions are all over the place. It feels as though the author has a personality in mind for the character but keeps superimposing their own personal morality over the top. Aaron is constantly hitting extremes in multiple directions when responding to situations. He brushes off the scheming of his teacher as 'for the family', then barely a sentence later vows revenge against that same teacher because his father was involved. This takes place despite seeing little emotional interaction between him and his family beyond the sacrifices they make to help Aaron gain power early on.

The grammar and spelling is of a fairly high quality, despite the lack of proper editing. The style and execution of the story is well thought out and includes interludes from other points of view throughout. The story is currently being held back by the lack of secondary character development and the lack of proper short term goalsetting for the protagonist.

Despite these flaws, the story reads well. The concept is well thought out with complex worldbuilding and plenty of room for development in the future.

I look forward to it.

DaruneAlbane
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Very good setup nice to have an OP MC where they still need to work hard and with the setup you can keep on "reseting" the story

cheeto97
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Interesting start that isn't common in most reincarnation stories. The author goes into just the right amount of detail to explain the magic and leveling system without simply saying 'because magic' or wow that's too much detail. The explanations were thoughtful and made a scientific sort of sense.

This is more a gamelit story as the leveling and skills are minimal but that makes sense for the character and how the world is set up. Don't expect large status windows with a lengthy list of characteristics and points. However there is a status window with basic attributes.

Pietje1324
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I actually liked this story up to 29/9/2018 chapter 18, when chapter 19 came out the author changed multiple plotpoints with it. This made the story, that up until then had the MC come off as somewhat more human because even our almighty MC could get blindsided, seemingly turn into the standard know it all that is in control of every situation when he doesn't seem to have the right to.

Hence my 1 star review, maybe a bit low. But the potential entertainment loss make me kind of bitter about it.

Thanatos010
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I read the first version and I thought it was fine, the characters are not bad and if the mc was fairly focused on research i could see how some stuff slipped past him, so far the new version seems about the same, but with slightly better decisions. I like your book and hope you continue the good work. This book has an interesting and fairly well thought out cast of characters and an intriguing story, the endgoal and how he gets there seems very interesting to me. I have not noticed any major flaws in the grammar, but its been a while since I read most of the book, and there was a rewrite. The style is not bad, but I didn't find it particularly unique. Overall a pretty good story.

Sky3Fall
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I really like the concept and direction you're going in. The backstory you wrote leaves a lot of wriggle room, which is a really good thing in a story. I can't really say much more due to there only being the prolouge and two chapters, but keep it up :D.

jpat1988
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Story has a ton of things that are expected and quite a few that are not. I really loved the first chapter as it started with him being this super badass who was an even bigger badass before. So it fully explains his OPness. Wanting more.

Roxt
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While looking for more to read this cought my eye, I expected to grow to hate the protagonist fairly quickly... so far, not yet. ;)

dougs
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enjoying the story - just read the first 25 chapters !  Thanks for posting