Out of Space

Out of Space

by neo Koh

Warning This fiction contains:
  • Gore
  • Profanity

The crew of the Training Ship UNS Singapore escaped from an alien fleet, finds themselves stranded on an unknown planet and has to survive against deadly monsters and magical creatures.

Genre  
Sci-Fic, Fantasy, Magic, Kingdom Building,
 Army Building, Technology gap, War, Grand Strategy

Book 1 Chap 001 - 200 
Book 2 Chap 201 - 400 
Book 3 Chap 401 - 600 
Book 4 Chap 601 - Ongoing

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Updated the previous chapters for spelling and grammar mistakes.

Updated with a MAP !

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Map of the New World

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Audio Narration by Agro Squerrils on Youtube!

https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=TvM0lAnxdGo

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Please support if you enjoyed my story! =)
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Table of Contents
Chapter Name Release Date
1 - Journey ago
2 - Contact ago
3 - Engaged ago
4 - Boarded ago
5 - Overwhelmed ago
6 - The Jump ago
7 - Disaster ago
8 - Lost ago
9 - Crash Landing ago
10 - Planet Fall ago
11 - Blake's World ago
12 - Strange New World ago
13 - Numbers ago
14 - Numbers Part 2 ago
15 - Giant Wolf ago
16 - Giant Wolves ago
17 - Manastone ago
18 - Needs ago
19 - Ruins ago
20 - Dungeoneering ago
21 - Trapped ago
22 - Boss ago
23 - MvP ago
24 - Loot ago
25 - Aftermath ago
26 - Ideas ago
27 - Ethics ago
28 - Stalker ago
29 - All along the Watchtower ago
30 - Clash of Giants ago
31 - Wheels ago
32 - The Empire ago
33 - Fugitives ago
34 - Help ago
35 - Mighty Magic ago
36 - Elves ago
37 - Disaster Relief ago
38 - The Hoomans ago
39 - Castle of Iron ago
40 - Sugar and Spice and Everything's a Lie! ago
41 - Kingdom of Goldrose ago
42 - Dragonslayer ago
43 - Are you...? ago
44 - A moment of Peace ago
45 - Battle of Sawtooth Pass ago
46 - Enemy at the Gates ago
47 - Alliance ago
48 - Counterstrike ago
49 - Infiltration ago
50 - Knights ago
51 - Tech vs Magic ago
52 - Recovery ago
53 - A time to Grief ago
54 - Goblins ago
55 - Pirates of the Goblin Sea ago
56 - Magic 101 ago
57 - New World ago
58 - The Untamed Lands ago
59 - Survivor ago
60 - Return ago
61 - Green City ago
62 - Interrogation ago
63 - Dissent ago
64 - Guns ago
65 - Camp Alpha ago
66 - Recruits ago
67 - Boot Camp ago
68 - Bored ago
69 - After Action Review ago
70 - Promotions ago
71 - The Crucible ago
72 - Escape ago
73 - The Hunt ago
74 - When shit falls, it comes in buckets... ago
75 - Distractions ago
76 - Eye of the Storm ago
77 - War Drums ago
78 - Rematch of the Pass ago
79 - The Ritual ago
80 - Zombie Mode ago
81 - Night of the Living Dead ago
82 - War Plans ago
83 - What's Next? ago
84 - Arcane Tactics and Intervention ago
85 - Claymore One ago
86 - To Kill a Necromancer ago
87 - Angry Orcs ago
88 - Objective Beta ago
89 - Ride of the Valkyries ago
90 - Earth Magic ago
91 - Anti Dragon Warfare ago
92 - All Out Attack ago
93 - The Witch ago
94 - 26th Imperial Dragon Corps ago
95 - Rout ago
96 - POWs ago
97 - Post Victory ago
98 - Recruitment ago
99 - Dragonite Crystal ago
100 - Mines of Sea Cliff ago
101 - Dungeon ago
102 - Peace through Superior Firepower ago
103 - Golems ago
104 - Looking for Group ago
105 - Dungeon Level 1 ago
106 - Waste Not, Want Not ago
107 - Clear! ago
108 - Boss Fight ago
109 - Rest and Recuperation ago
110 - Operation Dagger ago
111 - Talent ago
112 - Guns, Mushrooms and Explosions, Oh My! ago
113 - Falledge ago
114 - A Business Deal ago
115 - Officer Cadet School ago
116 - First Aerial Prototype ago
117 - Gunpowder ago
118 - Sweet Dreams (Are Made Of This) ago
119 - Level 2 ago
120 - The Fog ago
121 - Bazooka ago
122 - The Return of the Goblins ago
123 - Goblin Fleet ago
124 - The Goblin Beach Landings ago
125 - Unto the Breach ago
126 - Author's HP 46.7% ago
127 - Picking up the Pieces ago
128 - Freed ago
129 - Green Troubles ago
130 - It Ain't Easy Being Green ago
131 - The Council of Masters ago
132 - Magic Appraisal ago
133 - The Appearance of a Hero!? ago
134 - Supplies ago
135 - Stressed Out ago
136 - Operation Chaperone ago
137 - The seeds of a Nation ago
138 - Troubles ago
139 - The Evil Within ago
140 - See no Evil ago
141 - Hear No Evil ago
142 - Speak No Evil ago
143 - Tears of the Sun ago
144 - Sum of All Fears ago
145 - Rearguard ago
146 - Yo Mama... ago
147 - The Cavalry has Arrived! ago
148 - Eye of the Sun ago
149 - The Long Walk Home ago
150 - Chocolate ago
151 - Far Harbor ago
152 - Wings of War ago
153 - Rendezvous Point Yellow ago
154 - Dog Fight ago
155 - First Air to Air Dragon Combat ago
156 - I FOUND YOU~! ago
157 - Cobra Down ago
158 - How to kill a Hero ago
159 - Dante's Inferno ago
160 - End of a Hero ago
161 - Regrets ago
162 - Sunblock ago
163 - Holidays and Festivals ago
164 - Friends from Afar ago
165 - Trade Talks ago
166 - Story Telling ago
167 - The Things We Do for the Greater Good... ago
168 - Awakenings ago
169 - I Spy with my Eye ago
170 - History and Wrecks ago
171 - Lost ago
172 - Chains of Command ago
173 - Meetings ago
174 - Getting Out ago
175 - We All Float ago
176 - Deja Vu ago
177 - Decisions, Decisions... ago
178 - Doctor Strange ago
179 - Welcome To The (Concrete) Jungle ago
180 - My Soul! ago
181 - Home ago
182 - Running and Choices ago
183 - More Running and Choices ago
184 - Gods and Burgers ago
185 - Gone Rogue ago
186 - Wolf Whisperer ago
187 - Summer Festival ago
188 - A Wild Red Dragon Has Appeared! ago
189 - Dragon to Dragon Talk ago
190 - Misunderstanding Dragons ago
191 - Here We Go Again ~ ago
192 - Chief of Naval Operations ago
193 - Project Ironclad ago
194 - A Good Place to Live and Die ago
195 - UNS Floatin' Wreck ago
196 - Your Navy ago
197 - Good Intentions ago
198 - Vacation ago
199 - Shock and Awe ago
200 - Beginning of a New Era ago
201 - Invasion ago
202 - Flames of War ago
203 - Dawn of War ago
204 - Siege ago
205 - From Within ago
206 - Breakthrough ago
207 - The Retreat ago
208 - The Cabal ago
209 - The City of Slaves ago
210 - Running the Gauntlet ago
211 - Battle of Reachfields ago
212 - Pyramid Scheme ago
213 - Shocking Changes ago
214 - Jealousy?! ago
215 - My Stance ago
216 - Burger Shock ago
217 - Gossips and Threats ago
218 - Proposal ago
219 - Friend or Foe ago
220 - Terror of the Deep ago
221 - I Got Bigger Guns ago
222 - The Great Krarga ago
223 - Friendly Giants ago
224 - Monster Briefings ago
225 - Year One + 4 months ago
226 - Dead Frontier ago
227 - The Gathering ago
228 - Questioning Plans ago
229 - Operation Freedom ago
230 - Modern Warfare ago
231 - You funny guy! ago
232 - Slaves ago
233 - Barbarians ago
234 - Custom Seizure ago
235 - Extreme Prejudice ago
236 - Welcome to the Sandbox! ago
237 - Intranet Trolls ago
238 - South ago
239 - Stories ago
240 - Serpent ago
241 - Ambush ago
242 - Opportunity ago
243 - A Brewing Storm ago
244 - Demons ago
245 - Pay Back Your Dues ago
246 - The Devil is in the Details ago
247 - Mechanisms of Chaos ago
248 - Of Spycraft and Aliens ago
249 - Preparations ago
250 - Running Man ago
251 - My Mech is Fight! ago
252 - Air Raids ago
253 - Kill Team ago
254 - Article 75 ago
255 - Bag of Infinite Ammo ago
256 - The Great Devourer ago
257 - Calamity ago
258 - A Gathering Storm ago
259 - The Day is My Enemy ago
260 - Touch Me Not ago
261 - Unit Zero Two ago
262 - Yippie Kai Yay! ago
263 - Die Hard ago
264 - Die Harder ago
265 - With A Vengeance ago
266 - Live Free ago
267 - It is A Good Day to Die ago
268 - The Snake, the Empire, and the Hoomans ago
269 - World Events ago
270 - Dragon Down ago
271 - Be a Man! Do the Right Thing! ago
272 - Airborne Marines! ago
273 - You Don't Mess with the UN! ago
274 - Disturbance in the Force! ago
275 - Three Way War ago
276 - High Value Target ago
277 - The Trap ago
278 - Operation Pied Piper ago
279 - I Like to Order One Umagi Set! ago
280 - Words ago
281 - Feelings ago
282 - Unexpected Encounter ago
283 - New Things ago
284 - Long Term Plans ago
285 - Be My Guest ago
286 - Negotiations ago
287 - True Lies ago
288 - Party Time ago
289 - Mansion of Madness ago
290 - Double The Fun, Double the Ransom! ago
291 - Families ago
292 - No Rest For the Wicked ago
293 - The City of Sins ago
294 - An Invitation ago
295 - Eaters of Kin ago
296 - The Night Is Still Young ago
297 - Airdrop supplies ago
298 - Stand Off ago
299 - Parley ago
300 - Stand To ago
301 - Breaking Point ago
302 - Broken and Running ago
303 - Home Run ago
304 - Battle of Shard River ago
305 - We Kill and Eat Babies! ago
306 - Coming Home ago
307 - Dragon's Breath ago
308 - Terminator ago
309 - Bronze VS Lead ago
310 - Operation Firestorm ago
311 - Chasing the Scorpion ago
312 - Intelligence ago
313 - Sorting Out The Pieces ago
314 - Lend A Hand? ago
315 - Tick Tock ago
316 - Autopsy ago
317 - Why Can't We Be Friends? ago
318 - The Mission ago
319 - Desires ago
320 - Sins and Depravity ago
321 - The Jewel of the South ago
322 - House of Cards ago
323 - Tea Party ago
324 - Stalker ago
325 - Repercussions ago
326 - Cloak And Dagger ago
327 - Stalking the Stalker ago
328 - Questions and Answers ago
329 - Go Dark ago
330 - Into the Darkness ago
331 - Shaking the City ago
332 - Enemies At Your Doorsteps ago
333 - The Purge ago
334 - Retaliation ago
335 - All Bets Are Off! ago
336 - Undercurrents ago
337 - Uprising ago
338 - Working Together ago
339 - Depravity and Destruction ago
340 - Operation Gothic Savior ago
341 - Griffin Down ago
342 - The Thin Red Line ago
343 - Sacrifices ago
344 - Rage ago
345 - The Last Stand ago
346 - Iron Might ago
347 - Escape From Norshelm ago
348 - Out of Space ago
349 - Rocket Symphony ago
350 - City on Flames ago
351 - Tomorrow Never Dies ago
352 - Die Another Day ago
353 - No Time to Die ago
354 - Stealing a Town ago
355 - Chicken Power! ago
356 - City of Haven ago
357 - State of the Game ago
358 - Dignity ago
359 - Upgrades ago
360 - The Wedding ago
361 - We Need Money ago
362 - Word of Mouth ago
363 - Year Two ago
364 - Winter Plans ago
365 - March of an Empire ago
366 - Dance Steps of War ago
367 - Need Prisoners! ago
368 - It is Inevitable ago
369 - Go Strike! ago
370 - Internal Problems ago
371 - Fish Bait ago
372 - Disciplinary Actions ago
373 - The Self Defense Force ago
374 - Orchestra of Death ago
375 - The Joker ago
376 - Rock and Rumors ago
377 - Danger! High Explosives! ago
378 - Fun and Games ago
379 - One For The History Books ago
380 - Rolling Thunder ago
381 - Unexpected Command ago
382 - Article 99 ago
383 - Downfall ago
384 - So Interesting! ago
385 - Plans Never Goes As Planned ago
386 - Troop Movements ago
387 - Espionage ago
388 - Elementalists ago
389 - Operation Overlord ago
390 - Sucker Punch ago
391 - Urban Warfare ago
392 - Door Knockers ago
393 - Trapped? ago
394 - The Emperor's Own ago
395 - The Hunger ago
396 - The Eternal Emperor ago
397 - The Power of Exploding Stuff ago
398 - Number One Gun ago
399 - Is It Over? ago
400 - Rise of A Nation ago
401 - A Coming Storm ago
402 - First City of The Fleet ago
403 - The Alliance ago
404 - Marine Expeditionary Force ago
405 - Port Sanctuary ago
406 - How Nice of You! ago
407 - Food Concerns ago
408 - Surviving the World ago
409 - Land Fall ago
410 - Flying Ships ago
411 - Bastards Must Die! ago
412 - Oh... Shit! ago
413 - Angel Has Fallen ago
414 - Taken ago
415 - The End Zone ago
416 - Confusion ago
417 - We Can't Do Shit! ago
418 - Depression ago
419 - Coming For You ago
420 - Secret Meetings ago
421 - Happy? ago
422 - This is Madness! ago
423 - Hope ago
424 - Commitments ago
425 - Adventurers' Inc. ago
426 - To Heaven and Hell! ago
427 - Tears ago
428 - Mixed Emotions ago
429 - Conflicts of Interests ago
430 - Plans in Motion ago
431 - Foul Motives ago
432 - Getting Out ago
433 - Nominated ago
434 - The Iron Kingdom ago
435 - Glory and Honour ago
436 - A City called Hope ago
437 - Into The Dungeon ago
438 - Two Face ago
439 - Year 4 Winter ago
440 - How It Feels ago
441 - Deaths and Drills ago
442 - Mahou... Shoujo?! ago
443 - Is It Worth It? ago
444 - The Protectorate of Ramuh ago
445 - Funny Business ago
446 - Reunion ago
447 - A Call to Arms ago
448 - Working Together ago
449 - Dungeon Cleared! ago
450 - State of Panic ago
451 - One Big Jump for Gobs! ago
452 - Inside the Storm ago
453 - The Law Of The Strong ago
454 - Conquest Of The New World ago
455 - Hymn For a Battle ago
456 - Double Dragon ago
457 - Hymns for The Judgement ago
458 - Demons in the Heart ago
459 - Awaking the Dragon ago
460 - Mobilization ago
461 - 1st Army Rifle Regiment ago
462 - Nice View ago
463 - A Slice of Pie and Beggars ago
464 - Unicorn Rising ago
465 - The Dragon Lords ago
466 - Battle of Turnstead ago
467 - Care Package ago
468 - The Un An ago
469 - Magicks, the Gathering ago
470 - Awe And Respect ago
471 - Warjacks ago
472 - New World Order ago
473 - Rock and Stone ago
474 - Different Goals ago
475 - Mission Planning ago
476 - Merits ago
477 - Operation No Fly Zone ago
478 - HALO ago
479 - Aggression Fighting ago
480 - Marines Lead the Way! ago
481 - What Went Wrong? ago
482 - Fighting Fit ago
483 - Diversion ago
484 - The Inquisitor General ago
485 - Sky Pirates ago
486 - The Reckoner ago
487 - Artillery Duet ago
488 - Taking Mecca ago
489 - Sneaky Attacks ago
490 - Teamwork and Beer ago
491 - Greed ago
492 - Deals ago
493 - Our Vengeance ago
494 - Alive? ago
495 - Bug Out ago
496 - Mighty Venny ago
497 - We Come With Beer ago
498 - Next Steps ago
499 - Deal Or No Deal ago
500 - Hell Hole ago
501 - Influence ago
502 - Efficiency ago
503 - Unknown Contacts ago
504 - Elf Machine ago
505 - United Nationers ago
506 - Unfolding Events ago
507 - Ploy ago
508 - Toxic Culture ago
509 - Prep Work ago
510 - Scum and Villainy ago
511 - The Master Plan ago
512 - The Sage ago
513 - Strange Times ago
514 - Extreme Reactions ago
515 - Battle Tested ago
516 - Intentions ago
517 - Balloons ago
518 - North Sea Imperial Fleet ago
519 - Freedom! ago
520 - The Magic Converter Array ago
521 - State Visit ago
522 - Plan Alpha ago
523 - The Faith of Superior Firepawer! ago
524 - The Core ago
525 - IT ago
526 - Fast Travel ago
527 - Good or Evil ago
528 - Good Will ago
529 - Bad Luck ago
530 - Future ago
531 - The Auction ago
532 - The Black Dragon Princess ago
533 - Handsome ago
534 - Long Distance Flying ago
535 - No ago
536 - Trust ago
537 - The Stand ago
538 - The Second Wave ago
539 - Out of the Storm ago
540 - Misery ago
541 - Unknown Magic ago
542 - The Unrepentant ago
543 - A Glitch ago
544 - Among Us ago
545 - Anomaly ago
546 - Your Most Explosive Holiness ago
547 - Gluttony ago
548 - Potatoes ago
549 - Refuge ago
550 - Frenemy ago
551 - Cyborgs and Gods ago
552 - Offerings! ago
553 - Playing Games ago
554 - Expansion ago
555 - What The Fuck? ago
556 - For Rock and Stone! ago
557 - For the Isles! ago
558 - Bad Business ago
559 - All The Little Things ago
560 - Under The Water ago
561 - Raid ago
562 - Duty ago
563 - Beach Action ago
564 - Welcome To My House ago
565 - Firepower! ago
566 - Take Over the World ago
567 - Battle of Wind Coast ago
568 - Bim Bam Boom! ago
569 - PAC Man ago
570 - Irony ago
571 - Defeat ago
572 - Making Waves ago
573 - Project Icarus ago
574 - Sea Devils ago
575 - The Business of War ago
576 - Merger ago
577 - New Member ago
578 - Prisoners ago
579 - My Part ago
580 - Anarchy ago
581 - This Is An Order! ago
582 - Invite to Party ago
583 - Travels ago
584 - Unrest ago
585 - Inciter ago
586 - The Mist ago
587 - War Machine ago
588 - Working Hard ago
589 - A Long Boring Trip ago
590 - Rough Seas ago
591 - Leviathan ago
592 - Landfall ago
593 - Banished ago
594 - The Cove ago
595 - A New Home ago
596 - Tales of Myth ago
597 - A New Adventure Awaits ago
598 - No Doubt ago
599 - The Floating Market ago
600 - Allegiance ago
601 - Phoenix Arriving ago
602 - At What Cost ago
603 - The Old Ugly ago
604 - Illegal Actions ago
605 - Murder ago
606 - Where Are You? ago
607 - Worries ago
608 - The Future ago
609 - Foul Deals ago
610 - Stuck ago
611 - Mad ago
612 - Assassination ago
613 - Leaving the City ago
614 - Politics ago
615 - Useless! ago
616 - Excuses ago
617 - The City Of Ashmere ago
618 - Path to the Throne ago
619 - Invading the Iron Kingdom ago
620 - The Seven ago
621 - Iron for Iron ago
622 - The Healer ago
623 - The Grand Library ago
624 - A Match ago
625 - Intel ago
626 - Communications ago
627 - SHTF ago
628 - Coup ago
629 - Simple ago
630 - Escape ago
631 - A Favour ago
632 - Change of Plans ago
633 - The Weight of Leadership ago
634 - Not the Time ago
635 - The Only Clue ago
636 - Falling Back ago
637 - Judgement ago
638 - To Sacrifice ago
639 - Waste ago
640 - Destruction ago
641 - Rescue ago
642 - Observation ago
643 - War of the Old World ago

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TetwingDuck
Overall
Style
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It could be great, but it isn't.

Reviewed at: 424 - Commitments

Author seems to want to appear technically savvy but either has no knowledge base or it gets lost in translation. Would be far better off leaving more things abstracted instead of trying to define them and doing it empirically wrong. 

The characters are myriad and fairly meaningless. They're as fleshed out and important as the victim/perpetrator of a crime drama: good for one episode and then forgotten. Characters also suffer from chronic stupidity. 

The grammar is abysmal: tense is all over the place just within a single sentence, wrong and/or missing words, and incorrect homophones abound. It's readable, but that ruins any possible flow or immersion for me. 

It's damn interesting and all the tags are tantalizing but it just falls so far short and unsatisfying. 

 

Edit: I did continue reading as another review suggested it improved around chapter 40. Indeed. Grammar is still a bit rough in places, but it's better. PoV changes are a lot better as well. Characters still do some pretty dumb crap in the name of drama/conflict but not any worse than Walking Dead or something. 

Axolot
Overall

I like it despite sometimes the hard reading (grammar)

Reviewed at: 200 - Beginning of a New Era

The story is about the survival/growth and finally prosperity of an aliene race in an aliene environment. There's magic, monsters, other races and specially there are some kingdoms that don't take kindly the existence of our protagonist on this new world.

 

Now i don't know if there was some corrections but when im started reading this (some months ago) there was some poor editing/grammar on the first 50-100 chapters, after this part the grammar and editing are more smooth. 

 

 

 

NekoHime
Overall

Solid read, might not be for everyone

Reviewed at: 299 - Parley

I am 300+ chapters deep and obviously everyone who read more than 10 chapters will notice the grammar.
Its not that bad, you do notice them and have to mentally take a sec to correct in in your head but usually you get the gist of the sentence anyways. Its a bit annoying but i think it can be overlooked.
Story is nice, i like it
The only things bothering me is how much the POV gets changed how much info gets thrown at you or how major things just get skipped or accepted way too quickly. Like i dont think we ever got explained how magic mana and all that really works, it just was discovered and used my the troops and things like that happened a lot. I didnt mind as long as it stays interesting.
I am too invested to drop it now really want to see it to the end and how everything will look like in the coming years in that world.

0x0F
Overall
Style
Story
Grammar
Character

The story is a nice blend of sci-fi and fantasy. Some grammatical errors, but nothing that would make the story unreadable. (Most of what I read was a few wrong words in the wrong place, but I really only scan the readings.)

The story has the classic problem of not knowing militay jargon, and some of the charaters are introduced, just to be killed in the next few paragraphs. Wish the author would put something in the pages to let the reader know that the POV is changing, as it can get confusing in some parts.

VexedPotato366
Overall

The story is a good clash of sci-fi with fantasy so of coure we will see some nice battles also this is from someone whos read up to ch 33 and i have to say the story doesnt bore me with made up science or magic crap like most sci-fi novels and its a good read in my opinion.

j03man
Overall

The concept sounds cool but the first chapter is riddled with grammatical errors and info dumps. A horrible first impression that i couldn't push past.

Noissar
Overall

Have to get past the first Arc

Reviewed at: 44 - A moment of Peace

Storey does not really start to hit its stride until ch. 11-12.

I felt it was a joy to read at the 40ish mark.

I have dipped into enough translations and non-native English stories that I barely enven notice grammer, so can not really comment on that...

I will finish by saying that everything that put me off from continued reading after looking at the first few chapters disappeared the further along the storey went as of ch. 1 - 42 and starts into a Sifi becomes fantasy story with good vibe.

Leviathing
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Character

Awful Grammar. Doesn’t care?

I can almost see where the writer is going. The story and premise is interesting and I wish I could care enough to see where it leads and where it improves. 

How can I care about reading something that the author doesn’t care about writing? I can see that it’s still active yet there is no effort at all in cleaning up the abysmal grammar. 

I would like to be able to care about this story and I may in the future if the author decides to do the same. 

loveribbon
Overall
Style
Story
Grammar
Character

Oh god the grammar, the story is amazing, but oh no the grammar, the blend of sci-fi with fantasy elements is superb, but please no the grammar.

With a premise that is rarely executed well, the author hits the mark true with this work. Using amazing detail, and fleshing out this world so that it feels as real as ours.

rcell007
Overall

very good enjoyed the plot and the different characters.