The crew of the Training Ship UNS Singapore escaped from an alien fleet, finds themselves stranded on an unknown planet and has to survive against deadly monsters and magical creatures.
Sci-Fic, Fantasy, Magic, Kingdom Building,
Army Building, Technology gap, War, Grand Strategy
Book 1 Chap 001 - 200
Book 2 Chap 201 - 400
Book 3 Chap 401 - 600
Book 4 Chap 601 - Ongoing
Updated the previous chapters for spelling and grammar mistakes.
Updated with a MAP !
Map of the New World
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Author seems to want to appear technically savvy but either has no knowledge base or it gets lost in translation. Would be far better off leaving more things abstracted instead of trying to define them and doing it empirically wrong.
The characters are myriad and fairly meaningless. They're as fleshed out and important as the victim/perpetrator of a crime drama: good for one episode and then forgotten. Characters also suffer from chronic stupidity.
The grammar is abysmal: tense is all over the place just within a single sentence, wrong and/or missing words, and incorrect homophones abound. It's readable, but that ruins any possible flow or immersion for me.
It's damn interesting and all the tags are tantalizing but it just falls so far short and unsatisfying.
Edit: I did continue reading as another review suggested it improved around chapter 40. Indeed. Grammar is still a bit rough in places, but it's better. PoV changes are a lot better as well. Characters still do some pretty dumb crap in the name of drama/conflict but not any worse than Walking Dead or something.
The story is about the survival/growth and finally prosperity of an aliene race in an aliene environment. There's magic, monsters, other races and specially there are some kingdoms that don't take kindly the existence of our protagonist on this new world.
Now i don't know if there was some corrections but when im started reading this (some months ago) there was some poor editing/grammar on the first 50-100 chapters, after this part the grammar and editing are more smooth.
I am 300+ chapters deep and obviously everyone who read more than 10 chapters will notice the grammar.
Its not that bad, you do notice them and have to mentally take a sec to correct in in your head but usually you get the gist of the sentence anyways. Its a bit annoying but i think it can be overlooked.
Story is nice, i like it
The only things bothering me is how much the POV gets changed how much info gets thrown at you or how major things just get skipped or accepted way too quickly. Like i dont think we ever got explained how magic mana and all that really works, it just was discovered and used my the troops and things like that happened a lot. I didnt mind as long as it stays interesting.
I am too invested to drop it now really want to see it to the end and how everything will look like in the coming years in that world.
The story is a nice blend of sci-fi and fantasy. Some grammatical errors, but nothing that would make the story unreadable. (Most of what I read was a few wrong words in the wrong place, but I really only scan the readings.)
The story has the classic problem of not knowing militay jargon, and some of the charaters are introduced, just to be killed in the next few paragraphs. Wish the author would put something in the pages to let the reader know that the POV is changing, as it can get confusing in some parts.
The story is a good clash of sci-fi with fantasy so of coure we will see some nice battles also this is from someone whos read up to ch 33 and i have to say the story doesnt bore me with made up science or magic crap like most sci-fi novels and its a good read in my opinion.
The concept sounds cool but the first chapter is riddled with grammatical errors and info dumps. A horrible first impression that i couldn't push past.
Storey does not really start to hit its stride until ch. 11-12.
I felt it was a joy to read at the 40ish mark.
I have dipped into enough translations and non-native English stories that I barely enven notice grammer, so can not really comment on that...
I will finish by saying that everything that put me off from continued reading after looking at the first few chapters disappeared the further along the storey went as of ch. 1 - 42 and starts into a Sifi becomes fantasy story with good vibe.
I can almost see where the writer is going. The story and premise is interesting and I wish I could care enough to see where it leads and where it improves.
How can I care about reading something that the author doesn’t care about writing? I can see that it’s still active yet there is no effort at all in cleaning up the abysmal grammar.
I would like to be able to care about this story and I may in the future if the author decides to do the same.
Oh god the grammar, the story is amazing, but oh no the grammar, the blend of sci-fi with fantasy elements is superb, but please no the grammar.
With a premise that is rarely executed well, the author hits the mark true with this work. Using amazing detail, and fleshing out this world so that it feels as real as ours.
very good enjoyed the plot and the different characters.