The crew of the Training Ship UNS Singapore escaped from an alien fleet, finds themselves stranded on an unknown planet and has to survive against deadly monsters and magical creatures.
Sci-Fic, Fantasy, Magic, Kingdom Building,
Army Building, Technology gap, War, Grand Strategy
Book 1 Chap 001 - 200
Book 2 Chap 201 - 400
Book 3 Chap 401 - 600
Book 4 Chap 601 - Ongoing
Updated the previous chapters for spelling and grammar mistakes.
Updated with a MAP !
Map of the New World
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Okay, first off; the story is good. The premise is cool, it's slow-rolled nicely, and the ten or fifteen chapters at the start feels like some real classic Starship Troopers bullshit, which is just great. Read it with the Stellaris soundtrack on in the background. I'm maybe twenty five chapters in, and looking forward to reading more.
But. I suspect english isn't the author's primary language, and it shows a lot. Tenses are a big problem, mostly. Not so much typos, though there are a few of those; it's more just a constant need for a proofreader that makes it a bit too difficult to get through some paragraphs. Afterward, when I think back on what I've read, my mind auto-edits most of it out, and I like the story. But in the moment, actually parsing the language is too challenging to be fun.
I would love to see this get an editing pass. At that point, I'd probably spike my review up to the 4, 4.5 that I think this story deserves. But until then, it's difficult to recommend outright.
Good news! The author has gotten a lot better at the language and flow of the story. It's still not perfect, and the rough edges certainly show in terms of dialogue, but it's a lot easier to read, and I'm enjoying it constantly.
Okay, review time. After having read up to chapter 120 I must say that I have NEVER been so frustrated by a fiction. This could be one of the very best on this site, but its few flaws are massively impactful. Lets go over them.
Oh God, it hurts. So many errors. Not just in number, but variety too. Swapped words, wrong tenses, mispellings, and even sentece structure and word choice. Literally every aspect of grammar takes a hit throughout the course of these chapters. And consistenly. This alone was the cause of a loss of a star, maybe even a star-and-a-half.
We've got info dumps galore as well as poor scene transitions. Thow in a couple tangential strings of thought, and awkward dialog as well. These issues are much less prevelant than the constant grammatical errors.
And lastly: Characters.
All of the characters are believable, which is a plus, and the few cliches are used well. However, there are many situations that come off as inconsistent or illogical. It only happens a few times, but when it does happen it is quite jarring. One final note here. I would have liked to have had a "main" character, as the POV does jump around quite a bit, and having the story favor one character's POV would have made it just that much more engaging for me. This is total preference though.
The best thing this fiction has going for it is the story. By far. The author is descriptive, he's built up a world that feels real, and the characters actions and motivations are relatable. The premise is unique (enough so that I have yet to find its like on RR) and is executed rather well.
Scores are based roughly on RoyalRoadl averages.
Story is interesting. It is one of those stories with many threads that don't get dropped until they are finished. The author is willing to give pay offs to the threads they set up, and does so at a very reasonable pace. This story does like its tropes, but they are fun tropes and any author that bring tropes to their satisfying conclusions is, in my opinion, welcome to use as many tropes as they want.
Grammar is quite shaky. Mostly tense issues, which are not that disruptive in terms of understanding. Some word mistakes and choppy dialogue, which can impact the feel of the story. I do not remember any mistakes that caused a sentence to be incomprehensible.
Character score is a little weaker mainly because romance is especially weak, mostly due to reliance on tropes. However, the characters are fun overall and the tropes do have payoffs, so it is not reduce the characters as much as I would for other stories on this website would get for doing the same. This score is also negatively affected by the grammar in the dialogue.
So many novels like to blueball the reader with big things that never even come into scene before the story is dropped. This one won't.
As of chapter six, the fight scenes are definitely a strong point, very enjoyable (really all there is at the current chap).
But I had to stop reading-dear god, get a proofreader. There are a ton of errors.
If it was properly edited, 4 stars so far? I just couldn't keep going through all the errors.
Currently reading - Chapter 311
Everything just seems, perhaps a bit too easy for the humans on this 'magical' and alien world. The first hundred chapters or so it kinda made sense. The thing I find 'negative' with that aspect is that they are still owning the enemy heavily and it creates an effect where whenever they encounter an enemy, I know the HOOMANS are going to bull-doze down the new enemies so easily they might as well just have not been written about?
They took out a huge magical sea creature so easily! All they had to do was press a tiny button! What's the point of the world being magical if a bullet or missile takes it all out in one shot?! Why are the elves and humans not being affected by germs, are germs non-existent in this world? Why have I not heard a single sentence about any disease?
A large gripe I have is that some of these arcs/chapters could be taken out of the story entirely and a new reader won't notice the difference! The traiters? Killed easily, Snake-God thing killed easily, most likely that dumb thot is going to be killed easily too! then never mentioned again!
Set in the not too distant future the UN ship Singapore comes under attack and is forced to escape when the enemy boarding party catastrophically damages the ship in mid-warp sending it light years off course. The captain crash lands on a planet in uncharted space where the crew must face the new world. The new world's inhabitants have magic and resemble fantasy beings like elves, Orcs, goblins, and Dragons and other mythological creatures. It is a world at war and is technologically set in the medieval era. There are some light-hearted goofy moments mixed in as well.
Story-wise I love it. The military jargon is good as well as the transitions from points of view. Spelling needs work or a good editor, but not so bad that you can't understand what the author meant. The grammar does improve further into the story. As of this review, I have read up to chapter 279 and have become a patron.
This is a novel that brings a breath of fresh air to the over done troupes of new world fantacy. The sci-fi elements really give it a feel of possiblity and realism that most other novels on this site lack. There are a lot of characters, which can be confusing and daunting, but it adds to the reality of the situation these pople find themselves in. Most all of the characters seem well thought out and have differing motives which helps provide depth. If you enjoy both fantacy and science fiction then this is a must read novel on RoyalRoad, enjoy!
Caught up to chapter 284.
First things first: as stated on the title, it's a nice twist to an overused genre.
Thinking the human race as ultra tech falling in a medieval fantasy world is really interesting, and, even thou I understand the characters to have all kinds of military background, it's a little exhausting to have descriptions of every little piece of machine they develop.
World building is interesting with lots of character cores and many different plots.
The characters sometimes are interesting and well built but often they just seem shallow and empty. Their love relationships seems a bit forced too.
I understand the Blue's personality being affected by his consumption of TV and dramas but it can be really annoying at times, as well as his budding relationship with Ras. She's a wild dragon and should behave as such.
The grammar is bad. No point saying that over and over again as other reviews have already done so. Tip to the author: better use of would and should will have a major impact on your writing as well as the differences between similar words such as affect and effect.
Overall, I’ve really enjoyed myself and the writing speed of the author is nothing short of awesome. I hope you can continue to deliver and develop as an author.
Please, ignore any mistakes on my rumblings as English is not my first language.
Thanks and have a great day!
I love the genre of mixing tech and magic.
and I like it that contrarily to some others stories of the genre : they don't become uncharacteristicly OP
its one of may daily pleasure, almost every morning !
The story is well though, with many levels of threats that can provide matter for many further plotlines and chapters
The characters are starting to grow on me, even if we mostly see their actions... however for a story without a Main MC, many characters are fighting to be the most interesting one :)
Well done - you have convinced a lurker to rate. (I have previously rated 5 fictions, over more than a year and many more fictions read)
The story is simply fantastic. Enough said here.
The style does not follow the Main Character throughout. It follows the action. *Thumbs up* As far as I can see, this is the best style for this story.
The grammar... Eh, it could use a proofreader, but it's intelligible, and it has improved in later chapters. Kudos for improvement! [Neo Koh Smash Bad Grammar!]