Out of Space

Okay, first off; the story is good.  The premise is cool, it's slow-rolled nicely, and the ten or fifteen chapters at the start feels like some real classic Starship Troopers bullshit, which is just great.  Read it with the Stellaris soundtrack on in the background.  I'm maybe twenty five chapters in, and looking forward to reading more.

But.  I suspect english isn't the author's primary language, and it shows a lot.  Tenses are a big problem, mostly.  Not so much typos, though there are a few of those; it's more just a constant need for a proofreader that makes it a bit too difficult to get through some paragraphs.  Afterward, when I think back on what I've read, my mind auto-edits most of it out, and I like the story.  But in the moment, actually parsing the language is too challenging to be fun.

I would love to see this get an editing pass.  At that point, I'd probably spike my review up to the 4, 4.5 that I think this story deserves.  But until then, it's difficult to recommend outright.

EDIT

Good news!  The author has gotten a lot better at the language and flow of the story.  It's still not perfect, and the rough edges certainly show in terms of dialogue, but it's a lot easier to read, and I'm enjoying it constantly.

Deserving of 5 stars for the amazing story line, entertaining characters/progression/interaction, but the grammar needs SERIOUS work imo. Very obvious that the author is not a native English speaker which makes immersion into the story very difficult. That said, this is one I will definitely continue to read just for the unique storyline if nothing else. 

Story flows smoothly, with suprisingly low amount of sudden changes i peace and gracefully avoid getting clogged on info-dumps. This might be just my personal tendency, but even chapter getting deeper into magic theorem was still interesting and didn't feel out of place, like people explaining things in stories tend to. Even if chapters are discouragingly short they make up for it with terrifying speed they appear with. The whole story seems to be planed beforehand with forewarnings for a few ways situation could develop. Personally I enjoy it enough to not notice errors. Fusion fantasy is rare enough to rank it higher just for genere sake.

Okay, review time.  After having read up to chapter 120 I must say that I have NEVER been so frustrated by a fiction.  This could be one of the very best on this site, but its few flaws are massively impactful.  Lets go over them.

First:  Grammar. 

Oh God, it hurts.  So many errors.  Not just in number, but variety too.  Swapped words, wrong tenses, mispellings, and even sentece structure and word choice.  Literally every aspect of grammar takes a hit throughout the course of these chapters.  And consistenly.  This alone was the cause of a loss of a star, maybe even a star-and-a-half.

Next:  Style.

We've got info dumps galore as well as poor scene transitions.  Thow in a couple tangential strings of thought, and awkward dialog as well.  These issues are much less prevelant than the constant grammatical errors.

And lastly:  Characters.

All of the characters are believable, which is a plus, and the few cliches are used well.   However, there are many situations that come off as inconsistent or illogical.  It only happens a few times, but when it does happen it is quite jarring.  One final note here.  I would have liked to have had a "main" character, as the POV does jump around quite a bit, and having the story favor one character's POV would have made it just that much more engaging for me.  This is total preference though.

The best thing this fiction has going for it is the story.  By far.  The author is descriptive, he's built up a world that feels real, and the characters actions and motivations are relatable.  The premise is unique (enough so that I have yet to find its like on RR) and is executed rather well.

I am enjoyng this story quite a bit except for the grammer but I am not sure how much more I can take before I give up on it>

This is a novel that brings a breath of fresh air to the over done troupes of new world fantacy.  The sci-fi elements really give it a feel of possiblity and realism that most other novels on this site lack. There are a lot of characters, which can be confusing and daunting, but it adds to the reality of the situation these pople find themselves in. Most all of the characters seem well thought out and have differing motives which helps provide depth. If you enjoy both fantacy and science fiction then this is a must read novel on RoyalRoad, enjoy! 

I really enjoyed the novel so far (as of chap 26) and am interested to see where this all goes.

Worth the read. The concept is a nice blend of fantasy and science fiction. The early chapters have some gramma issues and the writing style isn't as good as the later chapers so don't be put off by it. Has a lot of potential and could be one of the great stories on RR.

Well done - you have convinced a lurker to rate.  (I have previously rated 5 fictions, over more than a year and many more fictions read)

The story is simply fantastic.  Enough said here.

The style does not follow the Main Character throughout.  It follows the action. *Thumbs up* As far as I can see, this is the best style for this story.

The grammar... Eh, it could use a proofreader, but it's intelligible, and it has improved in later chapters.  Kudos for improvement!  [Neo Koh Smash Bad Grammar!]

I started this story to waste some time, and using my time I did. Wasting not so much. This is truly a gem of a story with (as many time mentioned) quite a few grammar problems which aren't so annoying to me since I'm not a native speaker myself.

The good points of this story are obviously the story itself which is a lot like Nimue Alban and release that witch. More like a mixture of both I would say, while beeing a lot faster in the development.

So if anyone is intereseted in a action packed story with modern and medival military, evil emperors, dragons and some alien and sci fi mixed in then that's the story for you. It's not realy kingdom building, more like a striped down version of it but still realy enjoyable.

Now sorry for my own grammar, but as I mentioned I'm not a native speaker.