Origin of Power

by Alex M

Original HIATUS Action Adventure Fantasy Sci-fi Magic Male Lead Martial Arts Secret Identity Strong Lead Supernatural

Mav was eight when a Hellraiser attacked London, turning it into a city of islands. That day his power manifested, and he became a Titan.

Ten years later and the world is a different place. More Titans appear every year, ignoring the plights of ordinary people, using their power for their own gain. Tyrants rule the streets, enforcing their control through force, while the government struggles to keep its few remaining territories.

The Heroes Association was created to combat the threat, a division dedicated to protecting citizens from both Hellraisers and Tyrants.

But it wasn’t enough. The Heroes Association retreated to their safe zone leaving the rest of London to suffer through gang warfare and superpowered battles. Outnumbered and with no way to target them, Tyrants go unperturbed. The public live their life in fear of a Titan hidden amongst them, capable of ending their life in a heartbeat.

But some still resist… and Mav wants in.

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argusthecat
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This is a fine opening to a story!  From a construction perspective, the word choice is all fine, and there's only one mistake I noticed (taught and taut are different words!), but that's just the foundation that the author starts from. 

What's really great here is the casual worldbuilding, and the charactarizarion.  I can feel how these characters feel, and in three chapters, we haven't left the scene of the father and son huddled in a car.  And it's great. 

I look forward to seeing more.  Keep it up, and show us what you can do. 

Elethwen
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I really liked the atmosphere and the tension this prologue had. I can really feel like the MC and im looking forward to reading more and to learn more about this world. 

Grammar was good. 

Tom Hockney
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Haven't used this site very much, but decided to give this piece a read. Found myself blinking two hours away in some very immersive fiction. Really good work considering it's an indipendant author. Definitely following this guy. 

jpuntuned
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Gives me hope for a genre I had given up on

I am prejudiced against the Urban Fantasy genre. All the stories feel the same and they tend to be cliched as hell. However, Alex does a good job of writing something enjoyable that doesn't follow the overused tropes. 

The story isn't lacking in description, the dialogue is well thought out and the characters are engaging. I'm looking at you Chrissy, you close-minded bitch. Give the Titans a chance!

As far as superhero stories go it is an excellent start, I look forward to seeing how the political outlook towards Titans change over time and how the protagonist's powers develop.

The grammar is near perfect, I only noticed a handful of errors. However, the author's style needs some work. Repeated words and phrases tend to ruin the quality of the read, but all he needs is a good editor behind is back to fix the two issues and make this a 5 star project all across the board.

Aditya Naik
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The opening chapters are way too similar to the opening of Brandon Sanderson's Steelheart. I'd recommend changing it a bit. 

Apart from that, the currently posted chapters are very well written and structured.

Nayruke
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Good quality overdone plot

It's good, I guess? Like for Royal road its quality is excellent however the story is so... Overused. It's like Worm and Steelheart had a baby, both of which are excellent and you should go read, if you have read those it's fine for scratching that itch but otherwise go read those first