Fun in Other Worlds

Fun in Other Worlds

by Tain

Fan Fiction HIATUS Comedy Fantasy Male Lead

Tain, have been sick all this life till the day he die and get his personal heaven where he get to go to his favorit anime.

cover picture not mine.

First story ever, sorry if there bad grammar.

I dont own anything in the story. 

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As I am not experienced in using low star ratings, the numbers I've chosen are rather arbitrary, so forgive me.

Overall score: 2.5 stars: Cliche premise with an overpowered mc.

Style score: 2.5 stars: Presented rather badly.

Story score: 2.5 stars: See Overall score

Grammar score: 1.5 stars: Bad punctuation, flow, word choice, etc.  I don't think I've seen a single "correct" sentence. (lol)

Character score: 2.5 stars: Generic overpowered mc.

Note: I do not mean to be offensive to the author, but this story honestly needs a LOT of cleaning up.  If you want editing, Tain, I can do it, but I feel the plot is beyond saving.