Lone: The Wanderer [Rewrite]

by Lone

Original ONGOING Action Adventure Fantasy Romance Anti-Hero Lead Dungeon High Fantasy LitRPG Magic Male Lead Non-Human lead Portal Fantasy / Isekai Ruling Class Secret Identity Strong Lead Supernatural
Warning This fiction contains:
  • Gore
  • Profanity
  • Sexual Content
  • Traumatising content

THIS IS EXCLUSIVELY FOR THE REWRITTEN VERSION OF ONE OF MY MAIN NOVELS.


Nine-to-five. The daily grind. Life. Painful years of school. Working as a slave for some undeserving corporate big-wig. The monotonous life of unemployment. We all experience this in one way or another, and we can all conclude one thing: it's dull.

Such a fact rings true even for the fabled Lone Immortus, a powerful nine-tailed Golden Foxkin. However, what would you do if your monotony was suddenly ground to a halt and you were thrown out of your comfort zone along with a young girl forgotten by time?

Perhaps you might have done things differently, been more organised, immediately died, gained control of the world in a matter of days, but this is Lone's tale, not yours.

Watching two insecure people struggle to survive and find their place in an unfamiliar land just might be enjoyable to witness. Who knows? One thing's for certain: it won't be an easy path for them to tread, and what could possibly be more entertaining than watching people endure hardships and grow?

I know of at least eight gods that would answer with, 'Absolutely nothing.'

I wonder, after seeing this journey from start to finish, how would you answer?

[Guaranteed 1 chapter per week, the only exceptions being announced breaks or emergencies]


The new cover art is a courtesy of the very kind and talented ssddx.


This novel is a participant in The Writer's Pledge

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Table of Contents
Chapter Name Release Date
Book 1 Milindo & The Holy City: Prologue: Compatible Champion and Stupid Game ago
Book 1 Milindo & The Holy City: Chapter 1: Building Depression and Sudden Change ago
Book 1 Milindo & The Holy City: Chapter 2: Strange Screens and Panic Attack ago
Book 1 Milindo & The Holy City: Chapter 3: Painful Coconuts and Teleportation ago
Book 1 Milindo & The Holy City: Chapter 4: Mental Shock and God's Killer ago
Book 1 Milindo & The Holy City: Chapter 5: Skill-slot and Apology ago
Book 1 Milindo & The Holy City: Chapter 6: Sophie's Powers and Sophie's Nickname ago
Book 1 Milindo & The Holy City: Chapter 7: Small Tracks and Surrounded ago
Book 1 Milindo & The Holy City: Chapter 8: Stabbing and Fun-sized ago
Book 1 Milindo & The Holy City: Chapter 9: Boots and Trust ago
Book 1 Milindo & The Holy City: Chapter 10: Bravery and Experience Experiment ago
Book 1 Milindo & The Holy City: Chapter 11: Ocean Koala and Bath Pains ago
Book 1 Milindo & The Holy City: Chapter 12: Woodworking and Goblin Stirrings ago
Book 1 Milindo & The Holy City: Chapter 13: Cooking Cartographer and New Encounter ago
Book 1 Milindo & The Holy City: Chapter 14: Acting and Illusions ago
Book 1 Milindo & The Holy City: Chapter 15: Lone's Worries and Hazel's Dismay ago
Book 1 Milindo & The Holy City: Chapter 16: Beach Fort and Natural Weapons ago
Book 1 Milindo & The Holy City: Chapter 17: Emergency Unsummoning and Tail Blanket ago
Book 1 Milindo & The Holy City: Chapter 18: Dome Replacing and Attractive Frustration ago
Book 1 Milindo & The Holy City: Chapter 19: Third Hunt and Goblin Magic ago
Book 1 Milindo & The Holy City: Chapter 20: Crude Fireball and Stress Before Sleep ago
Book 1 Milindo & The Holy City: Chapter 21: Past Nightmare and Other Side ago
Book 1 Milindo & The Holy City: Chapter 22: Armour and Bones ago
Book 1 Milindo & The Holy City: Chapter 23: Loving Thoughts and Utter Confusion ago
Book 1 Milindo & The Holy City: Chapter 24: Retreating Paranoia and Sharing Problems ago
Book 1 Milindo & The Holy City: Chapter 25: Pancakes and Past Recounting ago
Book 1 Milindo & The Holy City: Chapter 26: Training with Sophie and Massage ago
Book 1 Milindo & The Holy City: Chapter 27: Hobgoblin and Synergistic Mages ago
Book 1 Milindo & The Holy City: Chapter 28: More Magic and Village ago
Book 1 Milindo & The Holy City: Chapter 29: Rescue and Plans ago
Book 1 Milindo & The Holy City: Chapter 30: The King's Rage and The Lucky Rain ago
Book 1 Milindo & The Holy City: Chapter 31: Regicide and Dungeon Tokens ago
Book 1 Milindo & The Holy City: Chapter 32: Hands and Not Disliking ago
Book 1 Milindo & The Holy City: Chapter 33: Farewell Letter and A Snappy Encounter ago
Book 1 Milindo & The Holy City: Chapter 34: Lightning and Second Ship ago
Book 1 Milindo & The Holy City: Chapter 35: Lady Malik and Acting ago
Book 1 Milindo & The Holy City: Chapter 36: Establishing Goals and Ros' City Lord ago
Book 1 Milindo & The Holy City: Chapter 37: Shopkeeper and Angered Lord Griffset ago
Book 1 Milindo & The Holy City: Chapter 38: Marking One Another and Eternal Bliss ago
Book 1 Milindo & The Holy City: Chapter 39: Reading and Lightning Bolt ago
Book 1 Milindo & The Holy City: Chapter 40: Acting Rank-Up and Matriarch ago
Book 1 Milindo & The Holy City: Chapter 41: Phil and Blacksmiths ago
Book 1 Milindo & The Holy City: Chapter 42: Agreement and Set-Up ago
Book 1 Milindo & The Holy City: Chapter 43: Failing Frustrations and Lofakern ago
Book 1 Milindo & The Holy City: Chapter 44: Peaceful Morning and Rowdy Afternoon ago
Book 1 Milindo & The Holy City: Chapter 45: Guild Explained and Perfect Provocation ago
Book 1 Milindo & The Holy City: Chapter 46: Icy Chill and Quest Accepted ago
Book 1 Milindo & The Holy City: Chapter 47: Thoughts on Metals And Ducal Encounter ago
Book 1 Milindo & The Holy City: Chapter 48: Bandit Custom and Childish ago
Book 1 Milindo & The Holy City: Chapter 49: Light-footed and Henry Malik ago
Book 1 Milindo & The Holy City: Chapter 50: Blacksmithing Worries and Battle Plan ago
Book 1 Milindo & The Holy City: Chapter 51: A Crushed Lone and Panic ago
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Luke Scheffe
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The rewrite is much better than the original. I tried reading the original and found that the MC was way too much of an asshole to appreciate the book. In this, however, he is actually reasonably compassionate and doesn't act either bipolar or like a sociopath. He actually considers other peoples opinions and even sometimes takes them.

ReadingIsLife
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I dont have a lot of experience on this site, and I tend to like almost everything I read, but I got to say this is one of the best. I haven't read the original, but I am really into the rewrite. I noticed on a recent chapter that you said you were feeling unsure about the rewrite. I just want to say I really hope you continue with it. The interaction between the characters is better than most of the other stories I've read, and I feel like the relationship building is done pretty well. The pace seems to be moving forward at a good pace. Every chapter has a development with either character growth or story. While there really isn't a plot at the point I'm at, I am sure one will present itself later with how long the original is. The combat, while clunky at times, is enjoyable to read and it doesn't stick out as something bad or retract from the story. I noticed a comment about how you struggle writing those scenes, and I feel the need to say that it is some of the better writing out fof the few books I have read. I really enjoy the story and I am hoping you continue with the rewrite. Almost all the other books I enjoyed got canceled, so I am really hoping, and I am sure I'm not alone, that you finish rewriting this outstanding story.

Chaos_Seed
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Thank you so much for rewriting this! When I began reading the original version of this it hurt so muh trying to get through it. All I could think was, "This story has such a great idea!" but I wasn't able to keep reading. The conversations were too awkward and quick that it just made it painful . 

Now to the compliments, this rewrite is MUCH BETTER! I admire how much you have obviously grown after writing the previous one, and cannot wait to continue reading the rest of this. 

Here's my explanation on the loss of a couple half stars... 

There are still a few grammar issues, but not nearly as much as in the original. Yet another thing to show the authors growth. Lastly, for the Characters, the conversations are still a little too formal, which kind of breaks the illusion that you create about the world in your mind, but once again it is far far better than the original. 

I look forward to seeing the rest!

monoliith
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This rewrite is SO FUCKING GOOD. Everyone go read it. IMMEDIATELY.

 

 

 

 

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STOP READING THIS, AND GO READ THE GODDAMNED STORY.

Yuhao Lightning
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So very good story. Keep it up the high quality.

So far, so good. If this kind of high quality story keep up then I will want to have a physical copy of the book when the story is finish.

I didn't bother to read the old version because it is missing some early chapters. But I do some skimming and it is pretty lackluster imo. And here the revise version is too good of a story that it makes me want to keep reading for more.

ReaverCG
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Started off weird for lack of a better word but as soon as they reached land it started picking up amd it got me hooked.

More skills, more level ups and more rank ups.

Love the rewrite. It is definitely way better. Will be following

Heralder
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I haven't read the previous version but I'm loving the story. I keep wanting to continue the it with the old version and I can barely stop myself.

I'm certainly coming back for more.

diegohna
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Rewriting done right

 I really can't read the original after reading this, a more mature and fresh take on a good history. So much more dep for the MC relations. Lone please give more love for this rewriting, here you can show how much more mature autor you are now

Sigfreid
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It's a second draft and you can feel it the story pulls you along with characters that feel they are growing a style all its own decent if not perfect grammar and a story that flows.  My only criticism is the female characters age etc feels creepy particularly the initial reaction from the mc.

Paulo Partezani
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Melhor evolução de um autor que vi no site!

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Eu adorei essa reescrita, é muito melhor que a anterior, o protagonista é o que é uma babaca, mas nessa mesma linha do tempo ele é muito mais fácil de se associar. Mas essa obrigação pode ser usada em alguns buracos de ultima versão, é isso mesmo? Por exemplo, em vez dele ir para uma arvore do mundo, ele vai para uma academia? Ou algo assim assim.