The Wielder of Chains-Chronicles of a Patchwork World
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Set centuries after the advent of the System, modern society has collapsed, our cities destroyed by the monsters that now dwell within their ruins. In the early days of the system there were many heroes and villains, but their time has passed and a new society has been built on what they left behind. We follow a young man as he journeys through this hostile world in the hopes of discovering what caused the system to suddenly appear in the first place.
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So to give a preface my review, I found/read/cought up in this fiction right before he added the (Old Version) to the old chaps, so I read them.
The auther decided to completely rewrite the fiction about two months ago, and I do agree with some off the reasons listed, the better grammer/spelling and writing skills displayed in the new one have been nice. But I believe the auther made a mistake completely rewriting the story anew.
(I'm sure there are people who will disagree with me and my reasons for this but I'm writing this and if you disagree you should review it too)
The original story was in my opinion better. It had a cool background ground being built and the way skills and progression worked were fairly unique. I liked the instinctual way the skills worked and how classes functioned.
I also liked the way magic was hinted at working better. (Althought there was not enough of it shown to tell for sure)
The newer one is better written, but so far the characters and overall story have been more "meh" then the original.
The way classes work hasn't been explained enough to tell the differnce yet, so I wont critique that. (Or if it has been I missed it)
The way skills work where you unlock sub-skills for them as you progress is still interesting, but I think the original was better in the way you unlocked skills and had to be smart about which ones you purchased after unlocking them.
(The auther said he thought it was limiting the mc, but I disagree)
I also think the aetherial human thing should have been left out, as while he does use magic, the most usefull things for him world be the phisical stats. Although I do have to admit, the racial skill he unlocked for that is pretty cool
Now I do have to say that some of the problems/complaints I listed could be remedied as the rewrite gets farther along, I still don't think the new one would be as good. Now don't get me wrong, the old one could have used some work, but instead of rewriting it, I think it would have been better to work on ironing out the problems and maybe adding a few chapters within it then completely rewriting it.
I DO think that their both good stories, I just think the older one was better.
I've been with this story since the original version and seeing the differences between the two, I am glad that he rewrote it. Even though the background for Kyle seemed more interesting when it was traumatic, the new approach is very interesting because now he isn't trying to do everything mostly on his own. The new way the System works has improved as well because it was going to fill up in no time leaving Kyle stuck at a paltry amount of skills for too long.
though this new story isn't updated as frequently as I, or even the author, would like, it is shaping up to be a very strong read, because the MC isn't trying to be a hero, nor is he an another or even vigilante. He is simply the son of two famous ex-adventures, following in their footsteps. He has good morals and a fun personality.
The journey with Kyle may just be getting started, but it is shaping up to be a good one.