Life: New Game +

Life: New Game +

by wslwrites

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I died and reincarnated. Or something like that. What would you do if you could live your life all over again? In a fantasy world. Tasked with an impossible quest. Having the worst possible luck. 

Life: New Game + here I come.

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Style:

 The style will probably be the most controversial factor to this story. It's told in differing POVs, each of them relatively short and sweet, with the MC's one in first person. There are some occasional tense shifts from third to first, but always in different scenes, so it works. I quite liked the way the author shoots between POVs during exciting moments.

Grammar:

The grammar was pretty flawed in the prologue and first chapter or so (couple of tense inconsistencies in the present tense parts), but got better as the story progressed so I'm giving it an optimistic 4.

Story:

The first arc was interesting, and the setting is also a fresh breath of air from the ussual fantasy-land. It feels a bit disjointed at the moment however; I really question the purpose of having the MC being reincarnated, since the majority of the first arc has had barely anything to do with his past life. It's almost like the author has had the MC die and be reincarnated just to have the story make sense when told from a first person perspective (it would be pretty weird having a first person story where the MC is a newborn incapable of thought).

Despite this, I'm still giving the story a 5 (it really should be a 4.5 though). The first chapter was entertaining even if I questioned the point of it.

Also, fix the prologue. At the moment it feels like it won't be relevant until a lot later, and there's too much unecesssary infodumping.

Character:

I like the MCs voice. He swears a lot, just like a 30 year old man! The other POV's are a bit underveloped at the moment, but at the very least they're all distinct. It's still early stages so I can't tell who the main characters will be, but I have high hopes.

Overall: 

A reincarnation story written in an unconventional style with a touch of its own unique flavour. Probably one of the better stories I've read here; I found myself skimming a lot less than I usually do. It's far from perfect, but definitely worth a read.

Marcusbek1
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I love it, and I'm sure others will too!

Reviewed at: 10 Words I would not say

After reading the preview, and seeing the abundance of Isekai (Another world) stories, centered around the premise of a person falling into another world, gaining in strength and defeat everyone like it's a cardgame, this story was a breath of fresh air in the genre itself.

Story:
I'll be frank. I love it! I have seen a lot of people talking about the lack of the MC, but I actually like the stories surrounding the side-characters, because it gives flavour to worldbuilding that's being done.

Only *personal* thing I am missing is the describing of certain areas or locations. It does give you the oppertunity to imagine it myself, but some locations where not really clear to me because I didn't experience them in my life (or because English isn't my native language), so I had to go out of my way and search up what these things actually look like.

Style:
I find it structured and clear. I really like the jumps you get when reading, going from one character to another, giving you constant new stimula within a single moment. I don't mind the switch between 1st and 3rd person view, but I can see others tripping over it. 

Grammar:

Good use of English. If you ignore the first chapter or so, you would not know there were any mistakes, because it has been consistently good.

Character:
What I said in Story also connects to Character. I like the constant view one gets in the minds of others. Sure, it's not completely polished, but I read till chapter 10, so I am confident that it will become more clearer over time. 

Overall:

I really like the creative style that you've embraced, since you're using it to its greatest effect. Keep it up, because I am loving what I am seeing!

ManeReader
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This is so much better than I thought it would be. Its not long enough to give it a proper review, but I'm quite thoroughly enjoying the ride. It has a style very similar to my own, there are a number of perspective switches and I love it. More authors need to get on the wave. 

If I have to complain about something its that there are some very odd grammar mistakes. They don't occur often, but when they do they're such obvious things its sometimes jarring. 

l nimbus
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Okay, i'll be honest, i loved New Life +. I actually liked the style the author is using, and he has some solid character development and world building already slipped in. 

 

No real issues, just wishing it was longer. go ahead and give it a try.

MoonWatcher
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Story with a promising beginning

(The review is up to chapter 4)

New Life + is (at the moment) pretty short story with a promising start and it definitely has the chance to shine. Its beginning is good enough to catch the interest, but the story is still unadvanced, so we have yet to see its general direction from now on.

Style - It shifts between a few POVs in two of the chapters currently present and while the change isn't subtle, it is easily distinguishable and doesn't hurt the overall flow. There are unexpected shifts from third to first person and they can a little bit confusing at first, though. The style is OK overall, with the inner monologue of the main character being sharp, clear and often funny. There isn't any poetic prose to it however, but the way of writing does its job fairly well. 

Grammar - It is good. There are missing commas or other small mistakes from time to time, but they don't take the joy from reading the story away in any kind of way. 

Story - The setting is based on the middle east, which is pretty fresh for RRL. It feels rather exotic and interesting for the little specks of it seen so far. The plot itself kicks off in a pretty intense and captivating way that's a bit far from the typical 'in another world' type of story (which this is, essentially). We've yet to see the details of it, but the prologue (SPOILERS), that's set in the future, gave the story a point to move towards (END OF SPOILERS). That's always good and I can see that the plot sounds promising so far.

Characters - They are believable (mostly), but are still far from fleshed out, except for the MC to some degree. I have high expectations for them, but they with knowing so little about them (most show just a little of their personalities and goals so far, because of the sheer shortness of the story in the moment) I can only hope to see their evolution and changes.

Horst
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I really liked the prologue and in general there are only a few grammatical mistakes, which don't distract the reader.

Style wise I got to say I found it hard to follow the layered world building and story lines. The many POV changes and different characters don't really help me establish a clear picture of the world and society because I first need to get a grasp on the character and from what POV that character is explaining the world to me. 

In general I like multiple POVs but I personally think that especially in the first few chapters focussing the POVs on a small character cast helps the reader get into the story and world.

Aside from the POVs and worldbuilding issue, I feel that in the 10 chapters that I read the actual MC got very little screentime so to speak. That doesn't have to be bad, but it makes it harder for the reader to identify with the MC.

Concerning the actual story there is at this point very little that can be said about it as there is no clear direction so far that the story seems to head in.

J Pal
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A decent work in progress

I enjoy stories which authors take the time to pace and slowly build up. 

The Style would be my biggest issue. Though each POV is short and sweet the author needs to take the time to flesh one out more and add more depth to the scenes. Saying that the protagonist's POV segments are still pretty sharp.

 

The grammar needs some work in the first few chapters but looks like the author started focusing on it a bit more in the later chapters. However, that's nothing a good editor/proofreader can't fix. 

 

The story could have easily gotten five stars if not for the prologue and first chapter. Perhaps its too early in the story for their relevance to show but they seem to only exist so the author can make use of the reincarnation trope. There is a lot of unneeded exposition and information littered around the story which could be introduced via action or dialogue.

 

Characterwise, great job with the protagonist so far, I've only stated my issue with him and will not repeat it. The side characters are interesting as well but as mentioned need more time dedicated to them instead of short segments and frequent switches.

empireriot
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Can't wait to see where this goes

I just finished chapter 6 and Overall, New Life+ has a lot going for it.

STYLE: This is pretty much the only place the story suffers. It starts off in first person present tense which always makes me cringe a little. However, it later shifts into past tense depending on which character it’s following. The problem is that the tense never really stays consistent one way to the other. Ultimately, it’s distracting but not so much to make me stop reading. On the plus side, the dialogue has a decent flow, and never sounds awkward, which is nice.

STORY: I love the concept here. It’s basically about a guy who worked in advertising getting killed and reincarnated to another world. The idea of him using his media knowledge to manipulate things in his new world has me excited to find out more. I really just love stories like that.

GRAMMAR: A few errors here and there, but nothing to really complain about.

CHARACTERS: Great MC. He’s funny at times and cynical at others. The only complaint is that I wish he didn’t swear at times. I’m not against profanity, but depending on the word choice it can really affect how the character is viewed. Though that might be an intentional choice and if so I can’t fault that. The rest of the characters are pretty solid for a story that’s starting out, there’s some development and the story has a good pace for more.

Professor Porkchop
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I read it all, stem to stern. The prologue was really hard to read, but everything else was really well written. It's almost as if it's someone else writing it! The difference is that drastic. So, yeah you've gotten better since you started it. The flow is good, the tension of the baby and mother is really good. My only issue is stylistic for me, so ignore it if you like. An its... The names. It's like you used a random fantasy name generator. (fine if you're playing dnd, not so much for a novel) i had hoped there a would be more to read. (One of my greatest sorrows is catching up to the author in a serial work)

Onch
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Please consider that this review was written when there were only four chapters available.

Now, for the proper review:

New Life + is a “reincarnated in a new world” story with a twist.  Its setting is pretty novel: The readers are immersed into an Oriental-style world Instead of basic fantasyland #452. So this could develop in interesting and new ways in the future.

There’s not must to say about the plot or the characters since the story is still in its infancy.

The grammar is okay and nothing detracts from the reading experience.