Seti Tutt, a recent graduate of the university, was too weak as a wind adept to become anything amazing with his abilities. However, his sight was stolen and now has to learn how to see with his wind, ultimately landing him as a student at Prestige Academy where enemies abound.
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The world building is exquisitely crafted to be both fulfill twords the authors intention of creating a believable world with the added benefit of (imo) not being forced at all! The story has a flow that hasn't, and I doubt will, be matched for a while, all the while spinning a tall tale of magic (mancy) that can be imagined with very little effort.
There are already a lot of precursors twords possible future plot points and I honestly can't wait to see where this develops. I sincerely believe that we could have another fiction that could EASILY keep up with, if not surpassing, the top trending fictions on this site, such as Randidly Ghosthound and E.L.L.C.
Keep up the good work author, I'd love to see where you take this
Edit: I've seen a bunch of people criticize the MC's thought process regarding the geas in the story but if you continue to read everything gets explained, you should give the book another go.
I have enjoyed every moment so far and I am highly anticipating more. The story has kept my attention through all 14 chapters that are currently out and I feel given time for more readers to find this story it will end up as one of the most popular stories on RRL.
As others have reviewed, this story is a blast and would've easily became one of the top listers on this site. However, lo and behold, the author became enlightened and found writing to be a cardinal sin. I suppose this was another "could've been" that will remain lost forever.
I love the story!
PROS: Creative way of using handicaps and underdog stories had always intrigued me, and this story has all that. All the characters have distinct personalities and their actions have consequences that have legitimate ripples affecting the world which gives a deeper sense of the world-building. Smooth reading from start to finish and the pacing is great!
So here's my review (mostly frustrations) based on my experience while reading your story, which I hope you wouldn't mind hearing.
First: The protagonist's motivations are all over the place.
This makes his actions and decisions feel a little flat, despite how big and impactful it was supposed to be. The conflicts the story focused on are more on the personal stakes despite the social situation influences, so having contradictory motivations can paint a hazy MC.
One example is how much he was willing to understand people and yet failed to look at his sister and father's cases.
The first motivation presented was solidly placed with his father.
The first substantial relationship you showed was the sister.
And yet, from early chapters the father was mentioned on a one-sided stereotype, and the sister took the back seat and plot device to move the story along. Yes, she had a vital role but that role was narrowly filtered on the protagonist's eyes. The story was able to express the personalities of strangers better than those with his sister he had been with for years, which made me, as a reader, question his drive. Not to mention how much he affected his family (primarily with his niche), more than the said strangers, you would think his take on them would also change. But maybe that change would appear in the latter chapters? So I can't really tell.
What I saw was, he was noncommittal (taking the path of least resistance on his life), wants to change (with how he approached Aiden), affected by family and how society saw him (motivation to take on his family's business).
That's why when he made big decisions and weighed it more on how he affects said strangers more than his family...it became more selfish since all I took from that decision was how it centered more on himself. We could say he was selfish. But nothing from earlier chapters showed that. He acts more on self-preservation and seeking for more in life rather than on selfishness imo. Which again makes his self-sacrificing acts, later on, feel hollow.
Then there are his trust issues. He distrusts Shepherds and yet wants to be them. He hates how Cassie used him, yet wouldn't mind being used by the Serio Family; He only mellowed on them (Cassie and Mafia) when he got something out of them, but those things were merely incidental (his memory/sight, and his training). Pinpointing his basis for that trust subsequently was lost to us readers.
His motivations and actions are contradictory. But I think its still fine. If these contradictions are done right, it could be used as a good stepping stone on shaping his character as long as there is a resolution, however, so far, I haven't come across a solid resolution to patch them up. Giving him a moral dilemma during the exam was a good avenue to address it, but it didn't provide answers but added to confusions instead, since he was quick and steadfast to his decisions so the 'dilemma' was nonexistent (which triggered my long rant above to how understanding he was XD).
Second: His background was wasted.
Once I took in his personality, I then questioned his background. This is a guy readying himself to take a multi-million nationwide business, which again, I didn't saw..? He has more knowledge on the Hero side of his city than the business side despite implying he had resigned himself to his fate (rich kid in a higher society) that he hardly practice his mancy since elementary. It took the most recent chapter to know exactly what his father's business was and not once was it explored as one of his strengths aside from it being a cash cow. He exhibits smarts so it should have applied when he dealt with the pressure of his background even before the mafia.
Why am I saying this? Because it's frustrating! His background is cool. How will he use this shift, from being the heir of a business giant, to the heir of the head of a mafia (confidence, cutthroat market, manipulations through money...tho he doesn't abuse it, he must be aware of it); from using the money to get what he wants, to using the illusion of power to get his way (exploiting resources, fame and facades)? And how much it'll parallel to his old life (hero society) and the new (mafia family)?
How he'll operate being part of those two is yet to be seen.
The idea of two sets of laws operating a single society is great! The United Accords is a nice touch. I want to see him, being caught up between those rules. Nitpick on it and just use the things he needed to justify the things he wants to do or simply fuck it up, and see the consequences. Wanting to be a Shepherd while aiming to be a Dragon. The duality is too sweet!
So my point is, the story moves forward and every revelation is a great read...but don't forget your MC's core and background, since it could offer a lot on this kind of story, thematically, that is. The new MC is more exciting, yes, but the old one could make him more relatable. Kudos!
A great story, but the author has left it for God. I'm not even kidding.
An elegant magic system, and an interesting world. This is one of the best I have read. The novel lacks the boring fluff but still makes the world interesting and clear. Read it if you enjoy any sort of modern magic novel.
EDIT:Yes it was dropped. We are sad so just ignore those 1 star rating ppl are just mad because they really liked this novel. Author posted some more chapters on reddit and plot that he/she had planned.Enjoy.
great story about a weak/overpowered wind mage MC .....and the mafia! the characters are all really cool....as someone aptly put, this is some good shit
Terrific story, unique, and wonderful.
Then adult "bible camp" IRL happened and the author decided to close the story.....because they asked.
Let this be a lesson religion loves high pressure sales techniques. The hot bible babe, the ultimate wingman "bro", the attention of being in the center of the party....the life of the party.
It's a personality warping sucker punch to the ego.
If you find yourself in such a situation tell them you need some time alone. A month? Barely any time really at all. If they are honest and true they will back off for a month. If they are more concerned with the business of religion than the faith the hot bible babe is going to be calling for dates. The wingman "bro" guy time. The religious super friends....outings.
Faith is where you find it in the red dust, or the infinite.
People that tell you after barely know you "change your life for us".....Usually about as concerned with faith as a lobbiest writing targeted propoganda after downloading your facebook feed.
+ My heart was beating fast in chap 5!
+ Easy to read and no apparent mistakes
- Few Chaps :(
"This story is dead."
"No, it was killed."
"Who did it?"
"Jesus, Jesus did it....."