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It's been 10 years (in real time) and 40 years in game time since [Tarros] launched. [Tarros] is a Virtual Reality Massively Multiplayer Online RPG (VRMMORPG) developed by [ Genesis Corporation ], the leading company in the gaming industry.But what will you do IF the biggest and the hardest virtual reality game ever created in the history of mankind reveals an unbearable truth to you and the entire mankind?

Author's note: Author? I'm not an author. I'm just casually writing a story with my tiny hands. Read the story if you want, disregard if you don't prefer it.

Satisfaction will always plague us down.

We will never feel satisfied in this world.

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This review applies up to chapter 22.

STYLE - The author's style doesn't have many frills, but it's serviceable. I think the author will improve and find their own style over the course of this/future stories.

GRAMMAR - There were some mistakes, and there is room for editing in this department, but not enough to pull a casual reader out of the story.

STORY - The opening hook was rather compelling, and helped differentiate it from other entries in the genre. However, I felt that the continuation of this idea could have been executed better and with a tighter focus. The initial premise of the invasion was established early, and I think I would have enjoyed it better if this was carried through within the first few chapters.

CHARACTER - The main character didn't make much of an impression on me, and neither did any of the side characters, sadly. Dialogue read a little unprofessional. I think some polishing could be done in this department to make it read as more believable.

This may be an oversight on my part, but I didn't really get much of the main character's traits or motivations other than him really loving the game.

OVERALL - Could be an interesting addition to the genre with some editing and a tighter focus on the characters and story.