A SH AI EL

A great read as of chapter 39
it starts a bit stiff, but when it starts rolling it just keeps on going and i hope it will continues to do so. so square away some time and read what this author has to offer. and you will be happier for it

side note: this is not an insta OP MC from the realm of shit writing so if it dosent catch you in the first chapter please try atleast two more before giving up on it

Oh man, how is it, that all good stories have like one chapter.

Hurry up man, I really like this story of yours!

Thx for your hard work and effort!

Starts off rocky, but the plot moves on, and the story is rather decent. Several cliches, but the author didn't dig in and rut around in them, as the self-aware author he is. 

The main character is flawed, which is a good thing. Some reviewers call him a 'yes-man', a special snow-flake, blah blah " I don't like my character, too weak! He's so dumb! oMg!" , but people forget that humans have flaws and not every MC has to be an incorrigible force of nature. 

Suffering and mistakes have to have an impact on the story and plot. Don't weld the plot armor too tightly. The story is just starting out, but the main characters new relationships to certain floating masses is interesting and worth exploring and subverting (avoiding the cliches and doing something 'original')

This story starts out a little bit slow, but it when it picks up its stride, it gets real good. The MC isn't too strong or too weak, challenges and obstacles that he faces feel real and serious, not just like some crap that he'll bullshit away with a bit of magic mumbo-jumbo. When he overcomes them through hard work, skill, and ingenuity it feels satisfying. That one person who left an "Average" review is just one those elitist snobs that think MCs should have no skills, abilities, traits, or knowledge that might set them apart from an average person, and also clearly has NO experience in IT. 

i very much enjoyed your fiction and appreciate your efforts

Realistic transported into another world story. A reaally well made not so young, apathetic mc meets non rpg-like magic world. Characters have actual character something sadly so rare here.

The biggest shortcoming of this story is it's main character, or more specifically it's that the main character is a complete pushover, more or less he is betacuck personified. There are several times in the story so far where he is either being negotiated with or being wronged by people of higher status than him.

Yet in each of these he caves in, one time he caves in because someone jiggles boobs in his face a little bit (not even intentionally), another time he just sits there and takes his punishment like a bitch for crimes mostly committed against him, and then at another he caves because he clearly doesn't know how to not cave. These are just the major ones, there's a lot more minor ones, the last one being chapter 56 where I stopped reading (all caught up at the time of this writing)

All in all the thing that bugs me about him is that, he's a pretty high tier fighter, I wouldn't say OP but he's like a fairly high ranked adventurer, and growing, from a relatively early point in the story, his capabilities should not make him a pushover.

There's nothing really special about the protagonist I suppose being easy to bully is his only defining trait. He doesn't play his cards right, he doesn't even play his cards well, there's really not much more to say about it.

The other characters are all equally shallow, especially the unnamed background characters who go around pestering strangers for stories. Seriously, people don't do that. And besides his circle of friends and close acquaintances other people generally are just a bunch of dicks.

Besides the shortcomings of the characters though, the story is actually half decent, the world is impressively well fleshed out, it's what kept me reading, although the technology level of the world is just middle ages tier stuff, the mages aren't hobos who don't know what fire is, they have a fairly decent understanding of the world compared to other similar stories, which is definitely a plus cus it doesn't allow the MC to become op because he's the only person in the world that knows what oxygen is. So he becomes OP by creating a do-it-all enchanted item that functions a lot like a 60s computer, he doesn't have an operating system but he can make programs. And he has a cheat which allows him to have a display too.

Also, the title of the story seems to hold no meaning at all. Wtf is ashaiel? it never comes up.

Lastly I suppose the writing, the writing is not bad but it's nothing special either, a few grammar mistakes here, a few vocabulary mistakes there but it's like once or twice per chapter, nothing too terrible. There are some weird POV changes though and most of them seem meaningless, it's like the author is just writing pov changes to write pov changes, it's an incorrect use of it for sure, but again not a big deal because they're not that frequent (although their frequency does seem to progressively increase...) and they're always just one chapter long, the chapters aren't that long and you can pretty much get away with just skimming these.

That's about it, is it bad? no, is it good? no, it's decent.

Is it entertaining? Yes, except for the chapters where the MC is getting pushed around like a ragdoll without any resistance. There was one hint though that he's finally starting to try to resist being pushed around, but it didn't last very long, I'm hoping the author is intending to use it as a character development device so that next time he'll fight a little harder and maybe not get completely trampled down by some random assholes.

I would recommend this story to people who are bored and don't have anything better to read.

Starts a bit slow, but once you get further in, there is no stopping.

The way the dialogue is written and some things described are a bit weird, but it works out fine, and if that's what the author feels comfortable about, I say it's perfect!

Characters are alive!

... sorry, just wanted to say that.

Well, the characters for one aren't one dimensional. There aren't a shit ton of characters to care about that you lose your mind (that's a plus), and those that are there and described about, are nicely done.

You can actually feel emotions when something happens to them and not just be like... oh, that happened.

Grammar is for the most part good, with very few noticeable mistakes, so no breaking the flow there~

I guess the only place the story loses out is a bit on the "style", but in all honesty it isn't something that's going to bother you, so don't even mind it.

Tl;dr 

The story starts getting good only after a few chapters have passed, so don't let the start discourage you, as this is definitely a must read.

It is also a nice change of pace from the novels I'm reading recently. 

The good: semi-serious story without a psychopath to main character. Good writing with few spelling or grammatical errors. Decent side characters.

The bad: Jokes that devalues the seriousness by which you consider the world, such as spitting water to defeat a sand elemental when a waterfall is nearby.

The ugly: Mc that claims to be unable to explain basic concepts behind a computer within a year. But can implement one from scratch in new materials within a month. He is also critical to most fighting within a few months, regardless of competence. Where he cannot contribute by skill his bumbling will save the day. In short, lots of “mc is a special snowflake” and storybook logic.

Not sure if I will continue reading, reviewed at character 25.

Wow! The story is good. I mean really good. Not your cliche-OP-scripted-braindeadcharacters kind of a story. Can't stop reading after chapter one.