The Ordinator

by JAnthony

Original HIATUS Action Adventure Fantasy Magic Male Lead Multiple Lead Characters
Warning This fiction contains:
  • Profanity

Orphaned by an attack from a vengeful mage, Rhavin a novice mage attempts to uncover the truth about the attack on his family. Unknown to him, his investigation exposes truths that will shake the world.

An epic high fantasy tale released one chapter at a time.

I also really need to pay for a good cover.

 

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Jimmy55
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The Ordinator is off to a great start. The scenes are vivid and beautiful, world building is done right, prose is strong, and the characters all seem to have fantastic fleshed out personalities. There aren't any glaring grammar issues, maybe a missed comma in a few of the chapters. It reads smoothly and I can't wait for it to continue. I would love to see him flesh out the main character more. At the moment he seems like a little underdeveloped. But for the story just starting out it can be worked out. Overall this story has a lot potential and I hope for a steady release schedule.

LetsGetWeird
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The author paints a picture in your head that is a sight to behold. I cannot wait to read more!