by Onch

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John Thomson is a regular college student, the kind of average person you cross on the street every day.

Or at least that’s what most people assume, because he’s far from what’s considered “normal”.

After all, a normal person isn’t regularly dragged into life-threatening tribulations involving fantastic creatures, otherworldly beings and people with logic-defying superpowers. Not to mention that he seems to have a knack for sticking his nose into the nefarious plans of secret societies and ancient cults.

But John’s life wasn’t always such a mess: Everything began when he accidentally invented a way to rewind time…


Weekly Schedule: At least a ~3.5k words chapter every Wednesday and Friday.

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Table of Contents
Chapter Name Release Date
Chapter 0: Prologue ago
Chapter 1: The Man With The Phone ago
Chapter 2: Cheating ago
Chapter 3: Serious Matters ago
Chapter 4: A Fishy Situation ago
Chapter 5: Hiding In Plain Sight ago
Chapter 6: A Brand New World ago
Chapter 7: Acquiring Currency ago
Chapter 8: Taking Care Of Business [Revised] ago
Chapter 9: Following Leads ago
Chapter 10: Tracking ago
Chapter 11: Avoiding A Tragedy ago
Chapter 12: Fighting Back ago
Chapter 13: Navigation Error ago
Chapter 14: The Trial ago
Chapter 15: A Fight To Remember ago
Chapter 16: Upgrades ago
Chapter 17: First Wave ago
Chapter 18: Reverse Assasination ago
Chapter 19: A Great Beam Of Light ago
Chapter 20: More Upgrades ago
Chapter 21: Floor -1 ago
Chapter 22: Down Under ago
Chapter 23: A Devilish Proposition ago
Chapter 24: Club Members ago
Chapter 25: Disruption ago
Chapter 26: Exploration ago
Chapter 27: New Horizons ago
Chapter 28: A Fated Encounter ago
Chapter 29: The Assassin's Return ago
Chapter 30: The Elder's Request ago
Chapter 31: Into The Abyss ago
Chapter 32: The Eve Of War ago
Chapter 33: The Depths ago
Chapter 34: A Soul's Struggle ago
Chapter 35: An Unexpected Victory ago
Chapter 36: No Rest For The Wicked ago
An Announcement ago
Chapter 37: A Slight Problem ago
Chapter 38: A New Approach ago
Chapter 39: Bringing A Bomb To A Spell Fight ago
Chapter 40: Second Wave ago
Chapter 41: A Blast From The Past ago
Chapter 42: John VS Beelzebub ago
Chapter 43: John VS Beelzebub II ago
Chapter 44: The End Of An Era ago
Chapter 45: Aftermath ago
Chapter 46: The Order of The First Flame ago
Chapter 47: New Objectives ago
Chapter 48: New Faces ago
Chapter 49: Back On Track ago
Chapter 50: Meeting New People ago
Chapter 51: Siege Tactics ago
Chapter 52: Around The World ago
Chapter 53: Mountaineering ago
Chapter 54: Knowledge ago
Chapter 55: Planning ago
Chapter 56: Acting Tough ago
Chapter 57: Moving Around ago
Chapter 58: Cleaning Up ago
Chapter 59: The Tunnels ago
Chapter 60: Digging Things Up ago
Chapter 61: Contention ago
Chapter 62: First Strike ago

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Pretty awesome story. I mean, magic and timetravel? You can't you get more awesome then that.

Also the grammer/spelling is pretty good. And the characters are interesting.  Chapters are a good leangth too.

I am really looking foreward to more being written.

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Let me start off this review by saying that despite eveything, this has become an interesting and somewhat out of the box concept after three chapters in. Warning of slight spoilers for the story ahead.

Our story revolves around John, your seemingly average student who discovers that his once benign phone app actually has the power to rewind the time stream itself. Using this power, he at first does a number of things for his own benefit, before discovering that his good friend is not as human as he intitally seemed.

Let me start off by saying that this story suffers from a somewhat shaky start. It's not bad per say, but I don't think it lends to the intent of the story that becomes clear after three chapters in. As just a heads up to any prospective readers, it begins as a science fiction story that turns into something much more fantasy and magic-influenced.

Overall, the main character John develops from a slightly boring everyman to a more interesting and introspective character the more he learns about the so-called Hidden World. The idea of the setting is nice; it allows for lots of magic and creatures to appear freely.

My only real cristiscms lie in the genre change and some perspective issues. I feel the story changes too quickly in the early chapters, somewhat coming out of left field in the process. The 1st person perspective is far from my favorite, but bias aside it's more confusing when it changes between characters and it can be hard to tell who is speaking.

Overall though, I think this is a promising premise with a lot of room to grow, so I will be following for the foreseeable future.

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Great mix between time travel and fantasy

Right off the bat I'll say that I'm an avid fan of time travel stories and because of that my opinion can be (and probably is) biased. Time physics is one of my favorite topics to discuss with my friends and Steins;Gate is undoubtedly my favorite anime ever. 

That being said... Time.Travel() is awesome! It blends fantasy and time travel in a strange but enjoyable way. What would've otherwise been typical urban fantasy story finds great addition and powerful plot device in the face of the so-called Rewinder that helps the main character go back in time. It also has some pretty good humorous scenes and vivid characters.

Style - It's a little rough and akin to the usual style that can be found in light novels or visual novels. However, it isn't bad, as the thoughts of the main characters are pretty hilarious and well-written and the dialogue is arguably enjoyable. In my opinion, it could be more descriptive in places as it would help the immersion factor. There are some sudden changes in POV that can be confusing the first time around, but I quickly got accustomed to them.

Grammar - I won't give 5/5 stars solely because I think that I'm not skilled enough in English to notice some mistakes and give maximum scores. The grammar itself is pretty stellar and there are no problems with the spelling whatsoever which makes the read nice and smooth.

Story - The prologue gave me a distinct urban fantasy feeling mixed with some Gantz vibes, for whatever reason. That is good (I like Gantz). Then the first two chapters gave me a strong Steins;Gate feeling (that reference was pure gold, though!). Then the things just got intertwined but in a good way. It's honestly hard to describe, but it's full of action and there's a classical urban fantasy 'secret world' present (although there is a twist to it). The novel doesn't delve into time physics and doesn't try to be realistic about the 'Rewinder', but it doesn't really need to as it's great even without it.

Characters - Most of them are vivid and quirky and can be relatively easily distinguished. The MC sticks out the most, as his sarcasm and inner monologue got a good laugh out of me. There's still room for character development and I'm looking towards it. 

Conclusion: Time.Travel() is a good and definitely creative novel, mixing genres and resulting in a unique blend. Its great use of time travel and intriguing plot make it a very good read and I'll follow its progress with interest. 

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Holy crap this is AMAZING. I was wondering how you can make time travel not OP as all hell.... well this is a good example. Because they're so much stronger than him, the MC has to constantly die again and again to get ANYWHERE against his opponets. He has to use his brain to the max and cheat using time travel to create tools. I love all the creative ways he's using his power to get ahead.

Not to mention the actual characters, wow. Every single one feels like a person with their own motivations. The villains have REASONS for being villains. Do you know how rare that is? Some of them not very good reasons, but still! The grammar is also good, I understood everything as I read it.

The story? Seems like it's actually planned out here. There's mystery, it's kind of funny, plenty of action, and even a bit of face slappin.

One thing that needs work is the character descriptions, I've read 18 chapters and I can't really get a good picture of the MC in my head. I'm not saying to pull any xianxia "jade like skin, silky black hair" bullshit, but some more references to how the characters look would be helpful.

All in all? READ THIS NOW.

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A common misconception I find is that a story has to have flowery language or a convoluted plot to be a great read, but that's just not true. 

Time Travel, though minimal in expose is a fun read. It's not something that'll be read in philosophy, but it's a story many many people will like reading. 

Quite similiar to the Eastern style of writing, Onch crafts a promising premise and focuses the story around that particular point (in this case being time travel).

There are grammar mistakes, but not bad enough to put off reading.

The story is fun; it's light; it's enjoyable. It''s fast paced, but that only adds to the style of writing, which is to-the-point

I gave it a five-star in style, because it seemingly follows the eastern novel template, which is a style in and of its own. 

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Keep Cracking Out Those And I'll Keep Reading

It's tough to create a character whose powers aren't so OP that it's fun to watch them fight, complex enough that you're interested in seeing how their powers grow, yet strong enough that it's an excellent trump card. Onch has done something exceptional here in that the characters powers are interesting enough that he could probably write a whole book based on the main character trying to get by in the real world with no other supernatural elements whatsoever. 

Add that to the clearly written fight scenes, the parts where the character uses his powers to study enchanting and finds clever ways to beat his opponents, and this is a story that's worth spending some time with. You keep cranking out those pages and I'll keep reading. 

Thomas Loud
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A Bit Jarring, But Enjoyable

Time.Travel is a joy to read, with a few noticeable flaws.

Starting with style, I find the FPV rather entertaining with how character thoughts are often bizarre and extremely enlightening. This is especially true for John, with his thoughts being not only a constant source of humor but also showing of his personality. A problem that comes from the author's style though, is that shifting who has the first person view can cause for a jarring and confusing few moments afterwards.

Grammar is quite well, with a few issues here and there.

The characters are definitely a make or break for readers. I find myself absolutely loving John and just how much of a selfish person he is. He has no real problem with abusing his power and it's extremely amusing. But this can also be a turn off for people so you've been warned. The side characters are pretty interesting as well, though I do find myself much more invested in John than any of the others.

Finally the story, I'm letting you know right now. This is not a very sci-fi tale, it's much more fantasy in nature and this is not really clear until the fourth chapter. You are quite literally struck out of the blue with the shift and this is another example of the jarringness in the story. Afterward, Time.Travel really sticks to its fantastic nature and it's for all the better. The story itself is still in its infancy but is nonetheless entertaining.

Time.Travel might have a few flaws that can really bother some, but  I feel they're outweighed enough by the interesting premise, funny characters, and entertaining style of writing


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Ok, i have read the majority of books on this site, and this book is among the very best. It has some very original ideas, while paying homage to some older clichés and still makes them all interesting and entertaining, but the creativity of this series takes the cake. The MC is a very believable character that has some really great ideas, and is actually smart instead of everyone else just being dumb. The side characters are all important (so far) to the story and they all have quirks and relatable personalities. Overall this book is a must-read, and I really hope the Author of this book keeps it up because it would be a shame if this book was dropped or finished poorly. Overall, this stuff is like a great book on crack! 

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Better read japanese ln,less dissapointment

Have you ever asked yourself how would it be if you could rewind time with a phone app, but the only limit is that you can only go back 24 hours?

Yes? then come and read about the most everyday life John that somehow created this app unintentionally, but never uses it..outside of being forced by the author for some cool action plot or moneymaking. Forget about any other possible use you could think of, when you could simply do nothing and accept everything as if you never had the app.

Join the ride with me to see if the ride will break the next chapter in:

Time Travel, but every rewind makes you dumber, The Story.

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Deeply entertaining story, characters

This story was very entertaining. It was easy to read and the story came alive in my mind without much added thought necessary on my part. I would have liked to see a little more,"show" instead of so much, "telling" when it came to the characters and their actions, but that is my only gripe. This had some grammar errors, but the only ones that gave me pause were the ones where perspective/MC thoughts were involved. Nothing a quick re-read through by the author couldn't fix.