Dungeon Boss Player

Dungeon Boss Player

by Penna02

In the near future, gaming changed quickly and now a real Virtual Reality was created and games soon appeared and one of the newest was Dungeon King World, a game where the player is a Dungeon Boss and has the full control all over the dungeon domain of how to make it grow and how it will interact with the outside world.
Inside a dungeon, the boss is the King, or Queen, and the monsters inside will follow their command without questioning it.

If you want to acquire the first book without waiting for the releases, here is the link: https://www.royalroad.com/amazon/B07D55X1MT

  • Overall Score
  • Style Score
  • Story Score
  • Grammar Score
  • Character Score
  • Total Views :
  • 52,064
  • Average Views :
  • 2,479
  • Followers :
  • 202
  • Favorites :
  • 43
  • Ratings :
  • 33
  • Pages :
  • 250
Advertisement
Remove
Go to Table of Contents
Rate it
Fiction breaking rules? Report
Advertisement
Remove
Author
Penna02

Penna02

Den's Perverted Rolling Ferret

Achievements
750 Comments
Word Count (13)
Top List #2000
500 Followers
100,000 Views
Error Fixer
7th Anniversary
Advertisement
Remove

Leave a review

drakan_glasses BE NICE! Fair critique is fair, but be respectful & follow the review rules. There will be no mercy.
Reviews
Sort by:
Kalari
Overall

Fascinating take on VRMMO games.

Though the whole VRMMO thing is popular with a lot of people, many of them feel very much the same. This one however is an exception to an extent. I think you did well on changing the objective from being the "adventurer" to being the dungeon. I at least thing that this is a nice read. 

I have found little to no grammatical errors at all. Moreover, I believe the story to be one of the better VRMMO stories I have read, Partly because of the way the Lead Character is being treated by the AI.

I'll have to say that it's too bad that it only has 20 chapters though.

MarkM
Overall

But badly in need of an editor.  There are a couple of annoying repeated grammar errors that made it more difficult to fully enjoy.

The DK style VRMMO is actually an interesting twist and the game mechanics are done well.  Sort of odd that the comedy comes from the System/AI and less from the player characters, but that worked for me, actually.