The Strongest Skill: Getting rich while becoming stronger

by Kinu456

Original ONGOING Action Adventure Comedy Romance LitRPG Male Lead Secret Identity
Warning This fiction contains:
  • Profanity
  • Sexual Content

[Congratulations!! you have levelled up]

[Skill Replication has levelled up]

[Skill Replication allows you to replicate any one of the abilities of the opponent]

[Please choose the ability you want to replicate]

[1. Passive Regeneration]

[2. Stone Skin]   

At his death's door, Muto Kenshin, a low levelled Hunter with a crappy skill who was struggling for a living discovered a blue window floating over his head.

Realizing that his life has now become a game, he takes full advantage of it to become stronger and earn money.

Read how he rises from being a poor waste to a truly rich and strong Hunter, all while wooing countless girls with his charms.  

 

To Support me or for advanced chapters, Here is my Patreon link: https://www.patreon.com/anku

Join me on Discord:  DISCORD

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Table of Contents
Chapter Name Release Date
1. What are these boxes? ago
2.Checking out the features ago
3. A call from little sister ago
4. The three Quests!! ago
5. Continuous level up!! ago
6. An Upgrade in Power!! ago
7. A Boss has appeared! ago
8. And the fight begins ago
9. The Struggle for victory ago
10. Shocked!! ago
11. Chapter 11 ago
12. First Encounter ago
13. Elevated Status ago
14. WILL ago
15. Understanding Will! ago
16. Joining the Government ago
17. Overpowered Title! ago
18. Zombie Lord! ago
19. Aizawa Maria ago
20. Aizawa Maria(2) ago
21. Aizawa Maria(3) ago
22. The Specter Guardian(1) ago
23. The Specter Guardian(2) ago
24. Specter Guardian(3) ago
25. The Specter Guardian(4) ago
26. The Hidden Floor(1) ago
27. The Hidden floor(2) ago
28. Overdoing it! ago
29. The Unbeatable Zombie Guardian ago
30. Trust and Friendship! ago
31. Fierce Struggle! ago
32. Dungeon Heart ago
33. The Boy Inside The Red Crystal ago
34. Thoughts of a woman! ago
35. Decision ago
36. Ellie ago
37. A happy family, the decision ago
38. Rage! ago
39. The Dungeon Break(1) ago
40. The Dungeon Break(2) ago
41. The Dungeon Break(3) ago
42. Roxe, The rogue Dungeon core ago
43. Unbeatable Enemy! ago
44. The Contract ago
45. Let’s start ‘Round 2’ ago
46. Round 2 ago
47. Killing Roxe(1) ago
48. Killing Roxe(2) ago
49. The Dungeon Break(5) ago
50. The Longest Night(1) ago
51. The Longest Night(2) ago
52. The Longest Night(3) ago
53. The Longest Night(4) ago
54. The morning after the Night ago
55. Where is Kenshin!? ago
56. Akari's Return ago
57. Reunion! ago
58. Two Pretenders! ago
59. Bonds! ago
60. Doi's Shock! ago
61. A Dark Gathering ago
62. Kenshin’s status! ago
63. A picnic at Dungeon!? ago
64~65 ago
66. Their first times!! (3) ago
67. The art of Killing Monsters ago
68. Time to Return! ago
69. Counting the Money! ago
70. The elegant witch!! ago
71. Challenging Level 3 dungeon again! ago
72. Washing away the shame! ago
73. The Bad luck of Three-Eyed Monkeys ago
74. Run!! The Fire’s Here!! ago
75. Realization! ago
76. The one who started it all; saves them all! ago
77. Destructive Energy Manipulation ago
78. The hidden cave path ago
79. It’s a snake, right? ago
80. Burning ago
81. The Lunatic Pyromancer!! ago
82. Slaps! ago
83. Their Past(1) ago
84. Their Past(2) ago
85. Their Past(3) ago
86~87 ago
88. Conspiracies! ago
89. Conspiracies(2) ago
90. To The North ago
91. Natasha ago
92. Destiny Calling? ago
93. Setting Out ago
94. Into The Zone ago
95. Power of WIL ago
96. -Killing With Just A Thought!- ago
97. -Forming an Intent!- ago
98. Searching for the settlement ago
99. Vera's Power ago
100. -Entering The Hidden Settlement!- ago
101. Third mission! ago
102. Fight! Fight! Fight! ago
103. Exploding Apes ago
104. The Frog at the Bottom of the well! ago
105. -Kenshin’s Plight!- ago
106. 20% ??? ago
107. Rampage ago
108. Vera's Side ago
109. Vera's Side(2) ago
110. That Purple Light ago
111. Death(1) ago
112. Death(2) ago
113. Being Alive Again! ago
114. Gone Mad ago
115. DemiGods ago
116. Improvements ago
117. Second Class Advancement ago
118. Beautiful Picture ago
119. Vera's Thoughts ago
120. Vera’s Surprise! ago
121. Kenshin's plan ago
122. Fully Unsealed(1) ago
123. Fully Unsealed(2) ago
124. Decision of higher ups ago
125. A new skill ago
126. Arrival of Elites ago
127. The Adams Couple and Lyda’s problem ago
128. Like a twitching monkey ago
129. Lyda wrecked! ago
130. Lyda Wrecked(1) ago
131. Lyda wrecked(2): An untimely intervention ago
132. Meeting Natasha Again ago
133. A Weird new Skill! ago
134. Copying without any shame ago
135. Unreasonable Woman! ago
136. Preparations ago
137. An Eccentric Duo ago
138. Fight of the powerhouses(1) ago
139. Fight of the powerhouses(2) ago
140. Breaking the second pentagram ago
141. Luck! ago
142. Ultimate Destruction ago
143. The Mastermind ago
144. The Golden Skull Organization ago
145. Tired to death ago
146. Chapter 146 ago
147. The Darkness that shrouded the Sky! ago
148. An Open challenge ago
149. Ade’el’s challenge ago
150. Killing someone using others! ago
151. Ade'el vs the hunters ago
152. Completing The Third Mission ago
153. Starfall Domain ago
154. Curtains Closing ago
155. Homecoming ago
156. Kenshin goes to the bank ago
157. Ellie’s Distress call! ago
158. Face Off! ago
159. a punch to puke blood ago
160. Aftermath ago
161. Kaio's background ago
162. Morning Horror ago
163. Buying a car! ago
164. Date gone wrong(1) ago
165. Date gone wrong(2) ago
166. Date gone wrong(3) ago
167. A Date Gone Wrong(4) ago
168. A Date gone wrong(5) ago
169. Battle of Intents(1) ago
170. Battle of Intents(2) ago
171. Battle of Intents(3) ago
172. A Shadow! ago
173. A Rude Soldier ago
174. Leena Cooper ago
175. Yuki's anger! ago
176. Proving Innocence ago
177. Bloody wolves Attack ago
178. Talent! nah, Just experience... ago
179. Strange! ago
180. Nuking her worries ago
181. End of Date ago
182. A little Visitor(1) ago
183. A little visitor(2) ago
184. A little Visitor(3) ago
185. Naked ago
186. Fist fighting with monkeys(1) ago
187. Fist fighting with Monkeys(2) ago
188. Fist fighting with Monkeys(3) ago
189. The Monkey Chief ago
190. A fierce battle! ago
191. Leo’s Surprise: Prelude to an approaching storm ago
192. Chapter 192 ago
193. Spoiler!! ago
194. Chapter 194 ago
195. A hundread-year-old family’s fall(1) ago
196. Chapter 196 ago
197. Chapter 197 ago
198. Chapter 198 ago
199. Leena's power ago
200. Chapter 200 ago
201. Chapter 201 ago
202. Chapter 202 ago
203. Chapter 203 ago
204. Chapter 204 ago
205. Chapter 205 ago
206. Chapter 206 ago
207. Lava Monster(1) ago
208. Lava Monster(2) ago
209. Lava Monster(3) ago
210. Lava Monster(4) ago
211. A new skill ago
212. A shy Chiba ago
213. Chapter 213 ago
214. Hurtful Words ago
215. Chapter 215 ago
216. Resolved ago
217. An Idea ago
218. Seduction? ago
219. Chapter 219 ago
220. Flaunting Status! ago
221. Unexpected Discovery ago
222. Finding his will ago
223. Chapter 223 ago
224. Sea Monster Rampage (1) ago
225. Sea Monster Rampage(2) ago
226. An argument with ignored logic(1) ago
227. An arguement with ignored logic(2) ago
228. Lily's Proposal(1) ago
229. Lily's proposal(2) ago
230. Reappearance of Laser Hero ago
231. A chance Encounter ago
232. Massacre(1) ago
233. Massacre(2) ago
234. Massacre(3) ago
235. Corrosion vs Destruction(1) ago
236. Corrosion Vs Destruction(2) ago
237. Escape! ago
238. The Pursuit ago
239. Flying! ago
240. Kidnapper Kenshin ago
241. Conclusion! ago
242. Helpless(1) ago
243. Helpless(2) ago
244. Going All out ago
245. Removing the Kiddy gloves ago
246. The Conclusion to a Pointless battle ago
247. Eight Trigrams Organization ago
248. Eight Trigrams Organization(2) ago
249. The Answer ago
250. A Surprise ago
251. Idle Talk ago
252. Suguro's Request ago
253. Meeting Isabella Again ago
255. Waiting ago
254. Setting out ago
256. New Skills ago
257. Approaching Danger(Sea Monsters(1)) ago
258. Sea Monsters(2) ago
259. Round 1 ago
260. Round 2 ago
261. Chapter 261 ago
262. Monster in Hoards(1) ago
263. Monster in Hordes(2) ago
264. Chapter 264 ago
265. Mermaids(1) ago
266. Mermaids(2) ago
267. Mermaids(3) ago
268. Mermaids(4) ago
269. Mermaids(5) ago
270. Tiger Faced Sharks ago
271. Tiger Faced Sharks(2) ago
272. Armored Corrupted Turtle ago
273. Water Pillar ago
274. DiLong ago
275. Prediction ability ago
276. Battle against a Dragon(1) ago
277. Battle against a Dragon(2) ago
278. Battle against a Dragon(3) ago
279. Battle against a Dragon(4) ago
280. A desperate struggle in the swirling waters(1) ago
281. A desperate struggle in the swirling waters(2) ago
282. A desperate struggle in the swirling waters(3) ago
283. Five seconds ago
284. Heavily Wounded ago
285. In the Black Void again ago
286. Aftermath(1) ago
287. Aftermath(2) ago
288. Waking Up ago
289. Comparing Their Past ago
290. The Reason for wounds ago
291. Chapter 291 ago
292. Chapter 292 ago
293. Something Happened! ago
294. Weird Group ago
295. Fight! ago
296. Kenshin Vs. Wolfman and Vampire girl(1) ago
297. Kenshin Vs. Wolfman and Vampire girl(2) ago
298. Power of Death ago
299. Joy Vs Necromancer ago
300. Mysterious Twin-tailed Girl ago
301. Ena ago
302. Another Compulsory Mission ago
303. Kenshin Vs. Princess of Darkness ago
304. Rescue Success! ago
305. Recruiting Chiba(1) ago
306. Recruiting Chiba(2) ago
307. Recruiting Chiba(3) ago
308. Their first Dungeon Raid(1) ago
309. Chapter 309 ago
310. Their First Dungeon Raid(3) ago
311. Familiar Enemy ago
312. Rematch(1) ago
313. Rematch against Lyda (2) ago
314. Rematch against Lyda(3) ago
315. Fight! ago
316. The Crow’s Death ago
317. Chiba's Dilemma ago
318. Reversal(1) ago
319. Exposed ago
320. Reversal(3) ago
321. A survivor ago
322. The man in the sea of blue flames ago
323. Kenshin vs Joy ago
324. Chain Reaction ago
325. Chain Reaction(2) ago
326. Shock! ago
327. Chapter 327 ago
328. Bleak Future? ago
329. Giant's Shadow ago
330. Doing it the old way. ago
331. An Ugly Boss ago
332. Revelations(1) ago
333. Revelations(2) ago
334. Chapter 334 ago
335. An Argument ago
336. No fate? ago
337. Grave News ago
338. Wiped-off from the map(1) ago
339. Wiped-off-the map(2) ago
340. Wiped off the map(3) ago
341. Annihilated City! ago
342. Confronting! ago
343. Stalemate ago
344. A Losing Battle On All Sides ago
345. Nightmare(1) ago
346. Nightmare(2) ago
347. Nightmare(3) ago
348. Sylph Race’s Ultimate Pursuit ago
349. Parting Words ago
350. Prelude(1) ago
351. Prelude(2) ago
352. Prelude(3) ago
353. Prelude(4): The Elders’ Council ago
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Marc'dU4death
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Everyone should nope the F away from this.

There are only 2 situations that i can see this type of writting being acceptable

1) non native english [probablility 90%]

2) author is under the age of 12

3) this is just a practice/way to be creative with no realistics goals....

now this story has one thing going for it, you want to like it. I do not know how or why but i really wanted to see this story improve.

unfortunetly it did not.

amin0
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My first review didn't go through

The writing is awful. It overpowers any good that story seemed to have and kills any potentional it held. The plot and premise are interesting despite it being a mish-mash of japanese light novels and english litrpg genres, but it also a mish-mash of the worst tropes of both genres as well. The author's writing skill does seem to get progressively better but the basic flaws in the author's grasp of English is still inherent in his writing. This isn't something that a simple editing would fix as it would require rewriting most of the story. The character and the character interaction with the world is completely immature despite how much the character yells "I'm mature! I took care of my sister financially!". I expected a heartwarming, weak-to-strong, mature MC as he navigates this litrpg while taking care of his sister, but instead I receive a weeby and cringey story. This is not a story I would recommend to even long time users to this site, let alone the mainstream media. I can't believe the author shamelessly tries to monetize this story so much when his writing is so lacking.

Ibskib
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Juvenile prose, poorly edited.

It should have been a warning sign to me when there's even a spelling error in the summary itself.
I could only get a few chapters in before I had to abandon the story.
the prose is both juvenile and sloppily edited, the author is in painful need of an editor, not only to help proofreading, but the general quality of the writing needs a lot of work also.

gary0044187
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Story is hot garbage.

Story concept is only mildly over done, this wouldn't be so bad if throughout the chapters the plot doesn't reuse so many tired tropes.  As of how far I got into the story the author seems to put no effort into editing grammar.  The MC is only the sum of the skills he has, without those he would have no character.  Every other character only exists to make the MC look better.  Still amazed this story is so highly rated.  Would rate lower if I could.

radiomutt
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My review is written after having read up to chapter 16. As of writing this review, there are 88 chapters. Therefore, this reviews is not comprehensive and up to date on the story as a whole. Unfortunately, I dropped the story at chapter 16 as it failed to hold my attention.

If the author could get a friend to beta for basic grammar mistakes, like not adding punctuation to speech - I checked the latest chapter just to see if they improved, and while it's spotty, there seems to be more cases where the author catches himself than not, which is nice to see. There are translated novels with worse grammar than this, though, that seem to get a pass and have huge popularity, so for an amateur and free work of fiction written by one person with no editor, this is, I mean, it's okay. The grammar is an aside.

The thing that jumps out at me the most about the story is that it feels like the passion project of someone who reads a lot of eastern webnovels and is trying to emulate aspects of them without really analysing it, so it comes off as clunky and cringey. Ex:

“Eto…mmm…Young sir, we will like to apologize for our rude behavior earlier”

“Ohh! Why?”

“We are like frogs at the bottom of a well, who tried to judge a book by its cover. We have offended you in our ignorance. Please accept our apology” with a shout all nine middle-aged men swallowed their pride and kneeled in front of Kenshin.

"Eto" is a Japanese filler word, such as "um" or "uh". There's no real need to use "eto" in a sentence of english words except that people who translate Japanese novels sometimes don't translate it into a western filler word, so if Japanese novels have it, this novel can have it. It comes off as awkward and jarring. But at least the story is, judging by the use of Japanese names and honorofics, meant to be set in Japan, so at least it's geographically accurate.

"Frog at the bottom of a well" is a Chinese proverb. It's used extremely often in Chinese webnovels, especially wuxia novels, which is probably why it showed up here. But seeing a Chinese proverb in a Japanese-bent story is awkward to say the least. On top of that, "Frog at the bottom of a well/judging a book by its cover" is mixing metaphors, and there's no indication that this is an intentional flub due to the nervousness of the speaker. Something like "We were frogs at the bottom of a well, or, no, um, w-we tried to judge a book by its cover- I mean, I'm sorry if we offended you with our ignorance!" would indicate this awkward mixing of metaphors was part of the speaker's nervousness and overeagnerness to apologise, and you could even brush off their using a Chinese proverb as grabbing at anything that came to mind in their anxiousness.

Another ex:

“Bakayaro! Even if it’s a low tier boss, it was still something we couldn’t kill with guns. Besides, it wouldn't come alone from that place” the middle-aged man shouted angrily at his subordinate.

“Hii!! I am sorry sir…Ehh! What the hell?” suddenly, Yutani shouted as if he had seen a ghost.

"Bakayaro" is just an entire Japanese word that is inserted into a story that up to this point, aside from the use of honorifics, was wholly english, and comes off deeply awkwardly. But "baka/bakayaro" is one of those famous Japanese words that translators just decide not to translate, god knows why, that ends up jarring people out of the story. "Hii!!" is a Japanese exclamation that is commonly used, but because "hi" is an existing english word, it comes off as clunky and awkward. Using "Yii!!" instead, or an English vocalisation would have been better.

The use of Japanese honorifics are fine, because they can convey social standings that using English equivalents might not, but randomly injecting Japanese words and phrases just serves to break the immersion of the story, as they are glaringly out of place. It's just a superficial emulation of "easterness" without really deeply thinking about it. There are many other ways the story does this, with a mix of Chinese narrative tropes and Japanese narrative tropes, that is equally off putting in the same way, but using these speech moments is the easiest example of what I mean.

All I can say to the author is: find your own voice. It's clear that you're a big fan of eastern webnovel genres and tropes, and it's great that you're taking inspiration from them, but just copying aspects of them ends up making your story feel awkward. Figure out what you like about the genre, the core points, and then explore it with your own voice and your own experiences instead of trying to just emulate JP and CN webnovel quirks.

I was going to say more - about how the MC was bland and had no real personality or interesting and original character traits, how the story was slow moving and awkward, but I don't feel I've read enough to give a clear and accurate review of those things, and my main gripe was that I didn't feel like I was really reading someone's original vision, I was just reading someone copy eastern webnovel tropes.

kronosxviii
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Wish Fulfillment, Tropes, Cringe, & Nonsense

3/21/2019:  Rage quit as of chapter 174 of 200

 

Style:

For such a horrid story, this is probably the only thing this author has going.  His/her style is consistant with good pacing and seems te be fairly set in stone, wither that's good or bad is entirely subjective.

 

Story:

An average take on the "dungeons in the modern world" setting.

SUFFERS, heavily from a severe case of:  "X only matters when the author feels like it / remembers something they wrote previously."

Spoiler: Spoiler

 

 

Grammar:

Was going to be 0.5 stars, but the author started using tools to "help" with his/her writing so: 1 star.

Overall quality ranges from understandable too purely nonsensical, literally there are times I have no idea what a sentence is supposed  to mean.  While rare you will run into sentence that would fit the following example:

Imagine someone with the intent of asking why the color of the sky is blue by saying: "Sky light water?"

To native speakers of English that sentence doesn't mean anything, but to non native speakers it would make sense if that's the best they can do.  Afterall I'm sure if I were to go to Germany and attempt to speak their language it would sound like pure nonsense to them.

Other than the usual large volume of errors you can expect of RR stories this author has a unique case of: wrong~word~itis.  The most common(chuckels) is when he/she uses "common" when trying to say "come on."

I'm going to assume it's a classic case of: spellcheck says it's right so it's right, which is similar to Todd Howards: "It just works."

 

Character(s): If I could go below 0.5 stars... I would.

Every. Trash. Japanese. Character. Trope. Possible.  Is present or is going to be. 

Main:

The main character is simply in every sense, a moron.  He's Japanese so like "all" Japanese people he's "kind & proper" even to the point of having no self respect.  Every female character that has more than one sentence describing their looks falls for him.  Every interaction with said characters made me cringe in some way or another.

There's... Just so much wrong with this character that I'm could write a novel on it, but I'll just paraphrase my favorite inner monologue line of his:

"Afterall I'm not some character in a story with plot armor."

He has so much plot armor he might as well have a God Tier skill called: "Plot Armor."

Side(cancer) Characters:

Do you know what Tropes are?  Because I'm struggling to think of a character that doesn't fit a J-Trope.

Every non-antagonist characters' sense of professionalism, experience, and personality disappear within a few sentences with the main character.  Turning into love struck damsel's or Yes-Men/Women.  They literally turn into NPC's, and while it's amusing in the short turn it gets boring fast.

Antagonists, I don't think there's been a real threat this entire time except for the main characters delusions in the face of his plot armor.  They're glorified glorified hit boxes that turn from masters minds to super powerful fighters that turn into paper tigers due to plot-armor and his NEED to look cool in front of beauties.

Impaler
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I remember coming onto this story a couple of months ago in its infancy and being super disappointed in the grammar and flow of the story. To those that are in the same boat as me, trust me, the author has made a massive push towards quality. I can't describe how happy I am I got another long novel to read here and how much better it is in comparison to before. Good job Kinu456, thanks for the chapters.

After the published chapters, this story is crap. I'm taking back my 5-star review until you edit these chapters this is awful.

Cestarian
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I read the other reviews before I started reading, I was expecting it to be abysmal, and while it wasn't as bad as I was expecting, it was still pretty bad.

The story's premise is practically identical to Solo Leveling (which despite the cringey name is actually a pretty fun read and has a half decent manhwa out too)

But it's nowhere near as good in it's execution.

The author keeps introducing new characters as if they're someone important, and then proceeds to completely forget about them the oment they first separate from the protagonist.

The story sometimes breaks the POV into some supposedly mysterious group of bad guys doung supposedly bad things, with the author trying to be all cryptic about it, but it feels kinda like the author is saying "hah look here is a mysterious group of bad guys doing mysterious probably bad guy stuff! what is the meaning behind their mysterious probably bad guy actions?" (e.g. these are chapters with a bunch of words where nothing really happens)

The story is a terribly weird mishmash of chinese (garbage) webnovels (e.g. wuxia/xianxia/etc) where everyone and their dog thinks they're the hottest shit on the planet and use that as an excuse to be dicks to literally everyone. (I mean everyone is like this, even the protagonist is somewhat like this). And weeb writing (e.g. littered with weeb slang, happens in a place called japan that sounds nothing like the real japan (you know, the one I'm sitting in right now), and everyone either has japanese sounding names ornames that sound like they'd fit well into anime)

It's like the author took everything I hate about chinese writers and mixed it with everything I hate about western writers (who happen to be weebs) and mashed it all together to make a somewhat (but not really) coherent story.


Most of the story feels incredibly rushed, for example one day he's making appointments to meet some people the day after, and counting his loot (supposedly the 'rich' part from the title) then the next day he's on a helicopter flying across the world (as if a helicopter could cover that kind of distance with any kind of speed lol) to fight monsters again, the appointments, the characters and the loot is all forgotten about.

There are also instances where he beats powerful monsters, gets op loot from them and then proceeds to completely forget about it. Or times where he completely forgot about taking the loot and then in the next chapter he magically has it.

And he gets an ability that costs 10mp to cast, he has 40mp, and yet he can somehow spam that ability like he had unlimited mana because that's what suits the author at that time.

In a nutshell: It's pretty bad. I somehow managed to make it through 90 chapters of this stuff and it somehow only manages to get worse with time as plot holes and loose ends just increase and increase with every passing chapter.

camperbee
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review as of chapter 9

i stumbled upon this fiction with high expectations, seeing as it was number 1 on trending works. sadly it did not deliver, for me atleast.

i give it a low to average rating as the style seems quite „childish“ to me.

the grammar is an ok i suppose. it is readable, but one has to expect a mistake every few sentences with this fiction.

Additionally, there are also many concepts that werent thought through, in my opinion.

The money system.

The lvl system. Why does he have a luck stat and no int, wis or charm stat at the beginning.

His skills are inconsistent. Passive regeneration was supposed to regenerate 2 health every 10 sec, now in chapter 8 or 9 it says every 4 minutes. The skeleton boss‘s health is also inconsistent going from 1000 to 400 and back to 1000 on chapter 8 or 9. Metal hands skill gets called metal arms skill in chapter 9.

These are also not the only cases of such inconsistencies....

how come he has a status? His replica skill doesnt hint to it having such an extra feature... how come the hunters association has knowledge of lvls when nobody can see those? (Status beeing an abnormal thing to the mc)

Choice of terms (rpg-game). Shouldnt an rpg world not think of games that are similar to their reality as an rpg?

Nonetheless, i think its ok as a fiction for the author to train his/her writing skills.

If there are any question as to why i gave a certain raiting dont hesitate to pm me.

best of luck in your journey as an author.

Seras
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Editing needed (badly)

It has an interesting idea I guess, but it's rough. Really really rough. It needs an edit sweep easy to spot errors "was around one million golds." Yeah... That's only the first time the added S to the end of words was found in the first chapter.

It could be fun, and I respect the dedication, but instead of pumping chapters, spend an extra 10 minutes proofreading.