The Strongest Skill: Getting rich while becoming stronger

by Kinu456

Original ONGOING Action Adventure Comedy Romance Harem LitRPG Male Lead Secret Identity
Warning This fiction contains:
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[Congratulations!! you have levelled up]

[Skill Replication has levelled up]

[Skill Replication allows you to replicate any one of the abilities of the opponent]

[Please choose the ability you want to replicate]

[1. Passive Regeneration]

[2. Stone Skin]   

At his death's door, Muto Kenshin, a low levelled Hunter with a crappy skill who was struggling for a living discovered a blue window floating over his head.

Realizing that his life has now become a game, he takes full advantage of it to become stronger and earn money.

Read how he rises from being a poor waste to a truly rich and strong Hunter, all while wooing countless girls with his charms.  

 

To Support me or for advanced chapters, Here is my Patreon link: https://www.patreon.com/anku

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Table of Contents
Chapter Name Release Date
1. What are these boxes? ago
2.Checking out the features ago
3. A call from little sister ago
4. The three Quests!! ago
5. Continuous level up!! ago
6. An Upgrade in Power!! ago
7. A Boss has appeared! ago
8. And the fight begins ago
9. The Struggle for victory ago
10. Shocked!! ago
11. Chapter 11 ago
12. First Encounter ago
13. Elevated Status ago
14. WILL ago
15. Understanding Will! ago
16. Joining the Government ago
17. Overpowered Title! ago
18. Zombie Lord! ago
19. Aizawa Maria ago
20. Aizawa Maria(2) ago
21. Aizawa Maria(3) ago
22. The Specter Guardian(1) ago
23. The Specter Guardian(2) ago
24. Specter Guardian(3) ago
25. The Specter Guardian(4) ago
26. The Hidden Floor(1) ago
27. The Hidden floor(2) ago
28. Overdoing it! ago
29. The Unbeatable Zombie Guardian ago
30. Trust and Friendship! ago
31. Fierce Struggle! ago
32. Dungeon Heart ago
33. The Boy Inside The Red Crystal ago
34. Thoughts of a woman! ago
35. Decision ago
36. Ellie ago
37. A happy family, the decision ago
38. Rage! ago
39. The Dungeon Break(1) ago
40. The Dungeon Break(2) ago
41. The Dungeon Break(3) ago
42. Roxe, The rogue Dungeon core ago
43. Unbeatable Enemy! ago
44. The Contract ago
45. Let’s start ‘Round 2’ ago
46. Round 2 ago
47. Killing Roxe(1) ago
48. Killing Roxe(2) ago
49. The Dungeon Break(5) ago
50. The Longest Night(1) ago
51. The Longest Night(2) ago
52. The Longest Night(3) ago
53. The Longest Night(4) ago
54. The morning after the Night ago
55. Where is Kenshin!? ago
56. Akari's Return ago
57. Reunion! ago
58. Two Pretenders! ago
59. Bonds! ago
60. Doi's Shock! ago
61. A Dark Gathering ago
62. Kenshin’s status! ago
63. A picnic at Dungeon!? ago
64~65 ago
66. Their first times!! (3) ago
67. The art of Killing Monsters ago
68. Time to Return! ago
69. Counting the Money! ago
70. The elegant witch!! ago
71. Challenging Level 3 dungeon again! ago
72. Washing away the shame! ago
73. The Bad luck of Three-Eyed Monkeys ago
74. Run!! The Fire’s Here!! ago
75. Realization! ago
76. The one who started it all; saves them all! ago
77. Destructive Energy Manipulation ago
78. The hidden cave path ago
79. It’s a snake, right? ago
80. Burning ago
81. The Lunatic Pyromancer!! ago
82. Slaps! ago
83. Their Past(1) ago
84. Their Past(2) ago
85. Their Past(3) ago
86~87 ago
88. Conspiracies! ago
89. Conspiracies(2) ago
90. To The North ago
91. Natasha ago
92. Destiny Calling? ago
93. Setting Out ago
94. Into The Zone ago
95. Power of WIL ago
96. -Killing With Just A Thought!- ago
97. -Forming an Intent!- ago
98. Searching for the settlement ago
99. Vera's Power ago
100. -Entering The Hidden Settlement!- ago
101. Third mission! ago
102. Fight! Fight! Fight! ago
103. Exploding Apes ago
104. The Frog at the Bottom of the well! ago
105. -Kenshin’s Plight!- ago
106. 20% ??? ago
107. Rampage ago
108. Vera's Side ago
109. Vera's Side(2) ago
110. That Purple Light ago
111. Death(1) ago
112. Death(2) ago
113. Being Alive Again! ago
114. Gone Mad ago
115. DemiGods ago
116. Improvements ago
117. Second Class Advancement ago
118. Beautiful Picture ago
119. Vera's Thoughts ago
120. Vera’s Surprise! ago
121. Kenshin's plan ago
122. Fully Unsealed(1) ago
123. Fully Unsealed(2) ago
124. Decision of higher ups ago
125. A new skill ago
126. Arrival of Elites ago
127. The Adams Couple and Lyda’s problem ago
128. Like a twitching monkey ago
129. Lyda wrecked! ago
130. Lyda Wrecked(1) ago
131. Lyda wrecked(2): An untimely intervention ago
132. Meeting Natasha Again ago
133. A Weird new Skill! ago
134. Copying without any shame ago
135. Unreasonable Woman! ago
136. Preparations ago
137. An Eccentric Duo ago
138. Fight of the powerhouses(1) ago
139. Fight of the powerhouses(2) ago
140. Breaking the second pentagram ago
141. Luck! ago
142. Ultimate Destruction ago
143. The Mastermind ago
144. The Golden Skull Organization ago
145. Tired to death ago
146. Chapter 146 ago
147. The Darkness that shrouded the Sky! ago
148. An Open challenge ago
149. Ade’el’s challenge ago
150. Killing someone using others! ago
151. Ade'el vs the hunters ago
152. Completing The Third Mission ago
153. Starfall Domain ago
154. Curtains Closing ago
155. Homecoming ago
156. Kenshin goes to the bank ago
157. Ellie’s Distress call! ago
158. Face Off! ago
159. a punch to puke blood ago
160. Aftermath ago
161. Kaio's background ago
162. Morning Horror ago
163. Buying a car! ago
164. Date gone wrong(1) ago
165. Date gone wrong(2) ago
166. Date gone wrong(3) ago
167. A Date Gone Wrong(4) ago
168. A Date gone wrong(5) ago
169. Battle of Intents(1) ago
170. Battle of Intents(2) ago
171. Battle of Intents(3) ago
172. A Shadow! ago
173. A Rude Soldier ago
174. Leena Cooper ago
175. Yuki's anger! ago
176. Proving Innocence ago
177. Bloody wolves Attack ago
178. Talent! nah, Just experience... ago
179. Strange! ago
180. Nuking her worries ago
181. End of Date ago
182. A little Visitor(1) ago
183. A little visitor(2) ago
184. A little Visitor(3) ago
185. Naked ago
186. Fist fighting with monkeys(1) ago
187. Fist fighting with Monkeys(2) ago
188. Fist fighting with Monkeys(3) ago
189. The Monkey Chief ago
190. A fierce battle! ago
191. Leo’s Surprise: Prelude to an approaching storm ago
192. Chapter 192 ago
193. Spoiler!! ago
194. Chapter 194 ago
195. A hundread-year-old family’s fall(1) ago
196. Chapter 196 ago
197. Chapter 197 ago
198. Chapter 198 ago
199. Leena's power ago
200. Chapter 200 ago
201. Chapter 201 ago
202. Chapter 202 ago
203. Chapter 203 ago
204. Chapter 204 ago
205. Chapter 205 ago
206. Chapter 206 ago
207. Lava Monster(1) ago
208. Lava Monster(2) ago
209. Lava Monster(3) ago
210. Lava Monster(4) ago
211. A new skill ago
212. A shy Chiba ago
213. Chapter 213 ago
214. Hurtful Words ago
215. Chapter 215 ago
216. Resolved ago
217. An Idea ago
218. Seduction? ago
219. Chapter 219 ago
220. Flaunting Status! ago
221. Unexpected Discovery ago
222. Finding his will ago
223. Chapter 223 ago
224. Sea Monster Rampage (1) ago
225. Sea Monster Rampage(2) ago
226. An argument with ignored logic(1) ago
227. An arguement with ignored logic(2) ago
228. Lily's Proposal(1) ago
229. Lily's proposal(2) ago
230. Reappearance of Laser Hero ago
231. A chance Encounter ago
232. Massacre(1) ago
233. Massacre(2) ago
234. Massacre(3) ago
235. Corrosion vs Destruction(1) ago
236. Corrosion Vs Destruction(2) ago
237. Escape! ago
238. The Pursuit ago
239. Flying! ago
240. Kidnapper Kenshin ago
241. Conclusion! ago
242. Helpless(1) ago
243. Helpless(2) ago
244. Going All out ago
245. Removing the Kiddy gloves ago
246. The Conclusion to a Pointless battle ago
247. Eight Trigrams Organization ago
248. Eight Trigrams Organization(2) ago
249. The Answer ago
250. A Surprise ago
251. Idle Talk ago
252. Suguro's Request ago
253. Meeting Isabella Again ago
255. Waiting ago
254. Setting out ago
256. New Skills ago
257. Approaching Danger(Sea Monsters(1)) ago
258. Sea Monsters(2) ago
259. Round 1 ago
260. Round 2 ago
261. Chapter 261 ago
262. Monster in Hoards(1) ago
263. Monster in Hordes(2) ago
264. Chapter 264 ago
265. Mermaids(1) ago
266. Mermaids(2) ago
267. Mermaids(3) ago
268. Mermaids(4) ago
269. Mermaids(5) ago
270. Tiger Faced Sharks ago
271. Tiger Faced Sharks(2) ago
272. Armored Corrupted Turtle ago
273. Water Pillar ago
274. DiLong ago
275. Prediction ability ago
276. Battle against a Dragon(1) ago
277. Battle against a Dragon(2) ago
278. Battle against a Dragon(3) ago
279. Battle against a Dragon(4) ago
280. A desperate struggle in the swirling waters(1) ago
281. A desperate struggle in the swirling waters(2) ago
282. A desperate struggle in the swirling waters(3) ago
283. Five seconds ago
284. Heavily Wounded ago
285. In the Black Void again ago
286. Aftermath(1) ago
287. Aftermath(2) ago
288. Waking Up ago
289. Comparing Their Past ago
290. The Reason for wounds ago
291. Chapter 291 ago
292. Chapter 292 ago
293. Something Happened! ago
294. Weird Group ago
295. Fight! ago
296. Kenshin Vs. Wolfman and Vampire girl(1) ago
297. Kenshin Vs. Wolfman and Vampire girl(2) ago
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amin0
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My first review didn't go through

The writing is awful. It overpowers any good that story seemed to have and kills any potentional it held. The plot and premise are interesting despite it being a mish-mash of japanese light novels and english litrpg genres, but it also a mish-mash of the worst tropes of both genres as well. The author's writing skill does seem to get progressively better but the basic flaws in the author's grasp of English is still inherent in his writing. This isn't something that a simple editing would fix as it would require rewriting most of the story. The character and the character interaction with the world is completely immature despite how much the character yells "I'm mature! I took care of my sister financially!". I expected a heartwarming, weak-to-strong, mature MC as he navigates this litrpg while taking care of his sister, but instead I receive a weeby and cringey story. This is not a story I would recommend to even long time users to this site, let alone the mainstream media. I can't believe the author shamelessly tries to monetize this story so much when his writing is so lacking.

radiomutt
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My review is written after having read up to chapter 16. As of writing this review, there are 88 chapters. Therefore, this reviews is not comprehensive and up to date on the story as a whole. Unfortunately, I dropped the story at chapter 16 as it failed to hold my attention.

If the author could get a friend to beta for basic grammar mistakes, like not adding punctuation to speech - I checked the latest chapter just to see if they improved, and while it's spotty, there seems to be more cases where the author catches himself than not, which is nice to see. There are translated novels with worse grammar than this, though, that seem to get a pass and have huge popularity, so for an amateur and free work of fiction written by one person with no editor, this is, I mean, it's okay. The grammar is an aside.

The thing that jumps out at me the most about the story is that it feels like the passion project of someone who reads a lot of eastern webnovels and is trying to emulate aspects of them without really analysing it, so it comes off as clunky and cringey. Ex:

“Eto…mmm…Young sir, we will like to apologize for our rude behavior earlier”

“Ohh! Why?”

“We are like frogs at the bottom of a well, who tried to judge a book by its cover. We have offended you in our ignorance. Please accept our apology” with a shout all nine middle-aged men swallowed their pride and kneeled in front of Kenshin.

"Eto" is a Japanese filler word, such as "um" or "uh". There's no real need to use "eto" in a sentence of english words except that people who translate Japanese novels sometimes don't translate it into a western filler word, so if Japanese novels have it, this novel can have it. It comes off as awkward and jarring. But at least the story is, judging by the use of Japanese names and honorofics, meant to be set in Japan, so at least it's geographically accurate.

"Frog at the bottom of a well" is a Chinese proverb. It's used extremely often in Chinese webnovels, especially wuxia novels, which is probably why it showed up here. But seeing a Chinese proverb in a Japanese-bent story is awkward to say the least. On top of that, "Frog at the bottom of a well/judging a book by its cover" is mixing metaphors, and there's no indication that this is an intentional flub due to the nervousness of the speaker. Something like "We were frogs at the bottom of a well, or, no, um, w-we tried to judge a book by its cover- I mean, I'm sorry if we offended you with our ignorance!" would indicate this awkward mixing of metaphors was part of the speaker's nervousness and overeagnerness to apologise, and you could even brush off their using a Chinese proverb as grabbing at anything that came to mind in their anxiousness.

Another ex:

“Bakayaro! Even if it’s a low tier boss, it was still something we couldn’t kill with guns. Besides, it wouldn't come alone from that place” the middle-aged man shouted angrily at his subordinate.

“Hii!! I am sorry sir…Ehh! What the hell?” suddenly, Yutani shouted as if he had seen a ghost.

"Bakayaro" is just an entire Japanese word that is inserted into a story that up to this point, aside from the use of honorifics, was wholly english, and comes off deeply awkwardly. But "baka/bakayaro" is one of those famous Japanese words that translators just decide not to translate, god knows why, that ends up jarring people out of the story. "Hii!!" is a Japanese exclamation that is commonly used, but because "hi" is an existing english word, it comes off as clunky and awkward. Using "Yii!!" instead, or an English vocalisation would have been better.

The use of Japanese honorifics are fine, because they can convey social standings that using English equivalents might not, but randomly injecting Japanese words and phrases just serves to break the immersion of the story, as they are glaringly out of place. It's just a superficial emulation of "easterness" without really deeply thinking about it. There are many other ways the story does this, with a mix of Chinese narrative tropes and Japanese narrative tropes, that is equally off putting in the same way, but using these speech moments is the easiest example of what I mean.

All I can say to the author is: find your own voice. It's clear that you're a big fan of eastern webnovel genres and tropes, and it's great that you're taking inspiration from them, but just copying aspects of them ends up making your story feel awkward. Figure out what you like about the genre, the core points, and then explore it with your own voice and your own experiences instead of trying to just emulate JP and CN webnovel quirks.

I was going to say more - about how the MC was bland and had no real personality or interesting and original character traits, how the story was slow moving and awkward, but I don't feel I've read enough to give a clear and accurate review of those things, and my main gripe was that I didn't feel like I was really reading someone's original vision, I was just reading someone copy eastern webnovel tropes.

camperbee
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review as of chapter 9

i stumbled upon this fiction with high expectations, seeing as it was number 1 on trending works. sadly it did not deliver, for me atleast.

i give it a low to average rating as the style seems quite „childish“ to me.

the grammar is an ok i suppose. it is readable, but one has to expect a mistake every few sentences with this fiction.

Additionally, there are also many concepts that werent thought through, in my opinion.

The money system.

The lvl system. Why does he have a luck stat and no int, wis or charm stat at the beginning.

His skills are inconsistent. Passive regeneration was supposed to regenerate 2 health every 10 sec, now in chapter 8 or 9 it says every 4 minutes. The skeleton boss‘s health is also inconsistent going from 1000 to 400 and back to 1000 on chapter 8 or 9. Metal hands skill gets called metal arms skill in chapter 9.

These are also not the only cases of such inconsistencies....

how come he has a status? His replica skill doesnt hint to it having such an extra feature... how come the hunters association has knowledge of lvls when nobody can see those? (Status beeing an abnormal thing to the mc)

Choice of terms (rpg-game). Shouldnt an rpg world not think of games that are similar to their reality as an rpg?

Nonetheless, i think its ok as a fiction for the author to train his/her writing skills.

If there are any question as to why i gave a certain raiting dont hesitate to pm me.

best of luck in your journey as an author.

kronosxviii
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Wish Fulfillment, Tropes, Cringe, & Nonsense

3/21/2019:  Rage quit as of chapter 174 of 200

 

Style:

For such a horrid story, this is probably the only thing this author has going.  His/her style is consistant with good pacing and seems te be fairly set in stone, wither that's good or bad is entirely subjective.

 

Story:

An average take on the "dungeons in the modern world" setting.

SUFFERS, heavily from a severe case of:  "X only matters when the author feels like it / remembers something they wrote previously."

Spoiler: Spoiler

 

 

Grammar:

Was going to be 0.5 stars, but the author started using tools to "help" with his/her writing so: 1 star.

Overall quality ranges from understandable too purely nonsensical, literally there are times I have no idea what a sentence is supposed  to mean.  While rare you will run into sentence that would fit the following example:

Imagine someone with the intent of asking why the color of the sky is blue by saying: "Sky light water?"

To native speakers of English that sentence doesn't mean anything, but to non native speakers it would make sense if that's the best they can do.  Afterall I'm sure if I were to go to Germany and attempt to speak their language it would sound like pure nonsense to them.

Other than the usual large volume of errors you can expect of RR stories this author has a unique case of: wrong~word~itis.  The most common(chuckels) is when he/she uses "common" when trying to say "come on."

I'm going to assume it's a classic case of: spellcheck says it's right so it's right, which is similar to Todd Howards: "It just works."

 

Character(s): If I could go below 0.5 stars... I would.

Every. Trash. Japanese. Character. Trope. Possible.  Is present or is going to be. 

Main:

The main character is simply in every sense, a moron.  He's Japanese so like "all" Japanese people he's "kind & proper" even to the point of having no self respect.  Every female character that has more than one sentence describing their looks falls for him.  Every interaction with said characters made me cringe in some way or another.

There's... Just so much wrong with this character that I'm could write a novel on it, but I'll just paraphrase my favorite inner monologue line of his:

"Afterall I'm not some character in a story with plot armor."

He has so much plot armor he might as well have a God Tier skill called: "Plot Armor."

Side(cancer) Characters:

Do you know what Tropes are?  Because I'm struggling to think of a character that doesn't fit a J-Trope.

Every non-antagonist characters' sense of professionalism, experience, and personality disappear within a few sentences with the main character.  Turning into love struck damsel's or Yes-Men/Women.  They literally turn into NPC's, and while it's amusing in the short turn it gets boring fast.

Antagonists, I don't think there's been a real threat this entire time except for the main characters delusions in the face of his plot armor.  They're glorified glorified hit boxes that turn from masters minds to super powerful fighters that turn into paper tigers due to plot-armor and his NEED to look cool in front of beauties.

Jaksterzoo
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Got use to the mistakes.

At: chapter 27. 

This is a hard read. The grammar made this difficult to read, the author DID NOT change contradicting information that readers have pointed out, and there are a lot of stats that say one thing then immediately mean another. '5 meters to 50 meters for death slash.' Da heck. Not only that but the character himself is confusing. He is 23 and no doubt he shouldn't just be 'wow' when he notices a girl. It is good for a 'light read' if you don't want to comprehend a story and understand it. 

This story is gives the idea 'Oh, that's a good idea.' Other than that, most of his ideas are ruined either by poor execution or grammar errors. Not only that, but there are contradicting information that isn't normal 'for a 23 year old.'

Not thought out well. I'm iffy on even giving it a 1.

Edit: At chapter 63 improved rating from 1>3.5

Wow. The improvement is scary. Still some concerns such as out of character acting, but it went directly from a 1 to 3.5. Would rate higher if the first 30 chapters get fixed. 

I'll give probs to author, he improved as a writer a lot. Less grammar if any issues with the status, not as many if any confusing details unlike previous chapters. A better read.

Edit: At chapter 100- rating from 3.5>2. 

Reaon? The author's grammar is too frequent and messes up with the story. -.5, then they rid the inconsistencys with the story itself and the system saying some stuff but not others. -.5. Last two points I dislike is the fact he didn't try to replicate anyone just to level replicate up, or the fact our MC is staying inside 'of a script.' That, and the constant 'click the patreon link!' Is getting annoying.

Edit: At chapter 130- rating from 2>1.5 

reasoning: the author is just making some events that doesn't make sense. To give an example without spoiling. Imagine a level 20 beating up a level 25 monster. Then, This level 20 gets beaten up from a level 40. Then, two level 60's come and attack the level 40. Somehow, that level 25 managed to out accelerate a level 60 who can attack instantly. Seriously, it doesn't make sense. I don't really care if the excuse it 'but the level 25 specializes in escaping.' Your telling ME that a person with, let's say, 20 agility, even while doing a surprise movement from nowhere, can grab two far(ish) people/creatures, Then escape, and then NOT get shot when the other person stopped a skill, and just watched 'shock.' Sorry if that made no sense, the example, but basically the author is making things that SHOULD NOT happen up. It's understandable if, let's say, the level 25 had invincibility or a speed buff and managed to grab one person, do a surprise attack that was 'luckily' effective, and run. *mostly because in this scenerario the level 60 would be a mage typ*

also, the spelling errors came back. Hard to make out what the author is trying to say. Feels like it's a third language they are trying to pick up or just using big words that they don't know how to spell correctly. Such as 'spectacular' is spelt 'specter.' It's a bit annoying. 

 

  

 

FakeMask
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It doesn't need a proper review

This novel:

  1. Has chapters that are around 1000 words long each, which isn't necessarily a bad thing, if it wasn't that often a lot happens in one chapter and that everything is narrated with the descriptive skills of a five-year-old child who's writing in his diary: Dear diary, the world has changed! There are bad monsters now! But monsters are in Dungeons! Me is hunter! Me has sister! Me gets money! Me risks life! But me has a super-powerful skill now! Praise me!! Look at how cool me is!
  2. Yeah... the grammar's terrible, it gave me nightmares.
  3. A nearly-nonexistent story, which surprisingly wasn't born from an idiotic mind... not complitely at least, half of it was pretty much copied from other novels: hey look! There's a guy that's a young adult which just happens to be an orphan with a sister and so has to work hard to earn money! (The Legendary Moonlight Cculptor / Super Gene) Hey look! He is also an hunter who goes into ranked dungeons to fight monsters using a unique, overpowered, ability he awakened recently! (Skill Maker / Evolution Theory of the Hunter / A Monster Who levels Up). Hey look! He's been saved by a powerful person who also just happens to be a beautiful girl nearly his own age! (Do I really need to write anything here? I don't think it's necessary)
  4. The system he gets his powers from is the most normal and boring type, there are many novels that do a better job with complicated systems they have created and I think you're more likely to enjoy reading than this: on RLL: (The legend of Randidly Gosthound / The new world / Threadbare / Everybody Loves Large Chests) on NU: (Everyone Else is a Returnee / The Death Mage Who Doesn’t Want a Fourth Time / Kumo Desu ga, Nani ka? /  I Was a Sword When I Reincarnated) and MANY more, if none of these are to your liking (which is unlikely to happen as I tried to put novels as different from each other as possible) then you can just ask on NU's or RRL's forums for help.
  5. There are few characters and those few that I have read about I wish they didn't exist, at all. I can't call them two-dimensional because manga characters which don't feel that real can still be entertaining in their own way, in this novel nobody has a fucking personality they're all just annoying, also while at the start the author barely describes them, when he actually tries to make them more... likeable...? Real...? Anyway the attempts are so forced and mediocre that it just makes things worse.
  6. This novel has nothing special, just by reading the title I could easily assume it is inspired by the average JP novel, and by reading it I confirmed my hypotesis.

This novel is severly lacking, it's not original, ineteresting or well-written, if I wanted to I could hit that advanced review button, but why should I do so? That half an hour I spent reading enough chapters to judge this novel was wasted, and the author doesn't seem inclined to edit even a single chapter or opting for a rewrite. Spending more time to write a longer review is pointless, I just decided to write something because I don't want people with high expectations trying to read this. For me this is one of those few novels that just make me want to say just don't read it, it's a waste of time.

mio
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started off great, then devolved into mediocrity

it honestly started great, the concept was good, the potential for getting too op was capped with his skill not working on skills at a higher level, and the story was wellbuilt with him having to care for his sister...

 

then you threw it all away... it stated with the "vicious eyes" that were repeated twice, really obviously, in the same chapter, almost immediately following one another. 

then you threw away the plot to help the sister by making the teacher a scammer... strange plottwist, but not that bad.. except...

you used it as an excuse to advance the plot too quickly, suddenly giving him a title that was way too OP and giving him all day to go in a dungeon without worries. 

then, after the first boss, which was an "impossible event" you introdce not one, but two more bosses, together with a girl, whose entrance was so forced the chapter told me to call the cops for a rape! 

honestly, i think you were a bit too enthusiastic too play with the powers and stuff and forgot about the plot. 

i still give two stars, since the writing itself is good, and the style is nice.

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The author is clearly into this, and that's alright.  It's good to want to write, to create something.  But for a story on the trending page, I expected *way* more.  The grammar is a nightmare, the formatting is impossible to follow, and the constant stat screens shown for tiny changes are super annoying.  Not to mention, the system itself doesn't make any sense, and almost none of the mechanics of the world are explained in a meaningful way.  Why do they have cell phones and also dungeons?  Why is he already level four when he just got a system, which apparantly no one else has, even though everyone has a skill?  It's a total lack of worldbuilding, and really dragged me out of the story.

Keep writing, friend.  But do so with an eye to your own improvement.  I think you've got some cool ideas in you, but you need to refine them.

Callmephambam
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Would not recommend unless fixed

There are a lot of grammar issues. A lot of the math that goes into the stats don't add up. There are a lot of inconsistencies throughout the story. There is also the problem of the author telling and not showing. Literally spoon feeds info slowly and deliberately, almost like the author is only doing it to fix plot holes retroactively. I wouldn't recommend reading this story unless it gets a lot of fixes

Eaken
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How is this on the popular page

Common plot line, basically took things from novels/animes and threw it together.

Author doesn't know how to do simple math, nothing adds up.

The characters are only as intelligent as the author, and the MC is really, really stupid.

As of chapter 12 no character development.

I'm done.