The Scourged Earth

by Mirrored

Original HIATUS Action Adventure Horror Sci-fi Cyberpunk Grimdark LitRPG Magic Male Lead
Warning This fiction contains:
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  • Sexual Content

 Derrick is no ones hero.  He is barely dealing with his mundane life when all of humanity is forced to confront the extraordinary. Overnight, all across the world, mysterious machines appear. They offer people the chance to purchase almost anything they can think of. Weapons, medicine and even super human abilities are offered, seemingly for free.

But following these machines, come the Scourges. The most dangerous creatures, diseases and machines that infest the universe. Ever growing and battling, these empires of horror and hunger will overhelm and devour the Earth and its inhabitants. Unless Derrick and humanity can stand against all the horrors that battle between the stars.

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My first Story, an attempt to turn the standard fantasy litrpg apocalypse into a Sci Fi. Trying for a slower build to power for the MC, so don't expect him to have cheat powers. I delight in helpful crticism so no holding back plz.

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Table of Contents
Chapter Name Release Date
1.1 The World Changes ago
1.2 Hitting the Gym ago
1.3 Whet the Blades ago
Interlude: Gods and Monsters ago
1.4 Me and you in the Melee ago
1.5 Explosive Situation ago
1.6 Rest and Recuperation ago
1.7 Hunting Grounds ago
1.8 The Next Level ago
2.1 A New Day ago
2.2 A New Battlefield ago
2.3 Cakewalk ago
Interlude: Gods and Monsters II ago
2.4 Human Nature ago
2.5 Social Creatures ago
2.6 Moves ago
Interlude: Ghost Town ago
Just a Poll and some music suggestions. ago
2.7 Questions and Answers ago
2.8 Dark Gifts ago
2.9 Scavengers ago
2.10 Pull of Greed ago
2.11 Tyranny ago
3.1 Standing Out ago
3.2 Temptation and Meditation ago
3.3 Plots and Armor ago
Interlude: Hierarchies ago
3.4 Trust and Trials ago
3.5 Support ago
3.6 Confidence under Fire ago
3.7 Progress ago
3.8 Alien Rules I ago
Interlude: Subtle Beasts ago
3.9 Caught in the Fold ago
3.10 Alien Rules II ago
3.11 Talent ago
3.12 Commitment ago
4.1 The Basics I ago
4.2 The Basics II ago
4.3 Personal Growth ago
4.4 Personal Growth II ago
4.5 Personal Growth III ago
4.6 Oil and Water ago
4.7 Undercurrents ago
4.8 Faces and Voices ago
4.9 Seizing Power ago
4.10 Meeting New People ago
4.11 Meeting New People II ago
4.12 Making an Impression ago
4.13 Unneighbourly ago
4.14 Tools and Traps ago
4.15 Nemesis ago
Interlude: Priorities ago
4.16 Nemesis II ago
4.17 What Lurks Beneath ago
5.1 Wake Up Call ago
5.2 No Good Deed ago
5.3 Goes Unpunished ago
5.4 Bargains ago
5.5 Responsibility ago
5.6 Rushing Ahead ago
5.7 Heart of the Matter ago
5.8 Under your Skin ago
5.9 Under Your Skin II ago
5.10 Fog of War ago
5.11 Fog of War II ago
5.12 Party Tricks I ago
5.13 Party Tricks II ago
5.14 Deleterious ago
5.15 Celebration ago
Interlude: Complications ago
Editing, Scheduling and Patreon Announcement ago
6.1 Without a Hitch ago
6.2 Limits ago
6.3 Litigation ago
6.4 Helpless ago
6.5 Innovation ago
6.6 Abomination ago
6.7 Complications ago
6.8 Breakneck ago
6.9 Moving Targets ago
6.10 Moving Targets II ago
 6.11 Recoil ago
6.12 Wild Theories ago
Interlude: Unnatural ago
6.13 Reaching ago
6.14 Drama and Queens ago

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LiterallyGoose
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Thoroughly engaging and well crafted.

Reviewed at: 3.43 Deleterious

This story is thoroughly engaging and at times artfully crafted. The MC has a slow and difficult progression path, his gains feel hard fought and his victories are therefore more gratifying. 

 

Plot wise, the standard trope has been refreshed here, classic LitRPG in a Sci-Fi setting, with a gritty modernism and pessimistic tone. There are several hints about off world and eons spanning plot lines that could be used to further a web serial that quite frankly has a great deal of readability and ongoing potential.

Excellent action scenes, good pay offs, witty and at times humorous, dark and edgy enough to realise a definite post apocalyptic feel.

 

Negatives:

 

Not many, MC can be difficult to empathise with eat times. Companions and ‘colleagues’ could be filled out a bit and more rounded but this can come with more development.

Forshadowing can be slightly heavy handed but again, it isn’t bad, it kind of matches the tone and pace. 

 

Overal, I can’t recommend this story enough. Well done to the author - he has created an engaging story that has the potential to really grab hold of you. Give it a go, you won’t be disappointed. 

 

 

 

Scesce Scesce
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got to the last chapter, it's generally good, the mc despite  this being kinda of sci.fi doesn't use any kind of rangeded weapons which is actually cool, since to me , using a gun on system apocalipse would kinda of ruin this.

like i wrote up above it has generally speaking no problem, but i admit that the despite the funny humor i've been quite tempted to stop reading it..  predictable romace (kate e_e),  System which is not really to my taste for all the scify crap... etc...

but luckily for the author it's around that time that the tall alien girl came around  and kind of made things interesting again. now going back to kate, author ... really young  femme fatale with her  own issue, like the living stereotype .... the biker milf or the alien would have been way more interesting...  even though  the alien girl is probably a stereotype too, but at least an interesting one.

Now i'm crossing finger for them to actually hook up and kinda wanna how the author is going to develop things (blaze and mc).

for now it's a maybe. hopefully blake will fuck. off (he kinda of told to be interested. xD). 

Zaerquin
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 I found this and read it the same day, it was an enjoyable and fun read. One of the better apocalypse litrpg stories out there, the format of levels and all the numbers are enough to add to the story without being focused on them and making for a boring read. In fact, the world/universe that you have built is one of the most interesting ones I've ever read.

I look forward to more.

Thank you.

Neeleypanda
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I'm really enjoying this story I like all the characters that you've introduced so far, I really hope you come up with a patreon so I can support this and also get more chapters

viewless
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Grimdark action story with a cool horror vibe

I really enjoyed reading this story. The dark, oppresive mood is very well done, the overwhelming odds, the fatalistic outlook people adopt. 

My issues with the story are relatively minor, in the sense that they can be avoided or fixed pretty easily. The first is the massive amount of grammar and spelling errors. They often broke my immersion in the story and even made me wonder if the author is using transcription software of some kind.

The second is that I fear the author is falling into the "escalation trap" that is common in these types of stories, where the story keeps the foot on the gas so long that it becomes tiring and even a bit offputting, especially in a long running webserial format. A notable example of this is 'worm' and 'pact' by wildbow. The typical recomendation to avoid this would be to separate your stories into discrete arcs, each with their own "ramp up" and "ramp down" sections. It's what long-running, succesful stories tend to do to maintain interest, a great example of which is the manga "One Piece", which has been running for over 20 years and is still wildly popular and critically aclaimed. 

Anyway, the story is highly reccommended. It's not easy creating such a dark, oppressive, and interesting world, and I look forward to what comes next. 

VoidVoyager
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EPIC!!! I love the style and pacing. the character are also realistic and pragmatic and i honestly find it endearing, hope to see it become a widely recognized piece of fiction. It fits the bill if you are also a fan of the legend of Randidly ghosthound

mdp45
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LITRPG Meets Zombie Apocalypse

Great start, cant wait to see where it goes. English is very good few if any grammar issues. Nice character building for main and side characters.                              

Nomad1791
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I'm enjoying the read a lot. I'm giving a high score to counter some of the negative ones that I just don't understand. The story is good, well written, mc is easily likable and relatable. World building is nicely done and easy to picture . Going in my top 5 with SD, MOL, and RG

Playster
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One more good story on royalroad!

I am a pretty hard reader to please. But I like this story.
2 problems for me with this finction:
1) In the beginning you can't see the potential of the main hero. Later you can.
2)Some fights drag on not giving much to the story. I don't want to know how he jumped over an obstacle.

Exept from those personal opinions I like it!

DrMonotone
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Definitely worth the read!

Id definitely recommend this one! Its prety unique as far as LitRPGs go and ahh... Trust me... I've read an absolute metric crap ton of LitRPGs, so finding a new perspective like this is always refreshing! Certainly good even if you don't care about the story and only need good writing examples and ideas!