Birth of Mana
by Shou Kouyou
Residents of the world today only know of the sky as a sheet of pure darkness. Alz is an elf who was separated from his parents at birth due to the village’s tradition. One day, Alz stumbles upon a relic from the past, learning about the world which once existed, where lights illuminated the skies. Inspired by this, the young Alz decided to go on an adventure, an adventure to explore the vast world he lived in.
Discover the world with Alz as he sets off on an adventure, experiencing many new encounters, and overcoming obstacles along the way as he slowly delved deeper into the truths behind the world.
IMPORTANT NOTE: This story is not fantasy-themed and not I didn't omit the fantasy tag by mistake. That said, there is meaning and significance to the title, except that it will be unveiled only much later into the story. Magical elements and the like will not be a factor in most of the story until the very end.
tl;dr: This is not fantasy, magic doesn't play a role in the story.
Updates: Will try to post a chapter once every 2 days
PS. This is my first novel so there might be several issues in various aspects which I might not notice so comments are highly appreciated.
This is more to add pressure to myself rather than anything else... but anyways the story is now part of the pledge!
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I'm really disapointed in this story. From the very beginning the preview showed how the mc would go to the bunker and then set out on an adventure on his own to explore the new world, along with discovering the birth of mana. Good premise right? Well that all got messed up when he got back to his village and was bullied into this rejoined his tribe. Now with the the cliche after cliche, we again have to wait five tiny chapters for something interesting to happen, and ten chapters at the very least to get him to properly go onto his journey. I'm sorry, but I am done waiting for this story. I mean it took 15 chapters to get to the bunker, and another 15 until he was ready to leave. I hope you continue this project and learn from this experience.
Hey, enjoying it so far! I am at Chapter 9 and as of right now; I would suggest adding a little more details about what exactly happened with the Towers. It seems a little rushed, out of order, and not clear. Another thing is that the story seems extremely slow going and you are adding too many unimportant details which aren't contributing to the progression of the story. I am not a writer by any means, only an avid reader.
The story is well thought out and brilliantly written. The characters are real and you can easily connect with them. There is little to no grammar issues. Overall it is well worth the time spent reading the book.