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If superpowers appeared today, what might the future look like?

In a future which has endured nuclear wars, people rarely wake up one day with supernatural powers, transforming an innocent life into a walking apocalypse. Shunned and feared, these Exhumans are often violent, ever misunderstood, and always dangerous.

In this world unfolds the dark story of Athan Ashton, an 18-year old with a football scholarship who wakes up to find himself a lightning-powered Exhuman. Following a failed imprisonment and execution, he is exiled to the wilds, ostracized from all he’s even known.

Like most, Athan never questioned society's view of Exhumans, buying the public line that they are selfish and a danger, fit only to be reported and dispatched. But living on the other side, Athan begins to discover why Exhumans go bad, and begins the impossible task of becoming more than just his powers. 

Athan is dedicated to use his Exhumanity only for good, but is that enough to survive in a world where his very existence is a crime?

 

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Exhuman is finished! After 500 chapters, it's come to an end. Thank you for your support through the years that this story ran! 

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483 Chapters
Chapter Name Release Date
001. 2251, Present Day. North American wilderness. Athan. ago
002. 2251, Three weeks ago. Los Angeles suburbs. Athan. ago
003. 2251, Present Day. North American wilderness. Athan. ago
004. 2201, Fifty years ago. Philadelphia suburbs. Harris. ago
005. 2251, Present Day. Mining facility administrative building. Athan. ago
006. 2251, Present Day. North American wilderness. Athan. ago
007. 2251, Three weeks ago. Los Angeles suburbs. Athan. ago
008. 2251, Present Day. North American wilderness. Athan. ago
009. 2251, Three weeks ago. Los Angeles suburbs. Athan. ago
010. 2251, Present Day. North American wilderness. Athan. ago
011. 2251, Three weeks ago. Los Angeles suburbs. Athan. ago
012. 2251, Present Day. North American wilderness. Athan. ago
013. 2251, Two weeks ago. Undisclosed location. Blackett. ago
014. 2251, Present Day. North American exclusion zone. Athan. ago
015. 2251, Present Day. North American exclusion zone. Athan. ago
016. 2251, Present Day. Los Angeles suburbs. Lia. ago
017. 2251, Present Day. North American exclusion zone. Athan. ago
018. 2251, Present Day. North American exclusion zone. Athan. ago
019. 2149, 102 years ago. Chicago suburbs. Saga. ago
020. 2251, Present Day. North American exclusion zone. Athan. ago
021. 2251, Present Day. North American exclusion zone. Athan. ago
022. 2251, Present Day. North American exclusion zone. AEGIS. ago
023. 2251, Present Day. North American exclusion zone. Athan. ago
024. 2251, Present Day. North American exclusion zone. Athan. ago
025. 2251, Present Day. North American exclusion zone. Athan. ago
026. 2251, Present Day. North American exclusion zone. Karu. ago
027. 2251, Present Day. North American exclusion zone. Athan. ago
028. 2026, 225 years ago. PSI Research Labs, outskirts of Atlanta. Yaan. ago
029. 2251, Present Day. North American exclusion zone. Athan. ago
030. 2251, Present Day. North American exclusion zone. Athan. ago
031. 2251, Present Day. North American exclusion zone. Athan. ago
032. 2251, Present Day. North American exclusion zone. Athan. ago
033. 2243, 8 years ago. San Diego. Kliver. ago
034. 2251, Present Day. North American exclusion zone. Athan. ago
035. 2251, Present Day. North American exclusion zone. Athan. ago
036. 2251, Present Day. North American exclusion zone. Athan. ago
037. 2251, Present Day. Los Angeles suburbs. Lia. ago
038. 2251, Present Day. North American exclusion zone. Athan. ago
039. 2251, Present Day. Undisclosed location. Blackett. ago
040. 2251, Present Day. North American exclusion zone. Athan. ago
041. 2251, Present Day. North American exclusion zone. Athan. ago
042. 2251, Present Day. North American exclusion zone. Athan. ago
043. 2251, Present Day. North American exclusion zone. Athan. ago
044. 2251, Present Day. North American exclusion zone. Athan. ago
045. 2243, 7 years ago. San Diego. Karen. ago
046. 2251, Present Day. North American exclusion zone. Athan. ago
047. 2251, Present Day. North American exclusion zone. Athan. ago
048. 2251, Present Day. North American exclusion zone. Athan. ago
049. 2251, Present Day. North American exclusion zone. Athan. ago
050. 2141, 110 years ago. XPCA Research and Containment Facility. Laura. ago
051-A. 2251, Present Day. North American exclusion zone. Karu ago
051-B. 2251, Present Day. North American exclusion zone. Tate. ago
051-C. 2251, Present Day. North American exclusion zone. Saga. ago
051-D. 2251, Present Day. North American exclusion zone. Taglock. ago
051-E. 2251, Present Day. North American exclusion zone. AEGIS. ago
052. 2251, Present Day. North American exclusion zone. Athan. ago
053. 2251, Present Day. North American exclusion zone. Athan. ago
054. 2251, Present Day. North American exclusion zone. Saga. ago
055. 2251, Present Day. North American exclusion zone. Athan. ago
056. 2251, Present Day. North American exclusion zone. Saga. ago
057. 2251, Present Day. North American exclusion zone. Athan. ago
058. 2251, Present Day. North American exclusion zone. Athan. ago
059. 2251, Three months ago. Las Vegas. Lia. ago
060. 2251, Present Day. North American exclusion zone. Athan. ago
061. 2251, Present Day. North American exclusion zone. Athan. ago
062. 2251, Present Day. North American exclusion zone. Karu. ago
063. 2251, Present Day. Newbruck. Athan. ago
064. 2251, Present Day. Newbruck. Athan. ago
065. 2251, Present Day. Newbruck. Athan. ago
066. 2251, Present Day. North American exclusion zone. Lia. ago
067. 2141, 110 years ago. XPCA Research and Containment Facility. Laura. ago
068. 2251, Present Day. North American exclusion zone. Athan. ago
069. 2251, Present Day. North American exclusion zone. Athan. ago
070. 2251, Present Day. North American exclusion zone. Athan. ago
071. 2251, Present Day. North American exclusion zone. Athan. ago
072. 2251, Present Day. North American exclusion zone. Athan. ago
073. 2251, Present Day. North American exclusion zone. Athan. ago
074. 2251, Present Day. North American exclusion zone. Athan. ago
075. 2251, Present Day. North American exclusion zone. Athan. ago
076. 2201, Fifty years ago. Philadelphia. Harris. ago
077. 2251, Present Day. North American exclusion zone. Athan. ago
078. 2251, Present Day. North American exclusion zone. Athan. ago
079. 2251, Present Day. North American exclusion zone. Athan. ago
080. 2251, Present Day. North American exclusion zone. Athan. ago
081. 2251, Present Day. Undisclosed location. Blackett. ago
082. 2251, Present Day. North American exclusion zone. Athan. ago
083. 2251, Present Day. North American exclusion zone. Athan. ago
084. 2251, Present Day. North American exclusion zone. Athan. ago
085. 2251, Present Day. North American exclusion zone. Athan. ago
086. 2251, Present Day. North American exclusion zone. Athan. ago
087. 2251, Present Day. Blackett Manor. Barry. ago
088. 2251, Present Day. North American exclusion zone. Athan. ago
089. 2251, Present Day. North American exclusion zone. Athan. ago
090. 2251, Present Day. North American exclusion zone. Athan. ago
091. 2251, Present Day. North American exclusion zone. Athan. ago
092. 2251, Present Day. North American exclusion zone. Athan. ago
093. 2251, Present Day. North American exclusion zone. Athan. ago
094. 2251, Present Day. North American exclusion zone. AEGIS. ago
095. 2251, Present Day. North American exclusion zone. Wynn. ago
096. 2251, Present Day. Las Vegas. AEGIS. ago
097. 2251, Present Day. Las Vegas. AEGIS. ago
098. 2251, Present Day. Las Vegas. AEGIS. ago
099. 2251, Present Day. Phoenix. Karu. ago
100. 2251, Present Day. Blackett Manor. Athan. ago
101. 2251, Present Day. Blackett Manor. Athan. ago
102. 2251, Present Day. Blackett Manor. Athan. ago
103. 2251, One week ago. Las Vegas. Lia. ago
104. 2251, A little less than one week ago. Las Vegas. Lia. ago
105. 2251, One week ago. Chicago. Karu. ago
106. 2251, Present Day. Blackett Manor. Athan. ago
107. 2251, Present Day. Blackett Manor. Athan. ago
108. 2251, Present Day. Blackett Manor. Athan. ago
109. 2251, Present Day. XPCA HQ, D.C.. Athan. ago
110. 2251, Present Day. XPCA HQ, D.C.. Athan. ago
111. 2251, Present Day. XPCA HQ, D.C.. Athan. ago
112. 2251, Present Day. Las Vegas. Lia. ago
113. 2251, Present Day. D.C.. Athan. ago
114. 2251, Present Day. Las Vegas. AEGIS. ago
115. 2251, Present Day. D.C.. Athan. ago
116. 2251, Present Day. D.C.. Athan. ago
117. 2251, Present Day. D.C.. Athan. ago
118. 2251, Present Day. Camden. Lia. ago
119. 2251, Present Day. D.C.. Athan. ago
120. 2251, Present Day. D.C.. Steffie. ago
121. 2251, Present Day. Philadelphia. Lia. ago
122. 2251, Three Years Ago. Tampa exurbs. Camila. ago
123. 2251, Present Day. D.C.. Athan. ago
124. 2251, Present Day. D.C.. Athan. ago
125. 2251, Present Day. D.C.. Athan. ago
126. 2251, Present Day. D.C.. Athan. ago
127. 2218, 33 years ago. Former United States. Journal of a survivor. ago
128. 2251, Present Day. D.C.. Athan. ago
129. 2251, Present Day. D.C.. Athan. ago
130. 2251, Present Day. D.C.. Jack. ago
130b. 2251, A week ago. Hell? Soran. ago
131. 2251, Present Day. Rural GA, near Athens. Athan. ago
132. 2251, Present Day. Haydn, GA. Athan. ago
133. 2251, Present Day. Blue Ridge Mountains. Saga. ago
134. 2251, Present Day. Blue Ridge Mountains. Athan. ago
135. 2251, Present Day. D.C.. AEGIS. ago
136. 2251, Present Day. Blue Ridge Mountains. Athan. ago
137. 2251, Present Day. Blue Ridge Mountains. Athan. ago
138. 2251, Present Day. Blue Ridge Mountains. Athan. ago
139. 2251, Present Day. Blue Ridge Mountains. Athan. ago
140. 2251, Present Day. Blue Ridge Mountains. Athan. ago
141. 2251, Present Day. Rural NC. Lia. ago
142. 2251, Present Day. Los Angeles. Karu. ago
143. 2251, Present Day. Los Angeles. Karu. ago
144. 2251, Present Day. Los Angeles. Karu. ago
145. 2251, Present Day. Near Charlottesville, VA. Saga. ago
146. 2251, Present Day. Los Angeles. Karu. ago
147. 2251, Present Day. Aesa's Dimension. Karu. ago
148. 2251, Present Day. Aesa's Dimension. Karu. ago
149. 2251, Present Day. Rural NC. Athan. ago
150. 2251, Present Day. Rural NC. Athan. ago
151. 2251, Present Day. Rural NC. Athan. ago
152. 2251, Present Day. Rural NC. Athan. ago
153. 2251, Present Day. Rural NC. Athan. ago
154. 2251, Present Day. Flagstaff, AZ. Jack. ago
155. 2251, Present Day. Rural NC. Athan. ago
156. 2251, Present Day. Rural NC. Athan. ago
157. 2251, Present Day. Formerly Oakland, CA. Athan. ago
158. 2251, Present Day. Kingdom of Eryendria. Tower. ago
159. 2251, Present Day. Kingdom of Eryendria. Athan. ago
160. 2251, Present Day. Kingdom of Eryendria. Athan. ago
161. 2246, Five years ago. Kanagawa Prefecture, Japan. Kaori. ago
162. 2251, Present Day. Kingdom of Eryendria. Athan. ago
163. 2251, Present Day. Kingdom of Eryendria. Athan. ago
164. 2251, Present Day. Kingdom of Eryendria. Athan. ago
165. 2251, Present Day. Kingdom of Eryendria. Athan. ago
166. 2251, One week ago. Haydn, GA. Ajax. ago
167. 2251, A few hours ago. Nowhere. AEGIS. ago
168. 2251, Present Day. Kingdom of Eryendria. Athan. ago
169. 2251, Present Day. D.C.. Athan. ago
170. 2251, Present Day. D.C.. Athan. ago
171. 2251, Present Day. D.C.. Athan. ago
172. 2251, Present Day. D.C.. Karen. ago
173. 2251, Present Day. D.C.. Athan. ago
174. 2251, Present Day. D.C.. Saga. ago
175. 2251, Present Day. D.C.. Athan. ago
176. 2251, Present Day. D.C.. Lia. ago
177. 2251, Present Day. D.C.. Athan. ago
178. 2251, Present Day. Irenside Mansion. Athan. ago
179. 2251, Present Day. Penthouse Suite. Athan. ago
180. 2251, Present Day. Penthouse Suite. Athan. ago
181. 2251, Present Day. Penthouse Suite. Athan. ago
182. 2251, Present Day. Penthouse Suite. Athan. ago
183. 2251, Present Day. Chicago. Temperance. ago
184. 2251, Present Day. D.C.. Athan. ago
185. 2251, Present Day. D.C.. Athan. ago
186. 2251, Present Day. Blackett Manor. Blackett. ago
187. 2251, Present Day. D.C.. Athan. ago
188. 2251, Present Day. D.C.. Athan. ago
189. 2251, Present Day. New Eden. Steffie. ago
190. 2252, Present Day. D.C.. Athan. ago
191. 2252, Present Day. New Mexico. Athan. ago
192. 2252, Present Day. New Eden. Athan. ago
193. 2252, Present Day. New Eden. Athan. ago
194. 2252, Present Day. New Eden. Trish. ago
195. 2252, Present Day. New Eden. Athan. ago
196. 2252, Present Day. New Eden. Athan. ago
197. 2252, Present Day. New Eden. AEGIS. ago
198. 2252, Present Day. New Eden. Athan. ago
199. 2252, Present Day. New Eden. Athan. ago
200. 2252, Present Day. New Eden. Athan. ago
201. 2252, Present Day. New Eden. Athan. ago
202. 2252, Present Day. New Eden. Athan. ago
203. 2252, Yesterday. D.C.. Tower. ago
204. 2252, Present Day. New Eden. Athan. ago
205. 2252, Present Day. New Eden. Athan. ago
206. 2252, Present Day. New Eden. Athan. ago
207. 2252, Present Day. New Eden. Athan. ago
208. 2252, Present Day. New Eden. Athan. ago
209. 2252, Present Day. New Eden. Athan. ago
210. 2252, Present Day. New Eden. Athan. ago
211. 2218, Thirty-Three Years Ago. Rural North Carolina. Davis. ago
212. 2252, Present Day. New Eden. Athan. ago
213. 2252, Present Day. New Eden. Athan. ago
214a. 2252, Present Day. New Eden. Athan. ago
214b. 2252, Present Day. New Eden. AEGIS. ago
214c. 2252, Present Day. New Eden. Karu. ago
214d. 2252, Present Day. New Eden. Athan. ago
215. 2252, Present Day. New Eden. Athan. ago
216a. 2252, Present Day. New Eden. Athan. ago
216b. 2252, Present Day. New Eden. Athan. ago
216c. 2252, Present Day. New Eden. AEGIS. ago
217. 2252, Present Day. New Eden. Athan. ago
218. 2252, Present Day. New Eden. AEGIS. ago
219. 2252, Thirty minutes ago. New Eden. Karu. ago
220. 2252, Present Day. South Spring General Hospital, Las Vegas. Athan. ago
221. 2252, Present Day. Las Vegas. Athan. ago
222. 2252, Present Day. North American exclusion zone. Athan. ago
223. 2252, Present Day. North American exclusion zone. Athan. ago
224. 2252, Present Day. Harriet Wright Airport, Ontario. Athan. ago
225. 2252, Present Day. Santa Fe. Athan. ago
226. 2252, Present Day. Santa Fe. Athan. ago
227. 2252, Present Day. Santa Fe. Talon. ago
228. 2252, Present Day. XPCA Regional Facility, New Mexico. Athan. ago
229. 2252, Present Day. Las Vegas. AEGIS. ago
230. 2252, Present Day. XPCA Regional Facility, New Mexico. Athan. ago
231. 2252, Present Day. Las Vegas. Athan. ago
232. 2252, Present Day. Talon's Apartment, Santa Fe. Athan. ago
233. 2252, Present Day. Santa Fe. Athan. ago
234. 2252, Present Day. Santa Fe. Athan. ago
235. 2252, Present Day. Las Vegas. AEGIS. ago
236. 2252, Present Day. Santa Fe. Athan. ago
237. 2252, Present Day. Las Vegas. Athan. ago
238. 2252, Present Day. Las Vegas. Athan. ago
239. 2252, Present Day. Las Vegas. Athan. ago
240. 2252, Present Day. XPCA Regional Facility, New Mexico. Athan. ago
241. 2252, Present Day. Motel Coco, New Mexico. Athan. ago
242. 2252, Present Day. Motel Coco, New Mexico. Athan. ago
243. 2252, Present Day. Las Vegas. Saga. ago
244. 2252, Present Day. Underneath a school, OR. Dillan. ago
245. 2252, Present Day. Las Vegas. Athan. ago
246. 2252, Present Day. Las Vegas. Athan. ago
247. 2252, Present Day. Las Vegas. Athan. ago
248. 2252, Present Day. Las Vegas. Athan. ago
249. 2252, Present Day. Las Vegas. Athan. ago
250. 2252, Present Day. Suburban Oregon. Athan. ago
251. 2252, Present Day. Las Vegas. AEGIS. ago
252. 2252, Present Day. Suburban Oregon. Athan. ago
253. 2252, Present Day. Whitney's Repair and Service, OR. Athan. ago
254. 2252, Present Day. Whitney's Repair and Service, OR. Athan. ago
255. 2252, Present Day. Whitney's Repair and Service, OR. Athan. ago
256. 2252, Present Day. Whitney's Repair and Service, OR. Whitney. ago
257. 2252, Present Day. Whitney's Repair and Service, OR. Athan. ago
258. 2252, Present Day. Whitney's Repair and Service, OR. Athan. ago
259. 2252, Present Day. Primrose High School, OR. AEGIS. ago
260. 2252, Present Day. Four blocks north, OR. AEGIS. ago
261. 2252, Present Day. Four blocks north. Taglock. ago
262. 2252, Present Day. Four blocks north. Athan. ago
263. 2252, Present Day. In a hotel. Athan. ago
263. 2252, Present Day. Falling Star Inn, OR. Athan. ago
264. 2240, 12 years ago. Irenside Mansion. Karu. ago
265. 2252, Present Day. Falling Star Inn, OR. Athan. ago
266. 2252, Present Day. Falling Star Inn, OR. Athan. ago
267. 2252, Present Day. Falling Star Inn, OR. Athan. ago
268. 2252, Present Day. Las Vegas. Lia. ago
269. 2252, Present Day. Las Vegas. Lia. ago
270. 2252, Present Day. Las Vegas. Athan. ago
271. 2252, Present Day. A plain city street. Athan. ago
272. 2252, Present Day. A plain city building. Athan. ago
273a. 2252, Present Day. Not home. Athan. ago
273b. 2252, Present Day. Not home. Saga. ago
274. 2252, Present Day. Las Vegas. Whitney. ago
275. 2252, Present Day. An abandoned building, Las Vegas. Athan. ago
276. 2252, Present Day. Las Vegas. Athan. ago
277. 2252, Present Day. Las Vegas. Athan. ago
278. 2252, Present Day. California State University. Athan. ago
279. 2252, Present Day. Downtown Chicago. Jack. ago
280. 2252, Present Day. Downtown Chicago. Kaori. ago
281. 2252, Present Day. California State University. Athan. ago
282. 2252, Present Day. California State University. Athan. ago
283. 2252, Present Day. California State University. Athan. ago
284. 2252, Present Day. Apartment near CSU. Athan. ago
285. 2252, Present Day. Apartment near CSU. Kaori. ago
286. 2252, Present Day. Apartment near CSU. Athan. ago
287. 2252, Present Day. Virtual space. Athan. ago
288. 2252, Present Day. Apartment near CSU. Lia. ago
289. 2252, Present Day. In a box. Kaori. ago
290. 2252, Present Day. California State University. Athan. ago
291. 2252, Present Day. In a box. Kaori. ago
292. 2252, Present Day. California State University. Athan. ago
293. 2252, Present Day. Tunnels beneath New York. Karu. ago
294. 2252, Present Day. Tunnels beneath New York. Karu. ago
295. 2252, Present Day. In a box. Kaori. ago
296. 2252, Present Day. Apartment near CSU. Athan. ago
297. 2252, Six weeks ago. Las Vegas. Athan. ago
298. 2252, Present Day. Apartment near CSU. Athan. ago
299. 2252, Present Day. California State University. Athan. ago
300. 2252, Present Day. California State University. Athan. ago
301. 2252, Present Day. California State University. Athan. ago
302. 2252, Present Day. Apartment near CSU. Athan. ago
303. 2252, Present Day. Virtual space. Athan. ago
304. 2252, Present Day. Whitney's place. Athan. ago
305. 2252, Present Day. Whitney’s place. Whitney. ago
306. 2252, Present Day. New York. Whitney. ago
307. 2252, Present Day. New York. Athan. ago
308. 2252, Present Day. Fuji Sushi, near CSU. Athan. ago
309. 2252, Present Day. A bus, California. Athan. ago
310. 2252, Present Day. XPCA Regional Facility, New Mexico. Athan. ago
311. 2252, Present Day. East Potomac Golf Course, D.C.. Athan. ago
312. 2252, Present Day. Downtown D.C.. Athan. ago
313. 2252, Present Day. Apartment near CSU. Athan. ago
314. 2252, Present Day. Las Vegas. AEGIS. ago
315. 2252, Present Day. Las Vegas. Athan. ago
316. 2252, Present Day. Las Vegas. Athan. ago
317. 2252, Present Day. XPCA boneyard, Utah. Athan. ago
318. 2252, Present Day. XPCA boneyard, Utah. Athan. ago
319. 2252, Present Day. XPCA boneyard, Utah. Saga. ago
320. 2252, Present Day. Empty apartment, Utah. Athan. ago
321. 2252, Present Day. Empty apartment, Utah. Athan. ago
322. 2252, Present Day. Interstate-15 South, Utah. Athan. ago
323. 2252, Present Day. Interstate rest stop number 1583, Utah. Emily. ago
324. 2252, A few hours ago. Suburban Oregon. Rito. ago
325. 2252, Present Day. Las Vegas outskirts. Athan. ago
326. 2252, Present Day. Las Vegas. Athan. ago
327. 2252, Present Day. Las Vegas. Athan. ago
328. 2252, Last night. Las Vegas. Whitney. ago
329. 2252, Present Day. Las Vegas. Whitney. ago
330. 2252, Present Day. Las Vegas. Athan. ago
331. 2252, Present Day. Las Vegas. Athan. ago
332. 2252, Present Day. Unknown. Athan. ago
333. 2252, Present Day. New Eden sublevels. Steffie. ago
334. 2252, Present Day. New Eden. Lia. ago
335. 2252, Present Day. New Eden. Lia. ago
336. 2252, Present Day. New Eden. Lia. ago
337. 2252, Present Day. New Eden. Lia. ago
338. 122 years ago. San Francisco. A personal blog. ago
339. 2252, Present Day. Rob Hill Campground. AEGIS. ago
340. 2252, Present Day. New Eden. Lia. ago
341. 2252, Present Day. New Eden. Lia. ago
342. 2252, Present Day. New Eden. Lia. ago
343. 2252, Present Day. San Francisco. Saga. ago
344. 2252, Present Day. San Francisco. Athan. ago
345. 2252, Present Day. San Francisco. Athan. ago
346. 2252, Present Day. Irenside Manor. Athan. ago
347. 2252, Present Day. Irenside Manor. Athan. ago
348. 2252, Present Day. Irenside Manor. Athan. ago
349. 2252, Present Day. PLUGGED, 'net cafe, San Francisco. Athan. ago
350. 2252, Present Day. Private farmstead, TX. Liev. ago
351. 2252, Present Day. SFO, San Francisco. AEGIS. ago
352. 2252, Present Day. Japan. Athan. ago
353. 2252, Present Day. Tamachi business district, Tokyo. Athan. ago
354. 2252, Present Day. Ueno residential district, Tokyo. Athan. ago
355. 2252, Present Day. Okutama. Saga. ago
356. 2252, Present Day. Ikeda's Basement, Okutama. Saga. ago
357. 2252, Present Day. Okutama. Athan. ago
358. 2252, Present Day. Okutama. Athan. ago
359. 2252, Present Day. Okutama High School. AEGIS. ago
360. 2252, Present Day. Home, Alexandria, VA. Cosette. ago
361. 2252, Present Day. South Yellow Sea. Athan. ago
362. 2252, Present Day. Coastal Glasslands. Athan. ago
363. 2252, Present Day. Glasslands. Athan. ago
364. 2252, Present Day. Private farmstead, TX. Liev. ago
365. 2252, Present Day. Glasslands. Athan. ago
366. 2252, Present Day. Oasis. Athan. ago
367a. 2252, Present Day. Oasis. Athan. ago
367b. 2252, Present Day. Oasis. Tem. ago
367c. 2252, Present Day. Oasis. AEGIS. ago
367d. 2252, Present Day. Oasis. Saga. ago
368. 2252, Present Day. Oasis. AEGIS. ago
369. 2252, Present Day. Oasis. AEGIS. ago
370. 2252, Present Day. Oasis. Athan. ago
371. 2252, Present Day. Oasis. AEGIS. ago
372. 2252, Present Day. Somewhere over the Caribbean Sea. Liev. ago
373. 2252, Present Day. Oasis. Athan. ago
374. 2252, Present Day. Oasis. Athan. ago
375a. 2252, Present Day. Oasis. Saga. ago
375b. 2252, Present Day. Oasis. Lia. ago
375c. 2252, Present Day. Oasis. Karu. ago
376. 2252, Present Day. Oasis. AEGIS. ago
377. 2252, Present Day. Oasis. Athan. ago
378. 2252, Present Day. Oasis. Saga. ago
379. 2252, Present Day. Oasis. Athan. ago
380. 2252, Present Day. Oasis. Athan. ago
381. 2252, Present Day. Oasis. Athan. ago
382. 2252, Present Day. Oasis. Athan. ago
383. 2252, Present Day. Beneath Ikeda Estate. Kaori. ago
384. 2252, Present Day. Outside a residence. Alexandria, VA. Athan. ago
385. 2252, Present Day. Whitney's Place, San Francisco. Athan. ago
386. 2252, Present Day. Suburbs, New Mexico. Athan. ago
387. 2252, Present Day. Whitney's Place, San Francisco. Athan. ago
388. 2252, Present Day. Somewhere over Southeastern Louisiana. Athan. ago
389. 2252, Unknown time. The Void. Athan. ago
390. 2252, Earlier that day. Somewhere over Southeastern Louisiana. Tem. ago
391. 2252, Present Day. Somewhere in Southeastern Louisiana. Karu. ago
392. 2252, Present Day. The Void. Athan. ago
393. 2252, Present Day. The Raven's Nest, D.C.. Director Hall. ago
394. 2252, Present Day. Extracts Labs, The Raven's Nest. Athan. ago
395. 2252, Present Day. Saga's mind. Athan. ago
396a. 2252, Present Day. The Raven's Nest, D.C.. Director Hall. ago
396b. 2252, Present Day. Director Hall's bedroom, D.C.. Athan. ago
397. 2252, Present Day. Director Hall's house, D.C.. Athan. ago
398. 2252, Present Day. Director Hall's house, D.C.. Athan. ago
399. 2252, Present Day. Count's Cross, KY. Athan. ago
400. 2252, Present Day. Count's Cross, KY. Athan. ago
401. 2252, Present Day. Arlington Memorial Hospital, D.C.. Athan. ago
402. 2252, Present Day. The Raven's Nest, D.C.. Athan. ago
403. 2252, Present Day. Arlington Memorial Hospital, D.C.. Athan. ago
403. 2252, Present Day. The Raven's Nest, D.C.. Saga. ago
404. 2252, Present Day. Quiet home, Bethesda, MD. Athan. ago
405. 2252, Present Day. Quiet home, Bethesda, MD. Athan. ago
406. 2252, Present Day. The Raven's Nest, D.C.. Lia. ago
407. 2252, Present Day. Somewhere over the States. Athan. ago
408. 2252, Present Day. The Raven's Nest. Athan. ago
409. 2252, Present Day. Quiet home. Athan. ago
410. 2252, Present Day. The Raven's Nest. Athan. ago
411. 2252, Present Day. The Raven's Nest. Athan. ago
412. 2252, Two hours ago. Outside Atlanta, GA. Soran. ago
413. 2252, Present Day. Haydn, GA. Athan. ago
414. 2252, Present Day. Haydn, GA. Athan. ago
415. 2252, Present Day. The Raven's Nest. Lia. ago
416. 2252, Present Day. The Raven's Nest. Athan. ago
417. 2252, Present Day. Aboard a VTOL, heading west. Athan. ago
418. 2252, Present Day. San Francisco. Athan. ago
419. 2252, Present Day. Pacific airspace. Athan. ago
420. 2252, Two days ago. New Eden. Lia. ago
421. 2252, Two days ago. New Eden. Lia. ago
422. 2252, Yesterday. New Eden. Lia. ago
423. 2252, Present Day. Oasis. Athan. ago
424. 2252, Present Day. Oasis. Athan. ago
425. 2252, Present Day. Oasis. Athan. ago
426. 2252, Present Day. Oasis. Athan. ago
427. 2252, Present Day. San Francisco. Saga. ago
428. 2252, Present Day. Las Vegas. Athan. ago
429. 2252, Present Day. Las Vegas. AEGIS. ago
430. 2252, Present Day. Las Vegas. Saga. ago
431. 2252, Present Day. Exhuman Fortress, Las Vegas. Lia. ago
432. 2252, Present Day. Exhuman Fortress, Las Vegas. Karu. ago
433. 2252, Present Day. Las Vegas. Athan. ago
434. 2252, Present Day. Primrose High School, OR. Athan. ago
435. 2252, Present Day. Outside 'The Polygon', OR. Athan. ago
436. 2252, Present Day. Exhuman Fortress, Las Vegas. Saga. ago
437. 2252, Present Day. Aesa's Dimension. Athan. ago
438. 2252, Present Day. Haydn, GA. Athan. ago
439. 2252, Present Day. Haydn, GA. Athan. ago
440. 2252, Present Day. Las Vegas. Karu. ago
441. 2252, Present Day. Another Earth. Athan. ago
442. 2252, Present Day. Las Vegas. Cosette. ago
443. 2252, Present Day. Ramanathan's Lab. Athan. ago
444. 2252, Present Day. Ramanathan's Lab. Athan. ago
445. 2022, 227 years ago. Parallel Ramanathan's Lab. Yaan. ago
446. 2252, Present Day. Ramanathan's Lab. Athan. ago
447. 2252, Present Day. XPCA Holding Facility, New Mexico. Taglock. ago
448. 2252, Present Day. Ramanathan's Lab. Athan. ago
449. 2252, Present Day. Ramanathan's Lab. AEGIS. ago
450. 2252, Present Day. Las Vegas. Kaori. ago
451. 2252, Present Day. Las Vegas. Saga. ago
452. 2252, Present Day. Ramanathan's Lab. Athan. ago
453. 2252, Present Day. Ramanathan's Lab. Athan. ago
454. 2252, Present Day. Las Vegas. Karu. ago
455. 2252, Present Day. Haydn, Earth. Lia. ago
456. 2252, Present Day. Las Vegas. Karu. ago
457. 2252, Present Day. Las Vegas. Saga. ago
458. 2252, Present Day. Las Vegas. Saga. ago
459. 2252, Present Day. Las Vegas. Lia. ago
460. 2252, Present Day. Las Vegas. Saga. ago
Epilogue 1. 2254, Two years later. San Diego. Karu. ago
Epilogue 2. 2254, Two years later. Oasis. AEGIS. ago
Epilogue 3. 2254, Two years later. Haydn, GA. Saga. ago
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mukkaar
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Good story! With bad mc.

I have read till 107 in wordpress. Writing style is superb and professional. Story, characters and world is really well written making it easy to readand understand. I would give full marks for technical details and writing overall.

Mc just ruined this for me, its not that mc is badly written but he just doesn't make any sense. He's 18 years old who goes to school, but after while in story it feels like he was born moment he was introduced into story. It's like mix of zero social experience and some mental illness like bipolar disorder.

All other characters have compelling reasons to act way they do, but mc just seems to be retard. I didn't mind it at first because it was funny and it wasn't much, but after while it just became irrational. It was maybe after 50s all these issues with mc started just adding up and finally becoming just frustrating.

Mc's character is just gaping plothole for me, so I can't really say I'm big fan of this novel. I would probably give it less stars if I just went by experience of reading it, but I have to give props for all things other than mc. 

AvidReader9508
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Personally dont like the mc

I personally don't like the mc and the way the author has him act. The premise is good the world of the story is good, but the mc is too reluctant to kill. I'm not saying he should be a sociopathic killer, I'm not even saying that when he does kill he should be perfectly fine with it. But when the mc literally saves the person who has tried to kill you twice and literally tells them about his abilities at that point i dont like it, because to me (and I may not word it right so im sorry im just trying my best here) that looks like mc is trying to uphold an idealistic set of values of "you should not kill", where as I believe that the best idealogy is "you should not kill without proper reason", proper reason being in self-defence or in defence of an innocent. So I'm not gonna say your story is bad but I'm gonna say the story isn't for me.

Laevus
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I was only able to get 17 chapters in before giving up. It started out promising but quickly turned into a meme. The characters are stagnate and refused to grow. For all the talking about 'humanity' it's nearly non existing in this story. Almost the entire cast is in a looping script instead of being remotely believable. Their actions and rational is so dense it borders on ludicrous. 

If I were living in this world i know for a fact I'd make it my mission to incinerate as much of it as I possibly could and give the planet a chance to try again.

RainbowCookie
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Can probably be a great story for some

So have only read up to chapter 40 on the wordpress and so far it's a pretty decent story can tell the author is a pretty good writer, things that bother me so far that keeps me from giving it a higher rating is that some of the character's in it are so incredible stupid it hurts my head. I really like the dark tone of story wich get ruined somewhat by the harem parts for me atleast im not a huge harem fan but hey if you are that will probably just be a plus for you but for me it kind of ruins the tone of the story. I will keep reading and will most likely update my review as i get farther along in the story.

djeruknipis
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I think the author only care for word count

Because, along the ride, you will meet characters that are stubborn. Frustratingly stubborn.

I remember two days ago reading this fiction's first chapter and feeling glad I might started reading a good one. Commenters are enthusiastic in giving typo correction, fully hoped that this fiction be the best it could ever be. But went with it 50 chapters, things does not look good.

First, author offered POV from multiple characters. I wonder why the author did that. Because most of those POV character does not have influence on how the story goes. This fiction do pointless multi-POV. This improve later on, but its uselessness is still ever present.

Second, there's excessive, crude, bigotry going at the setting. I'm not sure if there's reader enjoyed reading that because I slog through them with difficulty. The villainy is much more enjoyable when they're veiled. There's even trope called Affable Evil! I saw that trope as a valid hook for author to draw in readers. This fiction's author did not use that. (S)he use the opposite. If author's goal is to repell readers from reading this fiction, he has (partial) success with me.

Third, you will meet unbelievably retarded main character. Maybe the most retarded character you'll ever read. Not naivette about not wanting to hurt anybody, no. Not unwillingness to survive, no. He has a skull so thick that he cannot perceive that anybody can be caring about him. A girl love him through speech, action, and everything, he wondered what she wanted (she literaly tell you on your face you fucking dimwit). Another girl want to make sure he doesn't blame himself for a fuck up that is objectively not anyone fault, he still wallow in despair until, I don't know, 200 chapters later. OMG, Even kindergartener can take hints better than he is. I don't know why author make this kind of character. Does he want to torture his reader?

Fourth, everybody is stupid. You want to kill your target, let's do planning for 3 days straight allowing a chance for your quary to escape. You want to be prepared for possibly life-ending conflict tomorrow morning where escape is impossible and surrender isn't viable, let's argue about your love life until dawn. You finally have someone to trust you after everything taken from you, let violate her to insanity. Not a single character here belivably doing a smart thing. If you read somebody doing the right thing, that's because, I don't know, miracle? Clearly author created them incapable of doing something right. Only when he want to bring story to particular direction, you'll find them doing things differently.

Author, you are a pro. By definition, your livelihood depend whether the market likes your product. You might be invested with your characters, but you do nothing to hook your reader to them. Let's stop this farce and try again.

5TON3KILL3R
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Spoiler: Spoiler

 

Well eh....yeah.

Story was good. Better than most but my rating and review are my own personal views so yeah.

 

Mc is a little bitch. So is his sister. All characters so far are crazy as fuck one way or another. Other than that the story wasn't so bad. If I hadn't read so many books and this.....sequence of eventss was knew i might have tolerated it but....honestly I'm tired of MC's like this one. Or fully out bat shit murdering ones.(although i can still stomach those. (Out side of Wuxia and xianxia that is) So yeah.

Scarson
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Massive Glaring Plot hole

The main reason for leaving this review is to highlight the huge plot hole in this story.  Now correct me if I am wrong but, the xpca know that there is a time period where new exhumans are pretty much invulnerable.  I believe the author said it was like a couple days long.  Now any reasonable goverment agency would then see that our mc surrendered easily take him away, wait for his invulnerability and then put a bullet in his brain.  Instead they decided to "throw everything they have at him" which they know will only make him stronger.  

 

Now maybe I read it wrong and they don't know about this invulnerability peroid, and this did try to kill him in every way they can.  In the story they just couldn't kill him because of his powers were way to strong.  So they had to exile him into the wilderness.  Ok so now you have this almost unkillable exhuman in the woods, fine.  But, him powers fluctuate more than goddamn superman.  Apparently melee attacks can hurt/kill?  So you are trying to tell me that the xpca that tried everything to kill him never attacking him will melee?  Along with that later in this story projectiles start doing damage to him.  Which in the beginning was said to be harmless to him.  

 

The characters also seem to just dance around the mc.

 

This story would be a lot more enjoyable if his powers weren't so much of a plot device.  

Air411
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It's great at the beginning in most everything, and grammar is nearly impeccable all the way through, so there's that going for it. But it starts going downhill quick. The story basically becomes shit and drama getting throw everywhere, and when the MC fixes something, it either hurts him, or more often, someone else even worse, in an infinite cycle. Characters are kinda unique but it seems like the author went really hard on the everyone is a horrible person. It's supposed to be a realistic and shitty world but, it's just a world of shit disguised as people.

Spoiler: Spoiler

 But hey, you might be into the traumatizing stuff and the endless drama and shit being thrown at a character, so give it a shot I guess.

Rotaretilbo
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Reconstruction is Fun™

I am current on Exhuman as of today, thru Chapter 183. It's certainly been an interesting read. Then again, one does not sprint through a work like this if it weren't interesting. So let's break this into sections.

Tonally, Exhuman can be a very competent hardboiled reconstruction of the superhero genre, and it can be a very competent goofy harem dramedy, but I think it suffers for trying to be both. While the downtime spent on the romance subplots serves a purpose, giving the reader time to breathe between heavier sections of the narrative, I think the story sometimes meanders too long there. The tone shifts are never jarring, but I do think Exhuman is trying a bit too hard to be both rather than letting the lighter tone serve the darker tone. Still, this is only a mild annoyance. As I said, both tones are well written, and the shifts are never jarring.

Narratively, I think Exhuman is fairly strong. The premise is interesting, a reconstruction of the brand of superhero we generally see in stories like X-Men, where the superheroes are oppressed for being dangerous, but more serious in considering how this would affect society rather than as window dressing. I also feel that the story does a fantastic job using foreshadowing to set up both future conflicts and their solutions, ensuring that nothing feels cheap or out of nowhere while simultaneously not making the whole story predictable. I think my main complaint, if I had to nitpick, would be that things generally resolve themselves a bit too cleanly. The protagonist often approaches these problems from a purely idealistic angle without really thinking his position through, and this rarely comes back to bite him in a meaningful way during the heavier sections of the narrative (though it frequently does in the romantic subplots). There is perhaps a little plot armor in play, as far into the story as we are, but I certainly would never claim that none of the main characters do not suffer. So it's just a nitpick.

Grammatically speaking, Exhuman is fairly strong. Diction, sentence structure, and word flow are all excellent. That said, there are occasional typos, typically artifacts of rewording things without passing through an editor: things like a word redundantly appearing twice in a sentence, or twice in a row, or sometimes a preposition might be missing. I'd guess that something like this happens maybe once every 20ish chapters or so.

Finally, we have the characters. This is probably the most contentious aspect of Exhuman. I have to agree with some of the criticism leveled against it. Every major character seems to have some quirk or trait that is overplayed so extremely that it threatens to break my suspension of disbelief. As an example, the protagonist is socially oblivious to the point of absurdity. Things go over his head, even when he's actively trying to figure out what's happening, that a small child would at least somewhat grasp. This is normally played for laughs, but it has undercut a couple serious scenes. However, in just about every other aspect, I find the character to be fairly nuanced and well characterized. His other traits, his motivations, and such are generally well thought out and believable. And I find that most characters are like this, having one element that is perhaps overplayed but otherwise being fairly nuanced in their portrayal. And except when that one quirk is undercutting what would otherwise be a serious scene, it's rather endearing.

So overall, I find Exhuman to be well written. It was certainly worth the read, and I intend to continue reading as it updates.

Guy Normus
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I'll preface by saying I read a whole bunch'a chapters on the blog, so I'm quite a ways ahead of the RRL postings (stopped reading on the blog because I felt guilty for not donating though; felt like I was stealing chocolates. Would if I comfortably could).

In short, the story's good enough to be closer to the average (quite good) published work rather than the usual RRL power-trip/'everything in the universe gets out of the MC's way' stuff. Because of this, I expect loads of people to subconsciously shift to actual book ratings rather than amateur gimme points you see in 99% of reviews. Anyway, onto the review:

 

Style: This story actually has a writing style! And it's good! Each character's perspective shows in the narration (and in a non-jarring way!), something loads of fresh writers neglect to do. It's like a breath of fresh air to have the tone match the mindset of the character. Fight scenes have impact and devastating moments ellicit emotion.

 

Grammar: Excellent! Doesn't stretch the English language to its limits to try and sound better than it is, but the vocab is organically varied enough to keep interest sentence-to-sentence. Typos, from what I remember, are almost nonexistant, but I binged most of the story, so I could have glossed over one or two. I remember seeing a few grammar snaffus, but those were on days I was feeling particularly edit-y. I highly doubt most of you will notice anything.

Story: Surprisingly unpredictable! The main character has lacking knowledge in logical areas and suffers for it; things don't always go 100% to plan and thus the sequence of events is believable, stays fresh 100+ chapters in, etc. All around engaging and enjoyable. Elements are introduced as the time comes, so no infodumps or anything tedious like that. Just a warning that the story does get quite heavy in a part or two, however, so that may not agree with a particular palette.

Characters: This is where the story shines, in my humble opinion. All characters feel alive in a way that I haven't been able to find in a web novel since well, ever, and they develop constantly. Sometimes it's with steps forward, sometimes backward. C'est la vie, though, and I appreciate the relative realism. Makes the story better if there are (ex)human characters making perfectly human mistakes. There are a number of (sometime main) characters that I dislike, but, if they make me feel any emotion, I consider them to be a grade-A character. I don't think there are any named characters that don't serve sufficient purpose or get their allotment of development, which is nice. Aside from the nameless grunts, of course. Even they manage to carve out som humanity for themselves every now than then, though.

 

If this was a published book, I'd give it somewhere between 4 and 4.5 stars (and I'm quite strict. I usually rate sub-4), only taking off for nitpicky stuff that I won't go into here. As this is RRL and I don't wanna set a bad tone for the reviews for a genuinely good author, however, I'll slap down the 5'er. Read it. 

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Oh, and to the author: I recommend posting 1 chapter per day on the site. With 100 in the backlog, you'll shoot up to Active Only in no time (probably), which is what most people (myself included) look at for some actually decent stuff. Sometimes we even find it. With 100+ chappies, you ought'ta stay there for a while to boot.