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If superpowers appeared today, what might the future look like?
In a future which has endured nuclear wars, people rarely wake up one day with supernatural powers, transforming an innocent life into a walking apocalypse. Shunned and feared, these Exhumans are often violent, ever misunderstood, and always dangerous.
In this world unfolds the dark story of Athan Ashton, an 18-year old with a football scholarship who wakes up to find himself a lightning-powered Exhuman. Following a failed imprisonment and execution, he is exiled to the wilds, ostracized from all he’s even known.
Like most, Athan never questioned society's view of Exhumans, buying the public line that they are selfish and a danger, fit only to be reported and dispatched. But living on the other side, Athan begins to discover why Exhumans go bad, and begins the impossible task of becoming more than just his powers.
Athan is dedicated to use his Exhumanity only for good, but is that enough to survive in a world where his very existence is a crime?
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I have read till 107 in wordpress. Writing style is superb and professional. Story, characters and world is really well written making it easy to readand understand. I would give full marks for technical details and writing overall.
Mc just ruined this for me, its not that mc is badly written but he just doesn't make any sense. He's 18 years old who goes to school, but after while in story it feels like he was born moment he was introduced into story. It's like mix of zero social experience and some mental illness like bipolar disorder.
All other characters have compelling reasons to act way they do, but mc just seems to be retard. I didn't mind it at first because it was funny and it wasn't much, but after while it just became irrational. It was maybe after 50s all these issues with mc started just adding up and finally becoming just frustrating.
Mc's character is just gaping plothole for me, so I can't really say I'm big fan of this novel. I would probably give it less stars if I just went by experience of reading it, but I have to give props for all things other than mc.
I personally don't like the mc and the way the author has him act. The premise is good the world of the story is good, but the mc is too reluctant to kill. I'm not saying he should be a sociopathic killer, I'm not even saying that when he does kill he should be perfectly fine with it. But when the mc literally saves the person who has tried to kill you twice and literally tells them about his abilities at that point i dont like it, because to me (and I may not word it right so im sorry im just trying my best here) that looks like mc is trying to uphold an idealistic set of values of "you should not kill", where as I believe that the best idealogy is "you should not kill without proper reason", proper reason being in self-defence or in defence of an innocent. So I'm not gonna say your story is bad but I'm gonna say the story isn't for me.
I was only able to get 17 chapters in before giving up. It started out promising but quickly turned into a meme. The characters are stagnate and refused to grow. For all the talking about 'humanity' it's nearly non existing in this story. Almost the entire cast is in a looping script instead of being remotely believable. Their actions and rational is so dense it borders on ludicrous.
If I were living in this world i know for a fact I'd make it my mission to incinerate as much of it as I possibly could and give the planet a chance to try again.
So have only read up to chapter 40 on the wordpress and so far it's a pretty decent story can tell the author is a pretty good writer, things that bother me so far that keeps me from giving it a higher rating is that some of the character's in it are so incredible stupid it hurts my head. I really like the dark tone of story wich get ruined somewhat by the harem parts for me atleast im not a huge harem fan but hey if you are that will probably just be a plus for you but for me it kind of ruins the tone of the story. I will keep reading and will most likely update my review as i get farther along in the story.
Because, along the ride, you will meet characters that are stubborn. Frustratingly stubborn.
I remember two days ago reading this fiction's first chapter and feeling glad I might started reading a good one. Commenters are enthusiastic in giving typo correction, fully hoped that this fiction be the best it could ever be. But went with it 50 chapters, things does not look good.
First, author offered POV from multiple characters. I wonder why the author did that. Because most of those POV character does not have influence on how the story goes. This fiction do pointless multi-POV. This improve later on, but its uselessness is still ever present.
Second, there's excessive, crude, bigotry going at the setting. I'm not sure if there's reader enjoyed reading that because I slog through them with difficulty. The villainy is much more enjoyable when they're veiled. There's even trope called Affable Evil! I saw that trope as a valid hook for author to draw in readers. This fiction's author did not use that. (S)he use the opposite. If author's goal is to repell readers from reading this fiction, he has (partial) success with me.
Third, you will meet unbelievably retarded main character. Maybe the most retarded character you'll ever read. Not naivette about not wanting to hurt anybody, no. Not unwillingness to survive, no. He has a skull so thick that he cannot perceive that anybody can be caring about him. A girl love him through speech, action, and everything, he wondered what she wanted (she literaly tell you on your face you fucking dimwit). Another girl want to make sure he doesn't blame himself for a fuck up that is objectively not anyone fault, he still wallow in despair until, I don't know, 200 chapters later. OMG, Even kindergartener can take hints better than he is. I don't know why author make this kind of character. Does he want to torture his reader?
Fourth, everybody is stupid. You want to kill your target, let's do planning for 3 days straight allowing a chance for your quary to escape. You want to be prepared for possibly life-ending conflict tomorrow morning where escape is impossible and surrender isn't viable, let's argue about your love life until dawn. You finally have someone to trust you after everything taken from you, let violate her to insanity. Not a single character here belivably doing a smart thing. If you read somebody doing the right thing, that's because, I don't know, miracle? Clearly author created them incapable of doing something right. Only when he want to bring story to particular direction, you'll find them doing things differently.
Author, you are a pro. By definition, your livelihood depend whether the market likes your product. You might be invested with your characters, but you do nothing to hook your reader to them. Let's stop this farce and try again.
Story was good. Better than most but my rating and review are my own personal views so yeah.
Mc is a little bitch. So is his sister. All characters so far are crazy as fuck one way or another. Other than that the story wasn't so bad. If I hadn't read so many books and this.....sequence of eventss was knew i might have tolerated it but....honestly I'm tired of MC's like this one. Or fully out bat shit murdering ones.(although i can still stomach those. (Out side of Wuxia and xianxia that is) So yeah.
The main reason for leaving this review is to highlight the huge plot hole in this story. Now correct me if I am wrong but, the xpca know that there is a time period where new exhumans are pretty much invulnerable. I believe the author said it was like a couple days long. Now any reasonable goverment agency would then see that our mc surrendered easily take him away, wait for his invulnerability and then put a bullet in his brain. Instead they decided to "throw everything they have at him" which they know will only make him stronger.
Now maybe I read it wrong and they don't know about this invulnerability peroid, and this did try to kill him in every way they can. In the story they just couldn't kill him because of his powers were way to strong. So they had to exile him into the wilderness. Ok so now you have this almost unkillable exhuman in the woods, fine. But, him powers fluctuate more than goddamn superman. Apparently melee attacks can hurt/kill? So you are trying to tell me that the xpca that tried everything to kill him never attacking him will melee? Along with that later in this story projectiles start doing damage to him. Which in the beginning was said to be harmless to him.
The characters also seem to just dance around the mc.
This story would be a lot more enjoyable if his powers weren't so much of a plot device.
It's great at the beginning in most everything, and grammar is nearly impeccable all the way through, so there's that going for it. But it starts going downhill quick. The story basically becomes shit and drama getting throw everywhere, and when the MC fixes something, it either hurts him, or more often, someone else even worse, in an infinite cycle. Characters are kinda unique but it seems like the author went really hard on the everyone is a horrible person. It's supposed to be a realistic and shitty world but, it's just a world of shit disguised as people.
Also, fucking mindraping and traumatizing your friend who trusted you, but you didn't care and did it anyways is just a goddamn mistake to be forgiven according to the MC.
But hey, you might be into the traumatizing stuff and the endless drama and shit being thrown at a character, so give it a shot I guess.
I am current on Exhuman as of today, thru Chapter 183. It's certainly been an interesting read. Then again, one does not sprint through a work like this if it weren't interesting. So let's break this into sections.
Tonally, Exhuman can be a very competent hardboiled reconstruction of the superhero genre, and it can be a very competent goofy harem dramedy, but I think it suffers for trying to be both. While the downtime spent on the romance subplots serves a purpose, giving the reader time to breathe between heavier sections of the narrative, I think the story sometimes meanders too long there. The tone shifts are never jarring, but I do think Exhuman is trying a bit too hard to be both rather than letting the lighter tone serve the darker tone. Still, this is only a mild annoyance. As I said, both tones are well written, and the shifts are never jarring.
Narratively, I think Exhuman is fairly strong. The premise is interesting, a reconstruction of the brand of superhero we generally see in stories like X-Men, where the superheroes are oppressed for being dangerous, but more serious in considering how this would affect society rather than as window dressing. I also feel that the story does a fantastic job using foreshadowing to set up both future conflicts and their solutions, ensuring that nothing feels cheap or out of nowhere while simultaneously not making the whole story predictable. I think my main complaint, if I had to nitpick, would be that things generally resolve themselves a bit too cleanly. The protagonist often approaches these problems from a purely idealistic angle without really thinking his position through, and this rarely comes back to bite him in a meaningful way during the heavier sections of the narrative (though it frequently does in the romantic subplots). There is perhaps a little plot armor in play, as far into the story as we are, but I certainly would never claim that none of the main characters do not suffer. So it's just a nitpick.
Grammatically speaking, Exhuman is fairly strong. Diction, sentence structure, and word flow are all excellent. That said, there are occasional typos, typically artifacts of rewording things without passing through an editor: things like a word redundantly appearing twice in a sentence, or twice in a row, or sometimes a preposition might be missing. I'd guess that something like this happens maybe once every 20ish chapters or so.
Finally, we have the characters. This is probably the most contentious aspect of Exhuman. I have to agree with some of the criticism leveled against it. Every major character seems to have some quirk or trait that is overplayed so extremely that it threatens to break my suspension of disbelief. As an example, the protagonist is socially oblivious to the point of absurdity. Things go over his head, even when he's actively trying to figure out what's happening, that a small child would at least somewhat grasp. This is normally played for laughs, but it has undercut a couple serious scenes. However, in just about every other aspect, I find the character to be fairly nuanced and well characterized. His other traits, his motivations, and such are generally well thought out and believable. And I find that most characters are like this, having one element that is perhaps overplayed but otherwise being fairly nuanced in their portrayal. And except when that one quirk is undercutting what would otherwise be a serious scene, it's rather endearing.
So overall, I find Exhuman to be well written. It was certainly worth the read, and I intend to continue reading as it updates.
I'll preface by saying I read a whole bunch'a chapters on the blog, so I'm quite a ways ahead of the RRL postings (stopped reading on the blog because I felt guilty for not donating though; felt like I was stealing chocolates. Would if I comfortably could).
In short, the story's good enough to be closer to the average (quite good) published work rather than the usual RRL power-trip/'everything in the universe gets out of the MC's way' stuff. Because of this, I expect loads of people to subconsciously shift to actual book ratings rather than amateur gimme points you see in 99% of reviews. Anyway, onto the review:
Style: This story actually has a writing style! And it's good! Each character's perspective shows in the narration (and in a non-jarring way!), something loads of fresh writers neglect to do. It's like a breath of fresh air to have the tone match the mindset of the character. Fight scenes have impact and devastating moments ellicit emotion.
Grammar: Excellent! Doesn't stretch the English language to its limits to try and sound better than it is, but the vocab is organically varied enough to keep interest sentence-to-sentence. Typos, from what I remember, are almost nonexistant, but I binged most of the story, so I could have glossed over one or two. I remember seeing a few grammar snaffus, but those were on days I was feeling particularly edit-y. I highly doubt most of you will notice anything.
Story: Surprisingly unpredictable! The main character has lacking knowledge in logical areas and suffers for it; things don't always go 100% to plan and thus the sequence of events is believable, stays fresh 100+ chapters in, etc. All around engaging and enjoyable. Elements are introduced as the time comes, so no infodumps or anything tedious like that. Just a warning that the story does get quite heavy in a part or two, however, so that may not agree with a particular palette.
Characters: This is where the story shines, in my humble opinion. All characters feel alive in a way that I haven't been able to find in a web novel since well, ever, and they develop constantly. Sometimes it's with steps forward, sometimes backward. C'est la vie, though, and I appreciate the relative realism. Makes the story better if there are (ex)human characters making perfectly human mistakes. There are a number of (sometime main) characters that I dislike, but, if they make me feel any emotion, I consider them to be a grade-A character. I don't think there are any named characters that don't serve sufficient purpose or get their allotment of development, which is nice. Aside from the nameless grunts, of course. Even they manage to carve out som humanity for themselves every now than then, though.
If this was a published book, I'd give it somewhere between 4 and 4.5 stars (and I'm quite strict. I usually rate sub-4), only taking off for nitpicky stuff that I won't go into here. As this is RRL and I don't wanna set a bad tone for the reviews for a genuinely good author, however, I'll slap down the 5'er. Read it.
Oh, and to the author: I recommend posting 1 chapter per day on the site. With 100 in the backlog, you'll shoot up to Active Only in no time (probably), which is what most people (myself included) look at for some actually decent stuff. Sometimes we even find it. With 100+ chappies, you ought'ta stay there for a while to boot.