Paranoia!

by Nneeil

Original ONGOING Action Contemporary Drama Fantasy Anti-Hero Lead Harem LitRPG Low Fantasy Magic Male Lead Martial Arts School Life Slice of Life Strong Lead Supernatural Urban Fantasy
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WARNING: Incest | Adult themes | And other stuff...

He felt it. The way helplessness kicked in and showed him the sweet but suffocating cage he was locked in. He just wanted to break free and feel the thrill of being alive. Having been granted that wish, he'll find himself amidst the conflicts of creatures lurking in the shadows and super-powered humans that prefer basking in the daylight among the average.

It's not a problem though, he'll thrive and survive. He has a system after all.

 

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Zombie Unicorne
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It's great, so trying it out won't hurt.

The somewhat long version of why I consider this story is great and how it caught my eye early was the main character, because he's not some loser or 'average' weeaboo loser for once! In fact he's pretty much superior in comparison to his peers. When he got his powers, it was so refreshing that he didn't compared it to a game like RPGs or anything but just saw the numbers and treated it as such. I still don't get why most main character would gush over such a stat system and quickly compare it to an game mechanic and thinking that them making the connection is such an advantage and an accomplishment and also think that them spending an entire summer playing games in their mom's basement finally paid off, when anyone can pretty much figure that shit out without them being a basement dweller or a weeaboo loser.

As for the plot, I hope it slows down a bit because so far, it's going light speed with very little setup. What I enjoyed the most actually is the MC dealing with his social life and new found powers and whats it's effect on his psyche. Power doesn't corrupt, it shows character and that's exactly what happened, he was restricted before but now, he's free and I'm curious where that'll leave him but my personal hope is that it doesn't go in the cliche route, we already have enough stories warning us about unchecked power, it's bout time we see the pinacle if it all.

Well anyway, I hope the story slows down and set up more buildup rather than thrusting the main character into battle and conflict in random, also dealing with Jered's new found worldview and perspective, aswell as his social life more than the random fights and rapid powerups would be a great improvement.

Jtw1000
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It is good and like said in previous reviews it is probably not for most people on rr. It has genres kind of like Euphoria and maybe a little like Mythical Conquest character wise, but it could be to soon to say. So far I have really liked it as of chapter 10 and if you are debating on whether or not to read it I would say just to give it a shot. It could not be your thing and that's fine it's not going to be for everyone, but it could BE your thing and your eyes will be glued to the screen if it is. Either way no regrets.

G3cko
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A story above the others, or just another novel?

The story idea is something we have seen before, whether that’d be on RRL, NU, or wherever else. It’s a Modern world with LitRPG elements, mostly in the form of a system and character sheet, at this point. But what makes it unique compared to other novels, is it slower pace (by comparison) and its rather average past of the MC.

The MCs past isn’t tragic or anything of the sort, not compared to other novels that gets free empathy and sympathy points by having their MC going through some tragic and traumatic past. In this novel, Jered (our MC) has gone through what a great part of everyone has, living with a single parent. Jered’s father died, causing their family to drift apart, not that they have no familial love, just that they preferred being alone. I find this great, since it gives the reader a better chance to form an anctual link with Jered, where the reader and he might be familiar, compared to the reader just thinking “Hiw very sad, you deserve the best of this world after what you’ve gone through, and guess what, BY THE POWER OF PLOT ARMOUR AND CHEAP SYMPATHY POINTS, YOU WILL GET IT!”

There are a few gramatical mistakes here and there but nothing that ruins the story or makes it unreadable.

I find it too early to judge the actual character and story score, so just take my rating to be “trust points” or me following my gut. It is, however, the story and characters that’ll decide if this story is “just another one” or its own novel. So yeah, this review is prone to change, but for now this is it. I am hopeful in regards to where the author will take the story, and in the author himself, and I will read this story as long as I can see the author putting in an effort.

pooham
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Not many of these kinds of Mature stories on RRL

This story if you see the tags is probably not for most people on RRL . It's kind of like Godly System on RRL too . But i think this have another direction . I like the mysteriousness so far. Seems like we have many chapters to go before we get answers . Not too much to comment on right now . I like the style and grammar , english isn't my first language so i don't see the small mistakes some people do. 

 My first review i think . So excuse me if its shit :p

Hypocrite1
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This was a Comment that got too long

I was initially rather skeptical of the story what with the tags that started it off, but as of chapter 10, there doesn't seem to be anything too off putting. Obviously later on we will likely see scenes of incest or sex scenes, but to me personally, these don't really mean anything. I'm sure a lot of people are going to be up in arms about the incest thing, but since this is all fiction, I can very very easily pretend that its not incest and even if I don't pretend so, fantasy incest is so far from real life incest that I can get over it.

The main attraction for me is the psychopathic tendencies of the main character. I've read a decent amount of stories with supposed anti heroes, but none of them push the boundaries of morals quite as much as I'm hoping this character will. My one gripe of the story is how easily the character goes in and out of his psychopath persona. Psychopaths have trouble empathizing with anyone, even their family. So when the main character quickly switches from murderous to loving, its extremely jarring. I know the author is building on how much he cares for his family, but maybe have the character transform more slowly. Of course this is all just personal preference and some people might like what I don't. So far the author has done great and I hope to see more amazing stuff in the future.