My life in another world - isekai

My life in another world - isekai

by Kato - san

Warning This fiction contains:
  • Gore
  • Profanity

A 17-year-old boy dies at the hand of a mercenary group. After meeting with the god of life, death and rebirth he is then reincarnated into a world beyond his imagining.     

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the first two chapters are in retrospective, please bear with it.

my pace for the rest of the week is going to be 1 or 2 chapters a day

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Roderick Pendragon
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Alright for a beginning writer

The imagination is there, but is obvious that the writer still has lots to learn. The story itself is pretty cool, but the first couple of chapters are a bit infodumpy. The writer adds a layer of seperation to the story by saying: "I looked and saw a huge mountain.", a better alternative would be "A huge mountain rose from the earth." or something similar. The sentences are long and almost always in italics, which bothered me a little. The grammar is alright, but I didn't really look for grammatical errors and such.
The MC is cliché, at least till chapter 6, but there is room to grow his character.

All in all 2.5 stars.