Jager: The death Angel

Jager: The death Angel

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Jager, a fearless man, nicknamed son of the devil because of his ruthless cruelty. Pursued by gangsters and police, disgraced by his own family, yet loved by some people as they believed he was doing the right thing, cleaning the garbage from the streets.

Not a hero, neither a villain, just a human flesh and blood, accomplishing what governments in years couldn't. However, no matter how strong you are or how fast you move, you are one against an army, and soon or later you will fall on your knees. The time comes for all of us and Jager isn't an exception.

Genre: Male lead, anti-hero, a little of LitRPG, Harem, fantasy, romance and reincarnation.(I don't know if I'm going to end this in fantasy but for now the true genres are: Noir, horror action, male lead, anti-hero, gore, assassin mc, contemporary and tragedy)

Schedule: Not a fixed one, although I will try to write new chapters every month.

Remember this isn't real.

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Dragonightmare
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This storyso far seems like it will be good im intrested in how you will develop the mc state of mind i hope that while from the description we know he is going to be seen as evil its for the right reasons not just him growing into a complete ass which i dont think you will do thou

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Foundations are there, execution could improve

Overall, I found that the plot overall could be considered quite entertaining. The characters are pretty good and the same can be said of the dialogue.

Unfortunately, despite the good grammar the sentences didn't seem to flow into each other too well. It is also suffering heavily from the plague that is "telling, not showing", which can at times take a great deal of character and character building from the plot.