Chris Walker was teleported to the world of Naruto. He didn't die, rather someone or something teleported him there for no apparent reason. (Or did he?)
The world of Naruto doesn't follow the same script as the original Naruto series. The whole world of Naruto is so much different, even though Chris has watched the entire naruto series, it won't help him at all since everything in Naruto is different.
And now Chris has to survive in this new world of Naruto
I do not have any rights to the Naruto or the cover either, this is only a hobby to write fan-fiction light novels.
WARNING: If you hate harem, then this novel isn't for you. There will never be any sexual content in this novel.
And i'll try my best to not let the harem ruin this novel. There are potentially only 5 harem members on it, NO MORE THAN THAT AMOUNT.
And yes, I am sorry for not keeping my word for this novel, and included a harem in it. I didn't want it either, because it means more work for me. But I did a poll and harem won.
I am sorry for that, and please forgive me.
This novel also includes OP mc, for those who don't like OP Mc's. And this also includes light Sasuke and Sakura bashing, only in the early part of the story, but then changes after. And this also includes more characters.
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I can’t continue to read this nonsense (the author said that the further the better, but the opposite, the farther the dumber becoming MC) I’ll leave this novel because of MC and the author who made all allies dumber and smarter than the enemy (as the author believes ) The author did not want a harem, but this is a harem (The author does not want such characters as Tsunade in the harem because they are too old but the author forgot that MC has the ability to manage time (which he does not use at all, he can seriously stop all the time 10 seconds, but the author did not even think that he could change be the age of the harem) The author thinks that MC OP but no it’s not (he can’t do anything at all) as a whole the story is not bad but the author turned the story into garbage) (I use google translator)
So, uh... Yeah.
This story really is something else. I don't think I've ever read prose this bad in my life - at least not prose that somehow still becomes popular. The author absolutely needs an editor and a rewrite, because reading this has probably given me a brain tumour.
I made through almost three chapters before deciding to look out for my health and giving up. I suggest you don't do the same. Just don't touch it at all.
The author apparently doesn't know how to write conversation. You don't write like this:
"Man, this novel really isn't any good." (me)
"what do you mean, this novel is totally great, I don't even have to use question marks, full stops, or anything, I can just keep going and vomit words like there's no tomorrow" (author)
I mean, really? Run-on sentences that last longer than Forrest Gump's cross-country run, character writing more 2-dimensional than Pac-Man, terrible dialogue, and a "hehe xd" random system that appears once in a while are some of the few things so very wrong with this novel.
I suggest you take a couple of writing classes, scrap this novel, and start over, because I think I may have to sue for damages if this brain tumour develops.
It is full of shit. Horrible character development. It makes no sense. You push characters and random stories out your ass every chapter. You branded your own mc as a rapist. The blue screen thing is not funny/cute/entertaining. WHY AND HOW DID ITACHI GET MARRIED. Who the fuck Is Isabella and how and what kekei genkai makes her so op that she can botch slap pains asshole. Why are the only changes you made to the story shit like making enemies stronger. Here is a change we would all love. Itachi didn't kill all the uchihas and is a good big bro. Yahiko didn't die so there is no pain. Minato died but kushina lived to protect her baby or vise versa. This would have been good changes but you just had to fuck it all up since the beginning eh
You keep pushing shit out your ads into the virtual world and keep calling it good content. I don't understand why this gets so much attention or why is it even at 3 and a half stars. This is seriously stupid annoying and frustrating. For someone with so much op powers he is so weak it is infuriating and makes no fucking sense.
I do not understand what's going on in this novel; I understand the plot somewhat, but I just don't understand that if he has a million times the charka of the nine tails; why isn't he already the strongest in the world. I know someone is going to say because it's the lack of exprience, but that's bull. With that amount of charka, he could destroy a continent instantly.
Sorry but this is cringe for me. couldn't get past ch 2, the OPness if whatever but your portrayal of anbu and the hokage is just horrible. maybe i have higher expectations since i've read legit good naruto fanfics on ff.net
Sad to say this is really not worth your time if your looking for naruto fanfic
on the other end you could easily improve this with some grammer checking, completing words and not using u instead of you. basicly alot alot alot of polish.
This novel started in a good note and I expected a lot from it. The author's idea of merging Naruto's world with his own ideas was filled with potential as well.
But because of the system, the MC became a bit too overpowered. Some of the new characters in the novel are likeable but the older characters seemed to have lost their original personality from the anime.
The plot almost seems to be non existant (at least for now). The fights in this novel are short and very uninteresting.
As I said earlier, this novel had a lot of potential. There a lot of new ideas put inside this novel but they have not connected very well with each other.
In a simple sentence:- This novel seems like a hodgepodge of different ideas and seems to be running of purely the author's whim.
I am a big fan of Naruto series and had read a lot of fan fictions before this but I was thoroughly disappointed by this one.
Give it a try if you want to. Everyone has different taste and you might like it. But I would rather not pick it up again.
The character's and stories are so random it just to stupid. The mc I'd super overpowered in truth but he gets such huge nerfs for the plot that he looks like a complete idiot who doesn't know how shit works. Somehow the rinegan can move faster then time and time is in fact faster then the speed of light. Somehow people can just adapt to time being stopped and ignore that it is stopped. You could name an inventory "inventory" for over 60 chapters. The mc I'd a stupid idiot who literally is like a god to this people but is so weak he can't do anything. To give mc a challenge(for plot) you literally make him out to be weak, make some random ass person op and say it's thanks to his KG(kekei genkai). At this point I won't be surprised if ichiraku guy ends up being madara uchihas and kaguyas son, who has eyes of super overpoweredness and gets mind controlled into fucking his daughter to give birth to the god of ninjas who will be the strongest opponent chris has ever faced. Also I'm 99.999999% sure your going to use the bullshit I just said as a future plot and call it story development.
Wish fulfillment story from someone who's probably never written anything, and doesn't even try to write well.
Grammar is better than other stories on this site, but still quite bad.
Probably not worth your time.
Alright, I was gonna dump the fic like the hundreds of other subpar fics I've sifted through in the past, but this one gets a lot of attention, and I don't believe that's very just.
Between the unfunny author parentheses, the OOC characters and the ridiculously overpowered MC, this story is a mess in quite a few angles, and exploring all of them would be a waste of time, so let me just give a semi-detailed break-down of why I'm giving you low-star scores.
Style: Author interjections are done through parentheses mid-story, but what really pisses me off is that the name of the person speaking in a dialogue is written in brackets like I'm some sort of fool that can't follow a written convo. Jesus Christ, that shit doesn't work. It never does.
Instead of doing this:
"I fell down some stairs" (Naruto)
"I fell down some stairs," Naruto said.
Or if it's implicit that he's speaking, I.e: Iruka asks him a question; Naruto! What happened?"
"I fell down some stairs"
The above would suffice.
The style is very unconventional and informal, bordering on amateurish, but that wouldn't be such a big issue if it wasn't compounded by the genuinely horrid storytelling.
Story: We've got our MC who reincarnates into the Naruto world, and selects God mode, purported to be the most difficult setting of the world, but instead of that, he munchkins four overpowered Kekkei Genkais, selects three elemental affinities and twenty miscellaneous/combat skills that make him into a peerless genius.
Literally nothing in this whole scenario is difficult. The shitty MC treats life as a joke, because it freaking is. The surrounding characters are absolute idiots, and it only makes the MC's job of surviving easier.
He gets interrogated by the Hokage for five minutes, and then he gets let off, and not only that, he first got taken in for being a spy, and then they freaking let him join the academy.
Keep in mind, this is the same dude that ordered the slaughter of men, women, the elderly and the children of the Uchiha clan. He doesn't kill a foreign element, but enrolls him into the school like it was a good decision. Ninja don't mess around with secrets, so why in the world did he do that?
Here's a snippet that really pissed me off: "I can't chase him outside of the village or he might be killed by whatever is lurking out there and my reputation will collapse."
Eh... first of all, no it wouldn't. Second of all, that is NOT the only way to banish a foreign agent from their village. He could kill, then cremate him and spread the ashes somewhere, he could transport him secretly and dump him somewhere, and the ANBU wouldn't bat a single eyelid.
They kill children, for god's sakes. I'm still having a hard time believing that the ANBU would ever humor the MC's request to be taken. Why wasn't he brought directly to interrogation to Ibiki Morino*** (You called him Horimo, what the heck?)? The Hokage has better things to do than interrogate people.
And even if Chris managed to trick the Hokage with four different skills, that made the whole issue utterly simple, a far-cry from the purported 'god-mode' difficulty that Chris would be subjected to.
Here's what actual God-mode would look like:
He gets dropped off somewhere in the Konoha forest. As is. No Japanese, no Jutsu, an average amount of Chakra.
Then he gets told to become the Hokage.
That, that there's a God-mode challenge. Not this excuse of a curbstomp.
Grammar is the only okay thing with this story, and it's still shit in regular standards. Little punctuations (you even forget the period, sometimes), run-on sentences and poor syntax, but it's readable.
Grammarly extension could fix that.
Characters: The Hokage used 'gonna' and 'wanna' several times in dialogue, he was utterly naive and extremely gullible, and generally OOC.
Some new characters introduced thanks to his God-mode difficulty, but does it really make it a bigger challenge for our already OP hero? No, it doesn't.