Re: Dungeon Conqueror

Re: Dungeon Conqueror

by Wilberforce

Warning This fiction contains:
  • Gore
  • Sexual Content

Edard is born with a heightened sense abnormal by all human standard. He can hear the voices of animals and can forecast the possibility of a rain by just looking at the sky. Spending several days eating nothing and holding his breath for an hour are just the least of his abilities.

He has always been curious about the existence of other planets with living creatures like himself. One day, he gets his wish; someone transported him to another world. 

He could have been happier though if he doesn’t receive an ultimatum of one-hour.

The immortal dais welcomes you to Màsar.

Congratulations, you have become a Conqueror. You will not age but you will die if your longevity runs out.

As an Initiate, you have zero longevity. On its infinite mercy, the dais has given you a one-hour lifespan to gain longevity else you will die.

Longevity: 00:59:59

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What to expect:

OP MC, fast-paced, lots of skills selections, plot driven, and despite the title there won't be constant dungeon conquering. 

 

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SunnyB
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Starts off okay, goes downhill

So the story starts off like many others, MC is summoned, gets OP powers, blah blah blah. Despite that, the story in the beginning isn't that bad. The power system is a bit messy with some info dumps. Other than that, the story itself is interesting. The MC has a unique background meets some  interesting people, and learns more about the world along the way. Just something you wouldn't mind reading as a bit of a time waster. However, there could be a lot more explanations about the MC, his life before being summoned, his goals, etc. What killed the sotry for me is the lack of common sense the MC has.Everything that is told to him he accepts without question and doesn't consider people mgiht be lying to him and/or using him. For example

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 Another part showing the lack of thinking skills is when 

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karm4
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could be interesting if it werent so bad

terrible grammar, bad planned out storyline and a general wishfullfilment.
At least the girl isnt immediately fallen for the Mc which is still a plus.

 

it is on the level of 90% of the novels on this side with its atrocious english and the bland story and its descriptions.

The only reason to start this novel if you really like stories where people fight against dungeons and even then im not sure if you can still read this.

Elliot Moors
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STYLE - The author has a clear voice that is easy to read. While there are some aspects that could be tightened up, reading through this story doesn't offer many obstacles and in most places it is easy to understand the author's intent.

GRAMMAR - Not much to note here. Apart from a few errors, the grammar is perfectly satisfactory throughout, at least for my reading experience. Another pass of editing would always be beneficial, but I don't think it's needed for most people's tastes. 

STORY - If you've read any LitRPG at all, you'll feel right at home. That being said, the author has done an impressive amount of worldbuilding to bring this story together, which is commendable, and it is often shown off through the status screens interspersed throughout.

CHARACTERS - This is the weakest part of the story for me, personally. So far I haven't connected very deeply with any of the main characters, although that may change as more chapters are added. I would very much like to see them fleshed out further with clear personality traits so that we as readers are more pulled into the experience. That being said, the characters are absolutely serviceable, and there are a few nice character moments I can think of off the top of my head.

OVERALL - The author has begun to deliver an enjoyable story that readers of the LitRPG genre will likely enjoy. Conventional aspects are blended with some unique ones, and an impressive level of worldbuilding helps the setting feel more engrossing. While the characters could stand to be improved in my opinion, they don't stand in the way of the story and they get the job done.

Good work, author! Keep 'em coming! 

Roderick Pendragon
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Style: The flow of the story is good. There are no big jumps in perspective or time which make it a easy read. There is not a whole lot to say here, as it is nearly perfect.

Grammar: There are some grammatical errors, which I noticed, but it didn't impact my reading experience. As I did notice them, and some part of my mind began to nag, I can't really give 5 stars for this.

STORY: The story format is just like a typical LitRPG, but the quality is ensured by the writer. Just like a Marvel Movie, you now it's about superhero's, and you can vaguely guess what's going to happen, but it's nonetheless an excellent movie.

CHARACTER: The characters give of clear vibes, and one can easily guess their motivations. For the full 5 stars I would add some more mystery to the mix, and slowly reveal it over the course of the next couple of chapters. There is not much more to say, as the story is still fairly short.

All in all, good work.

 

Folkensedai
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this is a nice wuxia.
you will like it if you don't try to understand everything, as it's often quite incomprehensible.

Dark_Raizel
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Support this Story guys

Just read the prologue. It's a good start. Clichè but interesting enough. Can't wait for the author to write a 100 chapters of this.