Dragon Child of Thunder

by WorldSerpent

Original HIATUS Action Fantasy Romance Tragedy Harem Martial Arts
In the World of Zenheim on the Continent of Astarte, where Magic and Sorcery run rampant, Home to The Humans, The Dwarves, The Elves, The Beastmen and The Draconions and the many other subspecies. Mankind has been pushed to the brink of extinction many times by the enemy of the world, Raz Seph the conqueror, his twelve Dark Knights and his legions of mindless, violent dark beings called """"Invaders""""
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Table of Contents
Chapter Name Release Date
Prologue: ago
Prologue 2 : A Child is born. ago
Prologue 3: The Lightning Calamity. ago
Chapter 1: A second chance. ago
Chapter 2: Growing. ago
Chapter 3 : Resolve & Insight. ago
Chapter 4: Dumb-looking human. ago
Chapter 5: A Frightful Intention. ago
Chapter 6: Preparation ago
Chapter 7 : Presents. ago
Notice : 18+ ago
Chapter 8 : The First Step. ago
Chapter 9 : Family. ago
NTR-Response. ago
Chapter 10 : Unexpected turn of Events. ago
Chapter 11 : In-fuhrer-riated. ago
Chapter 12 : Plotting ago
Chapter 13: Heathen God. ago
Chapter 14 : Battle In the Arena. ago
Chapter 15 : Savior? Or Destroyer? ago
Chapter 16: Rest Day. ago
Chapter 17: Tears of the Lightning King. ago
Chapter 18: A Reunion. ago
Seatbelt Notice. Discussions & Questions. ago
Chapter 19: Reunion part 2. ago
Chapter 20: Heart-Stopping Party. ago
Support me if you're a fan! ago
Chapter 21 : Soaring. ago
Chapter 22 : High Nobility. ago
Chapter 23: A 5th Throne. ago
Notice! ago
Prologue of New FF--Glory to the All Father ago
SPOILER--READ AT OWN RISK! ago
Chapter 24 : Hope ago
Notice. ago
Chapter 25: Secrets ago
Chapter 26: Death ago
Chapter 27: Awakening. ago
Chapter 28: Blood Vow ago
Hey ago
Chapter 29: Fireblood. ago
Chapter 30: The Undying ago
Chapter 31: Potential ago
Update on DCOT. ago
Chapter 32: Front-lines. ago
Long time no see! ago

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Kuroyuki
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Review of an amateur author, but expert reader and leacher

 Alright, So this is my first time doing a review so it might be sloppy, but here I go.

Dragon Child of Thunder is a really innovative piece of writing! Among the novels and writings I have read this one stands out. I would say that its most innovative feature is... It's brutal honesty. The MC is a very honest to his desires type of character and that is rare in and of itself, however instead of this honesty causing the MC to be evil, or otherwise disliked, it causes the opposite to happen because instead of just going, 'I WANT MONEY! HAHAHAHAHAHAHA!!' he is like 'Don't care about the money, but you hurt someone I care about then you better find a place to hide, cause your going down. Not that hiding would do you any good'.

 

I honestly don't get the style rating, because I believe that every author has their own unique way of writing, and that classifying someones writing style as this or that hampers creativity. There is more then one way to do something right.

 

The story is great, very interesting and innovative, however there are a couple of threads poking out here and there, but still very good, and certainly very solid.

 

Grammar has its ups and downs. I honestly do not pay it much attention, because I can usually just skip right over it and still understand what he is trying to say quite easily.

 

The character portion was above, but basically if you don't like the fact that the MC gets a bunch of girls then go read something else. As much as I hate to admit it, even in this world the popular guys get their choice of girls, while the less popular ones get what they leave behind. At the very least his popularity makes sense, and he has a reason to get many wives as he is the last of his race and needs to rebuild it.

 

As a side note (and will probably get me 60 down votes if I guess correctly) The review of 'The Group' as they put it is very inaccurate, and it seems to me they take a small thing and wrap it around itself a lot to make it look bigger. I don't know why they are doing what they are, but this story is worth way more then 0 stars. Even if they didn't like the story itself, that is a personal thing and is not reflected in Grammar or Style. Therefore they just want to put the story down by putting close to zero stars in those fields. After all a 1 or less star in grammar should mean I was reading Gobbledegook, and I don't know Gobbledegook. and it is the same with the rest. A story that is 1 star or less would have to be a normal guy becoming a god, destroying his world and himself with little to no explanation. For style one would have to rewrite the english language in a japanese format, and then write it backwards. and for the character there would have to be little to no character at all.

This means that it would be quite impressive for someone to write 31 chapters that do not involve any characters, was written in english with a japanese format written backwards, had absolutely no story, as well as being written in Gobbledegook.

Umbrawolf
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I don't see what all the fuss is about

I don’t love this fanfic, but i don’t hate it either, i feel your reactions to negative comments have been above ridiculous and this hatred of the hidden figures seems well excessive, iv’e have read about half of your novel, and while I admit your story does have some interesting aspects, it is not a great fiction in many ways. But if you don’t mind bad grammar and plot confusion this is not a bad story, what stops me from readings this is outrage towards the ‘injustices’ that have been heaped upon you, i feel like your a 10 year old that can’t take any criticism, honestly if you god a proof reader, and listened to their advice this story could be improved greatly bit I somehow doubt this will occur.

All in all it is an average fiction with some good bits and bad bits. oh and i should add that with regard to your grammar i don't mind the odd mistake in phrasing as long as it is easily readable ( I make mistakes like that as well) but in your fic it is kind of painful.

 

peep the squek
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MASS OF PRIDE AND POWER THAT IS THE DRAGON!!

 you convey what dragons are. Pride and absolute power. it's really good. 

 

your writing style is easy to read which is nice. i was very please with the 3 part prologue that gives off information about the draconian. though i would also like to know about the other races too and not just their name and element they govern. the only problem i had with your writing style is that the paragraphs are segmented. i don't know if you did that on purpose so that the chapters would look long or just a minor glitch.

 

 

story wise, it is very interesting! i really love dragons and you depicted them as really good. STRONG AND POWERFUL. PRIDEFUL but CARING. dragons with insatiable curiosity and love for treasure or just anything that catches their eyes. I love that your MC has no style or formless in fighting because dragons are ball of power. they don't need a style to limit it. they move on instinct. you really did a good job here :D


grammar wise, it is very readable. easy to understand. some minor error but, all in all. better than atleast half of the fanfic here on RR. 

 

character. yep. awesome. i don't want anything to be different as to you did a really really good job. 

you're awesome.  

Madlock
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There are some moments who aint bad, but often I get this ''Baaahhh!'' feeling in the middle of a chapter and just stop reading cause it's getting ridicules. And i kinda don't like the immature attitude of the author, I mean calling people assholes just because they are comenting or trolling ur story? U should just ignore em and not take ur time writing six paragraphs on how much of an asshole or hater they are. 

raquibanand
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One of the best novels of my life..  I still wait for it to continue again..  Really sad that it stopped. 

Killermars
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I really like reading this please keep doing the battles have a nice description and the story's goes well just wondering when will the harem part come into all together its great

Reneul
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Nice Setting Bro :)

The story has a nice atmosphere with the lone survivor of a whole race and Dragon child setting .Also Its good to see a succesfull harem setting once in a while .

The personality of Lucius gets weird from time to time but I like it. 

Additionally the humor of this FF is pretty nice too (Kill that dwarf ! ) :)

SUrvivetheage
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 Great read, very good battle description, and it flowed well  can't wait for more!

kokuryuu
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Rant for "The Group" and DCOT Review

Really “The Group” Really is the only thing you can do  discouraging people to write? i mean cmon this is a web for Beginner author what they need is not something like discouragement what they need is what thing that make them improve their FF and make them want to write more .This place should be place where the gems polished so that they wil be more beautifull not destroying them by discourage them. 

Well enough of the rant now go to the review i think this  story is nice there is mistake in grammar here and there but it’s not really noticeable the style is good,well at first it confusing(for me) but it get better latter on.

 

well from my point of view if you want to enjoy harem story with OP mc and nice Story this is the Fic for you.

Cnt Wait For Updates
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The title says it all….

The story is cool, the MC is not a wimp, or something like that. The only true problem that I have with it is that he falls “wholeheartedly” in love wayyyyyyyyyy to easily. I mean its like one day he meets the girl and the next he is willing to give his life for her, no real… meat? I guess?…. to the relationship, or what caused it. The reasons behind the relationships are well thought out but its like a “love at first sight” moment every single time. Well, anyway that’s only a minor problem and the author works around it.