Labyrinth of Anchored Moments

Labyrinth of Anchored Moments

by KyuuSyron

While dreaming, a hard working family man is approached by a child-like god that has become bored of their custom created gaming world. Allowing the man to choose whatever 'Class' he wants, he chooses to become a 'Time Wizard'. He's dropped off in a city above a labyrinth with only this directive.

"You just have to play my game, which is styled after your world’s dungeon exploration RPGs, level up, and save the world. Or don’t. I don’t care."

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Nuthenry2
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It's a good short story the only problem I have with it is that there's not enough detail

ralph
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Intro: Pretty common "bored god" start, but straightforward and quickly into the story.

Grammer: Excellent. :D

Setting: Pretty early for worldbuilding, but is promising in how the author is building out the world.

MC: Very non-OP atm, but his class has the potential for being broken.

Style: A nice mix of game mechanics and "live action" mechanics in the LitRPG design, the authors writing flows pretty well with decent fight descriptions of the simple fights written so far.

Pros: promising LitRPG start, MC is not broken at the start, excellent grammer, potential for time anomolies, comedy presented well

Cons: common "bored god" premise, potential for badly written time shenanigans, not far enough along to have more prolonged/involved fight scenes, too early for most of the system hasn't been fleshed out in the story

Overall: I will be following and hoping for more!

*edit: originally expressed concerns about loli/harem, but author has commented about that vibe in an early chapter being unintentional.